mem77
Dec 8, 2016
Writing Feedback / Writing Task I about the relationship between worker with their supervisor and partners. [2]
Dear Dioba, here some advice for your writing and feel free to correct me too!
...iswere the highest percentage of ...
...occupants and supervisor hadan increased slightly from 61 percent in 2005...
Moreover, The percentage of relationshiprepresentsrepresented very good between workers and his partners in 2005 and 2009 hadat above 63 percent...
....while poor relationshipiswas the lowest percentage ...
(Overall, you've a good skill in writing task 1 with compound and complex sentences, and several comparisons. However, take a notice regarding your grammar since i find several mistakes in your essay. And also don't forget about conjunction because it's crucial if you want to make a coherence in your writing.)
Regards
Dear Dioba, here some advice for your writing and feel free to correct me too!
...
...occupants and supervisor had
Moreover, The percentage of relationship
....while poor relationship
(Overall, you've a good skill in writing task 1 with compound and complex sentences, and several comparisons. However, take a notice regarding your grammar since i find several mistakes in your essay. And also don't forget about conjunction because it's crucial if you want to make a coherence in your writing.)
Regards