Writing Feedback / Quitting smoking in your 60s - there is no age limit to stop [2]

Quitting smoking in your 60s can still boost life expectancy

Basically, there is no age limit to stop smoking, yet scientists suggest that kick the habit should not smoke as much as possible or until their 60s. This is because the faster they stop smoking, the longer persons are likely to live. Also, experts find out that all smokers can emphasize smoking cessation, regardless of age. Therefore, although smokers have some opportunities to live longer, they should consider the negative side from smoking especially causes of smoking-related death included lung, heart disease, and respiratory conditions.

source; newscientist

Writing Feedback / Unconscious brain training and the exposure therapy [3]

Unconscious brain training beats phobias without the stress

Exposure therapy is usually utilized to treated phobias, yet the result is not satisfied because some dislike and feel stressful when they try this therapy. Moreover, Hakwan Lau of the University of California tries to use software which can detect what person is thinking without realizing. Lau believe that the result which was presented at the Society for Neuroscience conference in San Diego can easier reduce fear reaction from patients.

By Clare Wilson

Writing Feedback / One of the modern designs of houses is the underground house designed by the professionals [4]

summary listening - experimental design for housing

One of the modern designs of houses is underground house where it is designed by the professional not the architecture. Some believe that this design has many advantages such as price low and friendly environment. Also the underground house utilizes double layer, solar energy and a plenty of mirrors inside the house. In addition, the underground house can reduce carbon dioxide from household activities.

Writing Feedback / The illustration depicts the information about natural loop of frog's life. [3]

The illustration depicts the information about natural loop of frog's life. Overall, there are four main stages which are occurring naturally, beginning with eggs to be the adult frog and the whole process begins again.

Initially, the eggs which are laid on the water surface come to form an embryo. After development period, an embryo becomes a tadpole, a baby frog. The tadpole has long tail and lives in the water by gill breathing.

Turning to the next step, the tadpole begins to change. It starts to grow hind legs, which are soon followed with forelegs. Tadpole's tail becomes smaller and it starts breathing with pulmonary, and preparing the frog for its life on land. Over the time, the tadpole has become even more frog-like. The tail becomes much smaller, and the legs grow. After that, tadpole frog becomes adult frog where the legs are developed and the tail has vanished.

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Writing Feedback / Water cycle - there are three main processes: evaporation, rain, and water running back to the sea. [2]

The illustration depicts the natural process of water cycle. Overall, it is noticeable that there are three main processes in this diagram; evaporation, rain, and water running back to the sea.

To begin with, owing to the sun's heat, evaporation process occurs from two main places; the sea which stores water, and lakes and rivers. In addition, transpiration from plants and trees also happens because of heat of the sun. After that, the result of evaporation and transpiration becomes invisible water vapor which is brought by wind. The higher wind carries out, the cooler vapor is, then cloud being formed. The next stage is when rain falls because clouds are much cooler.

Turning to the next stage, water from rain, then, flows on the river and some passes into the porous rock being ground water which flows into lakes, rivers, and seas. Afterwards water from river flows into the sea.

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Writing Feedback / Summary TED - Mia Nacamulli; Learning more than one language [2]

Mia Nacamulli - The benefits of a bilingual brain

Learning more than one language has many advantages for people especially for children. This is because the brain will work well if people force themselves to understand another language which is not their first language. Therefore, all of hemispheres of brain have to work together to produce different accent and pronunciation from the other language. In addition, children will be easier to learn new language than elderly. In conclusion, having bilingual does not make our brain smart, yet it makes us healthier, complex, and actively engaged.

source: ed.ted.com/lessons/how-speaking-multiple-languages-benefits-the-brain-mia-nacamulli#watch

Writing Feedback / Summary New Scientist - Electric fields can stimulate... [2]

Electric fields can stimulate deep in your brain without surgery

Deep Brain Stimulation (DBS) is one of the latest inventions for medical treatment in the meantime. This method begins to deliver an electrical current deep into the brain by implanting a long thin electrode through a hole in the skull. Therefore, it is predicted that this way will be used in many investigation such as for depression, obesity and obsessive compulsive disorder without needing for surgery.

Writing Feedback / Summary New Scientist - Gender equality is boosted by better infection control [2]

Gender equality is boosted by better infection control

Development in gender equality over the last few decades has been brought by better control of infectious disease. This is because women, today, have golden opportunity to continue their education; therefore their awareness about health is much more improved. As a consequence, improvements in infection control are more likely to have similar high stakes for women in developing countries.

source: newscientist

Writing Feedback / Learning English has become a basic need for better life around the world. [3]

Jay Walker: The world's English mania

Learning English has been a basic need for better life around the world. It is because English is always used for obtaining job opportunity and getting higher education. In addition, a forth of references is based on English. For instance, in China, the largest country learning English, the government implements regulation for people learning English started in the third grade by law. Therefore, English cannot take over the native language, yet English is the second language connecting each other easily around the world.

source: ted

Writing Feedback / Summary New Scientist - Food made from natural gas [3]

Food made from natural gas will soon feed farm animals - and us

In the meantime, a biotechnology company called Calysta, based in Menlo Park, California, introduces an alternative food for animals from natural gas, methane. By using a bacterium called Methylococcus capsulatus. The bacteria are grown in vats, fed methane, and are then dried and turned into pellets. According to Alan Shaw, the head of Calysta, this invention will be also implemented for humans' need. This idea occurs because consideration of greenhouse gas has a dangerous level where using fossil fuels as an energy source as opposed to sunlight is not very environmentally sound. Therefore, in theory, carbon emissions could be remarkably dropped by using methane from a renewable source, such as bio-gas from farm waste or landfill sites. We can imagine that no either animals or trees have to be dead because of daily consumption of human. The result of report concluded that Calysta's feed has tiny water and use of land compared with all the other ways of manufacturing feeds. (160 words)

Writing Feedback / Am I Really A Visual Learner? - Alexandra Panzer [2]

Am I Really A Visual Learner?

Most of people consider that they are visual learners. However, others argue that basically people have no specific way to make more understand what they learn. To tell the truth, Alexandra Panzer, a lesson creator in Science-Show, presents that there is really no way to categorize different types of students. This is because when experts conducted research, they just wanted to figure out how well students learn because of their inherent traits. In addition, only one study mentioned that students have a unique style each, yet there was no strong evidence to prove their hypothesis because majority of participants did not seem to have any clear learning style according to the survey at the beginning. Also, this research did not publish the result of test. Moreover, people can use all of media to encourage their understanding depending on what they study. In conclusion, this lesson is more likely to against the general notion about categorizing learning styles each learner.(159 words)

Writing Feedback / American, Swedes and Japanese in the age group of 65s and more [3]

A breakdown of the percentage of elderly people in three selected countries (the USA, Sweden, and Japan) in the a century period started in 1940 is given in the line chart and measured in percentage. Overall, it is really crucial to notice that three countries have similar pattern and expected increase with similar pattern in the future. Also, although Japan has been the lowest for decades, the percentage of elderly people will be the highest in the last decade.

From 1940 to 1980, both the percentage American and Sweden in the age group of 65s went up significantly at 15 and 14 percent respectively, whereas a plenty of Japanese in the same age group saw a slight decrease below 5 percent. In 2000s, there is predicted that the proportion of aging people in Sweden has overtaken the highest one up to 20 percent.

Turning to the next decades, Sweden and the USA proportion will experience a dramatic rise, while the percentage of Japanese population will go up sharply by 15 percent and overtake the highest figure at over 25 percent.

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Writing Feedback / The report about visitors of two selected, newly opened music sites in a 15-day period [2]

A breakdown of the report about visitors of two selected new music sites in a 15-day period is illustrated in the line chart measured in thousands. Overall, it is really important to notice that the number of pop parade visitors saw an upward trend, whereas the level of music choice visitors witnessed a slight increase.

Initially, it can be seen that the quantity of people surfing Pop Parade site is three times more than that of people browsing Music Choice. Between day 4 and day 7, there is a significant difference where Pop Parade proportion goes down to approximately 30, compared to Music Choice proportion which is fluctuated slightly. Nevertheless, in the next day Pop Parade begins to go up remarkably at 150 and another is still stable around 20.

Interestingly, although a plenty of Music Choice viewers overtakes the other from day 12 to day 13, the next day sees a sharp rise in proportion of Pop Parade and leads again at 140. In the following day, the number of Pop Parade visitors finishes at 170 and reaches a peak, whereas Music Choice sees a dramatic drop at 70.

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Writing Feedback / The given line chart provides the quantity of graduated students in universities of Canada [3]

The given line chart provides the quantity of graduated students in universities of Canada in the period between 1992 and 2007 according to sexes. Overall, it is really important to notice that although both of sexes had simillar pattern which saw an upward trend, females were the higher number than males .

In 1992, both woman and man graduated proportion stood at 100 thousand and 70 thousand respectively; then, both were followed by a downward trend in 1995. Afterwards, there had been a slight decrease in both by 1997. Between 1997 and 2001 female graduate proportion fluctuated slightly around 100 thousand compared to male proportion at approximately 75 thousand.

In the following year, female figure showed a sharp rise in number of graduates by a half of the former and reached a peak at just below 150 thousand graduates. In contrast, by the same period, the quantity of male graduates had increased slightly by 25 thousand and had finished at about 95 thousand.

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Writing Feedback / Today's hot issue comes to policy-makers' consideration in punishing criminals [3]

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should be always taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Today's hot issue comes to policy-makers' consideration in punishing criminals. Some argue making penalty should be fixed and indiscriminate. However, others are more likely to against this notion because they believe criminal actions depend on their motivation and consideration; therefore, these factors need to be considered before inflicting punishment to criminals. In my perspective, while the former statement makes sense, the latter one sounds as reasonable as does the first.

Fixed penalty for criminal can help to identify clearly how guilty persons should be punished. Thus, people consciously understand about their punishment when doing something wrong. Taking Philippines as an example, in the recent year, the government implemented dead penalty for distributors of illegal drugs indiscriminately. As a result, during 6 months, thousands of dealers are dead thanks to this regulation. Therefore, the crime rate, automatically, saw a sharp decrease and people got deterrent effect to be criminal.

However, considering criminal's reason and where they live is also crucial matter. This is because every single person has the presumption of innocence. For instance, a young girl hurt a man because probably she wanted to defense herself and unconsciously hurt him. Another example, an old woman stole meal in food stall because probably she, perforce, did it for her living. In these cases, we cannot judge them as criminals who should suffer heavy punishment.

To sum up, I believe although fixed punishment for criminals is a good idea, finding out their motivation and the fact of crime scene should be also thought before deciding a suitable penalty.

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Writing Feedback / Both cement and concrete need different raw materials in production process. [2]

The diagrams show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two diagrams depict the process of how cement is produced from raw materials and the production of concrete for building aim. Overall, it can be seen that both cement and concrete need different raw materials in production process. Also, although production of cement requires fewer raw materials, its process is more uneasy machineries and steps than concrete production.

In the first stage of cement production, both limestone and clay are crushed by the crusher to be powder form and then transferred to the mixer. Afterwards, the mixture is sent to the rotating heater to be heated, and then the materials are grinded to be cement. The last step is packaging cement in bags.

Turning to the other diagram, to make concrete for building, Gravel 50% and sand 25% are gone down to the concrete mixer, with Cement and water 15% and 10% respectively. After that, concrete mixer is rotated clockwise to result good mixture.

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Writing Feedback / Higher petrol price is not the only way to lower the level of greenhouse gasses [2]

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
What other measures do you think might be effective?

One of the causes of growing traffic and pollution issues is increasing the number of private vehicles especially in urban area. Although some believe to tackle this cause is by raising fuel cost, I am more likely to against this notion because this solution will conduce another problem such as social inequality. I believe developing comfort in public transport is one of the best ways to reduce pollution problems and growing traffic.

If increasing fuel price occurs massively, this situation will raise interest in having private cars. This is because the higher spending people do, the higher cost for transportation is. Taking my country as an example, in 2014, when the government implemented policy to raise the price of fuel up to twice more than before, all of needs and costs also went up such especially for basic needs and public transportation which increased sharply. Unfortunately, in the same period, sales of new vehicles experienced a dramatic rise and could sale 1000 unit in a month, according to survey conducted by Student Research Institute Makassar. This indicates that the government should consider another rule to tackle this problem.

A solution which can be implemented is improving public transportation more comfortable. It is because one of the reason why people prefer using their own cars is they feel uncomfortable when they are in public transportation. Therefore, repairing public transportation from bad facilities to having a certain quality will raise the number of passengers.

To sum up, there is no doubt increasing petrol price is not the only way to reduce greenhouse gasses. There is another measure more effectively solving this problem without issuing new problems.

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Writing Feedback / Schools spent most of money on their teachers and simultaneously the insurance outlay was the lowest [2]

This three pie charts show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991, and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts illustrate the percentage of total school spending each year during three decades selected (1981, 1991, and 2001). Overall, the outlay of teachers' wages was the highest percentage throughout the year, whereas insurance was the lowest expenditure.

Spending proportion breaks the teachers' salaries as the highest one when it comes to almost a half of school outlay in the three years given. The second place was addressed to salaries of workers except teachers in the first two years, 28 percent and 22 percent respectively. However, spending for furniture and equipment in the following years overtook the previous second highest position.

Apart from previous comparison, expenditure for school resources saw a five-percent increase in 1991, yet in the next period school only spent 9 percent of budget to buy books. Interestingly, although insurance outlay was the lowest percentages all of period, there was a significant uptrend from year to year.

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Writing Feedback / Healthy Meal for a child in the vicinity of school - opinions [2]

To learn effectively, children need to eat a healthy meal at school. How true is this statement ? Whose responsibility is it to provide food for school children?

Health is the main crucial factor in which every child should be met. Therefore, some people argue that there is school's responsibility to provide healthy food in the vicinity of school. I am personally more likely to agree this notion because I believe school is one of the main environment to educate children how to make life healthier.

One of the crucial facilities that school has is canteen where most of students must go to that place. Thus, school has a responsibility to control what canteen provide to children. Taking an example, in my country, there is a favorite school whose name is Islamic Boarding School Athirah. This school is fully responsible for what students consume when break time comes. Every day, staff provide different menu according to health department standard. Moreover, parents feel satisfied of school's service.

In addition, children spending approximately 8 hours a day, basically, need to have healthy meal to encourage their learning activities in their school. According to the latest study in state University of Makassar, 85 percent of schools in developing countries have unhealthy canteen where students always have lunch. As a result, 3 in 5 students prone to disease due to bacteria and unhealthy food they consumed. Also, the average of kids get absent up to five times a month.

To sum up, need of healthy dish is one of the essential matters people have to meet especially for children in age school. There is no doubt, school has fully control to keep children healthy and its environment clean. I would like to suggest that parents should consider cleanness factor of school where their children will enroll.

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Writing Feedback / US airlines - which aspect of their service made travellers satisfied the most? Bar chart and table [2]

The bar chart and table illustrate satisfaction levels of passengers in the United State with airlines and which aspect makes them satisfied in there selected years 1999, 2000, and 2007. Overall, it can be seen that, majority of passengers were satisfied in the rest of years and courtesy of flight attendants was the highest percentage of satisfaction of the flying experience.

To begin with, in the three-year period, there was a significant increase in satisfaction of costumers and the highest percentage of satisfaction was in 2007, 72 percent. However, fortunately, people feeling dissatisfied were more and more dramatic decrease and the lowest was in the following year at 24%.

On the other data, courtesy and price experienced a slight rise although courtesy of flight attendants was the majority aspect all years selected. Schedule was another aspect having an increase, yet in following year, there was a level off at 79 percent. Interestingly, a comfortable seat was an important aspect in 2007 in which 47 percent people chose this as an aspect, compared to two years earlier when there was no one choosing it.

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Writing Feedback / The pie charts compare workers' relationship with supervisor and co-workers in two-year period [2]

The charts below show the results of surveys in 2005 and 2009 asking workers about their relationships with their supervisors and their co-workers.

The pie charts compare workers' relationship with supervisor and co-workers in two-year period (2005 and 2009) according to result of surveys. Overall, it can be seen that relationship between employees and supervisor and their colleagues in 2009 was better than in 2005.

To begin with, workers having very good relationship with their supervisor saw a four-percent increase from 2005 to 2009. In contrast, in the same period, employees who have good and fair relationship experienced a slight drop by 6 percent and 2 percent respectively. Interestingly, there were 2% of employees having poor relationship with their supervisor each year. Also, in 2009 5 percent of workers had no supervisor, compared to 2005 which saw one percent no supervisor and two percent no answer.

On the other hand, both in 2005 and in 2009, majority of workers had no problem with their colleagues. It is proven with 63 % very good in 2005 and 70% very good in 2009. Also, in 2009, no worker had poor relationship with each other, compared to in 2005 with 1 percent workers having poor relationship.

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Writing Feedback / Casual clothes cannot indicate, that a person who wears them is poor or unemployed [2]

Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear

Fashion is one of the trends more and more developed. Therefore, some people can clearly notice someone by their clothing and they think every person can be judged according to what they wear. Others, however, are more likely to against this notion because clothing cannot depict someone precisely. In my view, people might stand out thanks to their clothes, yet we could not notice them in real.

Regarding to someone's clothes, people in common will conveniently notice others by looking at their shirt owing to their culture and habit occurring in their country. Taking an example, in my country, people will be respected if they wear white clothes, whereas people with dirty dress will be degraded. Moreover, the first appearance to indicate people is how they wear and how their clothes look like.

On another perspective, some people do not look at what people wear. This is because they prefer seeing their attitude and work. For instance, Mr. Mark Zuckerberg, CEO Facebook, said casual clothes cannot be indicated as poor person or people without job, because clothing is our passion whether others think it is bad or not. Another example, in my hometown, there is a company whose name PT. Sosro. The management allow their staff to wear what they comfortably wear such as T-shirt or other clothes. They prefer caring staff's progress rather than their appearance.

To sum up, although clothing can influence people's perspective to others, the main crucial factor is how to wear suitably according to our passion.

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