Writing Feedback / Initially, car was the most popular private vehicle amidst walking and riding bicycle. [2]

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000

A breakdown of the information about changes in the way people travel in England is depicted in the table. It is measured in miles between 1985 and 2000. Overall, most people prefered to ride a car than other transportation. Furthermore, it can be seen that there was a significant increase in total average distance that had been reached over a fifteen-year period.

Initially, car was the most popular private vehicles amidst walking and riding bicycle. The distance was roughly 4800 miles in 2000. It was totally differs from bicycle which had the tiniest number of distance at only 51 in 1995 and 41 in 2000 while the figure for walking had five times larger than it.

On the contrary, public transportation was predominated by local bus in 1985 and train in 2000. In addition, apart from local bus, four other modes of travel experienced to grow in the number of average distance. Other transportation reached the largest gap in the rising distance by approximately 135 from 450 in 1985 while taxi inclined slightly by 29 to 42 in 2000. (179)

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Writing Feedback / Technological advances made our life to become easier and simpler, particularly in communication [2]

Modern technology is changing our world. This has advantages such as bringing people closer together through communication. It also has disadvantages such as destroying the differences between cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Technological advances have brought our life to become easier and simpler, particularly in communication that these improvements make us getting closer to everyone. However, its drawback is able to destroy the differences between communities. This essay disagrees with the notion since declining people's basic ability to socialize with each other and helping to prevent destruction of cultures.

To begin with, an enormous of people highlights the positive impact that modern technology might bring a convenient way to make communication, especially abroad, is undemanding. However, as far as I concerned that this way does not involve the same interaction likewise with human beings. It is evidence that decreasing people's proficiency to speak and listen is getting worse, and it may continue to grow for forthcoming decades as predicted by Mark Gilbert, a psychologist from Cambridge University. He estimates that 23% of young people will be difficult to state their personal opinion due to less social skills, and it leads into less confident as a consequent.

On the other hand, deliberating about destroying of differences between communities, I opine that this serve can be avoided since technology is able to prevent different cultures by keep promoting it on several websites. For example, Indonesia rely on technological development to share its beliefs, traditions, and customs through accessing the internet. As a result, a large number of people around the worlds are able to grasp its cultures without physically visit in Indonesia.

In conclusion, I would totally disagree that technology brings advantage for our communication as it reduces our fundamental skills. However, modern technology can contribute to share our latest activity in terms of our unique cultures towards foreign people on the website. (279)

Writing Feedback / As the technology has evolved, everything seems to be possible to do for everyone, online dating too [2]

With the latest technological advancements, dating is now possible online. Would you recommend online dating for your single friends? What are the advantages and disadvantages of online dating? Site some examples to support your answer.

As the technology has evolved, everything seems to be possible to do for everyone, included online dating. However, I would not reccomend dating via internet for my single friends because their appearance may look different with the real one. Although there are several advantages, the drawback should be considered.

To begin with, why I would never offer my single friends to join a virtual dating because the people may give a fake account. For example, as stated by Mark Gilbert, a psychologist from Cambridge University reveals that 46% of adults attached different photograph and biography to attract more attention from other visitors. Therefore, I prefer not to give this option for my closest peers.

However, some people believe that they are able to take an opportunity to find their soulmate by this way. Firstly, it is possible for them to have an international relationship due to an advance technology. By accessing internet, they can find someone else whenever or wherever they want to. Neverhteless, it seems that they will rely too much on internet, and it has a negative influence towards their bond with surrounding people.

Another merit is the online dating provides an application which enable to be used for video calling. Thus, a direct call make them easy to prove that they use a fake account or not. On the contrary, I think that it is certainly not the same as real interactions and socializations with human beings, and it does not involve the same atmosphere.

In conclusion, whether the good reasons come to give benefits for a large number of people, depending too much on internet and declining real interactions with human beings lead into several adverse effects towards them. Hence, I suggest to my single mates to not start a date on websites. (297)

Writing Feedback / Several changes in an industrial complex, an artificial lake, and public places in Lakeside [2]

The changes in Lakeside in 2000 and 2009.

A comparison of the changes in Lakeside between 2000 and 2009 is depicted in the two maps. Overall, there are several changes in an industrial complex, an artificial lake, and public places.

First of all, there was a significant alter in the south east of Lakeside where the industrial complex had been expanded in 2009, and replacing an residential area that existed in 2000. This industrial complex was located alongside the river that flow into the lake before it already swifted into a pond that based in the north east of Lakeside.

The other change was a derelic warehouse which was right to a residential area had altered into a parking area for cars. Across the car park, there were an office buliding and a university that replaced an old town. Then, move to the eat, where an art centre was built next to school had swifted into a movie theatre. Meanwhile, a residential area in the south west of Lakeside was also changed into a shopping centre. (168)

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Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1: A structure that is used to generate electricity from wave power [2]

The diagrams show a structure that is used to generate electricity from wave power.
The diagrams illustrates how wave power can produce electricity by installing a simple structure nearby cliff or sea wall. Overall, the electricity can be turning on, if the current wave moves into the landward.

To create a structure, needs a specific shape of column, a turbine, and a lamp which should be installed in the edge of cliff. The column contains of two steels that connect with each other, and these steels create a chamber formation in other side whose shape similar to current wave. In addition, the two steels are also used to hold a turbine which has same direction, and connect directly to the lamp.

First of all, the function of the column is as a recharge area when the wave appears to move onward to the sea wall. Then, a strong wave is able to convert a large air which can conduct the turbine to produce a power as the main electricity for the lamp. However, if the wave is moving seaward again, the turbine can generate a small amount of electricity. (172)

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Writing Feedback / Locked in the fridge; Don't Do This To Your Tomatoes [2]

You may think that to keep your tomatoes look fresh with good taste, is putting it into the fridge. It is totally wrong. Based on a study form Proceeding of National Academy of Sciences, confirmed that many tomatoes have already lost its flavor before someone serve it yet to the kitchen, because of low temperature on the fridge.The low temperature storage is well-known as a special place to keep something chill, also it is used to make fruits or vegetables slow ripening and reduce decay. However, it actually can caused loss of their flavor and more blandly, if the temperature is below 54 degrees Farhenheit.

The other researchers from Cornell University, the University of Florida, and Zhejiang University in China, gave other conclusion by putting tomatoes in less refrigeration time. It will led them to cause less depletion of important compound. Although, it only had little effect on their flavor. Furthermore, if you want to get your fresh tomatoes, then they suggested that you may grow it up by yourself.

Source : New Scientist

Writing Feedback / There are some conflicting theories on the subject - Who did discover America? [2]

There was some theories which revealed that the real person who discovered America was not Columbus. Firstly, Zuan Chabotto, a person who traveled to places and decided to go to Venetia, claimed that Columbus did not reach into North America until 1498. Zuan Chabotto, was well known as John Cabot, had sailed into North America in the previous year earlier, 1497. It was proven by Alwyn Ruddock, an English scholar, in 1966. He found a letter by John Day, an English merchant, which mentioned that Cabot had reached in North America before Columbus did. Unfortunately, Ruddock had ordered to completely destroyed this letter untill it was not exist anymore at his death, in 2005.

Secondly, the greatest scholar and an honoured scientist who came from Uzbekistan, Abu Raihan al-Biruni, had learned about earth's co-ordinates, erath's circumference, and the principal of particular gravity. He had a great mind about an unknown suface of the Earth, which located between Europe and Asia, and able to be lived. Although Biruni had reached his conclusion about the land in 1037, he had not laid eyes at anytime. While Leif Ericson was a person, who had been sent to a foreign country to teach about Christian, had reached North America in 1000 with lack of understanding about what he had found.

Overall, until the present time, Biruni is getting his tittle of the discoverer of North America because of his calculations and observations. He was the greatest Central Asia explorer among the other earliest explorer.

Source : History Today

Writing Feedback / A successful company should be secured by people who have a high credibility. [NEW]

Some people think when recruiting, companies should aim to take on people who are innovative and able to work independently while others considered they should recruit people who are able to work in a team and follow instructions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is more and more popular amidst a large number of company that aims to take people who has a high creativity, and able to work independently when the process of recruiting. However, others opine that several factors, such as co-operative and obedient workers are far needed as the main measurement. This essay agrees with the first belief since the successful company should be secured by people who have a high credibility.

It is certainly true that some groups of people who afford to work in a team is necessary as they have a good communication skill to discuss their own views to other peers without any difficulties. However, some of them appear that they are not a typical of co-operativee workers but more likely to become followers since they have a limited experience. Furthermore, they only come to the workplace to finish what they have to do as an order. Thus, it seems that company has restricted their movement to develop their ability.

On the contrary, people who are able to create a breathtaking novel idea will be more functional for firm to boost their performance. For example, 63% of marketing office employed more than a hundred of innovative people who are able to create new slogan, jingle or gimmick, as stated by David Gilbert as a Head of Human Resouces in one of advertising companies. Moreover, independent employers are far important so they do not rely on their task to someone else, and they enable to do a self-correction.

In conclusion, I would disagree to the notion that people who capable of working in a team and following the instruction are able to lead the company to grow. However, recruting creative and independent people might bring a successful bussiness. (291)

Writing Feedback / There are several views of people on achieving the best results. [2]

Some people think that hard work and determination are the keys to success in life. Some, on the other hand, think that there are other factors behind a successful life. Give your opinion.

There are several views of people on achieving the best results. Talking about hard work and determination, some people believe that these are the primary keys to success in life while others argue that other factors, such as luckiness is play a vital role behind a glory. This essay agree with the first notion since somebody are not able to rely their life only on luck.

We are now living in a competition era where people compete with each other owing to monetary consideration. Some of them are getting a successful thanks to a lucky chance, but sometimes they actually have lack of experience or even knowledge. It is went to show according to The British Labour Association that reveals 74% of co-workers who passed the exam and became permanent employees due to a lucky factor, were not success to battle with their peers.

On the contrary, the career path will be totally different with people who want to reach their dreams by scaling up their effort and trying so hard in every job. I take Japan as one of the best countries where the local people really appreciate these factors, and New York Times had highlight the great progress over a decade. The result shows that almost 82% of Japanese pupils in three distinct schools succeed to enter best universities in Japan, The United Kingdom, and The United States. Furthermore, the growing number reveals over the period reveals that these factors are more functional rather than a luck.

All in all, I would firmly agree that people unable to only depend their successful life on something that has less probability, but they have to buld-up their self-conscious about hard work and determination. (283)

Writing Feedback / Some say that children are better to learn a foreign language at primary school rather than later. [2]

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Some profesionals say that children are better to learn a foreign language at primary school than secondary school. As far as I am concerned that the benefit in regards to this belief are outweighed its drawback.

It is popularly believe that children should spend more time to exposure nature and to explore new experiences through playing. That is why some people argue that giving their children an education about foreign languages can occasionally cause them stressful. It is proved by a finding from cambridge University that 23% of children who were forced to take an additional course of Spanish languages fell depressed because they had not enough time to play with their peers. Consequently, they did not perform well at class due to loss concentration. Therefore, sometimes participating in a foreign class appears to reduce children's mood that lead into depression.

Although it has an adverse impact for some children, it does not mean that learn another language at begginers is not important. One and the foremost advantage is children can brush up on linguistic skill in their golden age. they can adjust to read, speak, write and listen a foreign language as well as their mother tongue because they have practiced and learned since they were children. For example, a comparison of Indonesian people who started acquiring English language at 5-10 age group are performing better to speak or write than young adults aged 18-22. It is revealed by a researcher from University of Indonesia. As a result, these young adults cannot overcome the problem to speak well in English. Hence, it is inevitably true that practice a foreign language at primary school gives a good point.

In conclusion, although there is a detrimental effect towards some children who feel stressful, I would strongly believe that they are outweighed by the advantage. (303)

Writing Feedback / I would argue that teaching children at home can help children to resolve their problem swiftly [3]

Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

Some people think that to create the best children's development can be obtained by teaching them at home. Others, however, think that school plays a vital role towards pupils. I am strongly believe that these methods have its own benefits for children.

Expanding knowledge for students can be actually done at home. One possible good point is teachers are able to be more focused on teaching and finding out obstacles for each individual, since they only educate a few students. Another merit is children have a considerable amount of time, and they can choose personally when they are ready to accept scientific or linguistic subjects. It is because children cannot be forced to concentrate all subjects in certain time according to a psychologist, Stuart Mark. He reveals that children experience to have less concentration at 11 am - 1 pm. Consequently, it is a difficult time for teaching them at the time.

On the contrary, pupils who study at school should spend their time from 7 am to 12 pm or even more. It differs from boarding house students. However, they still get some advantages, such as brush up on social skill. I believe that it is one of development activities to socialize with their peers, and they cannot afford this at home. Another strength is pupils can build their competition sense at school since they are trained to develop their mindset in the future careers.

In conclusion, I would argue that teaching children at home can help children to resolve their problem swiftly and improve their learning ability by raising their concentration at certain time. However, studying at school can also enhance their social skill and establish a sense of competition towards students. (283)

Writing Feedback / Young people are often asked for participating for the development of communities as a volunteer [2]

Adult youths are often called up for working for the development of communities. Do you think they should work voluntarily or should they get paid? Give your opinion.

Young people are often asked for participating for the development of communities as a volunteer, and they do not get a wage. I would firmly agree with the notion since it is the best chance for them to enrich their competency, and not all instituions provide this activity.

This essay is disagree with the view of adult youths should get paid as they work in one of institutions. It is because they have lack of experience both of theoritical and practical matters. For example, according to statistical data from Keio University, reveals that 23% of young adults in Tokyo did not have enough knowledge to organize a community such as making a proposal or explaining the type of activity in fron of people. As a consequence, they should work as a volunteer, and see how other people overcome these difficulties.

On the other hand, young adults can expand their knowledge about practical work in the real situation through this activity. For example, based on a publication from Jakarta Post in 2015, shows that almost 73% of volunteer in the biggest event of Indonesian Petroleum Association were dominated by people at 20 - 23 age group. As a result, those young people can enhance their skills, such as organizing or communicating. Thus, working as a volunter has a vital role towards young people to improve their competency.

To sum up, I agree that young adults should train themselves in practical work as a woker who helps a community to reach its goals without being paid. They can get a huge benefit through this programme, such as improving communication skill. (267)

Writing Feedback / Nowadays, the majorty of children are facing a huge pressure rather than in the past [3]

Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

Nowadays, the majorty of children are facing a huge pressure rather than in the past due to academic, social and commercial perspective. I would argue that the willingness to be the best, and comparing children with another will lead children to become more stress. Thus, giving them education in regards to the winner is not always be the best, also teach them for being grateful are the best solution to tackle this problem.

It is popularly believe that children should be trained to increase their sense of competition in order to help them prepraing their future career as tough adults. As stated by an expert psychologist, Mark Gilbert, explains that 46% people who had been teached to compete in early stage are always occupying supervisor positions. However, they were getting more pressure than their peers when they were still a children. Therefore, children have to acquire about to become a winner, they do not have to impose themselves.

Another cause is adults usually compare their children to others. They think that it can help their children to motivate themselves to expand their abilities. In contrast with the notion that this way can lead children to get stress because they have their own unique natural abilities that are different with others. To overcome this issue is adults and children should be teached about keep feeling grateful of what they have, and help their children to improve their skills.

To sum up, as far as I concerned that teaching children about competition, and always comparing them with their peers can cause children to become more stress. I generally believe that giving them knowledge about the winners and the losers, also being grateful are the best way to help children reduce the pressure. (290)

Writing Feedback / An info about people shares of money, spent for five different necessities in four various countries [2]

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.

A breakdown of the information about people shares of money spent for five different necessities in four different countries is represented in the bar chart. It is measured in the percentage in 2009. Overall, people opted to spend more money for housing while health care and clothing were the least categories.

To start with, apart from Japan, housing was the most important needs for all countries. It was proved that United States occupied the first rank at above a quarter while the other stayed at above one-fifth. Moreover, Japan had the largest ratio in food at roughly 23%. Although the figure of food in Canada and United States were at below 15%, they had higher proportion in transportation at approximately 18% and one-fifth in a row.

Concerning to the rest parts, the percentage of health care; and clothing were only below one in ten for all countries. United States had larger proportion in health care at roughly 7% that three times as many as United Kingdom as the tiniest figure at around 2%. However, United Kingdom and Canada led in clothing proportion at close to 6% than United States and Japan at approximately 4%. (194)

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Writing Feedback / How many pupils have passed their high school exams, according to the subject and sex [2]

The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011.

A breakdown of the information about how many pupils that passed their high school exams according to the subject and sex is depicted in the bar chart. It is measured in the percentage between 2010 and 2011. Overall, most female pupils had passed in computer science while male pupils were good at subjects that relate to calculation and linguistic.

Initially, girls were good at computer science. It was proved that the figure occupied in the first rank at 56,3%, nearly doubling with chemistry. Meanwhile, foreign languages and mathematics stayed at the second level at 47,4% and 49,2% in a row, that roughly twice as many as history figure. On the other hand, the percentage of geography was the least at 20,1% which physics experienced twofold bigger than it.

Concerning to the boys, they got almost the same ratio at foreign languages and mathematics. The figure showed at 46,8% and 48,4% successively while computer science stayed at 42,1% that twice bigger that history. By contrast, chemistry had the tiniest proportion at 14,1% which approximately half as many as physics and geography proportion at 34,6% and 30,4% respectively. (186)

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Writing Feedback / Most people watch Channel One NEWS at 6PM [2]

The graph below shows the average daily figures for Channel One News over a 12-month period

A breakdown of the information about the average daily figures for watching Channel One News during a 12-month period is represented in the line graph. It is measured in millions of viewers per day. Overall, it is noticable that most people watch this channel at 6 pm although a large number of watcher tended to see at 11 pm in August.

Initially, except for the 11 pm figure, others daily time had been started since January. The number of viewers at 9.30 pm increased gradually by almost 1 to approximately 4 in May while the 6 pm figure went up and down. However, the quantity of watcher at 1 pm remained unchanged between January and December at around 1.2.

Concerning to the new section, the 11 pm number started in May, and surprisingly it increased steeply at 4 over a 4-month period. On the contray, there was a sudden decrease in the number of watcher at 9.30 pm at close to 1 during the same period, but it experienced to rise again until December. Meanwhile, there was a downward trend in the 6 pm number, and it bottomed at rougly 3 in December. (193)

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Writing Feedback / USA was the most popular place to be visited over the period of 1995-2010 [2]

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.

A breakdown of the information about international visitor arrivals in five different countries is depicted in the line graph. It is measured in millions at five-year interval from 1995 to 2010. Overall, it can be seen that USA was the most popular place to be visited over the time, and France appeared to gain the same number with USA in last year.

To begin with, only USA which had the largest starting point in the number of tourist arrivals. It stood at roughly 70, and stayed at 85 in 2010. On the contrary, France had a significant increase of 60 in the figure for tourist, and it projected to peak at 70 in 2010.

Concerning to the rest parts, the quantity of Malaysian visitors increased markedly by 20 from 30 in 2005 to 50 in 2010. Meanwhile, the figure for Brazil; and Egypt had a similar pattern which started at approximately just under one ten. Egypt appeared to lead slightly from Brazil in visitor number at just over a fifth and rougly 18 in a row. (176)

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Writing Feedback / Five different sources that can produce electricity in New Zealand and Germany [2]

The pie charts below show electricity generation by source in New Zealand and Germany in 1980 and 2010.

A breakdown of the information about five different sources that can produce electricity in New Zealand and Germany is depicted in pie charts. It is measured in unit, in 1980 and 2010. Overall, the most obvious facts are that Coal was the most popular source in New Zealand while Nuclear, Natural Gas, and Coal were three main sources in Germany.

Initially, New Zealand did not use Nuclear as in Germany, and except Natural Gas and Petroleum, other sources had an upward trend. Coal number started at 36 and grew roughly threefold in 2010. In contrast with the figure for Natural Gas bottomed at 2 from a third. The quantity of Hydro rose slightly by 16 to 46 while petroleum saw opposite pattern at 2 in 2010.

Meanwhile, in Germany, 2010 witnessed a mark jump in Nuclear number that reached a peak at 150. Coal number remained unchanged at 28, and the figure for Natural Gas appeared to fall dramatically as in New Zealand at 2. There was a slight increase in Petroleum quantity at 5 while Hydro experienced to decline by 5 from 7 in 1980. (186)

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Writing Feedback / The emergence of internet can lead someone to get much information without finding out to library [2]

Some people think it is a waste of money to establish libraries since the public can use the Internet at home to obtain information, do you agree or disagree?

The emergence of the internet can lead someone to get much information without finding out to library. Thus, some people think that it is wasting money to establish libraries. The essay is disagree with the notion because library is the only place where provide reliable source of knowledge.

It is true that the internet has bring a huge benefit towards people, and one of them is providing a large amount of information. Several websites attach hundreds of papers and journals that can be freely to be accessed, such as AcademiaEdu or Sribd. According to a statistical data from University of Indoneisa reveals that the percentage of visitors in AcadimaEdu continued to rise for each year, and it stayed in 2,4 million people in last October, 2016. As a result, some websites shift the content to become more educated. Therefore, the internet make someone easy to gain information.

However, just because the internet has provided all information, does not mean it is quite unnecessary to establish libraries. It is because an enormous number of textbook or publication from authors who had studied and experimented for a long time, cannot be downloaded freely. For example, a famous sedimentologists, Sam Boggs, released four principle of sedimentology books which cost $ 226. As a result, government has supported the library by giving a fund to buy these publication to enrich citizens' knowledge. Thus, it is a good reason to allocate a considerable amount of money to improve library.

To conclude, as far as I concerned that it is not a waste effort to spend money for education reason, such as establish library to enhance our knowledge with reliable information. (275)

Writing Feedback / There are several factors that can lead to the difficulty of getting clean water. [2]

What are the causes of water scarcity? What are your solutions?

There are several factors that can lead to the difficulty of getting clean water. The essay will first discuss about factory waste and drought which are the main cause of water scarcity, and then to tackle these issues, I think that improving industrial waste management and building recharge area can overcome this problem.

There are some detrimental effects to live near factories, and one of them is difficult to find clean water resources due to lack of responsbility in industrial waste. A river in Gwalior, India for example. It has been polluted owing to textile factories waste that were bulit nearby the river, as stated by a publication from Jiwaji University. As a consequence, local authorities should buy pricey clean water from retailers. To tackle with this issue, factories should apply a management waste product by recycling the waste to remove dangerous chemicals that can be harmful before pouring it into the river. Thus, the water resources can be used again.

In one hand, some groups of people are also hard to find water since suffer a long time of dry season. For example, according to a research from Keio University shows that 47% of rural areas in Tokyo experience a serious problem in finding a well which provide enough water to fulfill their primary needs. As a result, many people, especially children, have suffer dehidration and related disease. Hence, to control this issue, they have to build a large dam that can be a recharge area during rain season. Therefore, preserving clean water appears to be essential to prevent lack of water.

All in all, it is undeniable that water pollution and draught can cause people difficult to find water. Therefore, as far as I concerned that developing management waste products and building a dam can be the best solution. (301)

Writing Feedback / There are some factors which can help people to gain joyfulness. [3]

Happiness is considered very important in life. How is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieve happiness?

Writing Task 2

Some people think that happiness is hard to be defined, whereas they relize that it is one of the most essential part in life because it can lead them into a successful life. However, I believe that there are some factors which can help people to gain joyfulness.

With regard to some people who are not easy to describe enjoyment, because they never feel satisfied with their results that have been reached. For example, according to a publication from University of Tokyo Fujita in 2015, 23% of people in Tokyo were feel under pressure and stress because they could not buy a private transportation to get opulent lifestyle. 9% amidsts the violence had tried to suicide because of feel ashame. As a consequence, the figure might increase along with time due to lack of satisfied. Therefore, cheerfulness is very necessary for everybody.

However, they are two main factors that can lead people to cheeriness, which are always feel grateful and always help each other. For instance, based on experienced of Joko Anwar, is a person who has no great liability. He always feel gratitude and never being tired to give a hand for someone who need it. With his restrictiviness, he is capable of build a foundation for underprivilage children who live in rural area. As a result, he is not only create happiness for himself, but also for other people who deserve to get it. Hence, feeling gratitude and taking care each other can create joyfulness.

I concluded that the notion is true and happiness can be defined by some people who express themselve differently with reality. I believe that showing grateful and taking a part to provide a help for other people, are two key factors which someone can reach joyfulness. (293 words)

Writing Feedback / It is immediately apparent that food/drink/tobacco quantities were the largest among all countries. [3]

The table gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

Writing Task 1

The table reveals the information regarding to the consumer expenditure on different necessities across a range of five countries. It is measured by percentage in 2002. Overall, it is immediately apparent that food/drink/tobacco quantities were the largest over the time. Henceforward, Italy had spent considerable amount of money for clothing/footwear, meanwhile Turkey had the highest percentage of expenditure for leisure/education.

With regards to the two largest proportion of food/drink/tobacco was Turkey that stood at 32,14%, while Ireland had slight difference in its number at 28,91%. In contrast, Italy, Spain and Sweden had similar figure at aproximately above 15%.

Concerning to the rest needs, Italy had the largest number of clothing/footwear at 9%, while Spain had smaller quantities than two other countries at 5,40%. On the other hand, the percentage of leisure/education had been spent mostly by Turkish citizen at 4,35% and Spain had the tiniest proportion in this category at 1,98%. (151 words)

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Writing Feedback / The benefits of finding a vacancy or sightseeing popular places after graduating high school [4]

In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

Writing Task 2

Over the time, some teenagers in many parts of the world have decided to spend time for a year between graduating high school and starting new stage at university to find a job or visit other place. I would firmly agree that there are some advantages and disadvantages towards young people.

With regards to some adolescents who agree with the notion, they generally believe that find as much experience as you were still young is the most essential part. It is because they have much energy and much time to explore new experience. For example, according to a publication from cambridge university in 2010, 68% of juveniles, who decided to take practical work after finishing high school, were more confident than others to decide the field of study in University. As a result, they porobably more succesful than other students. Another good point is adolescents enable to make friends through their journey. The reason is people aged 18-20 have the best period to develop theur social skills to interact with each other based on a journal from Standford University. As a result, they have many friends who have different background and cultures.

On the other hand, there is also a demerit which exists from the notion. Young people will have different starting time with other friends due to their choice to delay entering university. For instance, they migh meet juniors in high school as their classmates. As a consequence, they will receive a degree from university longer than people on their age.

In conclusion, the benefit of find a vacancy or sightseeing popular place after graduating high school is greater than its drawback. Althouh juveniles have different period of graduation with people on their age, they have more experiences and friends than other. (293 words)

Writing Feedback / Proportion of products transported in the United Kingdom by road, rail, water and pipeline [2]

The graph shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

Writing Task 1

The line graph reveals the information regarding to the proportion of products transported in the United Kingdom by four different types of transport. It is measured by nmillion tones at four-year interval from 1974 to 2002. Overall, the most obvious fact is that the proportion of products that was carried by using road, was always the largest in each year over the time. Moreover, water was the second popular transportation in UK during the same period.

With regards to the two highest proportion in 1974, road quantity and rail quantity were stood at 70 and 40 successively. There was few decrease in the number of road over four-year period, while the figure of rail gradually by 10, from 40 in 1978 to 30 in the middle of 1986. However, concerning the remain yea, both of the changes had the same trend and increased marketly between 1994 and 2002. Road quantity and rail quantity reached 100 and above 400 respectively.

Concerning the rest point, the figure of water started at below 40 and the number for pipeline was 5 in 1974. These figure rose in 1978. Although the ration of water continued to remain steadly from 1982 to 1990, pipeline quantity growth gradually to above one-fifths in 1994 and remained over eight-year period. In contrast, the ratio of water inclined slightly at above three-fifths in 2002. (225 words)

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Writing Feedback / Execution punishments for cruel murderers have become a hot issue for debate in recent years [3]

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumtances of an individual crime, and the motivation for commiting it, should be always taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Writing Task 2

Execution punishments for cruel murderer have became a hot issue for debate in recent years. As society who think that every body has their own human right. The juridicy should find out more the information regarding to criminal history of the person and their motivation to commit it when decide the punishment.

With regards to some people who agree with fixed punishment, I believe that they want to reduce crime rates which are getting worst and bring detrimental effects on societies. For example, according to a publication from Jakarta Post in 2016, Indonesian's President, Joko Widodo, has regulated a new regulation to give execution punishments for rapists due to the increasing of violations which happen to children under ages. As a result, news crime rates about sex crime decrease suddenly during the periode. Therefore, some citizens create a petition to the government to punish them with fixed punishments.

However, concerning to other people, who still respect with someone's human right, are disagre with the notion. It is because the juridicy should get more detail information about defendant's pyschology. For example, there was a case which happened to a woman who murdered her husband. The woman should be punished for 20 years according to the regulation. On the other hand, she had strong argument to get a justice due to her husband was a person who wanted to shoot her with a gun. Hence, it is important to take an account about individual crime and the reason why they commit it.

In conclusion, I would firmly agree that fixed punishment should be a further consideration on deciding the punishment, according to the defendant's background and their motivation. (276 words)

Writing Feedback / The information regarding to some steps and tools that are used to produce cement and concrete [2]

The diagrams show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Writing Task 1

The diagrams reveal the information regarding to some steps and tools that are used to produce cement and concrete for building purposes. Overall, it is noticable that, cement production needs more equipment and complex stages than concrete production does. In addition, concrete cannot be produced before cement-making process is finished.

To begin with, there are two main materials which should be prepared for producing cement, that are limestone and clay. First step, these materials are crushed by crusher untill the material sizes powder. Secondly, after being mixed, it will be rotated with certain temperature to heat it in rotating heater. Thirdly, the material needs to be processed in grinder to produce cement. Fourthly, cement can be packed by using large bags.

After cement being produced, concrete-making process can be started. To create it needs 15% of cement, 25% of sand, 10% of water, and a half of stone with small size. The first step is that pour these materials into concrete mixer. After being poured, mixed together by rotating the tool. Finally, concrete can be already used. (177 words)

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Writing Feedback / What other measures do you think might be effective? [4]

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

Writing Task 2

Some societies think that to reduce increasing congestion and air pollution in urban city, it needs to be regulate by increasing the cost of fossil fuel. However, in my opinion, increasing the car sales tax rates is also effectively as well as the notion.

With regards to some people who agree with the view, they generally believe that the price is becoming not affrodable for some groups of people. For example, according to a publication in Australian's News in 2010, there was a new regulate from local government to make the price of petrol higher. As a consequence, people in 16 - 60 age groups, who did no have any income, started using private transportation, such as bus or train. Hence, it really works to solve crowded city from private vehicle and reduces air pollution.

On the other hand, I would firmly agree that there are some merits towards environment and society, if the government also increase the tax rates of car and minibus. Not only people who have limited finance that will be think twice to buy a new car, but also prosperous societies. For example, based on statistical data from University of Tokyo Fujita in 2010, there was a sudden decline in the car sale quantity due to the increasing of car sales tax rates of 17%, from 8% to 25%. As a result, the government started improving bike lanes in the town, also local inhabitants enjoyed riding the bike. Therefore, the city can provide more air fresh and the proportion of congestion reduces gradually.

I concluded that the problem of traffic jam and pollution enable to be solved effectively by some ways. There are increasing the price of solar energy and car sales tax rates. (287 words)

Writing Feedback / The information regarding to the changes in UK school's funds usage in 1981, 1991 and 2001. [2]

This three pie charts show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

Writing Task 1

A breakdown of the information regarding to the changes in UK school's expenditure for each year over three-year decades is depicted in three pie charts. It is measured by percentage. Overall, it is immediately apparent that the figure of teacher's incomes was always be the largest in every year and the toal spending of furniture and equipment had hit the highest level in 2007.

According to the data, the largest starting ratio was teacher wage that stood at two-fifths in 1981. Although it went up and down over three decade, the greatest proportion reached a peak at 50% in 1991. The percentage of resources experienced the same trend and projected at 20% during same period and fell suddenly by 11% in 2001. Henceforth, 28% expenditure for other workers' income continued to decrease steadily at 15% in 2001.

Concerning the remain parts, although the figure of furniture went down dramatically to 5% in 1991, it started rising significantly by 18% in 2001. Moreover, the smallest proportion witnessed in insurance and it growth markedly from 2% in 1991 to 8% in 2001. (180 words)

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Writing Feedback / Is there any connection between children's learning ability at school and the food that they eat? [3]

To learn effectively, children need to eat healthy meal at school. How true is this statemment? Whose responsibility is it to provide food for school children?

Writing Task 2, Practice Test, Page 130

Most people think that there is a connection between children's learning ability at school and the food that they eat. In my opinion, this statement is true and I would argue that parents have the main role to provide healtier food for children.

With regards to its merit of healthy meal, it is able to give high nutrition for children and it relates to the brain develepment. Pupils can be more concentrate to accept a new knowledge from teachers without any difficulties. It is proved, according to the survey from Cambridge University that reveals 78% of young people can memorize 50 words a day after they have eaten high protein and vitamin food, such as a glass of milk and a bowl of salad. As a result, students can study some new vocabularies and increase their reading ability and writing ability. Therefore, it is important for children to eat healthly.

Concerning to a person, who has big responsbility to provide meal, is actually their own parent. It is because they have to take care and pay much attention for their children's development. For instance, if a pupil brings his own meal box, it might reduce this child to buy junk food that is sold in food stall. Thus, parent do not have to aware due to their children have brought and ate home-made cooking at school. Hence, parent should provide their healthy meal.

Overall, it is undeniable that young people can learn effectively if they consume more healthyly. Henceforward, this food should be prepared and cooked by own parent, so children can eat it at school. (266 words)