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|'Students stretching limits' - UPenn Professor Short Essay
5 - I think think essay is very solid. Just one point. Such teachers are also very approachable, which I...
UndergraduateIvy_91 - Dec 29, 2008 / Joanne_an - Dec 29, 2008
|UPenn Undergrad Supp Essay (Why Wharton is right for me)
UndergraduateIvy1991 - Dec 29, 2008 / Ivy1991 - Dec 29, 2008
|A paragraph from my Northwestern essay too wordy? HELP
6 - It was difficult to tear myself away from these fantastic stories of reality, but, as I continued to click...
Undergraduatechuliuxiang - Dec 27, 2008 / EF_Constance - Dec 29, 2008
|UIUC Essay #2: Being a chief designer......
2 - I always wanted to become a designer because I thought designers have such freedom on their canvas without any...
Undergraduatelast_min_girl - Dec 27, 2008 / EF_Constance - Dec 29, 2008
|'I am an independent girl' - Rice why essay & why social science school
4 - I am an applicant with a genuine interest in the fundamental social sciences: Policy Studies and Economics; therefore, the...
Undergraduatecm22 - Dec 27, 2008 / EF_Constance - Dec 29, 2008
|commonapp essay: the park has become my personal therapist
Undergraduateodangletsbang - Dec 28, 2008 / odangletsbang - Dec 29, 2008
|NYU 4 Short Answers (family, life at NYU, talent show...)
UndergraduateLimon1909 - Dec 28, 2008 / Limon1909 - Dec 29, 2008
|i wrote a Carnegie Mellon undergrad admit Essay...Chemical Engineer.
3 - hey thanks Kevin...i had a rough draft before this which was ugly..i tried improving the paragraphs to the best...
Undergraduateredevil147 - Dec 24, 2008 / redevil147 - Dec 29, 2008
|CORNELL SUPPLEMENTAL ESSAY (an interest in the sciences through my courses and activities)
3 - My passion for biology began when I took AP Biology. I found biology to be engaging, because of its...
Undergraduateaj7514 - Dec 28, 2008 / aj7514 - Dec 29, 2008
|NU statement (Center for Student Involvement)
5 - EF_Kevin, thanks, I will defiantly check it out. I just wonder if anyone could edit my short answers....
Undergraduatejenny08066 - Dec 28, 2008 / JohnDavid - Dec 29, 2008
|NYU application short answers (cutting the things I wrote down)
7 - Thank you so much Mr.Kevin! :) I was worried about the second one you corrected. Glad I finally...
Undergraduateskim - Dec 28, 2008 / skim - Dec 29, 2008
|Why Columbia? (the amazing research facilities)
Undergraduatedsacks - Dec 28, 2008 / dsacks - Dec 29, 2008
|Need help with one of the Stanford's prompts?
4 - Thanks for the response. And can anyone tell me how to remove or delete this thread, because all...
Undergraduateavneeeet - Dec 28, 2008 / avneeeet - Dec 29, 2008
|'Internship participation' - NYU short answer: Why did you chose this school?
11 - Yeah I agree with Zowzow about the second sentence. It is too long I think. "Gallatin will allow me...
Undergraduatepencil - Dec 28, 2008 / skim - Dec 29, 2008
|BU supplement essays (engineering and BU)
Undergraduatesean1991 - Dec 27, 2008 / sean1991 - Dec 29, 2008
|Common app short answer - Fiber optics (150 words)
5 - Start with an intro sentence that captures the central truth of the essay. Three-dimensional vision has been used to...
Undergraduateabcdefg - Dec 28, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 29, 2008
|University of Illlinois (academic interests vs professional goals)
4 - Yes, right on! Sean was probably looking at your thread title: (i.e. academic interests vs professional goals) IT...
Undergraduatemustaa - Dec 28, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 29, 2008
|NYU Short Answers--(singing, bicycle, summer vacation)
5 - Molly and Christine, please check out the contributor page (link at the bottom of the screen), because you could...
Undergraduatemgbinger - Dec 28, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 29, 2008
|common app short answer ("the smallest player on the court")
4 - Standing one inch short of five feet, and always the smallest player on the court, the odds have always...
Undergraduateuhlyssuh - Dec 28, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 29, 2008
|most appealing about Columbia (afraid it Doesnt make sense...)
6 - My generation needs to face the fact that the job market is increasingly competitive due to the economic crisis....
Undergraduateyfung91 - Dec 28, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 29, 2008
|Rochester supplement (different points of view)
4 - For any foreign students coming to the United States, it is difficult to adapt to the new environment. I...
UndergraduateVeggy - Dec 28, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 29, 2008
|Duke Application Essay (risk, dilemma)
UndergraduateNichole_P - Dec 28, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 29, 2008
|Health Care; UM / Issue of Importance(personal, national, international)
4 - "Util just recently, health care had never even been an tangible option for my parents" A before a...
Undergraduatejane6272 - Dec 15, 2008 / timothyerdei - Dec 29, 2008
|essay of Virginia DId I answer the question+ grammar
5 - I make some changes to make the essay more expressive. I focus less on the story but focus more...
Undergraduatejustinwang - Dec 27, 2008 / justinwang - Dec 29, 2008
|Music is my way of life, my soul and my community. Rice... why this college?
8 - My father is an accomplished singer, cellist, piano accompanist, and choir director; while, my mother is violinist, and my...
Undergraduatepandora - Dec 25, 2008 / EF_Constance - Dec 29, 2008
|significant experience - practicing playing the piano
3 - I would add a bit more to the first paragraph. Use it as an introductory paragraph. I noticed that...
Undergraduateowen92217 - Dec 27, 2008 / EF_Constance - Dec 29, 2008
|Common App - "Childhood's just like a playground. Think about it."
Undergraduaten00bl3t - Dec 28, 2008 / n00bl3t - Dec 29, 2008
|CommonApp Short Answer (Yearbook)
6 - Contents wise, should I be more creative? Should I be doing more showing than telling? Any other advice apart...
Undergraduatecyjung91 - Dec 27, 2008 / Ivy_91 - Dec 29, 2008
|THIS IS MY ESSAY FOR UIUC,I THINK IT REALLY NEED ENHANCEMENT
4 - Thank you...
Undergraduateqiuerwei - Dec 28, 2008 / qiuerwei - Dec 29, 2008
|My why essays
Undergraduategracetm - Dec 28, 2008 / gracetm - Dec 29, 2008
|NYU SUPPS: worked vacations/ family passed trait/ activity an NYU/ song/ ...
4 - The only thing I could suggest would be to focus entirely on the tennis, since you already dedicate half...
Undergraduategcueva26 - Dec 29, 2008 / EF_Sean - Dec 29, 2008
|THINK BIG; "Dr. Ben Carson, a world-renowned neurosurgeon " - Character in fiction
3 - You're getting there. Some more advice: "From that page on, I decided that for any task I have...
Undergraduatenbarley - Dec 14, 2008 / EF_Sean - Dec 29, 2008
|Common app, two essays on music. Which one's better?
3 - Wow! These are both really fantastic essays! If I had to choose, I would pick the first one because...
Undergraduatecoolshadow888z - Dec 28, 2008 / PoliChick - Dec 29, 2008
|Leadership for University of Bufallo
2 - You need to stop writing in abstract terms and start writing using concrete examples. There were people you idolized...
Undergraduatefelixs07 - Dec 28, 2008 / EF_Sean - Dec 29, 2008
|"Rome did not finish building in one day." - admission essay help
NEW - this is the topic: Choose an issue of importance to you-the issue could be personal, school related, local, political,...
Undergraduatefl415 - Dec 29, 2008 / — -
|An issue of importance to and its significance (Terror strikes)
3 - I agree with Sean. Also, this topic is a bit to controversial and it might be risky talking about...
Undergraduatexyz - Dec 29, 2008 / JohnDavid - Dec 29, 2008
|Carnegie Mellon University (the reputation and economics)
Undergraduatewongxy - Dec 28, 2008 / wongxy - Dec 29, 2008
|Why Carnegie (economics essay)
9 - you are totally right. But I just wanted to focus more on me and my expeirience. But your comment...
UndergraduateVeggy - Dec 28, 2008 / Veggy - Dec 29, 2008
|Elaborate on one of your activities (sunny day)
Undergraduatebaubau - Dec 28, 2008 / baubau - Dec 29, 2008
|Common App Essay - Not specified topic yet.
6 - Wow, thanks you guys very much, I'm influenced by my Vietnamese writing style too much, that's why there are...
Undergraduatekofpower2411 - Dec 28, 2008 / kofpower2411 - Dec 29, 2008
|Common App Essay - she became my "Best Buddy"
3 - Overall a strong essay. A couple of minor grammatical points: "even as a member of an organization that...
UndergraduateKaytee17 - Dec 28, 2008 / EF_Sean - Dec 28, 2008
|why swarthmore essay- Quaker backgroung
Undergraduatedebaterchick09 - Dec 28, 2008 / debaterchick09 - Dec 28, 2008
|why rice social science? eh it seems too typical...
5 - great advice! I will definitely change it so i can show more passion! thanks cm22 and I hope we...
Undergraduatedebaterchick09 - Dec 28, 2008 / debaterchick09 - Dec 28, 2008
|A paragraph from cornell essay (the Cornell Engineering homepage)
Undergraduatechuliuxiang - Dec 28, 2008 / HiroShima11 - Dec 28, 2008
|Elaborate on one of your activities (a manager of a restaurant)
Undergraduatevk123 - Dec 28, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 28, 2008
|MACAULAY ESSAY - a dish that holds a strong associative power for you
Undergraduatesamosa - Dec 28, 2008 / samosa - Dec 28, 2008
|Village Records/ better to give than to receive/I went to Nashville; 3 NYU Short Answers
4 - I would join Village Records, but I would attempt to make changes and propose new ideas to the students...
Undergraduatepencil - Dec 28, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 28, 2008
|Personal Statement, (lunch, active in sports)
Undergraduatedsacks - Dec 28, 2008 / dsacks - Dec 28, 2008
|Common App essay: Performing
3 - This is a really nice essay! It is really personal, and I like the varied sentence structure....
Undergraduatealightinapark - Dec 28, 2008 / mad3na90 - Dec 28, 2008
|Upenn "Your interest..." (business)
4 - The University of Pennsylvania is not a public school, it's a private school, so the basis of your...
Undergraduateserendipity123 - Dec 28, 2008 / LW Trojan - Dec 28, 2008
|Davidson Peer Recommendation
5 - Even with piano lessons, workout classes, organizing and participating in functions as president of the Anchor Club, and tutoring...
Undergraduaterandomzm - Dec 28, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 28, 2008
|NYU CAS for 2009 - summer vacation/ activity/ family trait/ song/ academic program - Short Answers
6 - Your SAT score is very high... slightly above NYU average. I think you did a brilliant job on...
Undergraduatealightinapark - Dec 28, 2008 / Limon1909 - Dec 28, 2008
|'journalism student found me' - this to 150 words----Greatest Accomplishment
5 - You could take out or greatly condense the following to sentences: Later, a journalism student found me and asked...
Undergraduatebhangra369 - Dec 27, 2008 / abcdefg - Dec 28, 2008
|Supplement Essay- more about myself (music)
Undergraduatecutiep0chacc0 - Dec 27, 2008 / cutiep0chacc0 - Dec 28, 2008
|MIT short answer-feedback? opinions?
2 - Environmental Engineering is to me the most attractive MIT program. My AP Environmental Science teacher has revealed to...
UndergraduateNotAnHero - Dec 28, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 28, 2008
|unc long essay (my math teacher)
Undergraduateqzhang - Dec 28, 2008 / qzhang - Dec 28, 2008
|UPenn: A Bold Choice (Why UPenn?)
5 - well, it doesn't have to be kevin to correct this, does he? you know that he's very busy, every...
Undergraduaterandomzm - Dec 28, 2008 / Angela629 - Dec 28, 2008
|'Languages and my way to America' - CommonApp essay - my life of diversity
Undergraduateabcdefg - Dec 27, 2008 / abcdefg - Dec 28, 2008
|NYU short answers (family trait, NYU activity, talent show, NYU program)
UndergraduateVeggy - Dec 28, 2008 / Veggy - Dec 28, 2008
|Motivated you to apply to Rice? Wonderful psychology program that fits my type of learning
Undergraduatedebaterchick09 - Dec 26, 2008 / debaterchick09 - Dec 28, 2008
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