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IELTS 1: Computer ownership among educated people [5]
In general, it can be seen from the graph thatthe percentage of computer ownership and level of education which have differentdifference every years.
The first graph, in 2002, computer ownership was approximately 55 percent, and increased slightly to almost 60 percent in 2004
With the result, computer ownership from year 2002 until to 2010 has undergone increasing step by step every year.
For example, no high school diploma has approximately 18%,
what does it mean?
To sum up, it can be concluded that computer ownership in years 2010 had percent higher higher percentage than in year 2002 until 2008
also, in the beginning of your 3rd and 4th paragraph, it will be better if you write
according to the first/second graph,