Writing Feedback / How to be a good mother or father - you can learn it! [4]

It is necessary for parents to attend parenting training course to bring their children up. Do you agree or disagree?

parenting school

There is no doubt that parents have a big influence on children's life. As such, many argue that joining in course of parenting is essential in order to help them to controll the children's development. In my point of view, I tend to concur with this idea due to the fact that parents have a big tendency to determine the children's way of life and also they have to understand children's necessary then connect it with physicology and mentally aproachment. All of this needs can be obtained in parenting course.

First and foremost, parents are the first school for every children in the world. Therefore, they must know how to bring up their children in more sufficience life. Indeed, I could say that by attending on parenting training course, they can know what the children's necessity and how to face them in every condition. Thereby, the peaceful life is created by this condition as the benefit of understanding given to children. Taking Ari as instance, he is 8 years old and have a hedonisme lifestyle and this influence on their attitude to ungrateful in every condition. By taking parenting course, their parent know how to tackle this condition by give their son some film which has learned about gratefullness. Hence, their son became knowing to be grateful by the time.

In addition, it is commonly believe that children have a different character and tend to have swing mood. Because of this, parents should have a variety of methods to face the children in every time and every condition. For instance, children are lazy to attend the class because their task is too many, then finally get a low performance and achievement at the class. It can be tackle by parents with give them reward when they have a good record of presence. It will be worth due to the fact that in physicology's term, they have tendention to do the best by rewarding process. This is an example of method could be obtained in parenting course. As such, it is clear that involving on parenting course is very important for parents.

All in all, parents are the key word of children's life. that is why, joining on parenting course is very meaningfull to control children development. Thereby, parents should provide their time to attend this course.

Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1: Foster Road' Alterations [4]

Road changes connected with an installation process

The picture illustrates the Foster Road's alterations on both SE 84 th and 85 th avenue as the result of instalation process. At the first glance, it is immediately apparent that Foster road became more convenient by means of trees and road-arrangement facilities' existances.

To begin with, Foster Road before the instalation consist of two main ways throughed by driver and separated into two path in opposite lane. Beside that, the road did not have any space for walkers to pass, so did the bicycle lanes. Furthermore, the road looks so warm because there is no plants neither on left nor right side of the way.

Interestingly, a significant improvement witnessed on the road after the instalations. It can be seen obviously that there a lot of trees grown throughout the Foster Road's, makes the road become so greeny. In addition, the other changes show by the existance of pedestrian patway on both sides of road, so did the bicycle lane. Likewise, the new crossing road build beside the traffic lights.

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Writing Feedback / Direct Question Type : Responsibility of Children In the Past and Nowadays [2]

Children in some part of the world have less responsibility compared to children in the past. Some people think this is as a positive change, however others think of it as a negative change.

Difference in requirements for children

In the past, children have several responsibilities to do, they do not only focus to study but also they must help their parents to earn money in order to fulfill their necessity. In contrast, children today do not have responsibility as much as they did in the past. In my point of view, this is a positive change as children will focuse to only study in their childhood.

Ideally, children have responsibility to build up their knowledge when they were children. This is because they have to looking for their own self, in particular their strength and and weakness. By reducing responsibility, it will provide a wide time for them for finding their own interest and talent to improve in the next time. I will be emphasize that study is not just about learn in cognitive way, but also in psycomotoric and afective aspect too.

Another reason regarding this, is relating the fact that reduction of children activity indicates that their parents have done their own responsibility for covering the necessary of their family in all aspect, either on financial, or social aspect. As such, It is true that this condition is a positive change for children.

Taking everything into consideration, less responsibility of children can make student focuse to their study because they did not have any distrubtion to ignore their lesson. This also appears the fact that parent has done their job in a proper way. Moreover, student just use this chance to benefit their self by ensuring that they are realy study in the whole of time provided.

Writing Feedback / The diagram presents Manufacturing Process of Bricks [2]

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.

How brick is made

The diagram illustrates about the several stages for brick manufacturing process. Overall, there are seven steps to do which is started from clay-digging process and end up with distributing process.

The process is begun by taking clay in the ground by digger, then the process is continued with mixturing process. In this stage, the clay that has been sortered in metal grid then mixtured by roller. When material has been solid and calix, sand and water are added since then it ready for forming process.

At the brick-forming process, there are two method as choices, they are conventional method by mould and modern method by spesific shaper tool. Next is driying process by oven. In this stage, the bricks should be dried up to 48 hours to make the material compact. After that, the bricks are going to cooling chamber for reducing their temperature from oven heating tn the previous stage. In the last step, the bricks are ready to distribute, but before it, the peckaging process should be done perfectly.

Writing Feedback / The preference of people on E-Books and Paper Books [3]

More and more people prefer to read eBooks rather than paper books. What are the reason for this? What problem can this cause for libraries?

Different ways to read

It goes without saying that the improvement of technology has influenced on people live. Thus, it also relating to the recent condition that preference of people to read electronic books has been raising by the time. This then reducing the number of reader on using printed books. Based on the flexibility reason, I tend to support this notion. However, the lack of visitors can affect on libraries.

People tend to search the more accessible way to fulfill their necessity. Likewise on the way people getting an information through reading nowadays. E-books as a new sort of reading information is very flexible in use because people can use it in every condition, everywhere, and everytime as long as the devices to suppot it still avalaible. Thereby, people do not need to bring the printed book in their bag to search information they need.

However, the most obvious problem appears to this condition is the lack of libraries visitors. This gap is inevitable on almost libraries. The recent research in 2017 shows that the number of visitor in big five libraries in Malaysia reckons a significant decrease by 40 %, this is because readers tend to read ebooks rather than spend their time in library. Moreover, this decreasing number of visitors affecting to the reducing number of books lent by them.

All in all, E-books offers the flexibility for readers. That is why people tend to search information on this form frequently rather than paper books. Nevertheless, this condition has affected om the reducing number of libraries visitors.

Writing Feedback / The amount of water used by sectors, also the water utilisation in Brasil and Congo [2]

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.

measured numbers of water consumption

The line graph compares the amount of water used in three sectors, while the table illustrates the plenty of water consumption on both Brazil and Congo in 2000. Overall, it is immediately apparent that a great amount of water distributed to agricultural sector. Moreover, the amount of water consumption also influenced by the huge number of population, instead Brazil.

First and foremost, water would be used for three of farmland, industrial and domestic sector. Interrestingly, from 1900 to 2000, agriculture noticed as the most sector with the largest water using among the other and this amount of water become large and large till the end of period , which was 3,000 km3. In addition, the other sectors, either domestic or industrial have the same amount of water using from 1900 to 1950. Water using on both sectors also exhibit a gradual jump trend, but industrial sector reckons the higher than domestic water using in the end of timeline.

On the other hand, Water consumption in Brazil and Congo were very different. In can be seen clearly that each person in Brazil need about 359 m3 water, while Congo's population just using 8 m3. It is linear with the number of their population, Brazil population is higher than Congo. Moreover, on irrigated land consumption also showed a significant gap while Brazil can watering 26,500 Km2 and Congo just 100 Km2.

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Writing Feedback / The proportion of National Consumer Expenditure in Five countries [2]

Spendings rate in some european countries

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

A breakdown of information regarding the comparison of expenditure spending by five countries for three of national categories consumption in 2012 is presented by table. At the first glance, the highest expenditure spent belongs to food and beverage, while funding for leisure/education aspect was the lowest among the categories

First and foremost, it can be clearly seen that more than 15 % of expenditure by all countries allocated to food items and tobacco necessity. To take more detail, Turkey spent the highest funding for this item, which was twice more much than Sweden (15,77 %). Likewise Ireland, spent up to two fold expenditure more much than Italy and Spain in this category.

On the other hand, for each countries, the lowest funding spent for leisure/ Education category. It can be proof by the data that Turkey as the country which spend the biggest portion, just funding arround 4,35 %. In addition, Ireland spent twice less than the former. The rest is Spain, spent just 1.98 % and became remarkable portion owing to the fact that it occupied the lowest expenditure among the countries.

Turning to another data on clothing/footwear category, it witnessed the average range of expenditure about 5-9 % for fifth countries. Interrestingly, the highest expenditure spent for this category was Italy (9.00 %), while the lowest was Sweden (5.40 %). In addition, the rest three countries spend approximately 6.5 % of funding for clothing/footwear.

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Writing Feedback / Commit crimes and first punishment - death penalty? [2]

Many offender commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening and what the measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

Bigger number of criminal activity

In todays world, the are too many cases relating crime, either on petty or heavy crime. Moreover, another information reckons the fact that some of low breaker tend to commit more crimes when they have been through their first punishment. As such, in my point of view, this condition appears because of the weakness of law enforcement. So, they think that the punishment they accepted is non-sense. To tackle this, the high level of punishment, such as death penalty is firmly to give an obvious result.

Many cases on media shown that there is unbalance portion on law-breaker punishment accepted than the demerits they done. Taking corruptor X as instance. He have stollen government funding allocated for repairing of village' infrastructure and brough many disadventages for inhabitants. Unfortunately, the punishment he obtained is not big enough to give him effect anymore. He just has to stay in prison for about 5 years for compelling their crime. As such, the possibility to do the same crime for twice is exsist. Hence, it is clear that the law enforcement can be causing this problem.

To tackle this, enroling the high-punishment level such as death penalty will be worth. First, death penalty will give a high effect on crime agent to stop their activities. This is because it will be resulting a big pressure to them to consider many factors to do so. Secondly, it will be effect on reducing the number of crime rate, due to the fact that there is a clear of law enforcement by the government. Based on this explanation, I could say that improving the high-punishment level is effective way.

To sum up, unbalance punishment given to crime agent causing them to do more and more crime. Therefore, death penalty as the high level of enforcement could be an effective solution to tackle.

Writing Feedback / The attendance of Higher education students in the class [3]

University students should have right about wheter they attend the classes or not?

students' presence in a school

It seems to be true that higher education level is dominated by adult learners. As such, many claim that the students in university can choose to attend the classes or not because they have right to do so. Albeit the institution has their specific role regarding the student presence, I prefer to agree with this notion due to several justifications.

First and and foremost, studying in university is different with studying in the school. This comparison can be seen from the curriculum they used. University's curriculum has designed to be more flexible based on each major's need. Likewise, the source of information that lecturer used is more variatif and sometimes can be found in internet. That is why, student can learn it outside the class. Hence, it proves that student can determine their presence or absentation in the class room.

Another justification comes from the fact that university students tend to get involved in many different organisations in order for improving their self-development. As a result, they can not stay in the class totally. Interrestingly, there a lot of cases that someone who is seldom following the class has a high achievement too. Taking my friend, vera, as instance. She is very active in her research organisation. Thus, she rare to involve class, but she usually learn her subject outside the class or lend her friend's book. Ultimately, she has a high score in her class and being the best graduate in her major. This example has proven that absenteeism is not the only one measurement to be glorious in university. More than that, the key word is how students managing their priority.

In conclusion, although a fully presence is good for student, it seems to me that it will be wrong for obligating university's student for this rule. I personally prefer to saying that they have right to consider some decision whether they attend classes or vice versa. Furthermore, students in higher education need to develope their self with enrole in several organisations.

Writing Feedback / The alteration of US Oregon's state inhabitants in three counties [2]

The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S state of Oregon.

the population had rocketed significantly

The line chart displays the information about the alteration of Oregon's inhabitant number from 1940 to 2000 which is compared in three different counties. At the first glance, all features indicated an upward trend, while Washington became the most populous city.

Intially, the most density area was seen in Washington, as such it placed by 75 thousands people in 1940 while the other two cities just stood at around 30 thousands. Following this, all features witnessed a gradual decrease until 1970. Interrestingly, Columbia and Yamhill has a similar pattern, therefore both of them stayed almost in same position, which is appoximately 45.000 society.

By 2000, Washington's population had rocketed significantly up to two fold from the former. As a result, it reached a peak at this period. On the other side, Columbia and Yamhill went grow up about twice. Eventually, the final population rate of Columbia was equal with Washington in the first period.

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Writing Feedback / Non-scientific subject is not important? [4]

Some educationalists argue thet non-exam arts-based subjects, such as music, drama, art and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary-school curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve overall academic performance.

to what extent do you agree or disagree?

being an expert without learning Non-scientific subjects

Everyone has their own talent, either on art, sport, or the others. That's why many people say that to be an expert one, children should put more attention on practical subject based on their aptitude, because there beliefs that is non-sense to teach children with lack of artistic talent to involve in art classes at school. In my view, I tend to agree with this notion due to several strong reason.

Children will be happier to repeat the subject which they are very likely than the the others. That's why, to make them focus on one skill in particular art, it should be connected with their aptitudes. Moreover, art is emotion which need deeply imagination to create an outstanding compotion. Because of that, to be an art expert, children skill should improve at the begining of their ages. So, they will learn to feel deeply more and more. Additionaly, only person with peacefull condition who has a big possibility to design a luxury product. So, it's clear that developing skill by the aptitudes becoming so essential.

In the other hand, there also artist who have a good painting, but starting to learn art in school without an art aptitude before. This is because they have a big strong-willing to try and try. Unfortunately, there only a small portion of people in the world could be like this.

To sum up, it is true that there is an expert artist today who start painting and drawing without aptitudes. It means that someone's tallent can be improve by the time. But, it will be better for focusing children based on their aptitude to build up a perfect art product due to the fact that they will have a big impression on it.

Writing Feedback / Information Technology brings a work flexibility [6]

Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace (e.g at home, when travelling, etc). Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadventages?

Today's technology improvements

It goes without saying that technology improvement has bring a ripple effect on human life, especially when it comes to talk about employment flexibility. As such, it has allowed many workers to finish their task wherever they want to. Personally, I also think that the merits of this improvement outweight the drawbacks.

The information-technology impovement has influenced the flexibility of workers, especially on the way they complete their job. Obviously, this also relates to their productivity. Furthermore, some jobs in particular art company did not need to compel the workers to stay in office all the time. That is why they will get a huge benefits from this simplicity. This is because the artist can complete their painting in the other places, such as home, field, or in tourism places. Moreover, this mobility has influenced on how people arrange their time to work and to relax based on their own self. Additionally, the another benefit of this is relating to how the company has to reduce their outcome, due to the fact that, the office should not be operate 24 hours per day.

On the other hand, we can not deny that this technology improvement has some drawbacks too, owing to the fact that there also a job which force the labour to accomplish work in the office, in particular for a big company. For more detail, lets take an example on electronic services' companies. They tend to entire their time in the workplace because it it impossible to doing their job on the other places. That is why, I could say that the disadventages of this mobility are regarding to the effectiveness of workers time to make the problem clear.

Clearly, there are some benefits from technology advances since it can makes some particular work became more flexible and highly producing. However, it also has brought a drawbacks as the work became disorganise.