ekalamarsyari11
Aug 25, 2016
Writing Feedback / Learning a country by visiting it (IELTS task 2); "the only source of knowledge is experience" [3]
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it's not a result but it's a contrast
In my opinion, visiting a place canincreaseexpandtheour knowledge about it(unclear) .....
first idea :Learning more about a country can be gained when people can also 'experience' it than only 'know' it. it's hard to understand
second idea: Learning process, if I define, should involve all of human senses.
third idea: When people are watching news about a place, they only use two senses that are vision and hearing. It will be different if they visit it.
i notice that you make many ideas in a paragraph but it should be better if you only serve one main idea in each paragraph.
it's not a result but it's a contrast
In my opinion, visiting a place can
first idea :Learning more about a country can be gained when people can also 'experience' it than only 'know' it. it's hard to understand
second idea: Learning process, if I define, should involve all of human senses.
third idea: When people are watching news about a place, they only use two senses that are vision and hearing. It will be different if they visit it.
i notice that you make many ideas in a paragraph but it should be better if you only serve one main idea in each paragraph.