Writing Feedback / It is witnessed that the largest proportion of New Zealand's visitors come from Australia [2]

International visitors to New Zealand: country of origin

The pie chart compares about international tourists who visit New Zealand based on their nationality. The largest proportion is witnessed by Australia. A lower of number is showed for Americans and British while The East Asian People are the minority of proportion. But some of them come from unknown countries

According to the figure chart it can be seen that the first majority group is Australians people. The percentage is viewed virtually more than thirtieth

A closer look at the figure it has showed that United State of America and United Kingdom are taken the second largest proportion. On the other hand, the East Asian Countries show the third smallest proportion. However, there are small majority from others countries. But More than a significant majority commonly travelers come from English-speaking Countries which English is their first language.

To summary, most of them come from native-speaker countries. But a few of them come from Non-English Speaking countries

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Writing Feedback / Summary article :Human sperm grown in a lab in the first time [2]

According the French scientists, it informs the first time they make human spermatozoa from testicular cells called spermatogonia for giving either treatment for childhood cancer or decide to have children in future life. The company has to pursue their project because Kallistem obtain a patent for the method, unfortunately it failed to convince skeptics at that time. Actually, Chinese and Japanese researchers have done with using mouse sperm before.

Durand, one of researcher who recognizes this project, told that the necessary thing is a bioreactor in which bundles of somniferous tubules of testes that contain of spermatogonia. it has packaged inside tiny cylinder called "Chitosan". The substances include a precise blend of nutrients, vitamins, hormones and growth factors that diffuse through to the cells and coax them to mature, the process takes 72 days and the tests to do are currently under way. Lastly, Durand said if all the process supported by company it takes 4 years to see the result.

Writing Feedback / Most people in the past chose to stay in one place along their life [2]

Writing task 2:The advantages and disadvantages of moving around in different places

Most people in the past chose to stay in one place along their life because they felt enough to pass all of life in the same house, road and society. Nowadays, most people move around and stay in several places during their lifetimes because they are typical of human-being who like to jump from one place to another. It is a chance to have new experiences, job opportunities, and neighbors.

There are a lot of benefits for moving around different society such as, having new house, having new neighbor, starting new job, building new business and having new experience. Unfortunately, jumpers who love to move around in different places need to survive and adapt with new cultures surrounding their lifetimes for each place their moving. Also before they are moving, need to clean old house, pack all items inside house, find transportation and carry on all stuffs to new place.

On the other hand, people who like to stay in only one place in all of their lifetime periods are kind of human-being who do not want to try neither new challenges nor new experience. It is a way they have chosen to keep safety such as, having all family members surrounding them and meeting sociable people as much as possible everyday along their life. In my experiences, It is totally nice to always stay and move in different places. When I only stay in the same place, I was easy to feel bored but once I move around of strange situation I felt better even it is shocked but it is a new challenges to keep surviving.

To conclude, some people only stay in the same place along their life periods which make them away from new pressure, they think do not need new expectation in new situation, while, others say it is better to expert out life to try every place to feel the new atmosphere of each place.

Writing Feedback / Summary article: The questions remain after a bomb explosion in new york [3]

Since New York City commemorated the 15th anniversary of September 11th attacks a week ago, a bomb went off again around 8.30pm on September 17th, 2016, in Chelsea and Manhattan. The explosion shook buildings and blasted out windows. In this accident Twenty-nine people were injured, one seriously. Bill de Blasio, New York City's mayor said that the incident was intentional and criminal but he hesitated to call its terrorism while the investigation is processing. On the other side, On Saturday morning a timed pipe-bomb went off at a 5km fun run in New Jersey for a military charity, No one and group were injured. Whereas Islamic State has claimed credit for another attack at a shopping center in St Cloud, Minnesota

According to the article, New York is one of the world's best-prepared cities for a terrorist attack. Since 2001 the police department has ramped up its counter-terrorism activities. Mr de Blasio has promised that police presence will now "be bigger than ever". Cops will be on patrol at the UN, Times Square and other New York landmarks, as well as posted at subway stations. And also Andrew Cuomo, the governor of New York has deployed 1,000 state troopers and National Guardsmen to help patrol transport hubs. He promised that the subway, the city's lifeline, would be running in time for the Monday morning commute. He told, "we're getting ready to go to work tomorrow like any Monday morning".

Writing Feedback / All of life activities have been covered in internet, which should be used wisely to avoid addiction [3]

Question?

The internet is probably the most significant invention of the last 30 years. Without it our lives would be completely different
To what do you agree or disagree?

Answer:

In last 3 decades, many advanced technologies have been found. Camera mirrorless or Camera phone was invention to help people capture the beautiful view and landscape. And also, Credit card invention gives people easy way to pay shopping. On the other side, the internet is being essential for people nowadays. It is true those inventions have changed human life quickly. However, it shows that internet is being an important thing which changes the way of people life.

Recently, students are completely different than in the past, almost 50 percent their activities by using internet. Internet helps them to communicate with the teachers either to attend online course or sending an assignment via email and they do not need to attend live lecture or printing papers for assignment. Also, they can download online books to save their money for buying book in bookstore.

Citizens lifestyle are definitely different with old citizens in the past. There are many applications online to help people easily to pass life faster for example, online shopping. So they can order all of items shopping on website, it helps them safe the time to go to store. And also, transportation pick-up online, they can reach the destination on time, they do not need to cause traffic jam longer.

People have different method of spending leisure time, adults and teenagers love enjoying social media, such as Facebook, Instagram and Snapchat. Most people use internet to sign up on these sites. Nowadays, girls like to download Korean movies while boys are spending most of their time to play online game by using internet.

To conclude, I agree that the greatest advanced invention can be influence all of human life probably internet. Lately, all of life activities have provided in internet but it should use wisely to avoid being addicted with internet.

Writing Feedback / The percentage of Bulgarians who were expecting to live abroad, based on their education [2]

The bar chart shows the percentage of Bulgarians who were expecting to live in foreign countries, based on three level of education, higher education, secondary and primary or lower education, over a three-year period.

Turning on the details, senior high school is one of group of the highest education step in Bulgaria each year but it fell slowly in the end of the period from 65 percent in 2002 to 59 percent in 2008. On the other side, the second higher level of Bulgarians is junior high school or elementary school which increased slightly from 18 percent in 2002 to 32 percent in 2008. However, the percentage between 2006 and 2002 which showed a significant rise was only from 18 percent to 19 percent.

Furthermore, the categories of Bulgarians who had tertiary education fell down at 9 percent in 2008 from 20 percent in the previous period. It is shown that well educated Bulgarians people were lower interest to live and move to another country than primary school people.

To sum up, over the last six years, education was not the first aim of Bulgarian to move to another country which has illustrate the worst request based on the type of Bulgarian education. There might be other reasons for living in different countries.

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Writing Feedback / Most People are missing out on incredible opportunities all of the time, making bad decisions [2]

SUMMARY TED : Programming your mind for being success

Carrie Green began her speech with giving one question to the audiences, can i have a volunteer to stand with me on this stage?. After a couple of minutes someone joined her and she just wanted to test and give money to audiences but this was not about the money, it was about experiment demonstrates the power of your mind. The fact that what is going on up in your head has such a huge impact on the actions that you take, on the decisions you make, and the things that you experience.

According to Carrie Green, The reasons why people think twice to stand on this stage are because of fear, obstacles and less motivation. First reason, Fear of standing up stage in front of nearly 1000 people is really damn scary, perhaps it was fear of the unknown, because they had no idea what should do with the speaker. Furthermore, the second reason, it was because of OBSTACLES. There were quite a lot of obstacles in this room, probably they are so far at the back, and they just thought there are lots of tables in their way up it's too difficult to reach stage. Third reason, it's just the lack of MOTIVATION. Perhaps they just could not be bothered to move and come up to the stage But no matter what they reason were, their decision started up here on the stage, In their mind.

Most People are missing out on incredible opportunities all of the time, because of what's going on in the head, making bad decisions. However, people who believe with Those kind of self-limiting thoughts And so these wonderful ideas, incredible potentials, stay locked up inside will create a wonderful life And that is exactly what was happening to Carrie a few years ago.

source: youtube.com/watch?v=MmfikLimeQ8

Writing Feedback / 'sleep well at night and do yoga at midnight': it's hard to keep a healthy lifestyle in modern world [3]

Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Your feedback will really help to improve my essay ^,^

It is true that citizens have unfit the way of life in modern era which increases the number of people who died because of eating unhealthy meals. Some people believe that advanced technology give easy way to obtain fast food everywhere. Otherwise, others think a lot of method for staying fit today and it depends on the people commitment to make an effort for a healthy lifestyle.

To begin with, an unhealthy lifestyle becomes a particular of serious issue nowadays. And some people think that it is quite hard to eat fresh food or do physical movement in new world. Moreover, a period of life in advanced technology gives plenty of facilities such as, delivery food by fast food restaurant and eCommerce meals online. And these are easy way to have health problems and make human lazy to go outside. Furthermore, another facility from new innovation also make people spending much time in front of TV, Smartphone and computer, so they are less by working out in a gym and outdoor activities.

Nowadays, a healthy lifestyle has become an essential thing for people who expect to live longer and healthy. And others people argue that there are several ways to stay fit such as, cut down on unhealthy foods, make an effort to do exercise every twice a week frequently and increase fruits and vegetable intake regularly. However, people who prefer to keep fit in lifestyle have to commits with themselves to avoid unhealthy lifestyle.

To sum up, it is easy to have a healthy lifestyle in modern era by eating balance nutrition, eliminate junk food and doing exercise as long as the people can commits with these activities but in my experience there are many ways to have a fit body and healthy mind such as less stress, sleep well at night and do yoga at midnight. It might be very useful to solve health problems.

Writing Feedback / Which Communication Skills are being necessary in Your Job? [3]

The table below compares the outcome of necessary of communication skills for employees based on two observations, over a ninth-year period. At a glance, it shows that external communication has the most essential talent which affects employees to deal with all part of work aspects. Meanwhile, being a good listener to other worker can assist for a particular of internal skills.

Turning on, the percentage by two surveys for external communication skills between 1997 and 2006 rose slightly by 5 % for dealing with people, 6 % for experience services or products and 3% for caring for customers, and the only one ability for making deal just for selling a product or service fell slightly by 2 %. To compare, between internal skills and external skills, the highest percentage is showed by dealing with customers.

On the other side, the percentage showed by the survey for internal communication abilities between 1997 and 2006 increased steadily by 1% for planning the activities of others, 4 % for making speeches or presentations, 5 % for training people and influencing others, 6 % for analyzing problems together with others, and 9 % for being good listener with other employees which is also being the most largest percentage in internal skills.

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Writing Feedback / Happy partners were significantly more likely to report better health [4]

Belinda Luscombe said that greater people will bring happiness to the one surround their circumstance and they are healthier rather than the gloomy one. Between 2006 and 2012 Michigan State University surveyed among 2,000 adults married normal couples in the Health and Retirement over the last six years has been found that Participants with happy partners were significantly more likely to report better health, experience less physical impairment, and to exercise more frequently than participants with unhappy partners. The writer suggests, there are 3 reason points for a happy person why they could improve the health of their lover. First, a happy spouse is a better caretaker. Secondly, people with a positive outlook are more likely to eat better, exercise, sleep regularly, avoiding doing self-destructive things And thirdly, happy partners bring life easier for their lovers because their lovers are not stressed. And this research adjusted for gender, wealth and educational attainment but there was no difference in these outcomes between husbands and wives. The study surveyed four health indices: self-reported health, physical impairment, exercise and chronic conditions but the chronic conditions were the only thing that could not improve a cheerful life partner

Source : time

Writing Feedback / Reasons of working in the same place: opportunity of being leader and comfortable working atmosphere [2]

WRITING TASK 2: The reason why employees working in the same place within year

The most common reason that motivates employees to keep them working in the same place within years is money. I totally disagree with this statement because opportunity of being leader and comfortable working atmosphere are the reason for this trend.

These days, some workers believe that the leader position will be offered for old and expert employees only. Therefore, for that reason, staying in the similar company for along time will give many chances to lead its workplace. For example, a recent study of university of Auckland carried out from 2009 to 2011 found that about 68% of employees stayed to learn how to be good leader to prepare their next vote as a future director in that company while 32% workers stayed because of money purpose. It is true that the director position motivates employers to keep doing the same job for long-term period.

It is generally believed that other people stay longer in the same company because of the comfortable working experience. This means that what they find in the workplace such as working system and colleges they have makes them feel convenient. Besides, employees also have their own principle WHO supports them to do their best in working. For instance, in Korea, a new survey by government authority showed that approximately 85% workers unchanged their job as they have friendly colleagues and circumstance in office while 25% they need to earn a lot of money for their living cost. It is true that being convenient in work place is the reason for this phenomenon.

To conclude, the motivations why people have job in the same workplace within years are having a chance to be future chief company and pleasant workplace. It is nettles to say that employees definitely have their own-choice to decide where they want to earn money

Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 2: Government regulation to relocate factories and businesses in countryside [3]

Many factories and businesses are encouraged by governments to relocate their buildings in rural areas. Even though, this policy will reduce cost of production, its demerit of polluting environment in the suburban are far outweigh any benefits.

It is generally believed that the relocation of business and industrial center in the outskirt would make the cost production more affordable. This authority will only reduce a few negative effects for urban populations. Furthermore, the factories and business can increase the amount of products suited to lower cost of production but it will add transportation fee. For instance, the distance from suburb to urban areas will have additional cost for distribution products. I firmly claim that this policy can not settle the prior issue as the urban citizens still run into climate change from vehicle emission.

Apart from the aforementioned discussion, when the industry and business are moved to the suburb, environmental problem would be faced by people living there. Besides that, governments in several countries have to consider and survey the factory zone before this authority is issued as it will change land farm infrastructure. For example, agriculture products decreasing, inhabitants lose their primary job since the areas are replaced by factories and businesses also they do not have qualification to work in these workplaces. I fully believe even though there are best offer for training and high salary from both businesses but it is not easy to change their mindset as they are familiar to work in quiet and clean land farming.

To sum up, the government regulations might less production budget of industries if they move their factories place to countryside but it might also damage the land farming areas. Where possible, the government has to issue rules that take a solution having a long-term benefit.

Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 2 :THE WHOLE WORK CONDITION IS CHANGING TODAY [3]

Question:
The world of work is changing rapidly. Working conditions today are not the same as before and people no longer rely on taking one job for life. Discuss the possible causes for these changes and give your suggestion which can be taken in the future?

Answer :

It is generally believed that the whole work situation is totally changing today compared several years bygone. Workers prefer to take more than one job. Higher living costs are the reason of this case. Therefore, living in economical way is solution which can be taken by workers.

It is often said that the rise of living cost is one of contributing factors inducing the trend. The reason for this is that the salary the employees receive in every month cannot accommodate all basic necessities. A current study carried out in university of New York in 2012 uncovered that 65% of people in Britain decide to take a side job as the expenditure they make in every month is in the soaring rate. By this study, it is true that the increase of cost they spend for living is one of reasons why people are more likely to go part-time.

On the other side, one of possible solutions which can be taken by employees to solve this phenomenon is living in providently way. Workers can economize to buy only necessity stuffs and save money for emergency needed such as children tuition school, medical check-up or holiday fee in year-end. Even thought, some workers argue it is not easy to suddenly change the way of life but in my opinion having one settled job is enough as long as people can manage their financial balance between income and outcome

Overall, the most reason why employees search for another job is higher all basic necessities or accommodation. Moreover, workers can settle this issue by living in economical situation. In my view, workers have to manage their financial to be sufficiency for daily outcome.

Writing Feedback / Children are permitted to have job in several countries while they are still at school [2]

Question :In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong while others consider it as valuable work experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Answer:
Children are permitted to have job in several countries while they are at school. Some people argue it is fully not approved, whereas others believe it is more beneficial for children. Even though children's mental age is not ready to be engaged in paid work, I am more likely to support that they could work while their studying as long as they can balance between work and study to get benefit for their future job

It is often said that some citizens argue it may be serious issue for children to be an employee in paid job due to their mental age. The reason for this is that they might learn and focus on getting certificate showing their appropriate skills in formal school. For instance, Indonesian government issued regulation requiring employees being upper 18-year-old and finishing their high school education. I absolutely claim this opinion as children definitely have a chance to get engaged in this paid work since they are capable and have a will to work while they are studying

However, others regard that children can develop their skills to have job while they are registered as students at school. Today there are various types of paid work which allow children to channel their talents such as being a freelance writer or a tour guide, resulting in the development of skills required for their life. Obviously worker children can compromise with time between working and studying which is proved with their academy achievement higher than children who are not working. I totally believe with those who assume that children can gain new challenge in working since this can help them to be more independent and responsible for their future life

In the final analysis, it has some benefits for teenager to have job while they attend a school as far as they can organize their responsibility as a student. It will help them to get experience for the next future job. Whereas possible, Government and workplaces have to facilitate children who want to work before attend university.

Writing Feedback / INCREASING SEA LEVELS CAUSED BY GLOBAL WARMING [4]

QUESTION:

Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions?

ANSWER :

Today, the most serious issue that people face caused global warming is the increase of sea levels. This would lead to the inundation in coastal area and a solution that can overcome this problem is building a dam.

The main problem caused by global warming is the rise of sea levels leading to the inundation in coastal zone. Flood happens as the land nearby the beach is lower than sea level. This catastrophe will cause epidemic diseases such as diarrhea mainly striking children. Also, such disaster will halt human daily routines, causing the weakening economic rate. In 2009, Korea government said that 69% people chose to move to comfort zone while 31% preferred to stay at home as long as flood drowning their homes.

One of solutions which can be taken to cope with the problem is the construction of sea barrier in coastal area. Even though this solution will cost much money, its positive impact can be felt for long term. During 1990, Rotterdam government established Maeslantkering consisting of two huge gates which can open and close automatically to adjust the sea level.

To sum up, the most common problem that people are deal these days is the increasing sea levels caused by global warming. This will cause flood in coastal zone but building flood barriers nearest coastal area will solve this phenomena. Whereas possible, government should provide expense for this project.