Writing Feedback / The free movement of goods regulations and its impact on the domestic market [2]

The free movement of goods across national borders has long been a controversial issue. Some people argue that it is necessary for economic growth, while others claim that it damages local industries.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion. You should write at least 250 words.

These days, connecting between a country and another had become important rule particularly in economical dimension which had positif and negatif impact in order for society.

Personally, i believe that this regulation have enormous number of advantages for the domestic market, but the authority have to fit the condition.

This rule has become common in the most country today because it has tremendous benefit. For example, there are many countries that joined into the nation alliance that can allow to trade their local product to other countries. That can rise the provit and increased the economical condition. Then, this rule can also provide dividend from tax of goods that comes from outside country. It has also been profitable line for government.

In contrast, it can give opposite result if local entrepreneur donot have challenging sense. The free movement of goods would relieve local brand field. It happened as people more likely to choose other brand than original brand. On the other hand, people would addict with foreign brand that have low-cost than local brand. It can eliminate native opportunity to develop and to endorse their label.

To sum up, it can provide merit for local brand if the government forearm and have to fit the condition.

Writing Feedback / Dance is the language, and social dance is an expression that emerges from a community. [2]

IELTS Writing Summary TED: A visual history of social dance by Cammile A. Brown.

Dance is the language, and social dance is an expression that emerges from a community. A social dance is not choreographed by any one person. It cannot be traced to any one moment. Especialy in African-American social dances, see over 200 years of how African-American traditions influenced our history. Some experts believe that the present always contains the past, and the past shapes who they are and who they will be. There are some evoution of African-American dances year-by-year, firstly, The juba dance was born from enslaved African's experience of plantation. Slapping thighs, shuffling feet, and patting hands are ilk of this dance. Then, the Cake Walk are a dance that parodied mannerisms of Southern high society a way for the enslaved to throw shade at the masters. By 1920s, the Charleston was all about improvisation and musicality, making its way into lindy hop, swing dancing, and even the Kid n Play. Exoticly, it more be famous in South Carolina that permeated dance halls where young women suddenly the had freedom to kick their heels and move their legs. The next, is the Twist that can be traced back to the 18th century. Before the Civil Rights Movement, it is popilarized by Chubby Checker and Dick Clark. The story continues in the 1980s and '90s, hip hop is a social dance that took on even more visibiity, borrowing from its long past, shaping culture and being shaped by it. Today, these dances continue to evolve, grow adn spread.

Writing Feedback / The pie chart and table represent information about three vital reasons that caused land degradation [3]

The pie chart and table represent information about three vital reasons that caused land degradation in the world and especially in the three regions during 1990s. It is important to notice that over-grazing had the biggest percentage been caused land degradation in the worldwide. While deforestation had been the mayor reason in the three areas between 1990s.

In North America, there are 5% land degradation that caused by deforestation, 0,2%; over-cultivation, 3,3%; and over-grazing, 1,5%. Beside, in Oceania, over-grazing had dominated percentage for the causes of land less-produtive at approximately more than one in twenty. Meanwhile in Europe are place which had the highest percentage at around more than quarter land. Deforestation had been the crucial reason that caused degradation of land over there at around 9,8% between 1990s.

A part of previous comparison, over-grazing had been the vital reason of counter-productive land at around more than a third. Then, deforestation had also been important impulse of land degradation at approximately less than a third. At last, over-cultivation had the least percentage between 2 other reasons that caused ineffectual land in worldwide at around 28% between 1990s.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 1 Summary Article: Ancient Bee fosil reveals secrets of human ancestor's habitat [3]

Australopithecus well-known as The Taung Child found in 1924 revolutioned our view of human origins. It provided as human evolved in Africa, not Eurasia as previously thought. Recently, a fossilised bee's nest reveals an insight into original place in which that early human lived more 3 million years ago. It precisely thought that Taung Child was unearthed in the remains of small cavern as the rocks containing the skull appear similiar to cave-formed limestones.

According to Philip Hopley from University of London, all other south African hominis come from cave sediment formed within a ilk of limestones, Precambrian. And he said that the Taung Child was preserved at approximately 2,8 million-years-old surface soil.

The conclution said that it raises hope of future fossil discoveries at Taung. The search for more hominin fossis has focused on the immediate area around where the Taung Chid was found, because of the assumption that the fossil formed in a relatively small limestone chamber.

source: newscientist.com/article/2107441-ancient-bee-fossil-reveals-secrets-of-human-ancestors-habitat/

Writing Feedback / The spellbinding art of human anatomy - Summary TED [2]

Anatomy especially human anatomy is one of many subjects in medical aspect that we can be focused. This can describe how our organs work to healthy connection between ourselves and our bodies. But until today, many people do not know the location of their vital organs, or even how they function. Because human anatomy is a difficult and needs time-intensive subject to learn. But, there are some artists who combined between human anatomy and art. Those paint and draw the medical illustration by perpective of illustrator into the beauty of the human skin. The technique was balanced between the technique and a beautiful concept. Actually, it exist in the past, but would be more famous with some new art-touch. It can important to understand how art influenced anatomy and give benefit for medical education precisely in the future.

Writing Feedback / Specialist, Grammar, and Voluntary-controlled Schools are programs which decreased gradually [3]

The table represents information about the proportions of pupils attending in four secondary school types in period 2000 and 2009. It is important to notice that Specialist, Grammar, and Voluntary-controlled Schools are programs which desreased gradually in this period. While Community Schools is the only one school that increased dramatically to attend of pupils.

Between 2000 and 2009, there are two schools that dropped steadily to attend by pupils. Specialist and Grammar schools fell slowly from more than one in ten to 10%; and from 24% to 12%. And Voluntary-controlled School dropped dramatically stood at more than a half to a fifth%.

A part of previous comprison, Community school had been a schools to attend by pupils that rose dramatically from more than one in ten in 2000 to more than 32% in 2005. But, the highest rise happened from 32% to less than three-fifths in 2009.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 1 Summary article: Prediction of climate change in 2070 [2]

Climate change and global warming can attract the disadvantageous for human especially for our environment. The researchers make a prediction in 2070 that climate change might inhibit plant growing proccess. Wheat, rice, maize, rye, barley and sorghum are sort of plants which are needed human stay alive. Grasses are an important food source for human-certainly rice, wheat and corn. Evolutionary adaptions seems particularly unlikely for domesticated species and even local declines may be devastating for some human populations. However, moving to more favourable geographical locations is not an option for amount of grass species because limits to their seed dispheral and obstacles: mountains and human settlements. Thus, let's pertain to construct our good ethical behavior that can preserve our environment.

Writing Feedback / A small country with big ideas - Costarica [6]

Costarica is one developing country which located at right in the middle of Americas. It country have nearly five million people. Actually they had fossil fuel, but this resource not generated for their electrity because it focusly to supply their electricity transportation system for next period. So that their can power their cars, buses, and trains. In the future, in 2022, this country are already trying electric buses and cars that can save money and reduce pollution. On the other hand, surprisingly this country had other alternative energy resources that fulled by 70 per cent of electricity. It found from five renewable resources: hydropower, geothermal, wind, solar, and biomass. This energy comes from water in their rivers, heat from volcanoes, wind turbines, solar panels, and biowaste. There are 3 reasons why Costarica make and choose this plan, but the major reason is "the world is hungry of new inspiration".

Writing Feedback / Water usage in a major city from the West USA, based on agricultural and residential demand [2]

The pie charts represent and compare information about using water in San Diego, California and the Worldwide. It is important to notice that resident had been the highest user of water in San Diego and California. While agriculture had been the least percentage of using water in both of them. Overall, it opposite result in worldwide that agricuture dominated water to use by people.

In San Diego, using water reached at around three-fifths for resindential part. It had been fullness of percentage of using water. This case also occured in California that reached in level at around 39%. While agriculture had been the lowest percentage at approximately 17% in San Diego and 28% in California. And industry positioned in the middle that used water at around 23% in San Diego and 33% in California.

A part of previous comparison, agriculture dominated using water more than industry and residental demanding at around more than two-thirds. While opposite with previous result, agriculture had the least percentage at approximately less than one in ten. And same case within San Diego and California, industry was still in the middle position at less than a quarter.

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Writing Feedback / On learning vacations the travelers may enjoy their time off by learning something new [3]

IELTS Writing Task 1 Learning Vacations

Now days, there are kinds of trip which is provide a learning vacations. It be more popular because it can make the travelers to enjoy their time off by learning something new. In the past, these types were generally considered for young who learned in the school. But now, the learnng vacations has become more coomon for adults to spend their pastime in educational project, and various types of travel programs be more interest. From this trip, travelers can hone their creative skills on artistic endeavour. However, there are many content which travelers can choose such as photography and dancing to more serious subjects such as history, phylosophy, and literature. It provide much advantage than any types like more economical.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 1 Summary TED: A project of peace painted across 50 buildings [3]

How to construct a city where had been collapsed? It is a difficult question to answer, espesially in city which is fall apart of a devastating tragedy like coup d'etat in Egyptian. The accident was destroyed and relieved the spirit of civilization in there. But, there was a native man who had a new conception to develop humanist intention again. Him talk and make a discussion with several people in there. His idea to paint the wall of ruins with full by great number of colors accepted by personage in his city. The surprisingly result, the building covered by Arabic calligraphy that can answer the question. And proved that collaboration between a new idea and effort of local communities can attact the misconception and judgment.

Writing Feedback / In 2015 export of dairy products had dominated comparing to other products [2]

The table chart shows number of Someland's main exports in 2005, 2015 and compares with prediction in 2025. Overall, it is immediately apparent that in 2015 export of dairy products had dominated than other products. While in future predition, international tourism will be the highest percentage.

There are number of main exports of Someland which devided into two earner: product, meat and dairy; international tourism. In 2005 meat product decreased gradually from around 6 USD to 3 one-fifth in the future. On the another product, dairy product had fluctuated from 2005, 4 one-fifth USD; 2015, increasengly to point 8 USD and the prediction decreased steadly into approximately 7,8 USD.

From human service side, international had been main exports of Someland. It rose gradually, stood at about 6,2 in 2005 up to approximately 7 USD in 2015. In the prediction, the best rise of international tourism wiil be happened in 2025 at around 8 USD.

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Writing Feedback / Theft crimes in some countries in regard of cars [2]

EILTS Writing Task 1 Comparing the car theft

The line graph compares the theft of car in four countries between 1990 and 1999. It is clear from the charts that Great Britain had showed the fluctuation case of car theft and be the highest percentage in 1995. While, Canada had been the least percentage about car theft.

In the period between 1990 and 1995, car theft in Great Britain rose a two percentage from around 17 to 18. During the same period, car theft was dramatical rose in France, to nearly 10, while in Canada and Sweden fluctuated between 6 and 8 in this period.

By 1999, the number of car theft had occured in Great Britain in average had plummeted to around 16, but the car theft in France had rose around a half since 1995s, to approximately 14. By contrast, there were no significant changes in Canada and Sweden over the period as a whole

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Writing Feedback / Summary TED: Your Body is My Canvas [6]

Painting is the kind of art that usually painted the object on the canvas. But, there is a new method that painted directly on top of the object, physically on surface of the object. Acrylic painting made human as object of painting. It skip the canvas, so it need to paint all of the body of object: ear, feet, clooth that used by object. And make it fully covered object's body with ink. In this way, it be able to take a three-dimensional scene and make it look like a two-dimensional painting. It came up by new idea from a woman that well-known as Alexa Meade. The method was found when she so exited and fascinated by light and shadow. That is why she have an idea to combine people directly into paintings process.

Writing Feedback / In Philippines, many nurses usually choose to look for a job overseas, than stay in their country [3]

IELTS Writing Task 1 Nurse Migration

There are different conditions between number of nurses in develop countries and developing countries. The condition caused by movement of nurses. In the develop country, for example in Philippines, many nurses more choose to find a job in overses than stay in their country. High salaries and better quality of life can be a major reason of their choosing. The disadvantages is the position in the native country unfilled. In the other sides, in the developing countries, amount of nurse can make much health care services available. But, in the United States, the aspects create condition which is reducing of large amount of qualified applicants every year because shortages of nursing faculty. Finally, the condition indicated to us how important of nurses function.

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Writing Feedback / Hawaii islands are one of interesting places to visit because of their original culture [3]

EILTS Writing Taks 1 Hula Dancing in Hawaiian Culture

Hawaii islands are one of interesting places to visit in the world because they have original culture and beautiful landscape to see. However, their local dance, which is people well-known as Hula, is an entertainment that usually we watch in the television. Actually, there are contrastive origin form of classic and modern Hula that we can see today. Myth of Hawaii said originally Hula performed in front of an altar by Men and created to honor their god or goddess. The changing form occured in the eighteenth century as result of the interaction with European culture. Because of that, Hawaiian organized a cultural festival, which is consisted of hula competition, in the 1960s. The festival called the Merrie Monarch Festival that has become annual cultural event to attract more tourists again and seek to maintain their cultural heritage.