Writing Feedback / Electrical source in Germany and New Zealand [2]

A comparison about electrical source in Germany and New Zealand in 1980 and 2010 is represented by using pie charts and measured by units. Overall, Germany made coal as their raw material in both years, while New Zealand used coal as many as natural gas in 1980, however in 2010 Nuclear placed as the primary resources for producing spark. In addition, both had an upward trend in the total of units' use.

It is clear that in that two years, most of electrical sources in New Zealand used Coal, and in 2010, it was almost tripled at 56 in 1980. Furthermore, there was a tremendous downward in natural gas in the second year that become fifteen times smaller than in 1980 at 2. Another decreasing change was depicted by petroleum into about one-fifth from the previous year. However, it can be seen that a moderate positive change was shown by hydro from 30 to 46.

While New Zealand had no Nuclear sources, Germany had it. Moreover, it became the largest increasing value in that country, about 7 times larger than before at 20. While inartificial gas and coal hit the top of electrical sources in 1980, Nuclear In 2010 became the most enormous among all. In contrast, both years used water as the fewest resource for generating electric that stood at 7 and went down into 2 after twenty years. While coal had the similar amount at 28 in that two years, a slight increase was represented by fuel from 22 to 27.

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Writing Feedback / International tourist destinations between 1995 and 2010 is depicted in the line chart [3]

A breakdown of International Tourist Arrivals in five regions between 1995 and 2010 is depicted by using line chart. Overall, United States of America placed in the top among all in that fifteen years, followed by France that had the most significant change. In addition, there were two countries that stood in the lowest position.

It can be seen that USA had only general increase from 70 in the beginning to just below 90 in 2010. Although it increased until reached 90 in 2005, but a very tiny fall occurred in the rest of year. However, the other countries had positive trend in all years. The most tremendous upward trend was represented by France that almost threefold larger than in the beginning and made it had the same value with USA in 2010.

Furthermore, Malaysia, which had the third place, went up more than two times from 20. In the lowest position, in 1980 Brazil made a very slight difference with Egypt that just a little below ten. Then, both crossed each other between 1995 and 2000 and finally Egypt hit the fourth rank a little below 20, while Brazil in the last standing at just above 10.

Writing Feedback / A comparison of hourly viewers in millions per day of Channel One News in one year [2]

A comparison of hourly viewers in millions per day of Channel One News in one year is illustrated in the line chart. Overall, all data showed fluctuation trend except 1 pm that was looked stable in one year. It also can be seen that 6 pm has the highest number of average viewers while although in general 1 pm placed as the lowest, but in the end of the year, 11 pm became the lowest.

It is clear that in the first five months the sequence still same until the appearance of 11 pm news on 1st May. There are many changes of order in August, that was proven by a significant increase of 11 pm into the peak just above four, decreasing of 6 pm to the middle of 3 and four, and a downward movement of 9.30 into a little above one.

After that, these three data had immediately change in the next following months. There is a raise of 6 pm news into 4 and next it went down until November and rose slightly above three in the last month. A moderate change also showed by 9.30 from 2.5 to 3. In contrast, there was a tremendous negative change of 11 pm program into about 25 percent smaller than in august. Then, 1 pm program still in the same trend, just above 1.

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Writing Feedback / There are many problems that make water become hard to get; Water Scarcity and Solutions [2]

What are the causes of water scarcity? What are your solutions?

There are many problems that make water become hard to get. It usually causes by natural condition and people's act. This essay will give explanations about the reason of water scarcity and some solutions that is divided into two kinds of solutions, one is short-term and another is long-term.

In general, weather condition is one of the primary causes that usually makes water hard to find. Nowadays our seasons time is very weird rather than the past time. Sometimes dry season longer than rainy seasons, but it also reverses in the other time. In fact, the anomaly is caused by human behavior for overusing gasoline and creates greenhouse effect that make the weather become unstable. Taken an example of that, people in their activity are mostly use petrol for fulfilling daily needs. The increasing of the number of vehicles as a result of decreasing price makes every people can purchase it. Then, the machine burning process produce smoke that reduce the stability of air substance in the atmosphere, and the worst effect is causing our weather and seasons so unpredictable, and finally it makes some area in the world dry.

So, to solve that, there are many suggestions that is divided into two primary solutions. First is short term solution. Recently, technology had succeeded for discovering helicopter that can produce man-made rain. The aircraft bring a lot of salt, spread in in the sky to make the cloudy become heavy and finally it will produce rainwater. Secondly is long-term solutions. People must reduce the fuel usage to make our weather condition become stable again even predictable. They can convert their energy into electricity that is renewable even cheaper than gasoline and also less-harmful.

All in all, water scarcity can be solved if people are really aware about their behavior to take care their environment.

Writing Feedback / Using home-internet is less costly and more useful than a new library construction [2]

Some people think it is a waste of money to establish libraries since the public can use the Internet at home to obtain information, do you agree or disagree?

There is a people's argument that mention if using home-internet is less costly and more useful rather than build a library that kind of money wasting, because it has the same aim for obtaining information. In my view, I totally disagree, because there are some reasons that make library more precious than just computer. It will be explained more in this essay, but some of main points is about the book value itself, the information's accuracy, even for reducing exhausted feel.

Actually, it is true that constructing library needs more money than just building internet facility. Imagine, in the library we need to build the building itself, buying some books, racks, and boxes, pay the librarian and other workers' salary, even maintenance cost for the literature. In contrast, to build an internet area, just need a hotspot and monthly expenses that really inexpensive. It solely needs Wi-fi transmitter, LAN wire, small amount of electricity, without any devices such as mobile computer because today many people already have it.

However, library actually more beneficial than electronic information. Firstly, is about the worth of literature. Some libraries have ancient books, in order to protect it from damage and perhaps it is no matter will be an evidence for the past knowledge itself that is usually written by eminent past time scientists. Secondly, the trueness of the information. As we know that everybody can post freely without any filter in the internet, even though the information that is given by someone totally wrong. For instance, there are many inaccurate information even people that do not have responsibility for creating totally wrong thread that contains some information. Thirdly, with directly reading books, we can reduce our eyes' pain and tired because computer emits radiation that dangerous for our body, especially our vision.

In conclusion, although building library is more expensive than internet usage, but the benefit really outweigh the drawbacks, because it is too many information that is actually cannot be found throughout online surfing.

Writing Feedback / A comparison of the amount of High School Students who reach minimum grade to pass competency exams [3]

The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011.

A comparison of the amount of High School Students who reach minimum grade to pass competency exams that is divided based on subjects and gender in 2010-2011 is depicted by using bar graph. Overall, while the girls who passed computer science exam had the most enormous percentage, a smallest value was shown by the boys who took chemistry test. It also can be seen that Chemistry had the highest difference between girls and boys. Otherwise, foreign languages were almost same in both sexes.

To begin with, started with the most tremendous value that was displayed by computer science in girls' sector that hit 56.3%, while the boys located at 42.1%. Then, it was followed by two subjects that only had less than 1% difference in their gender: foreign languages and mathematics respectively. Both girls in those subjects had larger percentage than boys, while the girls in mathematics had 49.2%, the boys were only 0.8% lower than it. Furthermore, foreign languages had solely 0.6% different that was proven by boys at 46.8% and the girls had higher value at 47.4%.

Next, physics and history had difference less than 3% both girls and boys. Moreover, geography became the only one who had the higher percentage in boys, in comparison with others. In addition, both had different more than 10% that is illustrated by boys at 30.4% and the girls were smaller by 10.3%. Last, chemistry had solely 14.1% in boys while the girls were more than two times.

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Writing Feedback / Pupils are pressed by their surroundings like academic circle even for commercial purposes [3]

"Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

Nowadays, pupils have pressed by their surroundings such as their academic circle, social society, even for commercial purposes. In my opinion it is extremely harmful for them because it will create worst childhood memory. There are two main reasons that cause their highly pressures. The first one is come from their inner circle: high parents' expectation, and the second one is from external surrounding: facing global challenge. So, to reduce that, children should be developed based on their passions, and also growing their sense of awareness.

First of all, as a result of worldwide competitions, parents' expectation for today's pupils is increasing significantly rather than in the past time. Taken an example of that, today, both father and mother are decided to take their children in early education system such as play group even train them with many lessons like basic mathematics, logical test, and others. Moreover, they usually restrict their children to socialize with their environment and make them to keep stay at home to study. Secondly is caused by global challenge. Because of the raise of world's inhabitants, it brings effect that many young people become unemployment, so the children are pressed from early age to prepare their bright future. They know that their own future careers will have though competition, so the best way to prepare it, is making pressure in academic as their "daily food".

Unfortunately, it usually causes enormous stressful in their mind, so here it is some solutions to break that problem. First, their parents must know their pupils' passionate. It is because if the children are pressed by the parents, but it their own passion, they will be happy to do it. For instance, if the children keen on drawing, then the parents give many exercises of that, they will not feel pressured. Second, it is extremely great if the children already have awareness why they should be pressured, so their teachers, friends, also parents must grow and give clear explanation about the future condition. If the pupils already aware, they will have strong motivation from their mind, even do not feel any pressures because they already know why they must do it.

All in all, parents' expectation and global challenge, that become the primary reasons for people that press the children are not becoming big problems since the children do it based on their passion and already have tremendous sense of awareness.

Writing Feedback / Here's depicted a breakdown of expenditures' usage in some of countries of three continents in 2009 [2]

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009

A breakdown of expenditures' usage in some of countries of three continents in 2009 is depicted by using bar graph. Overall, housing had the most enormous average in four countries and also contained United States who had the greatest value among all. Meanwhile, Health placed as the smallest grade among all, even had the United Kingdom that had the tiniest percentage. In addition, clothing's spending was almost same in four countries.

It is clear that all countries' inhabitants spent most of their salaries for their home. The United States positioned as the top among all at more than 25%. It was followed by the United Kingdom, Japan, and Canada, and each of them still hit more than 20%. Then, Japan became the largest state that used their money for meals. It was shown by the percentage at about 23%, while the United States that had the biggest percentage before, placed as the lowest in food at just below 15%.

Next, transportation had the highest value in Canada at 20% while the lowest was Japan at half of it. In the last position, it was placed by health care and clothing. Each of them had different country who placed as the largest. While the first one was placed by the United States at about 7%, the second one was positioned by Japan at lower by 1% compared with before. It also can be seen that people that spent their money for clothing almost same that was proven by the small different between all countries that no more than 3% respectively.

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Writing Feedback / Recently, youth movement has developed significantly, especially throughout voluntary activities [3]

Adult youths are often called up for working for the development of communities. Do you think they should work voluntarily or should they get paid? Give your opinion

In the recent decades, youth movement has developed significantly, especially throughout voluntary activities. As a result of that, there are many communities that require large amount of human resources, so they usually hold open recruitment for finding volunteers. It is common that people that join into communities are not paid, and I argue that it is greater rather than they work for money purposes.

As already we know together, social communities have the primary goal for helping many people such as poverty, juvenile delinquencies, street children, orphanage, and others. So, most of their funding are used to reach their aim, not for their volunteer. It will bring negative effects to the volunteers if they are already promised to get salary of their work. They become less sincere, even it can reduce the money that actually must be donated for the other people. For instance, volunteer will be happy if they can get money from their work, but when the donation decreases, the amount of money that they get usually drops too, and it can influence their performance in that organizations.

In contrast, if the adult youths that work in voluntary mission is already told that they will not get any paid, we can see their real sincerity. They are usually more militant and have pure purpose to develop their own community. As a result, the community's donation will be more enormous because all of the money is given to the people albeit it is maybe still used for volunteers' need such as meals, drinks, even their uniform, but it is greater than if they still must be paid. Moreover, their ultimately high sincerity will bring much happiness even have the greatest value in the god's eyes. Although that, it is good if maybe the money is still given for one of them that has the best working performance for appreciating purpose, and to motivate the others for serving the best work.

To conclude that, people who work for the development of organizations should not be paid, because they occupy based on their sincerity and their kindness, so it will reduce the communities' spending and make it to be more developed.

Writing Feedback / MANY EDUCATIONAL METHODS to create different alternatives suitable for children. [2]

Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, many educational methods have already established by some expertise to create many alternatives that suitable for children. In general, there are two main methods that is often used by people. First, is self-teaching by parents in their own home, second is entering pupils into school. Both methods are believed by some people will make children develop well. In my opinion, it is better if the parents combine those two methods because when in the home, their parents already know well about their own children even the pupils can learn more intensive and convenient. In addition, when they go to the school, they can socialize with his friends also get lesson based on the newest curriculum.

To begin with, home-based education is one of the best methods to educate child. This is because people who take a responsibility for teaching that children are the parents. They already know what is the personality and the passionate, even their own children's potential. So, pupils can be more developed when they study appropriate with their want. Another reason that also become the advantages is because of convenient and intensive factors. For instance, in the home, we usually cannot see something that can disturb our learning process.

Meanwhile, school offers other benefits that cannot be got in the home. The most influential one is about friendship. As we know when the children enroll to the school, they will see many pupils like them and make a friend with others. It is extremely boosting their Social Quotient even their emotional aspects. Furthermore, their problem solving and communication skills will be more developed. Another positive side is the children will learn materials based on curriculum that is really structured. They can also get many disciplines that cannot be learnt in their own-home. Moreover, state-officials, especially Ministry of Education usually publishes the newest curriculum that is formed throughout comprehensive research that is used as the standardization of the school, so the students can study more effective.

All in all, both method have ultimately different advantages that actually cannot be separated. So, the best way for creating high quality child is by combining them.

Writing Feedback / Increasing people's awareness that foreign languages are the window to the world [2]

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Many tremendous global challenges, though worldwide competition, even the increasing of people's awareness that foreign languages are the window of the world, make many primary schools adding this disciplines into their curriculum. Their decision is emphasized by many experts that is really recommended for children to start learning non-mother tongue languages since they at primary schools rather than secondary schools. In fact, there are some drawbacks such as too early for them to study it even will be reducing their playing time. Meanwhile, that negative effects are not becoming enormous problem since joyful activities are used in the learning process. Moreover, if the students practice that language in very young age it will help them in the future and for interacting with other people around the world.

It is true that maybe if the pupils learn it too early, it will make them stressful as consequence of highly pressure. Moreover, their time for playing will reduce significantly because there are too many subjects that must be learnt by them. To contrasting these views, it is totally wrong if people say like that. It is because learning foreign language can be done by using fun methods such as singing, playing games, watching movie, create mini drama, and others. For instance, when I still studied at primary school, I was very excited with English and Arabic languages that were taught throughout singing together. We memorized many words just in one songs. Sometimes we also did a conversation practice with our classmates, even creating mini theatre that was played by some groups in my class. So, my past experience is proven that learning foreign languages can be easily done throughout fun methods.

The other facts that actually become evidence that the positive outweigh the negative side, are foreign language is good for pupil's future and it also will help them to socialize with non-local people. The first one is for their mature career. AS we know that nowadays, enterprises have high preference for selecting their employer that has ability to speak more than one language. So, if people already learn since their adolescence time, it will extremely help them to get better job also high salary. Secondly, foreign languages will be make us to easily make a friend with other countries' residents. As a result, it will make our social networking becoming wider. It will help us when travelling abroad. Taken example of that, when in 2015, I was elected to become International participant in a conference in Thailand. I just needed to call my friends from Thailand for providing me suitable accommodation but inexpensive. This occurrence could occur because of my encouragement to study English when I was at primary school.

To sum up, if we compared the pros and cons of both aspects, beginning to study foreign language at primary school will cause us to be ready for facing our future even will be make our worldwide friendship wider than before. So, it is prove that the advantages are more than the disadvantages.

Writing Feedback / To become successful in life, hard work and fighting spirit are the keys for that [2]

Some people think that hard work and determination are the keys to success in life. Some, on the other hand, think that there are other factors behind a successful life. Give your opinion

There is an argument that says to become success in life, hard work and fighting spirit are the keys of that. On the other side, another opinion mentions that there are other factors that can support someone to be more success. In my view, it is important for people to keep hard work, whether there are many factors that also influence their future achievement such as quotient, surroundings, even just luck.

As we already know that Einstein ever said in the past time that "The keys to be successful are determined by solely 1% Quotient, and 99% hard work. This statement actually true because it had already been proven in the real life. For instance, in the past time, the economics of China was below America, but these days, there is a fact that Chinese people have strong characteristic even well-known as the workhorse. As a result of their effort, China is able to defeat the United States of America in many business sectors.

However, I think it is unable to reach the peak just only with powerful endeavor because there are many factors that also have great impact. First of all, is about quotient. We cannot lie that Intellectual Quotient is one of the foremost factor to make our way easier. For example, while people that have low IQ need to study hard for preparing exam, they, who have tremendous IQ just need a little preparation to memorize the materials. Secondly, is their surroundings. Good friends even neighborhood also have enormous effect that affect our future, so we must selective to decide where we should stay, what kind of people that become our closely partner, even the personality of our mates. It is because there was a research that was conducted by many psychologists that said "if people routinely gather with others that are already success, their positive energy will spread inside their mind, so the possibility to become success is increasing". Third, is just luck. It is clear that this factor is likely unimportant, but sometimes luckiness able to decide the final result of our work, so we must pray to our God as much as we can.

All in all, albeit determination and hard work are the keys to become success, but there are still have other factors that look like have less impact, but sometimes there are able to specify the final result of our challenging struggle.