Bams17
Nov 29, 2016
Writing Feedback / A perception of several people, that building new libraries is impractical and just waste money. [4]
this sentence contains several problems
1. confusing sentence because without punctuation
2. contains more than 2 verb in one sentence ( s + verb agreement) developing technology leads tu utillise/ to get/ after conjunction and i think that you explain the similar point before and after and.
3. the sentence is too long.
... spending much time to read some information on screen bring about worst ... (double verb again).
advice.
1. remember and pay attention about s+v agreement
2. punctuation
3. sentence form
4. control grammar
5. revise and learn again miss...
good job!
Developing technology lead people to utilise the internet to...
this sentence contains several problems
1. confusing sentence because without punctuation
2. contains more than 2 verb in one sentence ( s + verb agreement) developing technology leads tu utillise/ to get/ after conjunction and i think that you explain the similar point before and after and.
3. the sentence is too long.
... spending much time to read some information on screen bring about worst ... (double verb again).
advice.
1. remember and pay attention about s+v agreement
2. punctuation
3. sentence form
4. control grammar
5. revise and learn again miss...
good job!