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|Why do you want to change careers? Medical Research to Nursing
Undergraduatedestine - Feb 4, 2009 / EF_Sean - Feb 4, 2009
|"conflicting cultures" - COLUMBIA ADMISSION ESSAY
9 - A really well-written essay. The opening line does need a bit of work, though. When using a metaphor, you...
UndergraduatePranav91 - Dec 14, 2008 / EF_Sean - Feb 3, 2009
|INTELLECTUAL INTERESTS; 'I love to study psychology and learn about behaviors'
Undergraduatelenzie09 - Feb 2, 2009 / EF_Team - Feb 3, 2009
3 - decided to visit various colleges and... ...schools online and believed that had made up my mind... Hey,...
UndergraduateFrancaruso - Feb 2, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Feb 3, 2009
|'volunteering at Ability First' - University of Southern California Transfer Essay
10 - Alright thanks, sent in the app. If possible please delete this thread or edit my posts to remove my...
Undergraduateessayheaven - Jan 17, 2009 / essayheaven - Feb 2, 2009
|Penn State - career goals and personal statement - (aspiring engineer)
Undergraduatejucks0r - Feb 1, 2009 / jucks0r - Feb 1, 2009
|Indicate how you first became interested in SLU
5 - Use quotation marks, like this: "In which state are you going to study next year?" my guidance counselor...
Undergraduatehahieu123 - Jan 31, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Feb 1, 2009
|USC Admissions Essay (Cinema Major) - an external influence
3 - ...glazed with rain on the evening of... His backyard was sprinkled... floated across the murky water, among...
UndergraduateZagayer - Jan 31, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Feb 1, 2009
|UMich - Discuss an issue of local concern, today's teens
2 - This essay is well-written. If you had more time and space, I would suggest engaging in a more in-depth...
Undergraduatenurit91 - Feb 1, 2009 / EF_Sean - Feb 1, 2009
|'Team leader and vice president' - How has your Environment influenced you
Undergraduatesantanaelissa - Jan 31, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 31, 2009
|U Chicago, desire for a particular kind of learning, community, and future.
5 - I was staying in New Jersey and only for a limited amount of time. I did, however, perform extensive...
UndergraduatePranav91 - Jan 31, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 31, 2009
|UofM-Setback Essay ("be active and outspoken in both business and life")
4 - As I walked in a daze down Wall Street, I bumped into numerous rushed business people with their cups...
Undergraduatejakethesnake312 - Jan 31, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 31, 2009
|UAlbany Admission Essay. Unsure about rough draft.
Undergraduateashurii - Jan 31, 2009 / ashurii - Jan 31, 2009
|Gettysburg Supplemental essay; Most Impressive Performance award
4 - No, no the second paragraph is fine, I just meant the words to the song. The conclusion is great....
Undergraduategetitlow - Jan 30, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 31, 2009
|'From Cuba to the USA' - UCF Admission Essays Help
UndergraduateRocksrntpeople - Jan 28, 2009 / Rocksrntpeople - Jan 31, 2009
|We have only one space left in UB's freshman class, tell us why you deserve for this place? Buffalo
16 - Thank you alot Kevin and all the moderators , contributers and members who helped.. i submitted it ... and...
Undergraduatemenamilad - Jan 21, 2009 / menamilad - Jan 31, 2009
|my writing and communication skills, help with mt saf
3 - So, for example, you might talk about how you are a good listener who can easily understand and empathize...
Undergraduateminny - Jan 31, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 31, 2009
|I'm independent, persevering, enthusiastic and abiding goals type of person
4 - thanks...
Undergraduatesantanaelissa - Jan 29, 2009 / santanaelissa - Jan 31, 2009
|Personal statement AUS
4 - It is because I find chemistry so fascinating and the idea of chemical engineering so appealing, that I have...
Undergraduatenetfreak - Jan 30, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 31, 2009
|"to smile and be enthusiastic" - Umic Diversity short answer
2 - Their reactions made me and happy and melted my heart and they made me confident, happy, and blissful. Even...
Undergraduateysleung - Jan 30, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 30, 2009
|Cornell: School of hotel administration
2 - ...who wants to have an early focus... ...the management of organizations , and ... The quality biggest...
Undergraduateserendipity123 - Jan 30, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 30, 2009
|UMich short answer 1 (cultural difference)
3 - I think it would be better without the quote from En Carta. You can start with an original, interesting...
Undergraduatesumantneo - Jan 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 30, 2009
|Stevens Inst. of Tech: how your ungrad will contribute to 21st century
3 - Through the application of creativity, inquisitiveness, and analytical skills, engineers collaborate together to build astonishing structures, apply new technological...
Undergraduateyasin391 - Jan 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 30, 2009
|USC Short Answers (Cinema Major)
4 - These are great. Well written and interesting, and the last one was very funny, it's great that you put...
UndergraduateZagayer - Jan 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 30, 2009
|'Do not stop questioning' - umich short answer (250 words)
3 - Take out commas that interrupt col rhythm, and you can make it direct and powerful, like a sword thrust:...
Undergraduatethatshot550 - Jan 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 30, 2009
|I have always prided myself on my ability to make delicious rojak - U of Wisconsin
7 - This version is great! I like everything about it. You seem like an interesting, humble, well-spoken student with a...
UndergraduateKeonYe - Jan 28, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 30, 2009
|My commonapplication "The Picture"
7 - Hi, I read your essay and I think you've done a good job. Very thoughtful. You've built a bridge...
Undergraduategetitlow - Jan 28, 2009 / serendipity123 - Jan 30, 2009
|UMich Essay: Discuss an Issue of Local Concern ("The British are coming!")
7 - Very good essay!! You explained the prompt thoroughly and you clearly defined the local concern of buses needing to...
Undergraduatedrman54 - Jan 20, 2009 / yasin391 - Jan 29, 2009
|(Reborn Me) - U of Texas Topic E Issue of Importance
2 - This experience has completely changed me. Before this, I never thought street dance and Chinese dance could be combined....
UndergraduateKeonYe - Jan 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 29, 2009
|'Indian students / China-Singapore' UMichigan, diversity and how you can contribute
11 - i know what you mean with the confusion on the question. i had the same problem when i wrote...
UndergraduateBaiwanyu - Dec 31, 2008 / thatshot550 - Jan 29, 2009
|I like to consider myself as a fledgling learning how to fly. USC transfer - me against the world
Undergraduatemjinoh1220 - Jan 27, 2009 / mjinoh1220 - Jan 29, 2009
|Photography- spontaneity - supplement essay
4 - Greetings, Your writing seemed very much engaging. Though I felt some change might be necessary: "Thus I practice...
Undergraduategetitlow - Jan 26, 2009 / fantasy - Jan 29, 2009
|The Struggles of Being An Albanian Female, admission essay
Undergraduatethatshot550 - Jan 27, 2009 / thatshot550 - Jan 29, 2009
|The Unspoken Journey of an Evolving Ambition
6 - I don't understand this part: ...that the school acknowledged so much. Oh, I finally figured out what you...
Undergraduatejerrymorinvil - Jan 28, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 29, 2009
|Admission Essay: Transfer student short essay.
Undergraduatemrk006 - Jan 27, 2009 / mrk006 - Jan 29, 2009
|Gettysburg Supplement essay?
4 - It would help if you posted some examples you were thinking of considering using. Then maybe we could help...
Undergraduatenikesh09 - Jan 27, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 29, 2009
|FSU undergraduate essay, writing about the struggles.
3 - Video games tend not to have quite the academic cachet that you would normally be aiming for in this...
Undergraduateaustinkline - Jan 28, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 29, 2009
|"Junior Reporter" - commonapp short answer - it's too long
5 - One minor grammatical fix: "horror tales (especially for Halloween)," You need something to set off the extra clause, but...
Undergraduatejjmmklm - Jan 27, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 28, 2009
|Marines mean Business - it provides wealth of unique experiences and leadership opportunities
Undergraduatejoe12o6 - Jan 17, 2009 / joe12o6 - Jan 28, 2009
|Suggestions for commonapp personal essay-a dot in the sky
Undergraduatefantasy - Jan 26, 2009 / getitlow - Jan 28, 2009
|Umichi transfer short answer (respect for differences)
6 - I then had a great talk with the mysterious American friend. somehow i agree with mustaa.. it might...
Undergraduatejapanese magic - Jan 24, 2009 / KeonYe - Jan 27, 2009
|"A Thinking Person" - Law School Personal Statement
7 - I entered the 8th Bernard C. Kissel Student Speaker Competition in March of 2007 . I embrace working...
Undergraduatedmly - Jan 23, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 27, 2009
|Texas Common application- someone who impacted...
5 - hey , I'm applying for the same university too through applytexas.com ; however , there is no essay requirements.....
Undergraduatedavphan - Jan 14, 2009 / menamilad - Jan 27, 2009
|The Economics is my favorite subject and I'm interested in CO-OP Management program - Short essays
10 - However, I admit that I make some minor errors in grammar and punctuation. You don't need the "s" at...
Undergraduatesakibniaz - Jan 25, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 27, 2009
|Commonapp Essay (an inestimable lesson)
5 - thank you very much, Kelvin. I really appreciate that! Also, the next time, I will follow the forum's rules...
Undergraduatenvminh91 - Jan 26, 2009 / nvminh91 - Jan 27, 2009
|essay for fsu (the freshman basketball team and more)
6 - I was on the freshman basketball team my freshman year of high school ,which took a lot of effort...
Undergraduatekesh561 - Dec 26, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Jan 27, 2009
|Sports Psychology/BEd Concurrent Program Essay
3 - first-hand My reasons for participating in sports , I believe, reflect the character and determination that will enable...
UndergraduateMjrosko - Jan 26, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 27, 2009
|Those blessed with the curiosity to learn &search are forever Young/ SOP- Tourism
3 - thanks a lot...ive made corrections and submitted my SOP last friday !! nd yeah... sorry for the late reply...
Undergraduatepipi - Jan 18, 2009 / pipi - Jan 27, 2009
|What domestic or international travel destination best defines you and why?
7 - I think you can simply fill in the box " please refer to my attached answer to this question"...
Undergraduatekofpower2411 - Jan 22, 2009 / getitlow - Jan 26, 2009
|the transfer essay (setback you have faced)
Undergraduatesushi bar - Jan 24, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 26, 2009
|Immigration reform in the United States during the economic crysis period. Issue of Importance essay
16 - This seems much better! It still cries out for a suggestion, a solution you would promote. You are right...
Undergraduateeharvey03 - Jan 23, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 26, 2009
|"An Unexplainable Happening" - a personal narrative about a memorable event
UndergraduateCrystalP - Jan 25, 2009 / silverystars - Jan 26, 2009
|My first Essay. how a college education will change your life
28 - Interesting, as I've not given that much thought about how religion can be seen as a negative in...
UndergraduateJack10977 - Jan 11, 2009 / silverystars - Jan 26, 2009
|USC HOPEFUL ("passion is striving")
3 - This first sentence should be more specific... what is your intended major? All my friends knew the...
Undergraduatelilahahadi - Jan 25, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 26, 2009
|"Camera is interesting." Personal Statement
Undergraduatematrixwky - Dec 29, 2008 / matrixwky - Jan 26, 2009
|My association with computers began long before people of my age could lay their hands on one; SOP
Undergraduatesharon108 - Jan 22, 2009 / sharon108 - Jan 26, 2009
|University of Wisconsin - land rich in tradition
UndergraduateInfinity09 - Jan 25, 2009 / Infinity09 - Jan 26, 2009
|Common App and how to start the art supplement?
15 - I thought the commonapp art supplement is only asking for a URL which have your art works presented... in...
UndergraduateULL - Jan 11, 2009 / last_min_girl - Jan 24, 2009
|An important issue ("She is always")
UndergraduateElainephuong - Jan 21, 2009 / mustaa - Jan 24, 2009
|What does critical thinking really entail? - essay references and ideas
Undergraduatedennis - Jan 22, 2009 / dennis - Jan 24, 2009
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