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|Marshalls made me realize how sine qua non a higher education is
3 - Jonathan, you are a hero. Thanks for helping so many people lately. I see what the problem is...
Writing FeedbackBlaqnsassy - Feb 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 20, 2010
|Is persistence all that is needed to be successful? - A SAT essay
3 - god thesis statement. This is brilliant. Patience and motivation are indeed the components of persistence. Thanks for sharing...
Writing FeedbackDemha - Feb 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 20, 2010
|Educating Children with Toys - help me with these pargraphs
5 - Consequently, toy manufacturers are designing toys that can aid children in learning to initiate action, to taking care...
Writing Feedbackmary123 - Feb 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 20, 2010
|Narrative Essay (an experience) - "How do I approach him?"
5 - Well, for good clear composition, you ca use the last sentence of the first paragraph to establish a...
Writing Feedbackbharat2363 - Feb 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 20, 2010
|'Building character' - Community Service- Synthesis Essay
3 - This should be a comma and not a semi-colon: Having community service as a requirement to graduate is a...
Writing Feedbacktiger13twin - Feb 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 19, 2010
|GRE Argument essay:Finding new jobs for laid-off XYZ company employees
2 - This is looking very strong! ...last year those who used Delany found jobs much more quickly than did...
Writing Feedbackeringao - Feb 19, 2010 / EF_Susan - Feb 19, 2010
|THE PROCESS OF FORGIVENESS, BLAME, AND SELF-ACCEPTANCE
3 - Hi Overall great essay. But I'm sure that your readers will be much happier if you stop using profanity....
Writing FeedbackMementoMori - Feb 2, 2010 / Demha - Feb 19, 2010
|IELTS Essay - Technology vs Traditional Cultures
6 - comments: Your first paragraph sounds like you are giving your opinion. That should be your final paragraph. What is...
Writing Feedbackvictorp_sv - Feb 17, 2010 / comet2000 - Feb 18, 2010
|"never thought college was important at all" - Cause and Effect
4 - Comments: So far, it's ok. I think you should expend more on your essay. It's a bit short but...
Writing FeedbackDannyrestrepo - Feb 17, 2010 / comet2000 - Feb 18, 2010
|Give reasons and make suggestions. unemployment problem , reasons and solutions.
3 - One of serious issues associated with this change is the high young unemployment rate among young people, which in...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 18, 2010
|Revising and ideas..How has your childhood shaped you as a writer
4 - As a child, I was encouraged to be open, focused, as well as descriptive in everything that I did;...
Writing Feedbackashleyfloyd - Feb 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 18, 2010
|Some people prefer home theater, others cinema at hall, discuss. IELTS GT
3 - hai, Can't you introduce with some dialogue on movie,than starting with your agreement? Even one can review some more...
Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Feb 17, 2010 / remya - Feb 18, 2010
|achieving happiness through relationships - IELTS ESSAY
Writing Feedbackremya - Feb 17, 2010 / remya - Feb 18, 2010
|Inspiration Essay about a Broadway star
2 - Not many girls get the opportunity to meet the one person who they idolize, and the one person who...
Writing FeedbackDanni Nicole - Feb 17, 2010 / EF_Susan - Feb 18, 2010
|Toefl essay: Grades represent a proper way of motivating and encouraging students to learn
3 - Hi, very well written, but i am not clear with your conclusion para. it helps students know their advantages...
Writing Feedbacklizzielu17 - Feb 12, 2010 / Poojasugandhi - Feb 17, 2010
|Reasons to attend college or university -(TOEFL) Writing practice
2 - Hi, are you preparing for the toefl ibt?? Then your essay is incomplete. You should follow proper pattern for...
Writing FeedbackMasterSci - Feb 17, 2010 / Poojasugandhi - Feb 17, 2010
|Do you agree or disagree? a jury has access to the defendant's past record
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 14, 2010 / linmark - Feb 17, 2010
|Why Life Insurance important? - It has many benefits
6 - I didn't realized how important it is until my grandmother passed away late last year. I feel like...
Writing Feedbackjaneypooh - Feb 12, 2010 / Randyhl - Feb 17, 2010
|Smoking at public place should be banned. Argumental essay for IELTS GT
8 - Thank you, Kevin. You really have got the power to raise one's confidence higher. Thanks again for your overwhelming...
Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Feb 14, 2010 / usalma2002 - Feb 16, 2010
|First Impressions from Lasting Impressions (tattoos and piercings essay)
3 - Tattoos and piercings have been around for many years they are even found in the bible as a marking...
Writing Feedbackmonkeygirl76 - Feb 15, 2010 / Nets - Feb 16, 2010
|Argu: discuss disad./ad. business and cultral contact bt countries,&your opinion
3 - an intensive discussion on whether it is a positive development or a negative one. Undoubtedly, there is a...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 16, 2010 / EF_Susan - Feb 16, 2010
|TOEFL - I believe people can get more knowledge from books
3 - This is because books contain more information and knowledge, and people can learn from past. ---- yes, learning from...
Writing Feedbackchlghdgus - Feb 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 16, 2010
|mobile phones is destroying social interaction. Do you agree? IELTS GT essay
3 - "Due to the contribution of technology, like other electronic devices, mobile phone has penetrated in our daily lives. Application...
Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Feb 16, 2010 / cathyliu - Feb 16, 2010
|About A New Education Essay
8 - When kids are first taught calculus they're usually introduced to something called the 'limiting process'. Say, when we graph...
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Jan 13, 2010 / Rajiv - Feb 16, 2010
|Thomas (Tommy) Clement Douglas Essay Gr.10
8 - Well, the essay is your contribution to the site, so that people can find examples of good writing and...
Writing Feedbackcherry99 - Feb 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 15, 2010
|Narrative essay about an experience that has changed the way I lean
3 - Good sentence!! Actually, see which one you like more... that way, or this: As I shyly made my...
Writing Feedbackjmoreh10 - Feb 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 15, 2010
|It is unrealistic for people to work at the same company for their entire lives.
Writing Feedbacknetseung - Feb 15, 2010 / chlghdgus - Feb 15, 2010
|Narrative Essay About My Grandmother - Feedback
2 - Your title of a narrative essay is very broad. What else do you want to communicate besides general narration...
Writing Feedbackchocolatepap - Feb 14, 2010 / linmark - Feb 15, 2010
|The new use for salicylates reduce number of headaches
5 - Thanks for your comments! You give me some confidence to deal with GRE analytical writing test!...
Writing Feedbackxymivy - Feb 8, 2010 / xymivy - Feb 15, 2010
|Foster Care definition essay - grammatical assistance requested.
Writing FeedbackChillkindacat - Feb 13, 2010 / Chillkindacat - Feb 15, 2010
|Taking vacation is one of the most important needs of each student.
4 - Short or long vacation, does not matter. The importance is to take advantage from the free time. In conclusion,...
Writing Feedbacknabg - Feb 13, 2010 / cathyliu - Feb 14, 2010
|"Good night daddy, I love you too" - Historical Narritive Essay
Writing Feedbackmsdenna - Feb 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 14, 2010
|Opinion on famous people's personal news, their hobbies in the media - IELTS
2 - In open market economy, all businessmen want to make money selling items that are in demand - regardless of...
Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Feb 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 13, 2010
|"a great nation indicator" - GRE Issue essay
2 - Recently means "not very long ago" I'm going to take GRE analysis writing test soon. Would you please help...
Writing Feedbackchencong0320 - Feb 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 13, 2010
|Schools are the only place to receive true education? toefl essay
Writing Feedbackchlghdgus - Feb 11, 2010 / chlghdgus - Feb 12, 2010
|My Last weekend: "working around the house"
3 - Capitalize Internet. ...by watching TV and various kinds of movies. I really enjoyed my weekend this way...
Writing Feedbackserkitinati - Feb 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 12, 2010
|The surest indicator of a great nation, welfare, GRE Issue Writing
2 - I think you should add one more sentence to that first paragraph. After telling the 2 different opinions, you...
Writing Feedbackjuliachen - Feb 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 12, 2010
|Issue of local concern - parent-child relationship
4 - The essay is very good, except for the story you told about the little girl. It doesnt capture the...
Writing Feedbackjjinko - Feb 11, 2010 / RShemanski - Feb 12, 2010
|"I want a wife" - is it a good tittle?
Writing Feedbackanwarhazamah - Feb 5, 2010 / serkitinati - Feb 12, 2010
|The Hijab: Friend or foe? (argumentative essay on 2 authors essays)
7 - make your opinion clear. Make the opinion mara longer. The reader really wants to know what YOUR thoughts are....
Writing FeedbackJoeyson - Jan 25, 2010 / sineadkachroo - Feb 12, 2010
|Maternity and faternity - correct my essay and give some suggestions
4 - It is thoughtful, and your topic sentences do express the meaning of the paragraph as they are supposed to,...
Writing Feedbackabduoo - Feb 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 11, 2010
|My best friend (despite of living in different countries)
Writing Feedbackserkitinati - Feb 7, 2010 / serkitinati - Feb 11, 2010
|Toefl; Do clothes have any influence on how people behave?
7 - SHABAIL thank you, Sharla , you really give me a good advice, I'll try that. Sometimes I just...
Writing Feedbacknicol018nie - Feb 9, 2010 / nicol018nie - Feb 10, 2010
|GRE Essay on::Success in any realm of life comes more often from taking ..
2 - Success is the ultimate goal most people work for. Success has its own definition and limits for individuals. Some...
Writing Feedbackprakashraj - Feb 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 10, 2010
|"Imagination is not enough. Knowledge is necessary." - GAMSAT essay practices
Writing Feedbackkumara - Feb 7, 2010 / kumara - Feb 9, 2010
|'no control' - The mass media and their influence on people's ideas
7 - hmm! not bad for a bigginer ,but i think you only concertrated on the image the media potrays,check things...
Writing Feedbacktramhuong - Feb 5, 2010 / BORE - Feb 9, 2010
|LEGALIZATION OF SAME SEX MARRIAGE - revise my introduction, argumentative paper.
32 - I personally would simply talk about the essence of human rights; how essentially we are all equal and that...
Writing FeedbackBrianne - Oct 16, 2009 / Envie - Feb 9, 2010
|Theory of Knowledge Essay- Comparing scientific and historical facts
2 - They use very strict approaches when looking for the "truth." However, the problem with history is that it...
Writing Feedbacksaad91 - Feb 7, 2010 / jen50192 - Feb 8, 2010
|Toefl essay: Mass media influences people's ideas
NEW - Hope you guys give feedbacks to my essay.thank you so much. have a nice day! The mass media,including...
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|Essay about My Classmate from Cambodia
5 - Luong and Allen, great job here! Thanks for the excellent contributions you make to help others at EF....
Writing FeedbackPov - Feb 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 5, 2010
|'I studied in the Philippines'; Spending money on travelling or saving?
Writing Feedbackduke616 - Feb 2, 2010 / duke616 - Feb 5, 2010
|Competition or cooperation---GRE ANALYSIS WRITING ISSUE
Writing Feedbacklola2010 - Feb 2, 2010 / lola2010 - Feb 4, 2010
|Editorial on Martin Luther King Day
Writing FeedbackNotoman - Feb 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 4, 2010
|Cool vs uncool - an argumentive definition essay
Writing FeedbackJoeyson - Feb 2, 2010 / Rachach6 - Feb 3, 2010
|essay about yasser arafat
5 - Yes, I see that Paradokht already told you to capitalize proper nouns. Also, write Nobel Prize, not...
Writing Feedbackzahoora - Feb 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 2, 2010
|work that one finds fulfilling or work that pays well? Van Gogh, C.Marx examples
3 - Yes, add a sentence to the end of that first paragraph. Make it a sentence that answers the question...
Writing FeedbackODIE - Feb 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 2, 2010
|Machiavelli and Lao Tzu - compare and contrast essay
2 - Check verse 17 of the Tao. I see that you ended this essay with an inaccurate statement about what...
Writing Feedbacklink2314 - Jan 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 2, 2010
|Trying to be "Little Miss Perfect" - Can someone give me feedback on this essay
3 - Let's do this part in the past tense and omit some unnecessary words: I feel that I have always...
Writing Feedbackcjharris24 - Jan 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 1, 2010
|Why do you want to be a part of Teach for India?
Writing Feedbackvineela - Jan 17, 2010 / niloo - Feb 1, 2010
|Experience is the best teacher - THE RELATIVE VALUES OF EXPERIENTIAL AND ACADEMIC LEARNING
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