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|Rocky Balboa: The American Dream Personified
2 - Good afternoon. A few mechanical suggestions. First, make sure that your quote at the beginning is correct; "ain't"...
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|Concert report - essay for my music class
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|Oates and Stone- A comparative research essay- I need a grammar review!
3 - Thank you for your help however: - Americans cannot invade other americans (as far as wars go). Therefore...
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|Satirical essay; The topic is how lazy American's are.
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|Everything begins at any circumstance in life - FSU essay
2 - You have some good points in this essay, but overall it is a bit disorganized. Focus on a couple...
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|[Argument]The residents of San Perdito should vote Montoya out of office
3 - I really appriate your help. Please point out in details what I can do to improve my essay. Are...
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|Gardner's theory of multiple intelligences - Persuasive essay on why music should be in school
Writing Feedbackchazbell - Oct 29, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 30, 2008
|A passage about some measures to protect endangered animals
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|Is Consumerism a good or bad thing?
NEW - Do you think consumerism is a good or bad thing? Given your response, how do you respond to the...
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|Presidential Comparison paper (sociology)
Writing Feedbackbgibson8708 - Oct 29, 2008 / bgibson8708 - Oct 29, 2008
|Essay: marry someone familiar or different?
3 - Good afternoon. Devotion has really great feedback, all of which I agree with. Since he/she has covered all...
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|topic - condom machines in school
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|The theme of the contest is WOW - my short story
2 - Good afternoon. Since you didn't really provide specifics about the prompt (I don't know what "WOW" is), I...
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|how my writing has changed - my self-evaluation essay
2 - You have a good self-evaluation here. You examine your strengths and weaknesses, and are very honest about both. You...
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|Classical Essay - Abortion The Right to Choose
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|Society of Notes...revision and comments
NEW - Last essay, I swear! I'm glad I found this site though, as it's been an invaluable resource. I'm thinking...
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|Successful organization / Something what seems to be is not always the same as it actually is?
2 - Good evening. "...jobs and get promoted ." "...employees in this company begi n to ..." "...individualism...
Writing Feedbackhelenalqy - Oct 25, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 25, 2008
|Definition of Education-Need filter words & eliminate repetition paragrap.
14 - hey babydoll, well i was researching for the same paper that you have discussed here. Do you still have...
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|Diversity to me is an intrinsic part of life; a lifelong learning essay
3 - Good afternoon. It seems a bit disorganized. Are you trying to explain these events in the order in...
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|'Young people are no longer interested in religion.' What is your view?
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|Without academic excellence, most students nowadays are squeezed out of the competition
3 - I think your paragraphs are appropriate lengths; if you divide the essay further you risk making the flow too...
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|"realistic or optimistic" + "hardship and misfortune" -- essays edit help
NEW - Assignment: Do people truly benefit from hardship and misfortune? As an old saying in my hometown goes,"Adversities are...
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|Essay: What dish holds a strong associative power for you?
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|It is better to have one long school vacation than to have a few short one?
6 - I think your organization is fine. You start off with a good introduction followed by a body that explains...
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|Responsibility- through example or behavior of others?
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|Essay: What will you bring along to Sahara + unforgettable experience
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|Check for my essay about my holiday trip to Singapore
2 - Good afternoon. OK, let's see: It is the smallest nation in SoutheastAs this is neither a proper...
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|Twin Pregnancies-Impact on the family
2 - Please help me shorten this paragraph, is it possible? My biggest problem is staying within the page limits, is...
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|The Quality of the Decision: The Power of Thinking Without Thinking
2 - My own experience shows the reason why I want to make decisions slowly and cautiously. Decisions, when devoted enough...
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|This is my 9/11 essay intro - is it OK?
NEW - Hey there!! I would really appreciate it if someone can please take a look at the inroduction of...
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|Describe a person... A rough draft thrown together i need some insight
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|What must we do to truly understand ourselves? Difficult for people to judge themselves evenhandedly
6 - In regards to usage, I suggest one of the books from the "Prentice Hall Guide for College Writers" series...
Writing Feedbackhelenalqy - Oct 15, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 20, 2008
|[Analysis of Issue] Schools should be only responsible for academic skills
2 - "How to become a useful person for society?" There shouldn't be a comma after this, and "people" should be...
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|"Wild animals never kill for sport"; killing animals (argument synthesis)
NEW - British historian James A. Froude once wrote, "Wild animals never kill for sport. Man is the only one to...
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|the effort involved in pursuing any goal -advise, corrections are welcomed!
NEW - Assignment: Is the effort involved in pursuing any goal valuable, even if the goal is not reached? Although...
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|First Nations Ambitions Triumph
NEW - Running Brave is an intriguing and inspirational movie which is based on a true story about a American...
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|the juxtaposition of christian and Pagan elements in Beowulf
NEW - The Juxtaposition of Christian and Pagan elements in Beowulf mirror the mix of religious practices occurring in Anglo-Saxon society.,...
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|Essay: On Artificial Intelligence
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|Essay on labor and Delivery Pain
2 - Good morning. You have a very nice introduction; it lays the groundwork for what you will discuss in...
Writing Feedbackhunnybun39 - Oct 19, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 19, 2008
|[Analysis of Issue] Humans are becoming subservient to machines
4 - No, I don't think you lack examples; in fact, I think quite the opposite. My concern is that your...
Writing Feedbackfranklamparden - Oct 18, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 19, 2008
|Essay about my weekend activities
3 - Hello Gloria, I really don't have words how much appreciated your comments and feedback. I wish I knew about...
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|'Love is the answer to world's questions' - Essay on why love is important in life?
8 - You're very welcome. Feel free to post here not only for feedback on essays, but any general language...
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|Private Eloquence/ PAST EXPERIENCE
Writing Feedbackcowman809 - Oct 16, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 17, 2008
|essay about myself, when/where I was born, my study, hobbies, etc.
2 - "...I am the baggiest one." What does "baggiest" describe here? Do you mean biggest? I'm not sure... :) ...
Writing Feedbackcrawling - Oct 17, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 17, 2008
|Cigarretes has been banned from public environment. Agree or Disagree?
NEW - Essay topic: Cigarretes has been banned from public environment. Agree or Disagree?? Around the world people are concerned...
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|How to safe the Earth + Personal reflection of my presentation - Essays
4 - Good afternoon. From your posting, it seems that this prompt requests specific information from specific material that you...
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|Take advantage of every moment ; Colombia Essay/ Rutgers
NEW - Take advantage of every moment is what my older sister would always tell me. When I was 14 years...
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|What experiences have led you to select your professional field?
2 - "Zip, zap, zoom! " went my..." "...does my Play Station give way every..." I suggest wrapping the...
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|An unexpected act of kindness
4 - Good afternoon. Putting this piece at the beginning would be a great idea; it's a "hook" and sets...
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|Land for human's purpose or left in its natural conditions ?
NEW - In your country, is there more need for land to be left in its natural conditions or is there...
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|Essay: "There's no place like home."
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|Creativity is one of the highly concerned points to those aspired people
Writing Feedbackhelenalqy - Oct 13, 2008 / helenalqy - Oct 15, 2008
|The Act of Revenge, The Cask of Amontillado Essay
4 - Good afternoon. "In pace requiescat!" (1) Is correct. Regards, Gloria Moderator, EssayForum.com...
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|Motivations of buying a product - Toefl Essay
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|Should we celebrate Halloween? - essay help
NEW - Should we celebrate Halloween? Halloween has become the second most anticipated holiday for children after Christmas and Chanukah....
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|Essay on the short story "Rock Springs" by Richard Ford
2 - Good afternoon. In regards to spelling, I suggest you run the piece through a program with a spell...
Writing Feedbacksarahmk - Oct 14, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 14, 2008
|Impacts of Senior Citizens in their Choices for Healthcare - essay edit
2 - Good afternoon. As the prompt and/or requirements for this piece were not included in the posting, I can...
Writing Feedbackkcbisslessi - Oct 13, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 14, 2008
|A WONDERFUL CAREER - 'I am ready for my interview'
4 - Good evening. There are some main things I am concerned about in this essay. For instance, with the...
Writing Feedbackbadgrammer - Oct 13, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 14, 2008
|Observation paper for HRT 101 Benson
4 - Good afternoon. As I have previously commented, check for capitalization. Things that are not proper nouns (specific ...
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|Lost And Found - Narrative Essay
3 - Thank you very much!!!! My teacher said if I had any Misplaced commas. My grade would be automatic D....
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