Writing Feedback / The healthy food can affect the learning ability of children. [4]

To learn effectively, children need to eat a healthy meal at school.
How true is this statement?
Whose responsibility is it to provide food for school children ?

The healthy food can affect the learning ability of children. Today, manage the child foods to keep healthy certain have some difficulties. However, the child maybe not only doing activities in the home, but also spend much their time in the school. Thus, the problem of healthy foods for children is the parents and schools responsibility.

The parents can control the child foods by giving attention to the favorite food of their child. In additionally, the parents can makes some meals for children before going to school. By this way, the child can save their pocket money to do not buy something snack that unhealthy or not hygiene in outside of parent's guide.

On the other hand, the teacher can took their roles in giving children some acknowledgment of healthy food compositions by studying process in the class. For example, the teacher should be explaining the child about the effects of consume unhealthy foods for their brain and growth stage, and giving warn to the child for avoiding the foods that contains too much flavors. The school also can provides any healthy foods in the canteen such as reduces some snacks with sweeteners and keep produces hygiene and nutritious foods like pour chicken, egg rolls or meatball in food stalls that around of the school.

To sum up, the healthy foods is not mean problem for the child as long as the parents and the teachers in schools took their right position as children's guide in selection the best food to be consume for their child maximum grown and brain capability as long as childhood stage.

(266 words)

Writing Feedback / The air craft passenger satisfaction rate toward the main services of air travel in the US [4]

CUSTOMER SATISFACTION LEVELS IN THE US AIRLINES

The chart and the table show the information of air craft passenger satisfaction rate toward the main services of air travel in the US between in 1999, 2000 and 2007. Overall, the satisfied of the passenger has shown upward trends or has increased steadily and the dissatisfied has dropped together with increases of the passenger satisfied, and during in 1999 until 2007 the satisfaction rates of customer air agency has increased gradually by 5 % as average increases.

Based on the table data, the schemes of data almost had shown a similar trends where there are upward and downward trends in each years or in every passenger's satisfied up then the percentage of dissatisfied will be down consistently until in 2007 which the satisfied had increased by 7 % and the dissatisfied had declined by 8% smaller than in 1999.

While, based on the chart data, we can seeing the amount of customer's satisfaction towards air agency also has inclined percentage during the years, where there are upward trends of satisfaction towards any services provided, but only the comfort of seats that had not shown the data comparison of its satisfaction before 2007. Almost of the customer's satisfied had been inclined by 1% until 20 % for each of air agency services.

(212 words)

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Writing Feedback / The People Perspectives to Others by Their Clothes Wear [3]

Writing Task 2 IELTS (Cambridge IELTS book Unit 8D page 52)

Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, the innovations of fashion styles have rapidly changed, Every people as a part of fashions marketing targets certainly have any perspectives for their outfit looks. The fashion styles of people are depending on their favorable fashion trends. But, the judges of others who seeing the people by his covers seemingly have contradictive views.

Firstly, based on people views that have given evaluations the person just by his clothes. There are many people who have typically like this and usually use this way to giving interpretations for other social groups. Ordinary people who have narrow perspectives often use some attributes of the person as tools for makes classification states. They had made the standard criteria for separated people class by their fashion styles. For example, the society that come from high economic class have been identified by their clothes styles that includes any luxury or branded things, such as branded clothes, luxurious watches, original leather things, branded shoes and another high-level class things and this standard automatically applied towards them with lower class background as their measurement social class. Even though this way is not usually ensured people real backgrounds but it has affected many people perspectives today.

On the other hand, secondly, views come from the people who have the contrary perspective or disagree with the statement and have a principle for never judge people by his covers. Actually, the people who have opinions like this usually wiser than others and also have a wider perspective than generals in giving a label or a judge towards other. For instance, they do not directly judge the people by his outfit looks but outweigh giving evaluations from the people personality characters. However, they probably do not look people in their luxury dresses, casual clothes, originals branded or imitation brands that people wear before known the people personality and the clothes is not tools for them measure other personalities.

To sum up, every people have difference views depend on their standard criteria in judging people by clothes wear. However, the appearance of people from outside is not always shown their exact personalities.

(348 words)

Writing Feedback / The Relationships of Employees with Their Manager and Co-Workers [6]

Writing Task I (November 3, 2016)

The charts describe the results of questionnaires about employee relationships with their managers and colleagues in workplace after five years gap in 2005 and 2009. Overall, both of pie charts show that "very good" is the most choices of employees as the description of their relationships towards their managers and peer-workers and had been slightly increased over the years in 2005 and 2009.

Based on the grouping of pie charts first type which describes of relationships between employees and their managers had shown that there are less 10 % of employees who give answers "fair" and the employees who not have managers has been fewer in 2005 with 1% than in 2009 with 5 % after had increased by 4 %. Almost the answers of employees around on extremely "very good" choices which had been steadily above 60 % since in 2005 until 2009 %.

Same conditions with the pie charts second type which provides information on relationships between employees and their colleagues had shown that there are less 3 % of employees who not have co-workers in their jobs. A closer look reveals that "very good" answers is the highest percentage of employees opinions about their co-workers with consistently above on 60 % after had increased significantly by 7 % from 2005 t0 2009.

(215 words)

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Writing Feedback / The main perspective of Businesses is to Make Money - but is it the only priority? [6]

Writing Task II (Page 40 Unit 5)
The purpose of businesses is to make money and they should concentrate only on this.
Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for you answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Today, business is the one's tool of people earns money, However, as the way for earn money, some people occasionally only make money as a priority of behind the business that he has built. In this case, I disagree with the statements. I think the most important aims of business created is not money but the utilized of the firm in products or services which produced is number one.

I have been seen some examples of business collapsed because of not given customer wants. Due to for reached a lot of benefits the owner has ignored the quality and ultimate useful side of his products or services provided. Sometimes, the owner only focuses on thinking about how much money or maximum profitable that he can produce by his business and being underestimated with the main purpose of business where it must be stay stand up for a long time until the future. This is an example of a businessman who traps of money profitable mindset by his business, just called his as mister X. He has built some laundry service in around of his residence places, he believes that laundry business very appropriate with his neighborhood who always busy or major of an executive that not have too much time for wash their clothes and must need his services. Then, he was briefly to build some counters for his business. However, he has focused on earned maximum incomes in shortly time and then lost his focus on giving excellent services to his customers. At the last, the customers should be move to other places when not satisfied with the services.

Based on the example story above, we can see that when the businessman only focuses on maximum profitable or money priority, he will become greedy for spending their capitals just for one business idea and less thinking about an innovation or strategy for sustain the customers intends to use the service that he provided. On the other hand, there are will be there any competitor in the same core business, and smart marketing skills also innovation more important rather than concerning on money profitable in business. So its conclusion due to those reasons, to sum up, my opinion is opponents with the statements asked.

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Writing Feedback / The process of air circulation which goes in and out in through several ventilation holes in house [4]

Writing Task I (Page 35 Unit 5D)

The diagram shows the processes of air circulation which out and in across of several ways of the house. Overall devices of the process in releases heat temperatures of house made by the conventional method or non-electric usage for cooling down the heating temperature where only by several ventilations, and it was designed on the top and every part in houses for makes air easily circulates with fresh air from outside into the houses with balanced compositions.

Based on the picture, we can show the house had been complete with almost seven ways of air ventilations have been placed on the top of house side and in each bottom corners and also from the underground of the house. Some fan vents have been placed on the nearby of the recessed lights or in rooms that easily to be heated such as in the kitchen and in the wash machine rooms. However, there are three big windows apart of ventilations that surely faster to replace heat atmosphere inside of the house.

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Writing Feedback / Perspective of Electronic Media Effect in People Relationship [4]

Writing Task II (November 1, 2016)

The use of electronic media has negative effects on personal relationships between people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Today, the electronic media usage of common people become an essential thing in their life. However, the people seemingly become depending on electronic media usage as a part of their necessary all the time in every day. Because of benefits an electronic media usage, inconstantly were influenced the people keep their relationship of each other. Somehow, I believe the presence of the electronic media gave us many advantages outweigh any drawbacks.

At present, along with the people activities became more variance and multitasking, the electronic media usage can be the tools for help the people keep their relationship by remote communication with their colleagues. For example, the students whose studying abroad certainly far away with their families. So in this condition, a mobile phone as the electronic media can be the tool in communication with family in other place or with remote people.

Moreover, today the electronic media such as mobile phone, laptop and notebook were launched with any features which supporting communication becomes easier and flexible because the people now can download any features of social media applications by their electronic media. For example, a mobile phone or notebook which complete with online access and social media applications such as LINE or Skype can possibly the students keep communication face to face with their relatives by gadgets.

To sum up, I completely disagree with statements that said the electronic media has a negative impact on our relationship, due to I think the electronic media is very useful to people life.

(261 words)

Writing Feedback / Various principal communication skills of an employee in a workplace [2]

Writing Task I (November 1, 2016)

The table provides an information of the result of two questionnaires about common communication skills were the employees usually used in their jobs in 1997 and 2006. The forms of questionnaires were has given are divided into two items that consist of the external communication skills item and the internal communication skills item by percentage. Overall, the results have shown that the external communication had been essential skills which were often used by an employee rather than the internal communication skills, and a skill of dealing with people had been the highest skill usage in external communication skills rather than others competencies of communication.

Based on the table data, the dealing with people skill had slightly increased by 5 % in 2006 since in 1997 and had become the highest
percentage of communication skill usage by the employee rather than other competencies in external and internal communication in the workplace. On the other hand, the listening carefully to colleagues had been the second higher communication skill usage by the employee in the workplace and also had increased by 5 % in 2006 with 47 % before started at 38 % in 1997.

However, based on the data information, the employees argue that the selling a product or service are not too important used and had been the lowest competency skill usage after had decreased by 3 % in 2006 with only 21 % of external communication type usage. While the employees argue that making speech or presentation skills in internal communication competencies is not too worried and had been the lowest percentage of all competencies communication skills with only 11 % in 2006 after increased by 4 % since in 1997.

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Writing Feedback / Over time, the people's lifestyle had been changed. The technology can be a main factor for it [2]

Writing Task II ( October 31, 2016)

Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Over time, the people's lifestyle had been changed. Technology can be the factor which affected of the people lifestyle. Nowadays, there are many tools that were invented for make people lives complete and become easier than the past. Although, there are some people feel cannot have a good lifestyle and others feel can enjoy their lives as better as if they want it by using the technology. Actually, I think both of the people issues above depend on people ways to arrange their time and activities all the days.

In fact, today there are many sports equipment and gymnastic tools for people use in the home without an instructor. I think those things are very suitable for people who want to keep their fit but not have much time to take workout activities in the gym center or in outside home. Certainly, the people who work in the office can apply this way to maintenance their healthy after working in their home. So, there are not reasons for ignoring important of exercises because of the busy activity or difficult to practice it alone at home, due to every tool usually complete with CD instruction for learning how to use it.

However, maybe the price of the tools is not affordable for all people. Sometimes, only who have high financial that can buy the gymnastic tools such as a threat-mile device or weight-loss equipment. But this is not the reason for people who have an average income because at present there are many gym places that provide some tools for gym activities or workout exercises with low price for uses it just usually only 5,000 to 10,000 Rupiah per hour. So, every people can freely use the tools that their needs.

To sum up, actually, I think today we have more accesses to the healthy lifestyle as our habitually. All of it just depends on ourselves in how we manage our time and budget which appropriate with our necessary.

(330 words)

Writing Feedback / Information of Bulgarian people who remain in country after graduation for continuing their studies [3]

Writing Task I ( October 31, 2016)

The chart provides information of Bulgarian people who stay in overseas after graduated for continuing their studies in 2002, 2006 and 2008. Levels of study program consist of elementary school or lower education, junior high school and senior high school degree. Overall, the Bulgarian students who had graduated from junior high school are the highest number of students who planning study abroad than other graduates degree during those time. Then, the people who graduated from primary school or lower education degree showed upward trends over those periods.

Based on the chart data, it can be seen that the students of secondary education had been steadily on the top levels by average data above fifty percent even though actually had shown downward trends started 2002, 2006 and then to 2008 by 6 % lesser than in 2002. On the other hand, elementary school levels had dramatically increased started at 2002 by 18 % to 32 % in 2008. Then, the people who graduated from senior high school education had fluctuated trends which had increased in 2002 until 2006 by 3 % and then had suddenly fallen to 9 % in 2008.

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Writing Feedback / Rule of "Smart Casual Dress" in Workplace for Employee [3]

WRITING TASK II (Unit 8 Page 84)

Some organizations, believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, there are many industries which have popular name in the public. Not only because those industries has been famous or successful, but also because their employee which have good performance or has given excellent service to the public. Thus, not seldom a workplace give some rules to their employees to pay attention with their first impressions in dress style and work attitude. In here, I want to give my opinion about the role of employee dress code and it is related towards employee working task.

I think, the rule of dress code style in office is linked to several factors of the workplace itself. Occasionally, smart casual dress is interpreted differently in many workplaces. Some important factors that affects the rule of workforces dress usually depends on industrial type, size of company, number of employee and sometimes based on amount of interaction between employees and customers. In workplace which the main working task mostly operated in office, a 'smart casual dress' or 'dress office looks' certainly become the work style of employees. For example, in bank, hospital, airport or other industries with main job in office usually have some rules where the employee must wear outfit that looks officially includes vests, dress pants, ties and leather shoes for man whereas dress shirts, skirts, outfit enhancing jewelry and boots or high heels for woman. Overall, their appearance often more good looking and eye-catching in order that giving the best service to customers. Hence, the work quality entirely more looks from their performance in work and by their outward styles.

However, for other industries which have core business in factories are not need imposes the workforces to wear formal outfit when working in field or outside of office. As long as they are can work productively and do the best for their work, the dress smartly is not urgent problem. The employer in field industrial also usually more freely about outfit in the workplace, and mostly tend to consider the quality of work.

Eventually, I argue that the rule of smart casual dress in workplace must suitable based on tasks job of employee in office or follow the entirely rules from the employer.

(344 words)

Writing Feedback / A Perspective of Working in Own Business or Being an Employee [3]

Write about the following topic.

Some people decide to start their own business instead working for a company or organization. Do the advantages for people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, entrepreneurship become more popular and attractive for some people who want to build their own business. There are many examples of successful people who create their own job. Although, an entrepreneur must be face several challenges or risks, but overall I suppose that the positive effect of create own job space more outweigh any drawback.

However, a person who act as an entrepreneur have different perspective with commonly mindset of people as usually. Certainly, the people who have own business will be more freely in working time. They also can be the leader of their own company. Moreover, the people who have innovative thinking will be more get advantages with this job, where they can develop their idea into a new things or new products that never exist before. Thus, if they are lucky, their products will attract the consumer for using it intensively. In addition, the people can more earn higher income than other competitor. The most different point of people who have own business is convenience life which keep earn money or income even when he doesn't work instantly.

In the other side, not all people have same passion about entrepreneurship. Part of them presumably not suitable with this job. Hence, the negative things if the people are not ready to handle the risk of business is make them will be lose. Several things of drawbacks being an entrepreneur are there is not guarantee for lasting successfulness. As long as the new competitor still be there, lucky or unlucky is always is absolutely change.

In conclusion, the people who have own job space will be more independently in arrange their enterprise and have more skilled up in managing their financial matters.

(282 words)

Writing Feedback / A Perspective Happiness of People in Their Marriage or Single Life Over Time [4]

WRITING TASK I (Unit 7 Page 76)

The charts provides the information about of pleasurable feelings of someone who have spouse and not have spouse in the US along with their glad feelings because presence of child in marriage life. Overall, the people who have husband or wife as life partner will be more pleasure over time rather than they who do not married. Additionally, all of the spouses are still keep happier even though they have or not have next generation or children.

Based on the data, the first chart shows the people who are married in teenager stage to young adult stage (18-29 years old) are the happiest than all whose marriage after these stages. However, the people who not have spouse seems have happiness which lesser than the people whose marriage. But for people in elderly stage seems happier than all stage even though they do not married.

Beside of that, the presence of children in all of marriage life not give significantly effects which different towards their happiness. Although, the people who have child in toddler stage until teenager stage (under 18 years old) are the most happiest than when they have children with age above 18 years old or not both of them.

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Writing Feedback / A Wind Turbine as an Electricity Generator in this Era [2]

WRITING TASK I (Unit 5 Page 56)

The diagrams show about a process of generating electricity which produced by wind and where are the generator spot most appropriately to be placed. Overall, a wind turbine can be placed in nearby or far away from of settlement areas, but certainly the energy is produced will be different depend on its location which positioned.

Additionally, a wind turbine is made from some equipment which usually consist of steel tower, blades-fiberglass or wood, a wind sensor tool for controlling speed and as detector of wind direction and also a computer for receiving information from wind sensor. Actually, the process of a wind turbine is simple enough. First, the wind which blow will make the blades rotates until the wind sensor focused on the wind that have maximum speed and position accurately to produce the maximum energy or powerful generator.

In this case, the spot of wind turbines position also very influence to the electric output. However, the wind turbine which has been placed in offshore or in hills have higher powerful energy rather than if it is placed in the settlement regions with electric produced are 1.5 mega-watts : 100 kilowatts respectively.

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