Writing Feedback / CCTV, security cameras, etc. Public surveillance criticism- the advantages outweigh the disadvantage [3]

Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening.

Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Advanced technology's products have played pivotal role in 21st century life, including in the public surveillance which aimed to monitor societies' activities. Even this issue is no longer the top secret of government and intelligence agency as people realize the vast development of informational technology, many of them are still unaware that they are under strict supervision. By a great access to keep the peacefulness and security within the country, I believe that the advantages of this recent utilize of technology outweigh the fact that the privacy is a rare thing to maintain.

Obviously, an official surveillance conducted by government restricts the freedom of citizen resulting on lack of privacy. All citizen's behaves in public area are recorded by security cameras and, desperately, as well as their communication through mobile phone even its private conversation and messaging. Another thing is that so easy to locate people by cell phone tracking. An American cyber-crime specialist at TED Talks video revealed that most of technology companies have assisted government by open-encrypted people activities and communication with a system installed in almost all mobile phones. He added that this even more dangerous than hijacking since people have no longer their privacy even it is a fundamental right of human. Nevertheless, this has been a controversial issue whether or not important to keep our privacy and against the state but I personally believe that this development is considerably beneficial for human life.

It has been proved that the using of CCTV and cell phone tracking and recording brings a pleasure as it establish the peacefulness of life nowadays. The crime rate in majority of countries could be decreased thanks to security cameras which help police to arrest the offenders and maintain the security by avoiding crime through surveillance toward all the public facilities and areas. Another advantage is the easiness to track crime agents which are harder in the past. By cell phone tracking, it is easy to collect evidence and detain people who commit crime. In Indonesia, a huge number of corruptors and those who perpetrate tax avoidance are jailed based on the evidence and their activity which supervised by police officer. This method is reliable and proves that this cutting-edge device would bring peace and hold the jurisdiction of country.

All in all, I believe that the merits of public surveillance by sophisticated technological device are greater than the demerit.

Writing Feedback / The total of movies rented and sold in diverse formats each year between 2002 and 2011 [2]

The total of movies rented and sold in diverse formats each year over a period in a selected store is illustrated by the chart. Overall, the main fact that stands out is the number of rentals which considerably decreased during a decade started in 2002. Meanwhile, during 8 years, the figure of DVD is dominated the annual number of movie selling while other several formats were only existed in a few years.

Turning to a detailed analysis of movies' rentals, it was stood up at above 180,000 in 2002 as much more popular activity than buy the VHS and DVD. However, to the end of period, it continuously declined and stated at just around 50,000 in 2011, almost thrice times lower than at beginning. The same trend showed by the figure of VHS sales which decreased although this format just available for purchasing in the first four years.

On the other hand, the selling of films in DVD format remained high while it inclined each year from 2002 to 2007, it also leveled as the highest selling at more than 200,000 discs in 2007. Unfortunately, this number just then decreased slightly in the subsequent years. Blu-ray movies were available recently in 2007 when it selling was just at a very small number. It steadily rose in the next 4 years period but still in a minor number with no more than 20,000.

Writing Feedback / Excessive shopping leads to debt - causes and solutions. [3]

Some people get into debt by buying things they don't need and can't afford. What are the reasons for this behaviour?
What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

To shop or purchase goods is a pleasure activity for majority of people. Unfortunately, in some cases, consumers end up to buy items that they actually don't need and even don't affordable for them then lead to financial crisis and debt. I believe that the consumptive life styles as well as easiness offer to buy by e-commerce trends are the main reasons for this phenomenon. However, a well-managed finance introduced to society and advanced standard for credit card holder would plausibly help people to avoid this issue.

In this modern era, it is a generally accepted that societies, particularly those who live in urban area, are suffering from consumptive and hedonism way of life. They tend to shop easily and often without consider the purpose and the cost of products they taken. It doesn't even problem since they can transact without cash money as most of them having credit card. Of course in this scenario, advertisement also plays an important role to persuade them purchasing goods whether or not is essential and affordable for them. In addition, e-commerce, or online shopping also a predominant factor of people behaviour to extravagantly shopping because it is offer easiness for buyers to pick items from list on the fascinating online shops then order and just wait until it delivers to their accommodation with no need for them to leave their activities or business. This obviously helpful for them who have not enough time to directly go to retails but have desires to purchase. As the consequence, as easy to buy things as less concern they are about the payment which then arise trouble when they chained by a great debt.

Nevertheless, I would argue that if citizens get information and education about finance management they would carefully arrange their budget on unnecessary shopping. Thus better if they take the assistance from finance adviser or firm so that they can step by step reduce their consumptive behaviour. Another important to concern is the using of credit card. As now most people use this as their main payment method, bank should strict the regulation and standard to their client so that those who utilize it are surely those who have a stable finance and able to pay the bills. By this, excessive purchasing of users would no longer a problem as they can afford the credit payment.

In sum, I believe that the trend of online shopping and consumptive lifestyle as the reason why people tend to buy goods that are unnecessary and unaffordable for them. However, good finance managing and restriction on credit card using are possible as the measures to tackle this.

Writing Feedback / The advantages gain by museums when charging visitors for admission [2]

Many museums charge for admission while others are free
Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantage?

Some may find that museums as sacred places where ancient and historical goods along with extremely valuable old treasures are displayed. By this important role of museums on society and an increasing number of visiting, several museums then settle on entrance fee for guests. I believe the merits of charging visitor are obviously outweighing the demerit which plausibly occurs.

Most of museums now, even it historical museum or science museum, decide the amount of price that people should pay for admission. This might be a trigger of the decreasing number of visitors while they lack of enthusiasm to go to museums as they need to be charged. They look for free or at least cheap entertainment for their family. In fact, they could find it buy trip to some theme park or city park which offer more joy compare to museums even though they are both essential as educational and recreation sites. People then choose carefully and think twice before came up with decision to visit museums. However, by the abundance information could be obtained on museum trip, I would argue that paid ticket would bring some advantages as museum operational and services can be enhanced.

Museums have developed their private finance system beside assisted by municipal or country funding so that they have freedom and access to increase the quality of museums. Several internal issues like maintenance, hiring and paying employee's allowance, and enrich their collection in order to being always update and compete with others museums are the concern of museums management, and admission money from visitor could be covered all these problems. By 1960, majority of museums in USA has built their money management mainly by ticketing system so they could restrict their demand on government fund at the same time by maintain and increase their facility, collection and overall quality as the museums have become so popular and hold a pivotal role as amenity for citizens. In addition, indirectly, visitors are more appreciate and admire things displayed there as they realize the huge funding for exhibiting those for them as one of reasons they should pay to enjoy it.

All in all, I believe the advantages of charging admission of museums are plenty than the disadvantage may arise by it.

Writing Feedback / The life cycle of salmon marine creature - big size of fish in river and in ocean habitat [NEW]

The diagrams inform the life cycle of salmon marine creature as big size of fish. At the first glance it can be seen that the natural habitat of this species involved open large ocean and plain water on the river during its whole life period. In addition, it take a long time, in years, for this species to develop from laid eggs into several stages to become adult salmon.

Turning to the first stages before eggs grow to be fry, salmons take a long journey swimming from sea to breed and lay their eggs attached in the reeds under small stones on the upper river with slow moving. It takes approximately 5 to 6 months for these eggs to become young fry in a very tiny size, 3 - 8 cm, which move to live as long as 4 years in the fast flowing of water stream on the lower river so it could be grown as 12 to 15 cm smolt.

These smolts need to migrate back to their origins habitat on the sea where they will get mature as adult salmons in a long period too, around 5 years. As they reach their state for breeding, this cycle would be started when they finally going back to the faraway river.

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Writing Feedback / The proper age that children should be started to go to school [2]

In some countries it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at four years old, while in others they do not have to start school until they are sever or eight.

How far do you agree with either of these views?

Children are the most valuable assets for the parents. Thus, the proper ages that children should be started to study in the formal institution has been a contradict issue among societies while they concern about the best option for their child. Although in some countries it is evident that children advised to go to school at four years old, I extremely agree with those proclaimed that they should get to study at seven or eight years.

With regard with those who support that young generations need to access formal education in the very early ages, around 4, they might be based their consideration in the fact that between 1 and 5 years old is the golden development of brain which grow vastly. In this time, children are easy to learn and process new information by simply imitate what they hear and visible for them. In South Korea, kids on this age are taken to parenting or children care services, a state below kindergarten, so that children can individually learn along their peers as the same time as their parents go to their workplace. Considerably, this is beneficial for both children and parents. However, I would argue this is not a wise decision as the young kids may experience mental hectic or what child neurologist said as the condition children get when they can't develop their learning skill such as math and language acquisition due to get school early.

In fact, age group 7 to 8 is the critical age for people to learn subject matters, behaviours and social skills apart from their nuclear family. This is the best time for being involved on new environments to obtain new experiences and grasp about science or other subjects as they are mature enough in both brain and physical state to learn complicated materials. In most European countries, particularly Finland as the best educational management in the world, the enrolment of student children in the primary school is need to be proved by birth certificate by parents to ensure that they attending school in the proper ages. Remarkably, this is revealed as the optimum age by researchers as small even no demerits plausibly get by young generations.

All in all, I believe that the proper age that children need to go to educational institution is on 7 to 8 years. Get to school too early in their very first former ages, actually, just a barrier of their mental development. Furthermore, governments need to be strictly based on this concern as this is about the future human resources.

Writing Feedback / The manufacturing of frozen fish pies as instant factory-prepared foods [NEW]

The diagrams inform about the production of frozen fish pies as instant factory-prepared foods which just need to be warmed in microwave before consumed by buyers. A fish pie itself is made from fish and potato slice as the main ingredients and the adding of sauce and peas to enrich the taste. However, it is obviously seen that the role of labours in the whole manufacturing process is only in the preparation of fish and the transport of raw materials into the industry whilst other stages automatically run by sophisticated machines.

Turning to the foodstuff management, at first to maintain the quality, potatoes used are those with up to one month aged. The processes are continued by machines to clean, peel and slice these potatoes. Before those could be stored, it needs to be boiled and then chilled in the low temperature in order to preserve.

Fresh salmon with on 12 hours or less from fishering then is marinated with lemon juice and salt before steamed on particular oven. Then the steps of skin and bones removing by workforces are in under inspection by supervisor to scrutinize the process and observe the workers. After this, fish put on the food package along with prepared peas, sauce and potato before being wrapped and frozen on the minus degree as preserving technique as long as it dispatched.

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Writing Feedback / What majors should university's student enroll? [2]

Some people believe that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

The proper chosen regarding to the university subject should be taken by high school leavers has arisen a big concern from society since it is all about future careers. Although some argue that the most important subject to study is all related to science and technology, I believe that attending university in favour majors is the best as it can be stimulate creativity, innovation and self-reliant of student.

In fact, science and technology are the popular majors with high enrollment in majority of universities as the great demand for the alumni from these knowledge branches. About more than 50% of opened job opportunity and work sector is related to both these subjects in all over the world. In addition, those who granted degree from science and technology are more likely to be hired by employers as suitable educational background with career position offered. Taking China as an example, with best known for industrial country, scientist and specialist on technology are highly needed to run the large scale manufacturing there, and this fact is similarly occurred in other countries. By this, beside well known as profitable subjects by the student, parents also tend to ask their children to study those majors as it reasonable to obtain stable and well-paid job in the future. Nevertheless, we can't deny this phenomenon, but I would argue the world is still need bachelors from others major and it is much more relief for students to study what they like.

Attending university by what students are likely to learn is the most pivotal as they need to be relaxed and focused on their majors which plausibly maintain only if they love the subjects. To take higher education level is complicated issue considered about the ability, interest and talent of students which is the reason why university offers diverse lectures to attract them to study based on their passion. An educational research in British revealed the relation between students' happiness during college with the kinds of major they enrolled. It said that they who interest with their majors are more creative and innovative person, they also have the chance to develop their learning skills and enhance their individual learner proficiency than those stressed with their study. Obviously, these quality of workforces are more dynamic and profitable to being hired by company as business need creative and innovative employees.

In sum, I extremely believe that it is more essential for student to study the majors they like in university than take those which related to science and technology even it is good choice for their career in the future.

Writing Feedback / Bananas and coffee selling in European countries [2]

Information regarding to the selling point in millions of euros of coffee and bananas labelled with Fairtrade in European regions in 1990 and 2004 is illustrated by the tables. Overall, it is obviously seen that there was an increasing trend of coffee sold over the period. On the other hand, the purchasing of banana was slightly jumped in Sweden and Denmark in 2004.

Turning to the table of coffee as one of commodities sold in Europe, all the selling was successful in all the marketed countries which the biggest incline shown by Britain from 1.5 million (1990) to 20 million (2004). It is followed by Switzerland for surging twice time higher. Although the same trend occurred in the figure of Denmark, Belgium and Sweden, the increasing money yielded was in a very small number.

In addition, the highly profitable is obtained in the bananas' selling in Switzerland by 32 million increases in the end of period. UK and Belgium also had remarkably risen purchasing by around five folds higher. Unfortunately, this number fell down in both Sweden and Denmark by 0.8 and 1.1 million respectively.

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Writing Feedback / Fashion address the class and personal character of people; Importance of appearance in workplace [2]

Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Fashion include as one of the basic needs which also address the class and personal character of people. Therefore, some companies argue the importance of well-dressed regulation toward their employees while other say skill and performance are more pivotal. However, I believe, in fact, some occupations particularly related to social services rely on appearance whilst those who work with their force obviously need to focus on work quality.

In certain job which offers services as its product, smartly dressing worker is the main factor to attract consumers. This has been a general requirement asked by employers as fashion mode and physical appearance usually viewed as workforce with excellent behaviour, attitude and intelligence by society. A 2014 Harvard study in economic regarding to effective marketing reveal the effect of fashionable and good-looking staff in the amount of revenue yielded by organisations. This research surveyed on a few work fields including flight attendances, bank officers, insurance and retails staffs even restaurant stewardess. In these kind of occupations, to be stylish absolutely essential as a service they give to the client. Nevertheless, this fact doesn't generally valid for all workers.

Human resources work in industry or manufacturing ignore their dress as it is not crucial toward their job. In addition, it is not an important issue to be notice by both companies and workers as their work is about physical force and have no relation to what clothes they wear. For being labours or constructors mean proficiency and work skill as the measurements of their works. In any case, to dress extravagantly might be would get negative opinion and hatred among employees and from supervisors because they seems lazy and have less dedication. Working ability outweigh appearance value for them who work in non-service sectors.

In sum, the importance of employees fashion style depend on the occupation whether or not it is a personal skill needed in workplace.

Writing Feedback / The relationships at the workplace between 2005 and 2009 [2]

The pie charts reveal the comparison of survey results conducted in 2005 and 2009 which asked about the relationship of workers to both their managers and colleagues. It is clearly seen that the relationship at the workplace become better in 2009 compared to the 4 years before even it just shown by a slight increase of them who answered very good as the major figure. However, employees who have no supervisors and co-workers didn't give any opinion toward the survey's questioner.

Turning to the chart showed the relationship of employees to their supervisors, the highest percentage was at the very good opinion at above 60 % in both years while a rise by 4% existed in 2009. Although the figure of good answer was the second highest proportion, it steadily decline by 4% to the subsequent year. Fair, poor, and have no supervisor percentage were resulted at a very low number. Interestingly, all the workers participated in the survey in 2009 whilst there was 2 % of them have no answer in 2005.

Same trends as those in the survey of workers and supervisors relation were shown by the figure of very good and good in the relationship among the workforces. Therefore, there were also small percentages below 10% of fair figure and those who have no co-workers. In 2009 there was no more said that their relationship was poor.

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Writing Feedback / The happiness rate of American citizens toward married status and presence of children [2]

The bar charts reveal the comparison of the happiness between married and unmarried of American citizens based on the survey conducted along with the happiness of the spouse toward children gifted. Overall, it obviously seen that the life joy for them whose in relationship is very high compared to those whose unmarried yet. Meanwhile, the figures of children effects are slightly similar.

Turning to the percentage of married people pleasure with more than 30% for all age categories, the exact numbers were remarkably higher than those single except in the oldest group. There was a difference by 24% from the youngest, by twice time bigger for people in age 30-49, and by 21% for those 50-64 aged. However, the happiness rate for the eldest in 65 and over was 44% for them in intense relationship and 34% for them who didn't involve in such of relation.

In addition, the percentage whether the married couple have children or not was steadily similar at just above 40%. The survey result presented that the happiest spouse was them who have young children (44%), followed by them who have no children (43%), and the lowest, interestingly, were those who have adult children with 18 or older aged (41%).

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Writing Feedback / The purpose and the responsibility of business [2]

the purpose of businesses is to make money and they should concentrate only on this.
do you agree or disagree?

A business is conducted to gain economic profits. Although the main objective of businesses is to earn money as much as possible, I believe that they should not only focus on this aim then ignore their responsibility to the labour, society and environment as well.

As business is about a force and career involved many people, it should create highly profitable works to yield much revenue. A company should gain high income in order to pay for employees and avoid bankruptcy. Most factories in China have competed fiercely by always launch their adjusted items with their strict management and production as their technique to attract more consumers for boosting their sales record. This do by those business units to gather many profits so they can continuously run their company and at the same time pay the salary of the massive workers. It is pivotal the utmost importance that business has a stable finance and produce much money as the main reason why it built. However, I would argue that they should also consider other things as part of their responsibility.

Business is also regarding to their responsibility for their human resource and the sustainable development of environment and society. Each company have corporate social response, CSR, which supervise under laws in order to contribute in the social life for both common people and their own employees also for the environment. For workers, corporation need to treat them well by reasonable working hours, appropriate allowance and health insurance payment. These are its obligation and the rights of workers. Business also have to involve in volunteering or charity activities to support society, they need to take a role as sponsor on national or local competitions and events. At last, it has to concern toward the environment particularly their source of raw material like forest and their waste. Company have to create wise using of natural resources by planting back or avid deforestation as well as build treatment system to overcome their chemical waste.

In conclusion, I extremely agree that business also has to participate and contribute to society as their responsibility instead of just producing money all the time.