Writing Feedback / Negative Effect of Fast Food Domination [5]

In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Global fast foods have replaced traditional diets in some countries and it can influence both families and communities in negative way. I extremely believe that this developing is harmful for inhabitants who consume it.

Fast food can affect traditional foods' sustainability as it can be served rapidly, so it is very suitable for busy society, and it have great taste also. Office worker who have short of time will tend to choose fast foods rather than traditional foods. In addition, they will provide their children with it too as they don't have much time to cook for them. As a result, it become habit for adult to consume fast diets, and kids who always be served it by their parents will be addicted as it has great taste and unique appearance also. It is evidence that traditional diets sustainability is threated by fast foods as people barely consume the traditional one.

Furthermore, people have unhealthy lifestyle as they consume fast foods frequently. Fast diets are made by less fresh material and also contain huge number of salt which can bind fat and cause hypertension. Moreover, unhealthy cook method can cause many negative substance inside the diets. Also, besides the material, those are made by less fresh oil. As a consequence, many health problem can be affected by those to consumers such as obesity, and heart attack since it contains lots of cholesterol. It is clear that fast foods cause many health problem to inhabitants.

To conclude, people will have many dangerous illness as they often consume fast foods. However, it will not cause problem to consumers' health only, but also traditional culinary existence since people tend to choose instant diets than the traditional.

Writing Feedback / Air Circulation Inside The House Can Waste Energy and Cause Heat Loss. [2]

The diagram below shows how heat is lost and energy wasted in a house because of air getting into and out of the house.

The air circulation, such as air leaking into and out of the house, is presented in the diagram. Interestingly, although the house has three level, all of the air leaking out of the building is passing through the highest level of the building.

First of all, on the lowest level, basement, crawl space and dryer vent are used by the air to get into the building. Furthermore, in the ground level, a great number of air come into the house by using several spot. Kitchen fan vent and window are used by air to come inside the kitchen. Besides that, air get into it by using window and main door in the living room, while it pass through electrical outlet in the bathroom.

According to science, air move from the high pressure to the low pressure area. So that all of air move from the ground level to attic by using recessed light in the kitchen and bathroom, and using attic hatch in the living room. Moreover, bathroom fan vent and plumbing fan vent are used by air to get out of the building.

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Writing Feedback / Land usage differences over the time of period in the West Park Secondary School [2]

The diagrams show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its contraction in 1950.

The changing of West Park Secondary School area between 1950 and 2010 is shown by the map and it is explained for every three decade. The most noticeable change is the existence of houses and catchment area such as farmland which is replaced by parking area.

Land usage for several facilities remain balance in the beginning of the period. Main road location is opposite of the school and houses. Moreover, farmland is located in the south of houses, while in the south east of it, there is playground. In 1980, there is an obvious change on land usage where houses is replaced by car park and science block, which is part of school development. It is located in the west of school's main building. Besides that, farmland is change into sports field.

In the following three decade, the school does not experience any changing, but there is an immense change on the parking area as it replace all of sports field. But, sports field are moved to the west of playground area, and it takes about a third of the area.

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Writing Feedback / Water Cycle Base on The Location Where It is Dropped [2]

The diagram shows how rainwater is reused.

The water cycle process is displayed in the diagram where it start as rainwater until it come back to the river after several usage. According to diagram, it can be seen that though there are three different processes depend on the rainwater dropped, but all of them are bringing back the water into the river.

The first process is begun when rain water drop in the reservoir such as Dam, and it flows toward Water Treatment Plant where the rainwater will be treated by several process before it is ready to be consumed by human. The second process is started when rain water drop directly around houses. It will be kept in rain water tank and used for human activities. The wastewater then will be streamed toward Wastewater Treatment Plant where the water will also get several process here.

After this process, there are two possibility of the water usage. First, the recycled water will be used by human for several activities, exclude consumption, and the second, it will be flowed directly to the river. Besides that, there is also Stormwater Treatment where the rainwater has not been used by human, but it streams toward the river immediately after it dropped on the Earth. Moreover, the process is repeated again.

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Writing Feedback / Does the increasing of human population become the worst problem? [2]

The continued rise in the world's population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time.
What are the causes of this continued rise?
Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

These days, human kind has a serious problem due to the global population increasing. I strongly believe that this is the most dangerous problem which human ever faced as lots of factors cause this issue.

The increasing of birth rate has a great contribution for human population exploding as at the present time, lots of juveniles or young people have married although they have not reach the ideal age for having family. It is different than the past time, although most inhabitants had more than three child, their children would not get marriage before their age reached the ideal age, and it was about 25 until 28 year. As a result, these days, a new family will have new member when the mother still a teenager. Undoubtedly that the increasing of birth rate cause human population exploding.

Furthermore, the drop of war frequency and number of virus outbreak give a lot of effects on the human population. For instance, in the past many countries established war to get better land for agriculture or mining. So that great deal of inhabitant became victims for this war. Moreover, at present, the development of technology cause decreasing of virus outbreak, so then inhabitants get more healthy life than in the past. Those have influenced human death rate. Considering the example, it is clear that both decreasing of war frequency and virus outbreak have increased human population.

Uncontrolled human population become the worst problem that ever human faced as it can influence the future of human kind. The government of each countries have to cooperate to tackle this problem.

Writing Feedback / Infrastructure improvement in Stockford during 1930 until 2010 [3]

The changes of the village of Stokeford over eight decades which is began in 1930 and ended in 2010 is presented by maps. The most noticeable change was the replacement of farmland with houses area.

To begin, there were lots of farmland in Stokeford in 1930. It was located in the East of River Stoke and in the East of houses and primary school. Besides that, Gardens were located in the South of primary school, while large house in the East of gardens. There was road infrastructure run through in the middle of Stokeford. In addition, in the West of primary school, there was shops and post office which also located between houses area. Afterward, in the North of houses area, there was bridge.

In 2010, there were many changes in Stokeford. There was no longer farmlands since it was replaced by housing area which also located along side of the road. The shops were also replaced by housing area, and after that, half of the gardens experienced the same thing with shops too. There were two new large houses in the east of primary school. Besides that, a development was occurred in the previous large house and it changed becoming retirement home.

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Writing Feedback / Pupils' Behavior Cause Several Problems to Schools [NEW]

In many countries, schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Pupils' behaviour become one of several problem which has to be faced by schools in many countries. However, I believe that schools and parents can cooperate to tackle this issue together as there are lots of factors which cause this issue.

Diversity of students in school indeed cause positive effect to themselves, but it become problems for schools. Background distinction become the main factor as pupils who has different family and culture also have different behaviour. For example, broken family has influenced pupils' behaviour in school as they don't get sufficient care from their parent. As a result, they will do ridiculous things to attract their friends and parents though sometimes it annoyed for them. Considering the example, there is no doubt that difference of background has pivotal role for students' behaviour.

However, parents and schools are able to tackle this problem by cooperating together as students spend much time both in school and home, so this issue cannot be solve by single actor. Schools have to know their students' family background by asking to the parents while they should support this effort as it is for their own child future. As a consequence, schools can look for different method to face the diversity of students' behaviour. Besides that, parents can also teach their kids about how to behave not only in schools but also anywhere outside the house. It is clear that both schools and parents have important role to solve this issue.

Therefore, the distinction of students' behaviour which cause problems to schools can be solved by cooperation between schools and parents. I personally believe, that government also can help them to solve this problem by giving consultation services for students and family.

Writing Feedback / Many People Refuse Apartment Building Process [2]

As populations grow and cities become more crowded, there is pressure throughout the world to construct ever-taller building to provide accommodation and offices. Many people object to such developments, citing the social as well as the physical dangers. Do you agree with objections to skyscrapers?

Uncontrolled human population stimulate government and employers to establish high building to accommodate citizen. A great number of inhabitants believe that this development is harmful for society. I personally agree that this development cause many problem for inhabitants, but there is also a positive effect which caused by this.

Population explosion become serious problem which faced by human nowadays. Building high-rise accommodation is not the best solution as it cause other problem to inhabitants. Lack of communication, which is caused by this development, is become serious problem which has faced by society who lived in apartment. As a result, there is increasing of individualism which also influence increasing of crime-rate. In other word, inhabitants has less safety due to they have no relative although they live in the same building. Undoubtedly that this development is harmful as it does not give solution but other new serious problem.

On the other hand, this development can tackle a problem although just for temporary since it give huge shelter for people by using a little number of land. For instance, after the establishment of apartment, lots of society can live in the same building without worry about annual disaster such as flood. As a consequence, human can solve not only population problem and lack of land but also healthy problem due to flood disaster. It is clear that building high-rise building can give solution for society though not the best solution.

To conclude, several problems can be solved by building apartment though it is only for temporary moment. But, despite the advantage, this development cause another serious problem also. The government should look for the main problem and solve it rather than give temporary solution.

Writing Feedback / Which one is better, spending money on sophisticated medical equipment or on health education [2]

Most developed countries spend a large proportion of their health budgets on expensive medical technology and procedures. This money should be spent instead on health education to keep people well. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Developed countries should use their health budget to educate their citizen about healthy life rather than to improve their medical equipment and procedures. I strongly believe that prevent citizen from disease is better than cure the disease itself, but improving medical equipment is important also. This essay will discuss both opinion.

To begin, health is the most important part of human life. There are lots of things that people can do if they are health so then government has to concern on people's health as it can improve many sector of the countries also. For instance, giving health education such as seminar will enrich people's knowledge about health, so then they can prevent their self from many health problems by doing healthy life. This also can increase country's revenue as people have much time to be spent on their job. It is clear that prevention effort should be chosen by government by giving health education to inhabitants.

These days, many societies is very busy and have short of time so then they cannot do physical exercise to keep their body health. Improvement medical equipment become one of the best solution due to this condition. For example, in the past, people have much leisure time which could be used for keeping their body healthy. Besides that, they could prepare many healthy food rather than junk food. But today, people do not have leisure time for doing physical exercise and cooking healthy food, so then they are threat by many disease. As a consequence, they have to spend a lot of money for treatment cost. Undoubtedly that sophisticated medical equipment is essential at the present time.

To sum up, although development on medical device is pivotal, but I believe that do prevention effort is the best way to keeping people's health. This is because prevention need less money than healing the disease, so than government can allocate their budget to other pivotal sector.

Writing Feedback / Some inhabitants think that government create too many rule though it is for their own safety. [2]

Governments make many rules to protect people from danger, for example, by making people wear seat belts in cars or not allowing smoking in public buildings. However, many people believe that there are too many rules nowadays. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

A great deal of inhabitants believe that government establish too many regulation in order to keep them safe. I extremely disagree with this statement as the government make reasonable rule not only for their citizen but also for environment.

These days, according to environment condition, there are lots of danger that threat people safety. Government establish many rule to protect their citizen from danger or keeping them from doing something dangerous as they can influence the future of the nation. For example, after global warming issue appear, many rules are made by government for their inhabitants to not overuse fossil fuel as it can increase the greenhouse gases. As a result, government and inhabitants can give contribution to keep the Earth away from climate change. Undoubtedly that these regulation are made for humankind safety.

In addition, at present time, life expectancy is decrease though the number of population is increase. This is because many people is careless not only to their own safety but also other people safety. For instance, in the past, parents tend to ask their children to go to school by foot or bicycle rather than fossil fuel vehicle. On the other hand, nowadays, it is common thing to let children ride motorcycle or car to go to school, although they do not have driving license. As a consequence, the number of transportation accident increase significantly which also linked to the decreasing of life expectation. It is clear that many rule has been made by government to keep this problem away.

Therefore, there is no doubt that government establish lots of regulation to protect their citizen from several problem due to environment condition and people's behaviour itself. However, I believe that make lots of rule is not the best solution to tackle several problem, government should give education according to specific problem to inhabitants, and so then inhabitants can do the right things without the force of the regulation.

Writing Feedback / Who have to take responsibility on the number of plastic usage for packaging [2]

Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. While others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A great deal of inhabitants thinks that they have to avoid using item which has lots of packaging while other believe that department store and employers should take responsibility for this case. I personally agree that buyers is the main actor for this issue, but both sellers and employers have important role also. This essay will discuss both opinion.

These days, plastic usage become hot issue as it can influence our environment sustainability as it is used for packaging items. Prevention effort should be done by both manufacturers and sellers as they are the one who make decision about their selling items' packaging. They also can establish regulation which related to plastic usage for packaging. For example, department store should take more cost if customers want to use additional package. As a result, buyers will think twice if they want to add more package and this effort will reduce the number of plastic usage also. Consider to the example, there is no doubt that both sellers and manufacturers are responsible to the number of plastic usage.

Most customers tend to use lots of plastic for packaging as they want to protect their items from being damage. Buyers indeed have an essential part on plastic usage and environmental condition as they are the main actor who decide the number of plastic on their items' packaging. For instance, they can brings their own bag to reduce plastic bag usage every time they buy something in supermarkets. Besides that, they can ask the seller to use less package on the items which they buy. As a result, lots of packaging can be reduced, and so do the plastic usage. In other word, they have contributed to sustain our environment and prevent it from being damage by plastic. It is clear that buyers is the main actor and they have pivotal role to tackle environmental issue related to plastic usage for packaging.

To conclude, although sellers and manufacturers have a responsibility for the packaging on their selling item, but buyers also have an important role as they are the one who decide the number of plastic for packaging their items. I strongly believe that there is other actor, government, who can help both seller and buyers to solve this problem and prevent the environment from being damage.

Writing Feedback / Which one is better to reduce crime-rate? Incarcerating criminals or giving education to them? [2]

In many countries prisons is considered the best way to decrease crime. However, education is often argued to be more effective way. Which opinion do you most agree with?

Some countries use prison as their treatment to reduce crime rate while other think education is better method to tackle this problem. I personally believe that education is the best way to decrease crime rate as prevention is better than fixing something.

At the present time, crime become a common thing as it can be found all over the world. Many countries give the criminals a punishment such as living inside the jail for specific period as they think crime rate will decrease by incarcerating criminals. For example, in America, the government provide several kind of prison to separate prisoners based on their age since there are juvenile detainees also. As a result, the number of criminal is decrease due to a great deal of criminals is arrested inside the jail. Although this method seem giving a positive effect on reducing crime rate, but I believe that giving education for criminals is the best way to tackle criminality.

Giving knowledge about the danger of criminality to both criminals and good citizen give obvious positive effect on reducing crime rate permanently. In New Zealand, the country which has the lowest crime rate in the world, the government does not arrest the criminals inside the prison. They tend to educate them about how bad criminality is, and then they also train the bad guy some new abilities such as sculpting or crafting so then they can have occupation by using their skills. As a result, they will continue to live by using their skills to get money and avoid their self from committing crime. Undoubtedly that giving education both to bad guy and good citizen is the best way to reduce crime rate permanently.

Therefore, the best way to prevent someone from committing crime is by teaching them about the danger of criminality. This method give permanent solution while detaining people inside the prison solve this problem for temporary only. In my opinion, religious education can also become a method to tackle this issue.

Writing Feedback / Many juvenile get problems due to their mother is a career women. [NEW]

The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

The change on woman position in society has caused many problems, especially for juvenile, as lack of attention from their parents. I would argue that this statement is true, and this problem also can cause other problem such as health problem both for children and parents.

In this modern era, business woman become common thing as they tend to choose working rather than staying in home to take care children. Juvenile who live in this kind of family will have lots of problems in society and school as they do not get many lessons which given by their parent. For example, pupils will find that they are difficult to adapt with others in society and they cannot follow the lesson in the class also. As a result, they have only few of relatives both in society and in school. Besides that, their score in some subject also bad, and this can influence their future. It is clear that lack of parent's concern affect not only juvenile's social life but also their future.

In addition, young people will have bad quality of healthy life since there is no body who provide them healthy food. Their parents prefer to consume fast food or other instant diet rather than fresh food as it need much time to be served. As a consequence, juvenile get disease frequently, and this condition hamper their study also. There is no doubt that juvenile's health quality is influenced by the attention of their parents.

To conclude, undoubtedly that lack of parents' attention brings a lot of negative effect for juvenile both on social life and their study. However, although household assistant can help parents to serve healthy food for their kids, but juvenile still need attention and supervision from their parents.

Writing Feedback / Several things that become reason to attend tertiary education. [2]

People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, and increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university?

There are diverse reason that people have, such as getting new experience, enrich their knowledge or for better job opportunity, so then they tend to study in university. I would argue that this statement is true because university is an important part to make a better life.

These days, the number of undergraduate student has been risen all over the world. Some people join university in order to gain many experiences and knowledge as university provides students with many facilities. For example, lots of literatures can be found in university's library and student can use all of it for free. As a result, they will get much information which can enrich their knowledge. It is clear that many people join university as they can improve their knowledge and experience.

In addition, some people attend college due to their occupation or just to get better career as many company prefer to hire employees who has high education rather than less education. Inhabitants who want to get high salary will decide to join the university before they look for occupation as they can get lots of information and knowledge to sustain their dream job. As a consequence, some people decide to continue their study not only until bachelor degree but also master degree in order to get more beneficial such as salary and position in their office. There is no doubt that joining college become an option for some people to get better job.

Therefore, I strongly believe that university is good place to get not only knowledge but also better occupation as there are lots of facilities provided by university. However, some people join college as their parents force them to do so, not because of their desire.

Writing Feedback / Which one is better, young or old director? [3]

Most leaders or directors generally belong to an older age group, but some people believe that young leaders are better. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

A great deal of inhabitants thinks that young people should be better to become leaders or directors than old people. I personally believe that young leader can be more beneficial than older chiefs though they have more experience than the younger.

These days, lots of young adult establish their own company and become the directors on it. Young leaders can bring the company to success as they can create unique and fresh idea which is never made before. For example, Mark Zurkenberg, who was invent Facebook, had established internet-based business which is never exist before and it is known as social media. He achieved success though he was very young, and now, he is categorized as the fourth richest people in the world. It is clear that young leaders can be very beneficial as they can produce unconventional business idea.

However, in this modern era, many company which is leaded by old directors still have success also as it achieve lots of revenue since it was established. General Motor, which was created in 1970, was known as the biggest company on transportation device. But, it became bankrupt as there were no fresh idea on their management system, while many company made new development year-by-year. There is no doubt that old leaders is not good enough to lead company into success at the present time.

To conclude, undoubtedly that young leaders are better than old directors as they can give unique and unconventional idea which bring the company into success. But, I believe that there are lots of things that can be learnt by young people from old leaders as they have large experience, so then young leaders can improve their company and become more success than previous.

Writing Feedback / Should children learn foreign language in primary school or secondary school? [NEW]

Some people think it is better for children to begin to learn a foreign language at primary school than at secondary school. What is your opinion? Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Many society believe that pupils should learn other country's language in primary school rather than in secondary school. I personally believe that learning foreign language since primary schools has more merits than demerits.

In this modern era, foreign language become basic subject that has to be learnt by pupils. Some primary schools provide their student with several foreign countries' languages as at this age, pupils can master these languages easier than secondary students. For instance, English, which is known as international language, is also become basic language in bilingual schools and pupils does not find any difficulties to learn it. As a result, students get many language knowledge since it is the most important part of communication ability. It is evidence that student is easy to learn other countries' language at early age.

But, this policy have demerit for the kids as they have lots of burdens on education. For example, pupils have to spend much time to attend additional class, such as course, to learn foreign language. As a consequence, children do not have enough time to enjoy their childhood while they supposed to have unforgettable memories at this age. There is no doubt that learning foreign language at early age give many burdens to pupils.

Therefore, undoubtedly that children should learn foreign language in primary school as it is easier to be learnt than in secondary school. However, this can affect their memory because they cannot enjoy their childhood, but I believe that learning other countries' language is more essential as it can influence their future.

Writing Feedback / The typical steps of items production for consumers [2]

The diagram below shows the typical stages of consumer goods manufacturing, including the process by which information is fed back to earlier stages to enable adjustment.

The diagram displays procedures of items production for consumers which is divided into two different steps such as fabrication process and information feedback. It can be seen that though there are two start point, but both of them are merge and resulting same end point.

First of all, manufacturing process is started by keeping raw materials and manufactured components in storage. Besides that, there is production research which is followed by designing product. After that, production planning can be done and continue the process to assembly, inspection, testing, packaging and despatch, before the product is ready to enter the last stages, sales.

On the other hand, information feedback is begun in production planning stage as this stage need exact information about the number of materials from storage. The second step is on testing stages which influence design stage. After that, market research is the next step as this stages affect design, advertising, and packaging stages. Moreover, the information feedback is going from sales to market research stage, while it also going from sales to production planning.

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Writing Feedback / Manual and technological process of chocolate manufacturing - ten stages [2]

The diagrams show how chocolate is produced.

The diagram illustrates chocolate production process which is consist of ten stages. Overall, it can be seen that these processes are divided into two method, first is manual process, while the second is technological process.

First of all, ripe cocoa fruits have to be picked from cacao tree which only grow in South America, Africa and Indonesia. After that, collect cocoa beans by breaking red pods so then it can be fermented before it is dried under the sun light. Moreover, the cocoa beans, which have been dried, are packed in big sacks. These processes is done manually by traditional method.

In addition, these cocoa bean sacks are sent by using train or truck to the factory, so it can be processed by other treatment. After it is stored in the factory, the beans are roasted on high temperature, around 350°C. The next stages is destroying the dry cocoa beans until the outer shell can be removed. Finally, the inner part of cocoa is pressed by using mechanical equipment, so then it results liquid chocolate. But, it need to be compacted before it is sold in stores.

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Writing Feedback / Should young people take a job before they attend university? [2]

Some suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university.
Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this.

Job should be taken by young generation before they attend college as there are lots of advantages which can be gain by them. However, there is also disadvantages for this issue, but I personally believe that the merits outweigh the demerits.

In this modern era, lots of young generation tend to have occupation rather than study. This can be harmful for them as they are lack of experience in their job. Seniority become an obstacle for them since respecting older people is a common ethic in this world. As a result, they will have more task than their senior while their fee is lower than the older people.

There are lots of things that can be learnt by young generation in their occupation. For instance, the process and procedure of chocolate production can be mastered though they have no information before they have the job. As a result, they can decide major study which will they take, if they want to attend university.

In addition, young people who tend to get a job will be more self-reliant than those who choose to study as they face many obstacle frequently. For example, managing money become the most common obstacle which is faced by young workers as they have to live far from their family. In consequence, they have better money management than student. It is clear that having a job before joining university is more advantageous than directly attend college.

Therefore, there is no doubt that this merits of getting an occupation outweigh the demerits. However, I believe that young people should decide, whether taking a job or attend college, wisely depend on their main need.

Writing Feedback / The electronic media may be very useful for human if they can use it wisely. [2]

The use of electronic media has a negative effect on personal relationships between people. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

In this modern era, technology development provide lots of convenient for human, such as electronic media. This device usage cause several negative effect for human relationships. I would disagree to this statement as human have many problem related to relationships due to the use of this equipment.

It is clear that electronic media usage has lots of bad impact for human. These days, people find difficulties on communicating with others as they always focus on their own gadget every day. For example, in commuter line, which is the main transportation for employees, most of passenger have no interaction each other because they are busy on their electronic device. As a result, inhabitants get lack of conversation which also influence their communication skills.

Furthermore, these days, people also become more selfish and have lack of awareness than in the past. People tend to enjoy entertainment which provide by electronic device rather than pay attention to society. For instance, mobile game is played by students frequently as it become a common feature in every gadget. As a result, it damages the relationship between teacher and student because they do not pay much attention on their teacher's lesson. This will influence student's education also, as they cannot understand the given topic. It is evidence that people have less awareness to community due to overusing of electronic media.

On the other hand, this development also has positive effect on human's personal relationship as people can be easy to communicate with relative who live in great distance with them. For example, social media which offer easy communication with relative as society can contact their family and friend rapidly. So then, people can communicate with other frequently which also mean make their relation more intimate. There is no doubt that electronic media has advantageous effect for human relationship.

Therefore, undoubtedly that many convenience which provided by electronic device cause many impacts to human relationship as people us it overly. However, I think this development has other negative effect for human such as health problem, but I strongly believe that it will be very useful for human if they can use it wisely.

Writing Feedback / Should money be the main purpose of business? [2]

The purpose of business is to make money and they should concentrate only on this. Do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that earning money is the main goal of business. I disagree with this statement entrepreneurship should not aim to gain much money only, but also create good relationship with other people as entrepreneurs have to interact with other people for their business development.

In this modern era, money become important thing on human life. Lots of people dream to have luxury things which they really want to have, so then they establish their own company only for making much money to make their dream come true. For example, Philip Morris which is well-known as cigarette producer, has aimed to gain money from the smokers though they will get health problem by the cigarette. As a result, the company grow bigger and produce more revenue year-by-year as lots of people are addicted by their product. However, I believe that money is not the most pivotal thing which has to be targeted by entrepreneur.

There are other important thing related to relationship which can be gained by businessman as they will always experience interaction other people. Good relationship between entrepreneur and consumer can be risen since both of them will always meet each other for business purposes. Otherwise, cooperation between entrepreneurs will make advantageous relationship for the future of company. This cooperation is a common thing for businessmen as it is impossible for company to survive without help from other companies. As a result, there are several development which is held by company, and this can create more income also. Considering the example above, there is no doubt that making relationship is the most essential thing which have to be gained by entrepreneur.

To sum up, undoubtedly that achieving much income is not the most important things which has to be aimed by businessman. I strongly believe that having good relationship not only between seller and buyer, but also between entrepreneurs is more essential as it can also influence the company's revenue.

Writing Feedback / The happiness of married and single inhabitants is influenced by different factors [3]

The charts the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.

A survey result about happiness levels for married and unmarried society and having kids effect can be seen in the bar charts. Overall, at the first glance, it can be seen that married inhabitants is happier than unmarried people. Also, having children brings more happiness than having no children.

To begin, relationship as couple has different happiness rate depend on their age. The highest level of this is on under a third century couple which has 45 percent, while the lowest is on middle aged couple at 40 percent. On the other hand, the happiest person on unmarried people is over 64 aged society at just above a third, while the least are young people and middle aged people who have same level at 21 percent.

The happiness of married inhabitants is influenced by children factor also. Having children under 18 age brings the greatest happiness at 44 percent while having children who have more than 18 age has the least percentage at 41. Interestingly, married people who have no children is happier than those who have over 18 age children.

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