Writing Feedback / Unhealthy lifestyle for students depend on their parents accountability and schools [3]

many children these day havec. both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem.
[b]to what extant do you agree with this statement?

Bad lifestyle for students depend on the accountability their parents and schools responsibility. I am strongly agrees with this notion owing to the fact that the most of pupils time is spent in both of school and housing life hood.

First of all, many students activities are that give bad effect for their body. Due to the fact that busy time in their schools will make them to forget their eating time. In case, the student who get exam in that day will focus on their test. Actually, they will forget that they have not eaten yet since early morning. This habit will make decreasing immunity of the pupil's body. Exactly, this will give worst effect for their health.

On the other hand, daily activity of all students is depends on school and housing schedule. Because of the schools have a rule that the students should do that. This is give negative impact for their education if they no do that. Furthermore, all of pupil's facilities have been provided by parents and schools. For example, unfortunately , the teacher is announce that tomorrow is final examinations. the student will pay attention about that, and also they will study hard until over night to understand all of the materiel in as much as they have not enough time to prepare it previously. The next day, they will go to school early morning. While, the parents should make a breakfast and remaining their child to eat before go to school. So, if the teachers give enough time for pupil to study, and parent have provided the meal for their son as well, the health of students will be good.

All in all, healthy live of student depend on their activity. Besides, the parent and school should responsible about managerial of pupil's time.

Writing Feedback / The proportion of various kind of problems that citizens experience while living in overseas [6]

Writing IELTS Task 1- the problem people have when they go move to other countries

The proportion of the kind of problems that happen for citizens who move to overseas live based on the age is provided by the bar graph. Overall, it can be seen that the secondary age people are the problematical persons. While, all of the people tend to easy to get school for their sons and daughters.

Sorting out finances is the biggest problems for middle age people . meanwhile, the elderly people tend to be easier for avoiding this problem than younger people.

Then, shorting out health care is the Highers difficult proportion of people in the age 34-35 . Even-thought, it is slightly difference to people who have age over 55 years. Then, the youth people just get over 35% this problem.

Furthermore, elder people tend to get the lowest proportion for finding school for their children of difficulty. In contrast, the middle age get higher proportion than the people in the age 34-35 years old

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Writing Feedback / Proportion of the hired teachers in Ontario during 6 years, based on graduation years and major [2]

Writing IELTS Task 1- The range of fresh regular teachers in Ontario - back from 2001 to 2007.

Proportion of the hired of teachers in Ontario during 6 years based on graduation years and subject is provided by line chart. Generally, the number English teacher decreased rapidly, and in contrast, the franc language teachers incline slightly. Nerveless, this job still were dominated by franc's teacher who graduated in 2007.

First of all, the percentages both of the teachers from difference subjects who got their degrees in 2001 stood at just under three-quarter. Then, the mentors who have finished their study in 2002 have gotten job of over 50% for being franc's teachers and just under 60% for teaching English. next, both of them have opposite trend for their changing until 2003, and also they incline simultaneously in 2005.

On the other hand, the English's teacher proportion who graduated between 2005 and 2007 bottomed at 2007. At the same period, the franc's lecturers have fluctuated trend and peak at over 70% in 2007.

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Writing Feedback / Writing Task 2-media-celebrity-ordinary people. On which group media should focus more? [6]

The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationship of celebrities such as actors, singers, or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the modern era, the celebrity's stories have become popular program that was shown in many media, like television, radio, YouTube, and many more. While, some people think that common citizen should be given more attention than others. In my view, both of them have not given beneficial efforts for audiences live, and Medias were better to expose inspiration program from influences people.

First of all, live and relationship of celebrities has not given affirmatives effect. It just told about artist lifestyle, and most of them were glamour persons. It is just make viewer tend to follow sweet. Furthermore, not all of the viewers have enough money to do that. Then, relationship of famous people is not important owing to the fact that it is the personal problem which other people do not necessary to know.

Similar to celebrities, exposing activity of common people has not given constructive effort for audience. Furthermore, correspondents will not get addition knowledge in as much as the common people no have extraordinary talent which is able to share and give motivation.

In contrast, many influence people stories, like researcher, president, and moreover, were that should be shown by media. In fact, it will give inspiration for all viewers. For example, the scientist who has conducted much research has changed this world by this invention. This story will make the watchers currently pupils to have more spirit to achieve their dreams.

To sum up, both of celebrities and ordinary people not really necessary to be shown on screen. While, the great people will give advantages for viewers.

Writing Feedback / On pictures the information about producing electricity from wind and where locate such investment [3]

The pictures provide information about producing electricity from wind and where it can be placed. Overall, it can be seen that the equipment that is needed for this process are wood blades or fiber-glass blades, wind speed and direction of detector, generator, steel power, and also computer. The generating electricity process will be gotten maximum result when it is located on the hill and in the sea. Furthermore, placed in the sea will not reduce view of this site.

Firstly, before operating this machine, all tools should be roped. Next, the process of generating power is started from turned blades by wind that causes blades rotation. Then, the rotation will be detected by wind sensor, and it is delivered to computer. As a result, the electricity power can be generated.

On the other hand, the amount of output from wind turbine mechanism is influenced by location. The turbine that is placed on the hill can be produced higher result than domestic turbine. While, proportion of output from the turbine which is located in the sea is received optimum power, and also this no give influence for sea landscape.

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Writing Feedback / Mom and Dad should be the teacher for social life of their children [6]

Mom and Dad should be the teacher for social life of their children. Other people think that school should be responsible to give related subject about that. Meanwhile, the children have lived with their parent since they were born in this universe. It makes me to believe that the parent is the first and the best teacher for them. Even thought, they get counselling subject in their school. This essay will discuss about this notion.

First of all, the most of first children knowledge have come from their life hood owing to the fact that they grew up in this site, and the first people who though them were their mother and father. Currently they gave the biggest influence about their children knowledge especially in social life. For example, the new born baby do not know all of thing in the world, and their parent teach them how to eat, drink, and communicate with other people. So, being good or bad child in social life is depend on how their parent teach them.

On the other hand, school has provided counselling subject. Furthermore, the students always practice this subject in in the school to make conversation with their peers. Nerveless, just counselling lesson is not enough for making student to become good people due to the fact that the teacher just give this lesson almost one time in a week, and they are not able to respect for all of the student. So, this subject is not effective to make a student being good in social life.

Overall, it can be seen that parent is the best teacher for children about their social life. Whereas the school give lesson about that, just lesson from school is not enough to make children being good people in life hood.

Writing Feedback / Proportion of factors why production of farmland decreased in 1990s [6]

Writing IELTS Task 1- DEGRADATION LAND

Proportion of factor why production of farmland decrease in 1990s based on main causes and in universe and region is provided by graph table. Overall it can be seen that the biggest factor of declining of agricultural production is caused by overgrazing, and Europe has the widest degradation of land.

First of all, the deforestation causes about 30% of all land degradation in worldwide. This proportion is less than overgrazing factor about 35%. Beside, over cultivate have proportion over first-quarter of reasons.

On the other hand, North America has the smallest land degradation in three regions. Furthermore, proportion of over cultivate just about 3.3 %. This is higher than in south pacific which is no over cultivation. Meanwhile, Europa has deforestation factor about 9.8%, and also this area has land degradation about 23%. Whereas, ocean pacific has a bad land which causes of degradation about 13% of all this region include Australia and new Zealand.

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Writing Feedback / If you want to free your time to start live healthier, just make it happen! [2]

Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Recent years, being healthy is quite hard for several persons. Meanwhile others have opposite perception, and it just is depend on their willingness. Busy time is the mean reason for this problem, but I believe that persons can have time to do sport if they give space time for it.

First of all, people especially workers and employees are always busy every day. Actually they go to work in early morning and go home over night. This activity makes them too tired to do other activity like sport. Meanwhile, in the weekend, they always use it to take rest or make quality time with their family. For example, every weekday, my father always spends much time in his office and arrives at home when I have slept. Than in weekend he always takes a rest and watch movie together with me and my mom.

On the other hand, somebody has told me that time will be free if we give them space. Though every person has their own activity, and most of them have busy time, they can do certain activity if they want it. For example, employees just work in weekday, and they have free time in weekend. So, they can use their holiday to do sport, or they can do physical exercise in their office even just push. All of these activities are reasonable, and it just is just depend on their willingness.

Overall it can be seen that the healthy life come from their self. Furthermore if they want to give them free space of time, they also can make it happen.

Writing Feedback / Bulgaria immigrate - is there a relation between intelligence and willingness to immigration? [2]

The proportion of citizen Bulgaria who wanted to immigrate based on the education level in three periods is provided by the graph. Overall it can be seen that the people who have middle education level showed the highest proportion in all periods. Besides, intelligence people and poor education persons have quite similar number in 2002 and 2006.

First of all, the number of higher education people in 2002 was higher than two years later. Whereas, in 2008 it just has percentage about 9%.
On the other hand, people who just study until secondary level of education and want to live in other country showed the lowest proportion in 2008. Even though, it just has a slight difference to the proportion in two years before.

Meanwhile, percentage of citizen country who has the poorest education level and wants to live abroad in 2006 was 19%. It is quite higher than proportion in 2002, and lower than in the last period.

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Writing Feedback / The electronic media make access to communicate with other people. It's good for mutual relations [2]

In modern era, advance technology especially in communication form has given worst impacts for individual relationship with other people. I disagree with this notion owing to the fact that electronic media make accessibly to communicate with other people.

First of all, several people think that electronic media, like mobile phone, make people just focus on their media and ignore other people surrounding them. Certainly focus or not on some persons in their life hood do not caused by electronic media. It is just depend on their willingness and how to make convenience condition when communicate with other people. For example my experience; I have communication media, mobile phone, and most of my friends have too, but we still have good relationships not only in media but also in real live. When we meet, we just focus on our conversation. It has happened owing to the fact that we know when we should use this media or not. So, electronic media especially communication form do not destroy our relationship.

On the other hand, electronic media particularly mobile phone make accessibly to communicate with other people in world wide. For example, I want to contact my lecturer in Surabaya while my position in Banyuwangi, so using mobile phone to sand massage or WattsApp make me to do not visit Surabaya. So, using communication tools, like hand phone, make we closer with our colleague or keep our relationship.

In conclusion, electronic media no not make bad relationship with other people. However, it make other people closer each other than before.

Writing Feedback / Result of survey in 1997 and 2006 based on the communication skills which are important in a work [2]

Proportion of the respondent in both result of survey in 1997 and 2006 based on sort of the communication skills which are important in their job is provided by table. Overall, it can be seen that the most essential in external communication for both of period was how to make agreement with costumers. Meanwhile, at the same time, being good listener when communicate with colleagues was the most important of the communication skill in the internal company.

First of all, in 2006 percentage of the respondents who were asked about knowledge of particular product was higher than before. whereas, when asked about advertising for costumers or clients, the data showed that in 2006 was higher proportion than in 1997 for 3 respondents. In contrast, the question about selling product or service showed the lowest proportion in both of period.

On the other hand, survey about internal communication in company turn out that making speech or presentation illustrated the lowest proportion in both of term. Therefore, number of people when asked about instructing or training persons in 1997 and 2006 were about 25 and 30 respondents respectively. It was higher than percentage of analysing problem together with other and planning the activities.

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Writing Feedback / Higher crime rate over time makes several countries imposing fixed punishment to reduce that [2]

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should be always taken into account when deciding on the punishment.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.[

Now days, criminality is the crucial problem in most of country in universe. However, Fix punishment is the best way to reduce crime rate. Even thought, some people think that considering reason and circumstance of crime is the essential thing before judgement. This essay will discuss pros and cons about this notion.

First of all, rising crime rate by the time make several countries imposing certain punishment to reduce that. Fix punishment is believed making wary persons for doing criminal. It has been proven in some country that crime rate can be reduced. For example in Egypt, every murderer would like to get dead penalty, and cutting hand is the punishment for thief. Recent days, there is Indonesian worker in Egypt who got dead penalty causes killing her boss. This accident makes other people wary to do that. Consequently, homicides in Egypt are quite minim.

On the other hand, not all of crimes are committed on purposeful. Several people have certain reason why they do that. Saving their life and forcing are two of reasons which push them to do criminal. For example in Surabaya, the girl has killed her father owing to protect herself from her father who want to rape. However, the judges should find out more about her before judgement, and the judges cannot give her the same punishment with someone who committed premeditated murder.

All in all, crimes cannot be seen from one side to give judgement. However, Finding out more is the essential thing which should be done by the judges before judgement wing to give fairness.

Writing Feedback / How to produce cement, and cement mixture process for making concrete for construction. [2]

The diagrams show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Both of diagrams give information about how to produce cement, and cement mixture process for making concrete for construction. Overall, it can be seen that both of them are made by simple process, and mixture is the main process for cement and concrete production.

First of all, the equipment which is need to make cement are limestone, clay, crusher, mixer, rotating heater, grinder, and also bags. Firstly, this method is started when limestone and clay are crushed by crusher for making powder. Then, the powder is flowed to heater and rotated in rotating heater along with heat. Outcome of this process is grinned by grinder. Finally, cement is already to be packed in bags.

On the other hand, the equipment which is used to produce concrete are cement (15%), water (10%), sand (25%), gravel (50%), and also mixer. Process is started with mixture all of the material in mixer, and the concrete is already to be used.

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Writing Feedback / Students travelling and working before continuing to study after graduating from secondary school [2]

In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

Travelling and working before continuing to study after graduating from secondary school for students are constructive activity. However, doing these activities during leisure time has pros and cons. In my view, I believe that going to work or travel are the best way to enrich the experience of adolescents.

Being independent after pass from high school is the desire of every tanager. Several youth tend to work for a year before entering to collage owing to the fact that they can get a lot of experience from this activity. Furthermore, the student can learn how to solve problem in real live and how to work under pressure. However, in university, students should survive in every situation and condition until they can finish their study. In addition, by working, the youth can earn money, and also they can save it to fund their study in university. It makes them to not depend on their parent. On one hand, final examination has made student to be stressful. They need to refresh their mind before continue their study. Meanwhile, by travelling, students can relax and get a lot of knowledge about these place and reality live.

On the other side, working and travelling during this leisure time can make student lazy to study and prepare their future live in university. However, subjects in university are totally difference with their study before, so students should prepare it. Nerveless, the youth have not much time due to working.

In conclusion, working and travelling in that moment give beneficial effect for students. However, drawbacks of these activities just depend on their self and how student manage their time especially to study and work.

Writing Feedback / The proportion of the quantity of goods transported (unit in million tonnes) in Britain [2]

The graph above shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

Proportion of the quantity of goods transported (unit in million tonnes) in British between 1974 and 2002 based on four difference method is provided by the line graph. Overall, it can be seen that road was the popular method which was used to transfer the goods during 28 years while pipeline shows the lowest proportion in that period.

Proportion all of these modes stood at the difference points in 1997. The next year, the number of rail and pipeline steadied in previous point while both of road and water modes increased slightly in just under 80 and about 40 respectively. After getting same number in 1978, water and rail showed the difference trends between 1978 and 1986.

However, during 1986 and after 1990, three of these methods ,except road, stuck at their previous point. Meanwhile, after that years, road illustrated upward trend and peaked at about 100 in 2002. Whereas, water showed higher proportion than rail in 2002, and the last four year, pipeline steadied in over 20.

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Writing Feedback / The proportion of consumer spending based on sort of item and several countries in Europe [4]

Proportion of consumer spending based on sort of item and several countries in Europe (Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey) in 2002 is provided by table. Overall, it can be seen that consumables is the most popular in all these countries while leisure or education shows the lowest proportion at the same time.

First of all, in Ireland, people consumed food/ drink/ tobacco about 28.91 % while leisure/ Education in this country showed about 2.21 present. Whereas, the number of consumer spending on clothing or footwear in Italy was lower than in Ireland. Meanwhile, percentage of persons who spent their time for education/leisure is over 3%.

On the other hand, proportion of swallowing food, drink, or tobacco in Spain is higher than in Sweden while this proportion is lower than in turkey. However, persons spent their time for study and relax showed the lowest proportion on all items. Besides, three of countries have percentage just under 7 present.

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Writing Feedback / People have difference ways to achieve satisfaction - holiday assignment on the happiness [2]

Everybody wants to be happy. I believe that achieving happiness do not difficult. It is depend on their self about their willingness and needs in future.

Last time, I have read status in social network that said "happiness is so simply, just laughing and living together with our family". However, this statement is not wrong. Whereas, simple or difficulties for being happy is a choice for everybody, and they have same right to be happy.

On one hand, people have difference ways to achieve satisfaction. It is depend on their dream and needs. For example Dayak people who live in remote areas in Borneo. They live in darkness without advance technology and higher education. They always fill free and live in sufficiency. They think, it is their comfort zone and having happy.

Meanwhile, other example is story of my live. I have lived in modern era with advance technology. Furthermore, I have studied in collage and have many friends. However, right now, I do not fill happy yet owing to the fact that I have high dream for my future live. To achieve that, I should work hard and struggle. I think that I will be happy if I can achieve my dream.

All in all, every person has own way to be joyful. Being simply or difficulties on the way to be happy that is depend on their self. I suggest that we should relax and always be grateful in every condition in order to achieve that inasmuch as it will bring about serenity in our live.