eddies [Contributor]
Feb 22, 2017
Writing Feedback / The ways used to dispose of the harmful garbage in Korea, Sweden and United Kingdom [3]
The introductory paragraph is well done, but I think you need to put some ideas in order to make your opening paragraph is more interesting. Let me give you an example:
Some comparisons of how to get rid of harmful waste are presented in the charts. The data is taken from different countries and is measured in percentage.
Also, some changes have been made in the following paragraph. Here is the one:
General speaking, people in Sweden are more likely to bury such materials, while those living in Korea recycle more their waste. Although waste products in the UK interred in underground show the highest proportion, hardly are these materials reused into other products.
Hope this helps :D
The introductory paragraph is well done, but I think you need to put some ideas in order to make your opening paragraph is more interesting. Let me give you an example:
Some comparisons of how to get rid of harmful waste are presented in the charts. The data is taken from different countries and is measured in percentage.
Also, some changes have been made in the following paragraph. Here is the one:
General speaking, people in Sweden are more likely to bury such materials, while those living in Korea recycle more their waste. Although waste products in the UK interred in underground show the highest proportion, hardly are these materials reused into other products.
Hope this helps :D