Writing Feedback / Affection for color and buying influence for some manufactures and retail companies is prioritized [2]

Colour is a powerful tool that is used to great effect by manufactures and retail companies when they try to sell us something. In fact, many of the purchasing decisions we make are partly or largely influenced by colour. How true is this statement? How much does colour influence us when we buy something?

Affection for color and buying influence for some manufactures and retail companies is prioritized. Although it is true for some critics, I would argue that quality and popular brand sides are more influential.

It is argued that the color effect plays main role in the will of buying among the customers. This comment has been analized by researchers how the prediction of improving selling in women wear in a shopping mall. A branded company named Logo, for instance, which has been popular with quality and the high price faced that the woman jeans have been sold cheaper in the fake markets. Logo looks this view not as thread of decreasing the company, because company found that some cheap jeans can be looked from the quality, and it is embarrassing for woman to have the fake jeans.

Undoubtedly, the bright color could deliver customers to happy feeling of shopping. It is because certain colour is believed such a treatment influencing buyers especially to mothers and girls. In the online selling like lazada.com, for instance, predicted that their selling would not perform as popular as nowadays due to competitors in the shopping mall, but colorful and looked like a luxury good, lazada.com is accepted and popular due to their stylish colour. In reverse, I believe that quality and popular brand are essential more than colour power.

In conclusion, although colour has great influence to customer, but manufactures and retail companies should consider quality and popularity of products.

Writing Feedback / Getting new job and having interview are linked as a common way within companies. [2]

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Most employers interview candidates before hiring them. Do you think this is the best way to do it? In your opinion, what is the best method for choosing employees?

Getting new job and having interview are linked as a common way within companies. While most companies or employers think it is efficient to get best candidate, I believe some methods should be considered further.

To some people who have relation major of communication with people, interview might work well, but for some are not. There will be nervous before having the meeting to interviewer, and it is possible that a candidate will not perform satisfy answers. For example, when my first interview to teach in a school, a week before, I already got worries for questions might be coming, and I got fever and stress during a week before meeting the principle for interviewing. However, aptitude test and writing essay might be the answers better than giving interview.

Aptitude tests are delivering candidate to show how qualified someone is within the academic, and writing essay can be seen as valuable because employers can analyze the strength and weakness points in public knowledge and social interest. Recent studies reported by Queen University said that 70% of 1000 candidates agree that they are prepared well to getting aptitude test and writing essay, and those tests are helpful method to get a new job in 2014. With this kind of tests, I believe nervous and worries can be decreased within candidates

In conclusion, interview can be successful to certain people who have communication skill only, and for the remaining sharing intelligences by aptitude test and writing essay are valuable method to be done.

Writing Feedback / Moving fabrics to suburb areas - should we care more for their profits or for our environment? [2]

In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

Government encouragement to move industry and business into suburb appears nowadays in many countries. While this is considered merits are likely to achieve further, some demerits should be considered primarily.

For companies, moving from big cities are chance to decrease costs and improve profits. To improve profits, build low cost landmark and having larger area to expand the production are the first step would be taken. Research from Queen University to The Good Year, for instance, while their landmark building had moved from the capital city of Indonesia to several province,they had advance the profit up to 35% per year. However, expanding companies to suburb will close opportunity to society to have green space. Further, sooner or later pollution toward stress in indigenous people will be increasing.

Approaching industries to move to regional areas will be a trigger of chaos on the main road. Stress on their main roads will be placed of employee who are going to work or coming home. Long time ago, Bandung was popular as a comfortable place to have vacation because of its large space field, but when we go there today, it is not a lovely place anymore, because it can be seen that people are busy both road and pedestrian.

In conclusion, government should reconsider to place industrial and business to regional areas. It is needed to keep going nature grows as the best place to visit or live without stress.

Writing Feedback / It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. [NEW]

In some countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree?

Smoking has special concern in many countries. Some have banned smoking activity in public areas such as bus or train stations, but critics argue that smoking does not a crime that should be banned. While smokers think that giving distance while doing smoking is fair enough, I also agree not to ban smoking, because health is absolutely personal concern.

Societies around the world have concerned to the health diseases influented by smoking. Smoking actively or the people close to smoker can develop cancers such as mouth, lung and other parts of our body. Recent research from Queen University found that the chemical subtances in the smoke is becoming the main threat to the citizens health, and it is a must to government to ban smoking especially in public areas. However, I think that using masker in public area can be good for citizen. It is because I believe that smoking has any positive sides to the smoker that also need to be respected, and it is personal decide to do smoking or not.

For some people, they are keen on smoking due to sensation of relax. Active smokers argue that doing smoking is helping them to decrease daily stress. People who are working 8 hours in labour believe that smoking 5 minutes can release exhausted through the day, especially when they do after lunch time. With this idea, I think that seems not fair to people to ban their right of getting relax. However, I completely agree that smoker need to take some distance from people around them as a respect of society health.

In conclusion, it is win-win solution for both society and smoker to advice smoking activity in certain place or leave the building, and I believe that making smoking illegal is an overreaction decision.

Writing Feedback / Studying art for some students is fun, but many are having problem with it... [3]

It is pointless making children who lack artistic talent learn painting and drawing in Art classes at school. Instead, they should concentrate on other creative and practical subjects which they may have more aptitude. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many schools, common argues appear that attending classes that children have disliked, or they lack of certain talents such as painting or drawing, it does not need further study to those subjects. While schools think that focusing children to aptitude for practical and creative subjects should be concentrated. I completely agree that involving children to the lack subject is useless, and it is valuable to improve child's ability.

Focusing our children into their personal aptitudes in academic performance enhances their abilities. By doing subjects that students are mostly like, they will have more regular time to repeat practices the creativity, and by repeating material improves quality of lesson achievement to students. Recent researches from Queen University mentioned that the exploration going further to lesson had increased to 1000 students who were analyzed during 6 months. with this view, I believe that it is compulsory to locate children to their aptitudes.

Studying art for some students are fun, but many are having problem with it. It is because making art such as painting, drawing or music need deeply imagination. Visualizing something that students cannot see will be becoming a tension and stress. Queen University studies revealed that stress coming to students 56% has come from their lack of interest in Artistic lessons, because they should imagine things or places cannot be seen. I believe that pressing our children to certain subjects that they are not keen on going is pointless.

In conclusion, I completely agree to the idea that attending children to lesson they lack is not meaningful, but getting further to other creative and practical lessons should be involved.

Writing Feedback / I believe that the worries to quit job appears, thus staying many years in a company is reasonable. [NEW]

Do you agree that money is the only motivation at work why people prefer working in the same company for many years?

Many people are not keen on changing work. While some reasons that it is due to money expectation, I completely disagree to that argue.

working in the same place for long-term period has some valuable merits for future. It might be pension or facilities such as insurance will be arranged by how many years the employee has been staying in the company. This was happened few year ago to my late grandfather, when he worked in Good Year about 35 years. The time he got 65, company provided him pension. Not only pension, but a home, life-time insurance, and monthly support to be enjoyed until the rest of his life.

It is undeniable that looking for a new job in order to get another better one has thousand of challenges and possibility of failure. This view can be seen that most of the companies reduce their employees due to the economic problems which is happening globally. Last updated news from The New York Times, for instance, announced that there might be hundreds of employee should be rested home because of dramatic fall of profit which is followed by a highly paid outcomes. With this view, I believe that the worries to quit job also appears, and staying many years in a company is reasonable.

In conclusion, not only the motivation of money of pension or facilities given by company takes part to have no intentions to achieve other careers, but also the minimal chance to reach a new job involves.

Writing Feedback / Childcare centers provide the best services for children of pre-school age [2]

Some parents think that childcare centers provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better cares for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

For some reasonable thought, some parents consider that childcare is believable place taking care their children, while working parents believe that caring from extended family is better than any places for children. I personally agree kin care is reliable.

the appearance of day care centers promises parents for placing their children. It is because those centers have fully-trained staff who got involved into a training center. The recent studies of Queen University announced that both the improvement of day care request and certified staff of baby sitter have grown dramatically in the last three years. In reverse, I doubt that taking children to day care is a smart choice, because it is well-known for a highly paid service and also rumor of abuse has spread widely.

Abusing is far from kin care, and it is believable because caring from extended family such as grandmother provides emotional bounding to their own blood. My nephew, Joel, often was told as a silent baby during the day in the day care. It was unreasonable because family recognised him as a playful boy at home, but when the grandmother was willing to take care him, he became a cheerful boy as before. This results a proven that cares from family members have huge support for children behavior.

In conclusion, certified nurture from babysitter in the childcare centers is not a guarantee our child will be saved from harmful things such as abuse, but I strongly believe that nurtured by family member naturally provides better both safety and love for children of pre-school age.

Writing Feedback / Societies argue that people using drugs are better being jailed than delivering them to the rehab. [3]

Should drug addicts be jailed or rehabilitated? Discuss both views and give...

Societies argue that people using drug is better getting jailed than delivering them to the rehab. While this tends to be a solution to drug addicts, I believe that it is better to approach them to recover into rehabilitation than punish into prison for this time.

There is a common view that delivering an addictive person to prison means keeping society from harmful things. This is because using drug could advance to unconscious condition,and it is possible to produce several obsession going to death. When drug user is in this situation, the possibility to harm themselves or people surround is inevitably increase. In reverse, I believe that addicting of drug is a pattern of unhealthy condition and it is not a crime. I think jailing does not the answer for saving drug user.

Compared to be jailed, getting addicts to rehabilitation might be an optional. Rehabilitation has some stimulation to recover addictive person. Set of specific medications and arranged activities in rehabilitation have been studied and trained and it is proven society for the hope of normal life, and it is believable treatment nowadays. I believe that giving another chance to have normal life is naturally meaningful as a person within society.

In conclusion, although harmful behaviour among addictive people seem to be serious problem in society, but I believe that healing and giving them opportunity to have better life is recommended way. I am likely to recommend government to take part to acknowledge citizen that recovering drug user might bring merits to family and especially to every personal life.

Writing Feedback / Children appearance of working in a company is a big deal nowadays for some countries. [2]

In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong while others consider it as valuable work experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Children appearance of working in a company is a big deal nowadays for some countries. While it is considered a mistaken for some people, I completely disagree due to some valuable reasons.

Employing children is illegal for some countries. Developed countries such as America refuse to allow children in the working place. The governments think that this time children should learn things valuable in the school. Educative plays, studies and basic skills in the school are better stimulation for children to prepare them to have bright future than getting early experience in the working place. However, I believe that having a job can help children to develop self-discipline.

The major thing of having a job to children is because they are starting to experience themselves to manage both time and self-reliance. When children are growing with practised discipline of time especially confident way, than the possibility to have better future is also improved. It is happened to me, when I was 15, I could buy things I adored, and some for parents. At that age, I had understood how to allocate money also I knew appropriately how to respect parents due to experiences of making money difficulties while some friends missed these points.

In conclusion, it is reasonable if some countries consider that working children in order to making money tends to be a mistaken way. However, I believe when we are asking personally to children, they would think positively that getting work experience in their ages is a movement towards better future.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2: British's Pollution due to use of cars [5]

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads.
Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The invention of a car in Briton had arguably one of the popular news in1888. Some experts found that car is a simply tool which could bring human and their stuff in a time to go easily to destination. It is inevitable that Briton's request of car had grown 29 million and its pollution since the appearance in society. While some researchers believe that there is alternate forms to reduce the pollution, I think international laws is a preference way to find the solving problem

As the matter of fact, nowadays, inhabitants have at least one car in a family. A car is believed a tool which could bring someone fast to a destination, and it is good to have a car because human is provided by a comfort and private seat. The general view has shown that a car is one of the Briton's basic needs, because it could deliver them to school, work and market and so on. Especially in working hours Briton's road packed with the cars.

Interestingly, Inhabitants also believe that their cars influence vehicles which is followed some matters; traffic and health, and it is urgent to find solving problem for in their environment. Britons presume that their government should build suitable solution for their environment. Thus, British government found that alternative means of transport is needed. Buses, train, tram, for instance, are the possible means to be a problem solving to reduce the pollution and traffic. However, the government should spend a lot of spending to build these infrastructures, and also this maintenance needs a long-term to succeed.

Having said that alternative means are expensive, researchers think that international law could encourage decreasing of car using. The government should forbid more than one car ownership in a house or Briton should pay fine as much as their car price to government. So this decision will reduce private transport using included the vehicle problem.

As far as I am concerned, international rule is an urgent to control British pollution. This means government could arrange a long-term plan to cover other means for inhabitants. I believe that Britons themselves should involve their environment problems.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2: Arithmetic vs Calculator for student [5]

Some people believe that electronics should not be allowed in school until after the pupils have mastered mental arithmetic. Others believe that calculators save pupils time, especially with complicated calculations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Indeed, nowadays counting is not a complicated thing to do, because technology has provided electronic way which is called calculator. While some people believe that calculator could help children's study, is it a helpful thing for a student in the school? I believe there are some benefit or drawbacks which are needed to see further.

Generally, calculator is human's best friend. This device could solve calculation faster than manual fashion by using machine which has formula. That is why students also tend to bring calculator to school to help them in arithmetic or mathematics subject. Some schools believe that calculator is modern fashion which has a helpful formula to do student task. However, I believe this is not a good thing to use, because students will attract them to be a lazy pupil, and this tool could influence them to have no curiosity to do exercise and homework.

Obviously, learning arithmetic is needed. This is because when a student could master the arithmetic, they could be smart people in basic calculation which could create a new formula which could be implemented in technology. Moreover, I think because final exam or national examination is forbidden to bring, so it is good for student to study and practice more arithmetic further, then they could pass the final or improve academic performance.

In conclusion, I presume that although calculator is a helpful thing for student, but it is not appropriate to be used in school, and it is better to enhance arithmetic further. I also think that arithmetic also could be a challenge for a student to be more creative.

P.S. wrote in 40 minutes.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: 'possibility of healthy man is higher than woman' - Fitness Membership [3]

The chart prevents the comparison between male and female fitness member in a period of 30 years from 1970 to 2000.

Overall, male membership leads all proportion numbers, and it can be seen that a number of man often go to fitness more often than woman.

A more detailed reveals that man attending of fitness is the highest rate in 1995 at 5000 membership, and it followed in 1975 and 1970 which are twice larger than woman membership. In 1970, woman had slight improvement (1000) where man got 2000 membership, and woman rate in 1975 reached 2000 where the opponent got double member. However, in the last year, man could not come as the highest, but it vice versa which got only 1000 and the opponent leaded double.

In 1990 tends the most stable proportion between male and female member which reached almost same rate approximately 2000 membership

Based on the graph, I conclude that the possibility of healthy man is higher than woman.

P.S. This writing is made in 20 minutes.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2: Need help to find out appropriate introductions [7]

Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real need of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?Advertising industry has its remarkable success in society all around the world with their influence of products which might have no essential use recently. While some people think this statement is true, I would consider other reasons with this issue.

Successful sports professional can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.According to researchers, the popular athlete's income has greater range than important professions. While some people think this is not an equal way, I think there are some reasons should be seen further with this issue.

In some countries, it is common for woman to find a job when their children are young. What are the advantages and disadvantages?Life would be extremely costly to set up. This view makes mothers tend to go to work when their children are in childhood. While some people believe that this is a common view, I think there are the merits and the demerits should be seen further.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2: People with Certain Talent VS Not Having a Certain Talent [4]

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

According to researchers, innate ability is unique in every person. While some people believe that practice can be worked as well as natural ability, I think there are further explanations for this issue.

Generally, innate ability: sport, music or art has known as a specific talent in someone since they were born. Sometimes, we can see that some people who have innate ability do not need to take a lot of practice to be major with their abilities. For instance, Cristiano Ronaldo, a Portuguese footballer who plays football from a young child, has sport talent which could win easily in competitions. However, although Cristian Ronaldo is a role model of his ability, he said that he also should often do training.

On the other hand, there is a quote said "perfect practice makes perfect result" which means although someone does not that specific talent, he also could a satisfied effort on something he learned. For example: a Korean pianist, Lee Hee-ah, has only two fingers on each hand. When she was in early age, she did not any talent of playing piano, but her parent support made her doing a lot practice, then she become a masterpiece of piano. From Lee Hee-ah, I believe that learning a special subject could result a masterpiece.

Admittedly, I agree that some of the success and popular people are well-known because of their talent and creations. However, I believe that there are plenty ways to achieve a satisfied effort. Not only efforts but also success in life is possible.