justivy03
Nov 23, 2016
Writing Feedback / From an accident to conclusions.. summary ted physical therapy [2]
Hi Bambang, in this particular TED summary, I believe the modification should be focused on the minor details such as the linking verbs and the phrases associated in your sentences, to elaborate this observation, please find the notes below;
- Cosmin Mihaiu has been an Physical therapytherapist and entrepreneur and, he
- became a TEDx speaker in 2015.
- Hehashad a bad experience when
-LongOne time ago he likedas he was playing hide and seek
-game but one day when he played that game theyhe got into an accident.
- They fell and gotinjuryinhured .
- Eventually, their parentsgive themadministered physical therapy
-tofor their recovery their body .
- He fell that the method does not effectively working because
- the progress is too long
- therapy is confusing and boring.
-Every day theyThey should
-be doingdo the same
-activities toactivities to recovery their injury .
There you have it Bambang, I hope the above remarks are helpful to your revision and should you need further assistance, we're here for you.
Hi Bambang, in this particular TED summary, I believe the modification should be focused on the minor details such as the linking verbs and the phrases associated in your sentences, to elaborate this observation, please find the notes below;
- Cosmin Mihaiu has been a
- became a TED
- He
-
-
- They fell and got
- Eventually, their parents
-
- He fell that the method does not effectively work
- the progress is too long
- therapy is confusing and boring.
-
-
-
There you have it Bambang, I hope the above remarks are helpful to your revision and should you need further assistance, we're here for you.