Wolf Larsen
Dec 28, 2016
Undergraduate / The cues of the Yoruba, Igbo and the western culture. MIT Cultural Background Essay [7]
Hello
Your text will sound much better (stylystically) if you apply the following adjustments to it:
Nigeria has [...]There are over 250 ethinic groups in Nigeria, with my family beloning to one of them.
mum [...] Mum.... delta [...] Delta...
Weare [...] belong to the...
Our foods [...] You should describe these foods briefly...
western [...] Western...
the most important [...] This should be the begining of a new sentence.
Christians [...] Christian (?)...
I am grateful [...] for the fact that my parents were able to support and train me...
this exposure [...] prompted me to learn...
Other than that your text seems Ok. You should simply shorten some longer sentences in it and the word-number will be kept under 100. I hope this will help. regards.
Hello
Your text will sound much better (stylystically) if you apply the following adjustments to it:
We
Our foods [...] You should describe these foods briefly...
the most important [...] This should be the begining of a new sentence.
I am grateful [...] for the fact that my parents were able to support and train me...
this exposure [...] prompted me to learn...
Other than that your text seems Ok. You should simply shorten some longer sentences in it and the word-number will be kept under 100. I hope this will help. regards.