Writing Feedback / The advantages gain by museums when charging visitors for admission [2]

Many museums charge for admission while others are free
Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantage?

Some may find that museums as sacred places where ancient and historical goods along with extremely valuable old treasures are displayed. By this important role of museums on society and an increasing number of visiting, several museums then settle on entrance fee for guests. I believe the merits of charging visitor are obviously outweighing the demerit which plausibly occurs.

Most of museums now, even it historical museum or science museum, decide the amount of price that people should pay for admission. This might be a trigger of the decreasing number of visitors while they lack of enthusiasm to go to museums as they need to be charged. They look for free or at least cheap entertainment for their family. In fact, they could find it buy trip to some theme park or city park which offer more joy compare to museums even though they are both essential as educational and recreation sites. People then choose carefully and think twice before came up with decision to visit museums. However, by the abundance information could be obtained on museum trip, I would argue that paid ticket would bring some advantages as museum operational and services can be enhanced.

Museums have developed their private finance system beside assisted by municipal or country funding so that they have freedom and access to increase the quality of museums. Several internal issues like maintenance, hiring and paying employee's allowance, and enrich their collection in order to being always update and compete with others museums are the concern of museums management, and admission money from visitor could be covered all these problems. By 1960, majority of museums in USA has built their money management mainly by ticketing system so they could restrict their demand on government fund at the same time by maintain and increase their facility, collection and overall quality as the museums have become so popular and hold a pivotal role as amenity for citizens. In addition, indirectly, visitors are more appreciate and admire things displayed there as they realize the huge funding for exhibiting those for them as one of reasons they should pay to enjoy it.

All in all, I believe the advantages of charging admission of museums are plenty than the disadvantage may arise by it.

Writing Feedback / The life cycle of salmon marine creature - big size of fish in river and in ocean habitat [NEW]

The diagrams inform the life cycle of salmon marine creature as big size of fish. At the first glance it can be seen that the natural habitat of this species involved open large ocean and plain water on the river during its whole life period. In addition, it take a long time, in years, for this species to develop from laid eggs into several stages to become adult salmon.

Turning to the first stages before eggs grow to be fry, salmons take a long journey swimming from sea to breed and lay their eggs attached in the reeds under small stones on the upper river with slow moving. It takes approximately 5 to 6 months for these eggs to become young fry in a very tiny size, 3 - 8 cm, which move to live as long as 4 years in the fast flowing of water stream on the lower river so it could be grown as 12 to 15 cm smolt.

These smolts need to migrate back to their origins habitat on the sea where they will get mature as adult salmons in a long period too, around 5 years. As they reach their state for breeding, this cycle would be started when they finally going back to the faraway river.

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Writing Feedback / The proper age that children should be started to go to school [2]

In some countries it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at four years old, while in others they do not have to start school until they are sever or eight.

How far do you agree with either of these views?

Children are the most valuable assets for the parents. Thus, the proper ages that children should be started to study in the formal institution has been a contradict issue among societies while they concern about the best option for their child. Although in some countries it is evident that children advised to go to school at four years old, I extremely agree with those proclaimed that they should get to study at seven or eight years.

With regard with those who support that young generations need to access formal education in the very early ages, around 4, they might be based their consideration in the fact that between 1 and 5 years old is the golden development of brain which grow vastly. In this time, children are easy to learn and process new information by simply imitate what they hear and visible for them. In South Korea, kids on this age are taken to parenting or children care services, a state below kindergarten, so that children can individually learn along their peers as the same time as their parents go to their workplace. Considerably, this is beneficial for both children and parents. However, I would argue this is not a wise decision as the young kids may experience mental hectic or what child neurologist said as the condition children get when they can't develop their learning skill such as math and language acquisition due to get school early.

In fact, age group 7 to 8 is the critical age for people to learn subject matters, behaviours and social skills apart from their nuclear family. This is the best time for being involved on new environments to obtain new experiences and grasp about science or other subjects as they are mature enough in both brain and physical state to learn complicated materials. In most European countries, particularly Finland as the best educational management in the world, the enrolment of student children in the primary school is need to be proved by birth certificate by parents to ensure that they attending school in the proper ages. Remarkably, this is revealed as the optimum age by researchers as small even no demerits plausibly get by young generations.

All in all, I believe that the proper age that children need to go to educational institution is on 7 to 8 years. Get to school too early in their very first former ages, actually, just a barrier of their mental development. Furthermore, governments need to be strictly based on this concern as this is about the future human resources.

Writing Feedback / The manufacturing of frozen fish pies as instant factory-prepared foods [NEW]

The diagrams inform about the production of frozen fish pies as instant factory-prepared foods which just need to be warmed in microwave before consumed by buyers. A fish pie itself is made from fish and potato slice as the main ingredients and the adding of sauce and peas to enrich the taste. However, it is obviously seen that the role of labours in the whole manufacturing process is only in the preparation of fish and the transport of raw materials into the industry whilst other stages automatically run by sophisticated machines.

Turning to the foodstuff management, at first to maintain the quality, potatoes used are those with up to one month aged. The processes are continued by machines to clean, peel and slice these potatoes. Before those could be stored, it needs to be boiled and then chilled in the low temperature in order to preserve.

Fresh salmon with on 12 hours or less from fishering then is marinated with lemon juice and salt before steamed on particular oven. Then the steps of skin and bones removing by workforces are in under inspection by supervisor to scrutinize the process and observe the workers. After this, fish put on the food package along with prepared peas, sauce and potato before being wrapped and frozen on the minus degree as preserving technique as long as it dispatched.

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Writing Feedback / What majors should university's student enroll? [2]

Some people believe that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

The proper chosen regarding to the university subject should be taken by high school leavers has arisen a big concern from society since it is all about future careers. Although some argue that the most important subject to study is all related to science and technology, I believe that attending university in favour majors is the best as it can be stimulate creativity, innovation and self-reliant of student.

In fact, science and technology are the popular majors with high enrollment in majority of universities as the great demand for the alumni from these knowledge branches. About more than 50% of opened job opportunity and work sector is related to both these subjects in all over the world. In addition, those who granted degree from science and technology are more likely to be hired by employers as suitable educational background with career position offered. Taking China as an example, with best known for industrial country, scientist and specialist on technology are highly needed to run the large scale manufacturing there, and this fact is similarly occurred in other countries. By this, beside well known as profitable subjects by the student, parents also tend to ask their children to study those majors as it reasonable to obtain stable and well-paid job in the future. Nevertheless, we can't deny this phenomenon, but I would argue the world is still need bachelors from others major and it is much more relief for students to study what they like.

Attending university by what students are likely to learn is the most pivotal as they need to be relaxed and focused on their majors which plausibly maintain only if they love the subjects. To take higher education level is complicated issue considered about the ability, interest and talent of students which is the reason why university offers diverse lectures to attract them to study based on their passion. An educational research in British revealed the relation between students' happiness during college with the kinds of major they enrolled. It said that they who interest with their majors are more creative and innovative person, they also have the chance to develop their learning skills and enhance their individual learner proficiency than those stressed with their study. Obviously, these quality of workforces are more dynamic and profitable to being hired by company as business need creative and innovative employees.

In sum, I extremely believe that it is more essential for student to study the majors they like in university than take those which related to science and technology even it is good choice for their career in the future.

Writing Feedback / Bananas and coffee selling in European countries [2]

Information regarding to the selling point in millions of euros of coffee and bananas labelled with Fairtrade in European regions in 1990 and 2004 is illustrated by the tables. Overall, it is obviously seen that there was an increasing trend of coffee sold over the period. On the other hand, the purchasing of banana was slightly jumped in Sweden and Denmark in 2004.

Turning to the table of coffee as one of commodities sold in Europe, all the selling was successful in all the marketed countries which the biggest incline shown by Britain from 1.5 million (1990) to 20 million (2004). It is followed by Switzerland for surging twice time higher. Although the same trend occurred in the figure of Denmark, Belgium and Sweden, the increasing money yielded was in a very small number.

In addition, the highly profitable is obtained in the bananas' selling in Switzerland by 32 million increases in the end of period. UK and Belgium also had remarkably risen purchasing by around five folds higher. Unfortunately, this number fell down in both Sweden and Denmark by 0.8 and 1.1 million respectively.

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Writing Feedback / Fashion address the class and personal character of people; Importance of appearance in workplace [2]

Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Fashion include as one of the basic needs which also address the class and personal character of people. Therefore, some companies argue the importance of well-dressed regulation toward their employees while other say skill and performance are more pivotal. However, I believe, in fact, some occupations particularly related to social services rely on appearance whilst those who work with their force obviously need to focus on work quality.

In certain job which offers services as its product, smartly dressing worker is the main factor to attract consumers. This has been a general requirement asked by employers as fashion mode and physical appearance usually viewed as workforce with excellent behaviour, attitude and intelligence by society. A 2014 Harvard study in economic regarding to effective marketing reveal the effect of fashionable and good-looking staff in the amount of revenue yielded by organisations. This research surveyed on a few work fields including flight attendances, bank officers, insurance and retails staffs even restaurant stewardess. In these kind of occupations, to be stylish absolutely essential as a service they give to the client. Nevertheless, this fact doesn't generally valid for all workers.

Human resources work in industry or manufacturing ignore their dress as it is not crucial toward their job. In addition, it is not an important issue to be notice by both companies and workers as their work is about physical force and have no relation to what clothes they wear. For being labours or constructors mean proficiency and work skill as the measurements of their works. In any case, to dress extravagantly might be would get negative opinion and hatred among employees and from supervisors because they seems lazy and have less dedication. Working ability outweigh appearance value for them who work in non-service sectors.

In sum, the importance of employees fashion style depend on the occupation whether or not it is a personal skill needed in workplace.

Writing Feedback / The relationships at the workplace between 2005 and 2009 [2]

The pie charts reveal the comparison of survey results conducted in 2005 and 2009 which asked about the relationship of workers to both their managers and colleagues. It is clearly seen that the relationship at the workplace become better in 2009 compared to the 4 years before even it just shown by a slight increase of them who answered very good as the major figure. However, employees who have no supervisors and co-workers didn't give any opinion toward the survey's questioner.

Turning to the chart showed the relationship of employees to their supervisors, the highest percentage was at the very good opinion at above 60 % in both years while a rise by 4% existed in 2009. Although the figure of good answer was the second highest proportion, it steadily decline by 4% to the subsequent year. Fair, poor, and have no supervisor percentage were resulted at a very low number. Interestingly, all the workers participated in the survey in 2009 whilst there was 2 % of them have no answer in 2005.

Same trends as those in the survey of workers and supervisors relation were shown by the figure of very good and good in the relationship among the workforces. Therefore, there were also small percentages below 10% of fair figure and those who have no co-workers. In 2009 there was no more said that their relationship was poor.

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Writing Feedback / The happiness rate of American citizens toward married status and presence of children [2]

The bar charts reveal the comparison of the happiness between married and unmarried of American citizens based on the survey conducted along with the happiness of the spouse toward children gifted. Overall, it obviously seen that the life joy for them whose in relationship is very high compared to those whose unmarried yet. Meanwhile, the figures of children effects are slightly similar.

Turning to the percentage of married people pleasure with more than 30% for all age categories, the exact numbers were remarkably higher than those single except in the oldest group. There was a difference by 24% from the youngest, by twice time bigger for people in age 30-49, and by 21% for those 50-64 aged. However, the happiness rate for the eldest in 65 and over was 44% for them in intense relationship and 34% for them who didn't involve in such of relation.

In addition, the percentage whether the married couple have children or not was steadily similar at just above 40%. The survey result presented that the happiest spouse was them who have young children (44%), followed by them who have no children (43%), and the lowest, interestingly, were those who have adult children with 18 or older aged (41%).

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Writing Feedback / The purpose and the responsibility of business [2]

the purpose of businesses is to make money and they should concentrate only on this.
do you agree or disagree?

A business is conducted to gain economic profits. Although the main objective of businesses is to earn money as much as possible, I believe that they should not only focus on this aim then ignore their responsibility to the labour, society and environment as well.

As business is about a force and career involved many people, it should create highly profitable works to yield much revenue. A company should gain high income in order to pay for employees and avoid bankruptcy. Most factories in China have competed fiercely by always launch their adjusted items with their strict management and production as their technique to attract more consumers for boosting their sales record. This do by those business units to gather many profits so they can continuously run their company and at the same time pay the salary of the massive workers. It is pivotal the utmost importance that business has a stable finance and produce much money as the main reason why it built. However, I would argue that they should also consider other things as part of their responsibility.

Business is also regarding to their responsibility for their human resource and the sustainable development of environment and society. Each company have corporate social response, CSR, which supervise under laws in order to contribute in the social life for both common people and their own employees also for the environment. For workers, corporation need to treat them well by reasonable working hours, appropriate allowance and health insurance payment. These are its obligation and the rights of workers. Business also have to involve in volunteering or charity activities to support society, they need to take a role as sponsor on national or local competitions and events. At last, it has to concern toward the environment particularly their source of raw material like forest and their waste. Company have to create wise using of natural resources by planting back or avid deforestation as well as build treatment system to overcome their chemical waste.

In conclusion, I extremely agree that business also has to participate and contribute to society as their responsibility instead of just producing money all the time.

Writing Feedback / The massive usage of electronic media has a drawback on the society's private relationships. [2]

the use of electronic media has a negative effect on personal relationship between people.
to what extent do you agree or disagree

The information technology has vastly advanced and hold important role in 21th century life. It is then argued that the massive using electronic media has a drawback on the society's private relationship. To some extent, I believe that this issue is not only brings a dire effect but it has aroused several severe problems at once.

It can't be denied that the various sophisticated technologies have brought easiness and convenient for people regarding to the way they communicate each other, particularly for those in intense relationship like a spouse or a couple. The important news or information can be accessed fast through their mobile phone unlike in the past when it took time even just for asking their recent news as well as the time needed for accepting the feedback. They used to interact each other by letter, telegram, pager or line telephone which caused hard to keep update and keep in touch. These days, it is no longer obstacle for people personal relationship as electronic media ease their communication pathway. Unfortunately, it has created another problems need to face by those to keep their bond.

Those who are in a certain private relation may find some difficulties triggered by their using of electronic media. At first, obviously it has transformed their intense communication way while they only need features on their smartphone like message, email, video call or even social media to share their information. They are likely and often interact through screen than face to face. Another reason is it creates distance while they meet and talk each other through virtual world rather than directly meet or date in some places. By this, there is a great chance to deceit or even dishonest since their relation as not as strength as the people in the past are. Although they are then meet directly, they just still focus on their own gadget without awareness or need to build passionate conversation.

To sum up, I extremely believe that there are some detrimental effects for using electronic media on people private communication with their couple or spouse. Therefore, they need to restrict the using of it and try to build healthy relationship by more pay attention each other.

Writing Feedback / The merit and drawback of working before attending university for high school leavers [2]

Some suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university.
Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this.

It is argued that better if student enrich their knowledge and experience by taking paid job before attending university rather than directly continue their education in the higher level. Thus, it has aroused contradict opinion regarding to the benefit and drawback of this issue. However, I believe that young people need to pursue their tertiary education degree first before involved in working.

Supporters of the idea that high school leavers should work in a few years before study at college concern about the experience and skill which could be obtained by them in work field. They would have enlarged proficiency, particularly practical skill, instead of only written theory dictated to them during study at the educational institutions. Young people work in a certain industry or office can increase their social ability among labors and also with them in the higher position, improve their general knowledge about manufacturing and business field, build their discipline and personal character as the part of human resource in their work as well as a chance to gather and manage their finance. Obviously, they will have more experience and information as their preparation to face adult life hood in both campus and future career.

On the other hand, they may lack the opportunity to be granted degree earlier at university as they spend their time for working formerly. Even the experience and knowledge are important for the bright resume for seeking job, but the first prerequirement looking by employers is at least their bachelor certificate. Those who have related major or educational background with the career position offered would have the priority to be accepted whether they are experienced or not. It is pivotal for high school alumni for attending higher education and then finishes their study as their basic to compete on the real work life.

To sum up, there is an advantage and disadvantage for young generation who chose to work before continue their study at campus. Yet, I disagree that they should take a job first since education is more essential for fulfilling their well-paid and stable occupation at future.

Writing Feedback / The benefits of making start up business instead of being worker for another company [2]

Some people decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organisation. Do the advantages for people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages?

The wealthy people are those who work as businessmen. The trend that people are more likely to open their own business rather than being labor or work for another person has become popular as the desire of them to be more individual and have their financial freedom by leading their own business empire. I believe that the benefits of this are remarkably outweigh the drawbacks that they plausibly gain.

Those who bravely create start up business may get difficulties during their force particularly for funding and giving an influence to the investor. The main obstacle need to face by these newbie entrepreneurships is the lack of money which is essential to conduct their business. By this, they need to look for potential sponsorships in the large number too who entrust their finance to be grown in this new company. In addition, come up with a strong and unique idea as the fundamental of this business birth is not an easy issue. They need to present an outstanding idea in order to impress investors so that they can admit the proposal. However, although these disadvantages exist as problems need to overcome by the new business starters, I would argue that there are more advantages they can obtain.

To have own business means more easiness and enjoyment which could be got by businessmen. At first, they have flexibility in both time and income relied on the fact that they are the boss. They can set up their working hours as well as the allowance that they should pay for. Next, this obviously offers high profitable revenue for the owners since the revenue margin for them and their officers is also managed by their self. They would find economic and finance stabilization as the result. Finally, they can be individual businessmen without need to do what the higher executive asked to them whilst they also open a new career chance for another people.

All in all, I extremely believe that it is better to create a private start up business instead of work for others people. Furthermore, the increasing figure of new business opened is needed to overcome the massive number of unemployment as it open many job opportunities.

Writing Feedback / Manufacturing and information flow of consumers good production [2]

The flow chart illustrates the manufacturing mechanism of buyers purchasing goods and the flow of information feedback to the former stages in order to enhance the quality of products. Obviously, this process involves several stages during production before it can be sold on the market. Meanwhile, researches also conduct all the time to support the whole manufacturing process.

To begin, raw material and all the components are put in the storage. At the same time when the product research conduct to get the design, the manufacture's substances and equipment are in the production planning stage based on the stated goods' design. During these initial steps, the information fed back from the plan to the storage unit.

Next, before sell the items, several processes consist of assembly, inspection, testing, packaging and dispatch are conducted carefully. To adjust this complicated mechanism, market research and advertising are also organised by industry. Therefore, the result of researching the market is sent to designing, packaging and advertising unit as well as the information from testing is fed back to the design stage. However, the whole information from producing until selling is also revealed to the market research and production planning.

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Writing Feedback / Chocolate production from harvested until manufactured in the factory [2]

The picture illustrates the whole process of chocolate production from ripe cacao fruit as red pods harvested bay cacao tree which planted in South America, Africa and Indonesia, into liquid chocolate processed in the factory. This involves simple stages played by local farmers. Then, sophisticated machines are operated for manufacturing.

Turning to the former stages, at first, white cocoa beans are collected from inside the harvested pods. Before those are dried naturally under the bright sun light, beans need to ferment in a certain period by spreading above leaves. The dried beans are stored in large sacks then ready to transport to the factory using train or lorry.

In the chocolate factory, beans are roasted by particular oven in the high temperature up to 350oC. The process is continued by crushing beans using crusher equipment in order to remove the hard outer shell. Finally, this inner part is pressed by machine to produce the delicious chocolate fluid.

Writing Feedback / Foreign language acquisition for primary school students - it's best time to learn [2]

some people think it is better for children to begin to learn a foreign language at primary school than at secondary school. What is your opinion? Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

A foreign language communication skill is a need due to the globalization era which makes world narrower and more competitive. Although some drawbacks of teaching another countries' language to primary school students may exist, I believe that the advantage outweigh the disadvantages. Many benefits offer to those who can mastery foreign language at their former years.

With regard to those who argued that abroad language proficiency improper to give to primary schools' pupils, their concern may be rely on some plausible dire effects. At first, children might get stressed as their time to for playing is reduced due to language class. Next, they would have difficulties on communicate, particularly speaking, since they have numerous mixed vocabularies. It is hard for them to socialize with their friend which doesn't learn the same language. At last, it might be a trigger for the national or local tongue because children make the foreign language as their habit and get used to communicate by that to faster and strengthened their language acquisition. However, I believe that early ages is the critical time which best to learn another language thus make it most useful and importance for children.

It is better to study language in the primary school rather than in secondary school. Those who study in the former educational institutions have less complicated subject which gives them access to focus on the language understanding. They also get more time to practice. In fact, the most valuable things they could get is the linguistic skill which allow them to globally interact and communicate with foreign people, this enrich their resume to study in international school in the next level with advanced technology and method.

All in all, I believe it is essential and more advantageous for children learning a foreign language when they study in primary school. Furthermore, parents and teachers should assist to decide which language should learn by student and support them to mastery it language.

Writing Feedback / To lead some company being an old or young businessman? [2]

Most leaders or directors generally belong to an older age group, but some people believe that young leaders are better. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

The chief executive has a main role of the development and survival of the business empire. I believe that elder generations are more respectful and careful if they hold vital position in work rather than the younger with less of experience. Moreover, this leadership character is not a simple thing which can be obtained by learning.

Entrust the highest leadership to the younger people is vulnerable since they lack of wisdom and influence which only can build by a long time experience. Yet, they are brave to face the risk and deciding fact, but their desire tempted by a much profitable works in a short of time thus making them easy to deceit in business proposal. In addition, leadership is not something that can learn by theory or simply a nature gifted, it's a complicated skill could be mastery by long nurture and get practiced and trained by times. Thus why, I believe the elder leader is the right chosen to lead the company.

Old people usually decide a business deal or transactions by thinking a long term effect of their decision. It might be take time, but since it is about the future of massive number of workers, so it worth it. They also charismatic and reflect their deep knowledge and consideration by their controlled emotion and attitude which make it easy to manage and give an influence to employees. Their dedication makes them familiar with the crucial conditions ever, the characteristic of officers and even a large business connection. So, it is reasonable and reliable to give the leader position to older businessmen.

In conclusion, I believe there are some qualities owned by older executive which plausibly hard to own by the younger. Furthermore, it is logical to let the elder leading since they are able to handle the business problem and give impressions to the workers.

Writing Feedback / Seeking for a job is the main reason why people attends higher educational institutions classes [3]

People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, and increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university?

Education has pivotal role in enhancing life quality. By this, most senior high school leavers pursue higher education, albeit they might be have different motives. I believe that to attend university is not classically about obtaining knowledge, but it is more about career preparation.

Tertiary education levels, at university or college, are enrolled by students to train and educate them more about the particular subject. They study popular majors like engineering or medic, and also common majors like economy or literature. They hoped they could be skilled and well-informed by attending that class. This might be the general reason why people continue their study. However, I would argue that it is unreliable if it is just their considerations. In fact, they could be an individual learner, take internship or just learn by searching abundance information in internet if they only need to enhance their knowledge.

Particularly and obviously, people study at campus for their future career. Educational background is essential for bright resume as one of prerequirements. So, they can have a big chance for hiring. For example, they who graduated from economic, accountancy or marketing would be more likely to get job by employers rather than senior high school alumni or those who granted degree from unrelated subject. Suitable academic background needed as the industry or offices rely on people experiences and skills got during study at university.

In conclusion, I believe for seeking job as the main reason why people attending higher educational institutions class. Meanwhile, for increasing knowledge, experiences, or making relationship are the chance they got during their works to fulfill their dream career by studying at university.

Writing Feedback / The rise trend of worked women as well as the increasing number of youth delinquency [NEW]

The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Recently, the increasing number of woman workers, especially those who married, argued as the main cause of adolescent delinquency which become more sever in the last twenty years. I extremely believe that the main role of women is for caring their children although they still have chance to work as long as they can manage their time and family still their priority.

Business women have become trend not just because they want earn their own allowance as well as men, for married women it is more to create finance stabilization in their family unit as the solution to meet the economic demand which higher and more difficult by times. A family with husband and wife as worker find it more convenient and pleasure to manage and fulfill their household financial since both of them can yield revenue. Unfortunately, women then lost their role as a mother and their children get less affection. I would argue that this is why juvenile become wild, misbehave and even conduct crime because they lack of attention and care they should get from parents, particularly mother.

The main role of in relationship women is to care about their child. In fact, they still have options and opportunity if they insist want to help their husband by being a freelance worker or just open their own business that they can control from home, like household industries. By this, they can educate their children properly and also economically aid their husband. Mother's priority to raise their children is pivotal since unprotected and lonely teenager without mother supervision is more likely to commit crime.

In conclusion, I believe that the high number of worked mother as the main factor of the increasing number of juvenile crime and misbehave. Thus, women need to realize their priority and act as a good mother albeit the economic state forces them to work also.

Writing Feedback / Whether prison or education is the best way to decrease crime or not [2]

In many countries prisons is considered the best way to decrease crime. However, education is often argued to be more effective way. Which opinion do you most agree with?

Each country has imprisonment systems prove the effectiveness of this to reduce the number of crimes. Even so, people argued that education is the best way rather than jail. I extremely agree that hard punishment need to control the offenders behave whereas education is only preventive technique.

The function of education, especially moral and attitudes classes is to teach people to differ good and wrong, to inform about the socially acceptable values and to train them to behave properly. This gives a fundamental thinking of how to act as the part of social life like what they got in behaviorism subject. Particularly, this is just a preventive technique since people have options whether they want to be a good guy or a bad guy, they even realize the consequence. As a result, we can't fully rely on the sophisticated or latest education system ever to reduce the crime rate.

In addition, I believe the most effective solution is to jail those crime agents since prison system is not only about restrict the freedom from real-outside world as their punishment, but also train them with several skills during prisoned, so they can be skilled person after release. In most countries, similarly, training and education even religious speech, given to prisoners to enhance their self-esteem and quality of life so they hopefully can enhance their own life and not to offender anymore. Then, as the scariest punishment, prison also educates people jailed there, it is not only reducing the crime but also given the second chance for the prisoners to be a good person.

To conclude, educational management and institutions only is not the best way to reduce crime since prison is also train hard and soft skills albeit just chaining people. Thus, I believe to jail the crime agent is always the most reliable options.

Writing Feedback / Contradict opinions about the most responsive to reduce the amount of packaging of goods [2]

Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. While others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Recently, the huge number of packaging materials used, particularly plastic, has aroused contradict opinions among people, whether they believe industries are the most responsive or customers just should to avoid buying those products. I believe that it is need the contribution from both since it become environmental issue.

For covering and labeling sell items nicely is one of the supermarkets and manufacturers challenge so those items would attract buyers attention. It is also for the easiness during distribution or even for preserving certain foods like vegetable and fruit. Thus, they use plastic, paper or Styrofoam, but plastic is the most popular due to its flexibility and endurance. Unfortunately, plastic is inorganic waste which hard to decay and take time for it. Regarding to this, the large shopping industries should use green plastics which are recycling results or the latest kind of plastic made by organic materials like plant, so it can be decayed fast and reduce damage for earth. However, this responsibility to reduce the number of packaging materials is also in the hand of consumers.

People who shop need to bring their own plastic or fabric bag to carry their purchasing items rather than use a lot of plastics given by supermarkets or avoiding buy products. The massive number of population also brings a great demand for shopping which need a fantastic amount of packaging of goods. So, citizen's awareness of the harmful of plastic and a chance for reducing it by simply use their own bag is pivotal to decline the number of garbage which brings dire effect to the environment.

All in all, I believe that the action to reduce the amount of goods packaging is rely on both industries and consumers. Furthermore, government should also participate by campaigning the use of save plastic package materials largely and even warned the retails who still use dangerous plastic in enormous number.

Writing Feedback / Laws and regulations made by government in the eyes of citizens [2]

Governments make many rules to protect people from danger, for example, by making people wear seat belts in cars or not allowing smoking in public buildings. However, many people believe that there are too many rules nowadays. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

It is citizen's obligation to follow the rules and laws stated by government. Recently, people believe that those jurisdictions are too many to conduct. I extremely disagree with this statement since it is the responsibility for the government to set the laws for its inhabitant's safety and security.

Some general regulations are made for the convenient of people as well as for their protection. To use seat belts whenever they drive meant to prevent accidents that may occur in the road since the mortality rate by driving carelessly and impatiently is high in most countries. So, it is pivotal to always be careful and admit this rules since it just for protect them. Another example is to not consume cigarette in public facilities or areas because the poisoned gases which release to the edifice's atmosphere might disturb even affected on others health. People need to realize all those rules are just for their pleasure as citizens to make them having a good quality of life.

Furthermore, I would argue that it is the part of state services and career, beside just responsibility, to set laws. In fact, those regulations released through long debate and even research. China's unpopular policy to restrict their citizens for having more than 2 children and force them to kill their own babies albeit the natality of twin and triplet birth in China is the highest all over the world, is efficient to control the population explosion there, thus also increase the life quality since they can reduce the accommodation constructing and energy consuming. Some policies and rules may hard to receive by people, but it is all decide for their importance.

All in all, I strongly disagree with people who think that there are too many rules to follow as citizens. However, governments should also massively introduce and share the reasons for their policy so that people would greatly accept rather than object it.

Writing Feedback / National budget expenditure on medical technology objected by some people [2]

Most developed countries spend a large proportion of their health budgets on expensive medical technology and procedures. This money should be spent instead on health education to keep people well. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

National budget expenditure to the advancement of medical technologies and procedures in a huge amount raise a question for some people who think it is more relevant to spend on health education. Even though educating citizens about healthy lifestyle is pivotal, but I would argue that it is more essential to spend a lot on technologies and research about medic.

Several people believe that the government economic policy which supports the development of technologies on health remarkably by spending much of its revenue is not popular and wise decision since it less efficient rather than directly and massively educate people about health. To campaign about avoiding a high consumption of instant food is simple and useful for inhabitants as well as to ask them to wash their hand before eat. It will become a common healthy life style which is effective to prevent for suffering from diseases. They have concerned it as the best way to make people realize and maintain their own health rather than rely on luxurious medical treatment.

However, I consider that it much more relief to create sophisticated medical check-up, treatment and prescription systems to stabilize the public health quality. These days, viruses and diseases have become more difficult to cure, like Avian influenza, Zika and Ebola infectious. Those are an endemic which spread vastly and hard to either prevent or control. Thus why it is a great demand of countries, particularly developed countries which fantastic annual income, to preserve a high technology devices and techniques on medic beside funding related novel research so that they can increase the public facilities and services on health since their citizens tax highly for medical insurance and it could be a profitable investment too.

In conclusion, I extremely agree that state need to invest much more money on advanced medical technology rather on the national health program. Furthermore, government needs to support scientist on this field to obtain grasp about health while also modernize the equipment of that.

Writing Feedback / Skyscrapers construction as the demand of overcrowded population [2]

As populations grow and cities become more crowded, there is pressure throughout the world to construct ever-taller building to provide accommodation and offices. Many people object to such developments, citing the social as well as the physical dangers. Do you agree with objections to skyscrapers?

Regarding to the population explosion in the world as well as the overcrowded citizens live in metropolitan, there is a demand to build high apartment and offices. This latest development get objections from people who think it is physically and socially dangerous for human. However, I extremely believe that this construction approach has many benefits for environment.

With regards to those who argue that ever-tall building has dire effects for life, they think that social keen and physical trouble may arise due to this architecture. The occupants who live in tall edifice have no strong neighborliness since they just stay on their storey with no need to socialize and interact with others. In addition, there is a plausibility that someone could get accident and fall off from a high distance, or this building may collapse then hurt citizens and break other buildings around it.

However, actually to construct these skyscrapers would give advantageous, particularly for environment.

These constructions would economically efficient by thrift land using rather than conventional buildings.so, constructors by city's planner request would be able to build green opened area, like gardens or City Park, as the same time to meet the demand of accommodations and work places for a massive number of people. Besides that, it would offer a great chance to build green structures which using renewable source of energy in order to avoid energy wasting. Solar panels could be installed as the outer wall and roof top to capture lights and convert it to be electricity, and the natural wind could also for cooling the building rather than using air conditioner.

All in all, I believe that it is more profitable to build high accommodations and offices rather than conventional structures. Furthermore, the detrimental effects mentioned by the objectors could be avoided.

Writing Feedback / student misbehave as severe problems faced by schools: causes and solutions [2]

In many countries, schools have severe problems with student behavior. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Student misbehavior has become a common problem faced by most educational institutions. Some causes such as advancement of technology and restriction on teacher role in school stand out as the triggers of this phenomenon. However, I believe teacher and parents should involve to tackle this problem.

Those pupils who pay less attention and respect to their educators might be build their bad characteristic based on several things. At first, it is obvious that it is also the dire effect of the advanced technology which offers unlimited access of abundance information, particularly on internet, to student children. This affected to the ability for finding information by their self, so they would underestimate teachers with outdated teaching method or material. In addition, in this century, teachers are no longer permit to give strict punishment to those who commit bad behavior or against school regulation as the great concern of people toward human rights, so children have freedom to behave wild and rude since they are covered by laws. This is truly doesn't wise for student moral development thus some strategies need to overcome it.

Some measurements need to be done for educating students well especially regarding to proper attitudes. Society, on this case family, should teach them how to differ bad and good things, to behave properly to older people and respect others since this basic value developed and recognized by student when they were children. It is family not school who is the most responsible for teaching accepted values and behaviorism to their child. In school, teacher should apply assessment of learning method rather than assessment of learning which only focus on students' academic achievement. By this technique, teacher would get access to assess student's behavior during study and give them reward as merit, students would make it habit to act properly thus train their behavior.

In conclusion, some reasons exist as the cause of student misbehavior which has become obstacle for schools. But, I would argue that the role of parents and assessment technique of teacher would plausibly effective solution to tackle this problem.