Writing Feedback / Task 1 Trends of Reader Boys And Girls in Starmouth School [2]

The line graph gives information about the number of the books which is read by boys and girls students at Starmouth School over four years period. Overall, it had an upward trends in both of the lines. However, in the end of the year the number of reader girls had higher number than reader boys.

In the first year, both of line rose slightly with reader boys had higher number than girls at 80 books while reader girls only a half of reader boys number. In 2011, reader girls experienced a significant incline while boys increased steadily and reached the peak at 100 books. In 2011 readers boys and girls had the same number. In the last years, reader boys experienced a slow decline and the girls increased dramatically and reached the peak at 140 books.

Although in the first two years reader boys always had the higher number but in the last years girls finally outnumbering boys by 60 books and had the highest number of all years.

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Writing Feedback / Summary TED Chinese Zodiac by Shao Lan [5]

When Chinese people ask about zodiac actually it i a polite way for them to ask people age also to make a judgement based on their zodiac. They can know their fortune and miss fortune, personality, career prospect and others. Chinese Zodiac is a cycle of 12 years and label it with animals started from a rat to a pig. Chinese Zodiac also influence their decision in many ways like give name to their baby, giving birth, marriage and others. They believe that some certain animals get unwell with each other so parents will choose a specific year for the babies. If they can make a right combination they will get prosperity to family. For example, pig suit with tiger or rabbit but not with snake. In 2012, people who give a birth increased by 5 percent in China, Taiwan and Hong Kong because they believe in dragon years their baby can get much fortunes due to dragon is a symbol of power, strength and wealth. Chinese also make an investment according to zodiac and now they have time, technology and wealth to create an ideal live which they wanted. They also have an important role in economical and political world.

Link : ted.com/talks/shaolan_the_chinese_zodiac_explained#

Writing Feedback / Summary an Article Best Trails to People Who Do Not Like Hiking [2]

Many people do not like to hike a mountain because it takes much times and extra effort also dangerous on the way up. That is why right now many people look for a short hike so that they do not need to spent much time but can see extravagant landscape while exercises. This is 10 best places to people who like short hikes. The first place is in Rifugio Bonatti, Italy, it is only 11.3 km and people can enjoy Mount Blanc massif view. The second place is in Island Peak, Nepal, people need to walk 56 to 65 km to reach himalayan peak. Ireland is the next destination. It is only 3 to 6.5 km and people can see a romp in the heart of the wild Irish countryside. Aoraki or Mount Cook National Park, New Zealand also great destination to go. By walking 4.8 km for round-trip, people can see New Zealand's Southern Alps at a glacial lake. In France Les Dentelles de Montmirail is a beautiful limestone fins. Lassen Peak Trail in California is a massive stratovolcanoes and can be reached by walking for about 8 km round-trip. Black Canyon also is a famous place to hike and the access is easy. Japan has many places to hike, one of them is Mount Takao. People who want very short walk can go to Outer Banks, North Carolina or Solheimajokull, iceland. Only less than 3 km people can enjoy a great views.

Link : nationalgeographic.com/adventure/activities/hiking-and-backpacking/best-trails-10-easy-hikes/

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 Talent show : Best way to find Talented People Or Just Entertainment? [4]

Question :Televised talent show have become popular in many societies today. Are these shows a good method of finding talented people, or are they just entertainment?

Many people enjoy to watch talent shows and that is the reason why it becomes more popular right now. Some of them think that this is a good method to find people with natural ability while others think that it is only to entertain viewers. In my point of view, talent shows can entertain many communities but actually that is the best way to look for talented people.

People in entertainment production find talented people by running a talent show. Many famous celebrities come from a talent program like one direction, little mix and others. They were a winner from X-factors in United Kingdom and now they are extremely famous in a worldwide.Talent show also give many artists a chance to prove their ability in the world scale. It is not an easy thing to be a successful person. People need to work hard and have great ability to compete in entertainment industry. With talent program people can show their capability on the right way.

On the other hand, many people think that talent show is only entertainment show to get much profit. They also think it is only a make up stories then company will exaggerate the background stories of the artist to drive viewers attention. By this way, company will get much money from selling tickets at the concert also get high ratting.

In conclusion, talent shows are used by many companies to get much income. However, it is a great chance to show off the ability of talented people and a reasonable way to discover people who has a gift.

Writing Feedback / "One Second Everyday" - Summary TED talks [2]

After work for years people need to take a break to refresh their mind by traveling or spending time with families then the can start new idea. Cesar Kuriyama is an artist in advertisement field who has an idea to take a break a year and make a project to record one second everyday of his life. The purpose of the project because people easy to forget what happen in the past and most of people do not have collection video. The last reason, when people do not do something interesting they will forget to capture the moment. When Cesar do this project he push himself to try something interesting everyday. The video actually also show personal protest to people who watch a live concert but they watch it through their phone so they did not enjoy the concert. With one second video people do not need to record the entire concert but they still can remember all the memories in there. He also record his sister who hospitalized for intestine disease." It was extremely difficult thing to do" he said. By taking hard video make him realize to appreciate a good day. He try to make the video as real as possible so he make it like he look at with his own eyes.

Link : ted.com/talks/cesar_kuriyama_one_second_every_day#t-36074

Writing Feedback / Honey-bee Colonies and The Production of Honey - IELTS Task 1 [2]

The bar charts give information about the number of honey-bee colonies and the production of the honey in every 10 years start from 1970 to 2010 in the United States. Overall, it can be seen obviously that both of graphs show decreased trends while honey-bee colonies had significantly decline trends, honey production experienced slightly fluctuating trends.

To begin with, the highest number of honey-bee colonies was in 1980, at 4,2 millions while the least was in 2010. In the first 10 years, the number of colonies had slightly incline until reached the peak in 1980 but for the 30 years later show sharp decline at 1,7 millions in 2010.

The honey production experienced a fluctuating trends over 40 years period. The biggest number of production was in 1970, at 130,000 tonnes while the least was in 2010, at 70,000 tonnes. In 1990, the number of honey production had higher humber than other years but had less number than in 1970.

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Writing Feedback / Sophisticated Technology Influence People - reduces empathy to others, makes distant connection easy [3]

Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In this modern era, many sophisticated technologies are invented such as computer, mobile phone, television and many others. Many people communicate each other by using cell phone by messaging or sending email. This condition have made people rarely meet their relatives and if it is continue to happen it will influence their social live. I personally agree that modern communication has had negative effect on human social lives.

Before mobile phone exist, inhabitant contact with others by talking directly so that they had good interaction. By talking to each other, they learned how to be a good speaker and a good listener so it improved their social skills. It is important to develop social skills because people live in a society while they can not live alone without help from others.

Right now, many people use cell phone to call or to send message to their friends without need to meet them and it is enough just by calling. Sometimes, they gather in one place but they only look at their phone and do not care with their friend. It will make them become individual and reduce their emphaty to others.

On the other hand, modern communication devices help people to convey with others who live far from them. They just need to use social media like skype or facetime and they can look at their friend in screen. Actually, this method also effective to support people having better contact.

To conclude, i believe that sophisticated communication have a negative impact people live such as reduce emphaty to others. It is better to talk than only send a message or email. However, modern technology also help people connect in far distance.

Writing Feedback / Summary Article : Gay-rights Activists Are Under Pressured by Religious Conservatives [3]

In recent years, many gay activist are more vocal to pursue equal rights in Indonesia but religious conservatives against it and start to push-back. A pressure group which based in New York is called by Human Rights Watch (HRW) report that LGBT (Lesbian, Gay, Bi-sexual,Transgender) have come under pressure which they never experience before. The religious conservative are making petition to court to make gay people become crime punishable with punishment 5 years in prison. The unusual thing happen this year in February, Defence Minister claimed that LGBT were high risk to national security and more danger than nuclear attack. Politicians also do the same thing, they prefer to support majorities voice than minorities because they need more votes in the next election. The most extravagant case is in Aceh province where LGBT will be punished 100 lashes. Actually, LGBT groups do not look for special treatment. They just want to have the same right with others.

Link : economist.com/news/asia/21704855-religious-conservatives-push-back-against-gay-rights-activists-under-pressure

Writing Feedback / Summary Article : Selfish Dogs Would Rather play with a Toy than help a Human [2]

Many people says that dogs are the best friend for human. In the reality, many dogs are more selfish. Dogs prefer to play with their toys than to help human or they do not understand the request from human. To find out about this thing, Piotti and Juliane Kaminski doing a research with 24 samples in the lab. Researchers test the dog one by one by putting a toy in one corner of the room and hiding a notebook which dog also see of another person using it also they put staplers. As the result, dog play often with their toy than the notebook then staplers. According to Clive Wynne selfish behaviour of dogs is not surprising actually. They are interested in an object that they like. Different opinion from Krista Macpherson, she said "Does the dog take an interest in an object that a human is interested in, or only in objects that dogs are interested in?The question is, how much understanding do the dogs have of these helpful behaviours?". Dogs are brilliant animals which can read human clues but without direction it will be difficult thing to do.

Link : newscientist.com/article/2100755-selfish-dogs-would-rather-play-with-a-toy-than-help-a-human/

Writing Feedback / Summary TED Talks : 5 ways to be a good listener [2]

Listening is making meaning from sound. The ability of human listening is about 60 per cent but people only use it about 25 percent. It is danger that people now losing their listening skills. It makes world become a danger world. There will be many wars and contradiction in all the places just because people did not listen to each other. The effect of this condition is people become unconscious listening.

How to improve people listening? There are 5 ways to improve it. First way with silence, people need to silence for 3 minutes a day to reset and re-calibrate their ability to listen. Second with mixer, the aim is to improve the quality of listening by hearing things at the same time in a place then count it (how many thing you can hear in a place). Third by paying attention to one sound. If we pay attention to something, we will interested in that thing. The fourth is listening position, people need to make a decision in what position they are right now. The last way is RASA (Receive, Appreciate, Summarize, Ask). By a good listening skill people can connect to each other and the world become a world of understanding and peace.

Link : ted.com/talks/julian_treasure_5_ways_to_listen_better

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 :Time and Costs to Go Around The City [3]

The table gives information about how long it took to travel around a city before and after the transport network was improved in four different form of transport. The bar graph shows how much it costs to use different kind of transport in town. The most significant facts to immerge from the table and the graph are that the fastest way to go around the city before and after improvements is taxi but it has the highest costs of all kind of vehicles.

Looking at the details in the table, the fastest conveyance to use is taxi for about 10 minutes while the least time is by using bus. After the improvements tram and bus become faster than before but taxi and car become slower.

The most expensive vehicles to look around the town is taxi for about 1.80 euro while bus is the cheapest for about 0.35 euro. Tram is more expensive than bus but cheaper than car.

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Writing Feedback / Travelling to Work in Houston and the most popular choice of transportation - IELTS Task 1 [2]

The table explains about the kind of transport which people use to go to work and and the bar charts shows how much CO2 emission from each form of transport. Overall, the most common vehicle is cars with only one person and it causes more pollution than combination of other vehicles.

Looking at the details, the most popular means of transport is car at 48 per cent while cycle or walk is the least common transport at 4 per cent. Car with one person outnumbering train/bus by 5 per cent. Car with more than one person has a lower percentage than train/bus but higher than cycle/walk. Train or bus has the highest average age while cycle/walk has the lowest average age.

The vehicle which cause the most pollution is car with driver only at 0.32 kg/person/km while cycle/walk do not cause pollution at all. Car with 3 pasangers has lower CO2 emission than a car with driver only but it has higher number than bus/train.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 Cambridge 8 The Reasons and Destinations of Visit Abroad [3]

The tables give information about a cross-section survey with 100,000 respondents were being asked about the reason why they traveled abroad and the destination which they visited by main region in 1994 to 1998. Overall, the highest number of the visitors was in 1998 and most of them went to Western Europe for holiday.

Looking at the details, in 1998 the number of the people who traveled was the highest, at 28,828 while in 1995 had the least number of visitors, at 21610. The biggest reason was for holiday in each year while other reasons had the smallest number every year. The second biggest reason was for business. Visiting friends and relatives had lower number of people than business but had higher number than other reasons in each year.

The most popular destination was in Western Europe while in North America was the least famous destination for every year. Other areas had lower number of visitors than in Western Europe but it had higher number of visitors than in North America.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 Cambridge 8 : The Benefits And Drawbacks of Youth People Who Postpone Their Education [2]

Topic : In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel f or a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

After graduated from Senior High School, many youngsters decide to postpone their education for a year to find a job or travel before they continue their study in a university. In several countries, the government support them to do this. The benefits and drawbacks of youth who delay their study before enter university will be analyze in the paragraph below.

Knowledge not only can be found in the university but also in other places. By working and traveling people will learn many things and get new experience. Sometimes, the information which they are found in the workplace or on the way they visit a place can not they get if only by studying in the school. By working people learn how to be a discipline and responsible and by traveling people can improve their social skill. Experience also make people become wiser, more patient and more respectful to others.

On the other hand, when youth decide to defer their education,there are some disadvantages too. The will be left by their friends. While their friends already in the third semester they just enter the university. In some cases, there are many youngsters who feels that they already get enough income prefer to not continue their study to higher level. If many young people think the same way so it will effects the future of the country.

In conclusion, some positive things to youth who choose to be an employee or traveler are getting different knowledge and skill. However, the youngsters still need to continue their study although they get much salary from work.

Writing Feedback / Summary TED talks : The Reporting System That Sexual Assault Survivors Want [2]

Many cases of sexual assault are not reported. One in 5 women and one in 13 men are sexually assault but only less than 10 per cent report it to school or police. The process to make a report started with giving report until it reported need 11 month. The process takes a long times and most of the perpetrators only spend a day in a prison.

Jessica Ladd is an epidemiologist who interested in infectious disease. She talked to college survivors about what they wish. Most of the students said that they wish there is a website which provide about reporting sexual assault in a save way. They also prefer to make an electronic report than talk to someone who may believe or not believe with their stories. Secure documents and preserve evidence are the most important thing in the website.

Jessica Ladd and her team already made a website which launch in August at 2 college campuses. There is unique matching system in the website, if one person report a name than another person report the same name, it will automatically sent the data for investigation then follow up. This system can prevent 59 per cent of the incidence because the repeat perpetrators will get a lesson and get what they deserve so they will not do the same mistakes. The name of the system is information escrow and the system can be installed not only in the campus but also in the workplace or military.

TED Link : ted.com/talks/jessica_ladd_the_reporting_system_that_sexual_assault_survivors_want

Writing Feedback / Summary from an article in new scientist : How to Watch the Great Perseid Meteor [2]

Do you know about Perseid Meteor? Perseid meteor is a meteor which come from the direction of constellation Perseus. This phenomenon happens every year in between 17 July and 24 August but only a few days. Perseid meteor shower is a result of earth crossing through debris from the tail of comet Swift-Turtle. The friction of dust and rock with the atmosphere make an appearance as bright lights in the night's sky. Perseid meteor shower mostly can be seen in the northern hemisphere between midnight and dawn on Friday morning of 12 august. "People can see more than 200 meteors per hour and this number actually is double as usual rate" said Bill Coke from NASA Meteoroid Environment Office Huntsville, Alabama. People need to keep their phone in their pocket because the light from the phone will ruin night vision and makes them harder to see the streaks. People do not need to use their telescope or binoculars to see the meteors because they can see it with naked eyes.

Link : newscientist/article/2100849-heres-how-to-watch-the-great-perseid-meteor-shower-tonight/

Writing Feedback / When people live in a small area, they know each other well. Threre's no chance for that in big city [2]

Task 2 IELTS : The Advantages And Disadvantages of Living in a Small Community

A few years ago, many people like to live in a small village than in a town because it is more peaceful and more comfort. The changes of economy make many of them move in order to many ingredients have increasing price also job vacancies are wider in a urban area than in a suburban so many people decided to move to a big city to get a better life. Unfortunately, people who live in a big city do not know their neighborhood as well as in the village. This essay aim to explain the advantage and disadvantage for people to live in a small community.

When people live in a small area, they will know each other well. Eventhough, they do not have close relationship, they will give their hand to help someone who need them. For example, when someone held an event in their house, their neighbor will help without asking for a feedback. Another advantage is people regard others like their own family.

On the other hand, there is a drawback to live in a small area like blabbing behind your back. It makes us feel uncomfortable with them when we know about it. Sometime the information that spread are not true at all. People will accuse us as a bad person although we do not do anything wrong.

In conclusion, the benefits to live in a tiny neighborhood are people will know each other well and take care of other people like they are one blood but they like to blab and exaggerate the story.

Writing Feedback / Task 1 IELTS : International Visitors to New Zealand :Transport Used During visit [3]

The bar chart gives information about the common transport which visitors use when they visit New Zealand. Overall, most of visitors are use public transport to go around when they visit New Zealand.

Looking at the details, car becomes the most familiar transport with more than 60 per cent of people use it. There are two vehicles which has almost the same number to be operated by holiday makers, plane and coach. The third most popular transport is train, at 20 per cent. And the boat becomes the least transport which visitor makers bring to bear, less than 10 per cent.

The highest percentage to be operated during visit is car. As a transportation which visitors use plane outnumbering coach by one per cent but both of the vehicles has percentage more tha 30 per cent. Train has a lower percentage than coach. It makes boat becomes the least percentage of all vehicles.