Writing Feedback / People have difference ways to achieve satisfaction - holiday assignment on the happiness [2]

Everybody wants to be happy. I believe that achieving happiness do not difficult. It is depend on their self about their willingness and needs in future.

Last time, I have read status in social network that said "happiness is so simply, just laughing and living together with our family". However, this statement is not wrong. Whereas, simple or difficulties for being happy is a choice for everybody, and they have same right to be happy.

On one hand, people have difference ways to achieve satisfaction. It is depend on their dream and needs. For example Dayak people who live in remote areas in Borneo. They live in darkness without advance technology and higher education. They always fill free and live in sufficiency. They think, it is their comfort zone and having happy.

Meanwhile, other example is story of my live. I have lived in modern era with advance technology. Furthermore, I have studied in collage and have many friends. However, right now, I do not fill happy yet owing to the fact that I have high dream for my future live. To achieve that, I should work hard and struggle. I think that I will be happy if I can achieve my dream.

All in all, every person has own way to be joyful. Being simply or difficulties on the way to be happy that is depend on their self. I suggest that we should relax and always be grateful in every condition in order to achieve that inasmuch as it will bring about serenity in our live.

Writing Feedback / Numbers of power generation in two countries in 1980 and 2010, provided by the pie chart [6]

A breakdown of the number of power generation based on source in both of countries in 1980 and 2010 is provided by pie charts. Overall, it can be seen that the main source that was used to generate electricity in New Zealand was coal and this country did not use nuclear as source in both of frame time. However, Germany was able to utilise nuclear as source to produce electricity in both of frame time.

In 1980, using coal as the resource in the New Zealand was higher number of unit than in Germany about 56 and 28 respectively. Furthermore, at that moment, producing electricity city using natural gas in both of countries was quite similar about under a third, eventhough Germany more can utilise than New Zealand.

In 2010, utilising coal in New Zealand illustrated a significant difference for using this material in Germany. Besides, natural gas power source in both countries had same number about 2. Meanwhile, Germany more able to use nuclear than New Zealand, eventhough this country just used 2 unit hydro power source and this member was less than in New Zealand.

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Writing Feedback / The number of people from abroad (unit in million) who came to some countries, during 15 years [2]

Writing IELTS Task 1- international tourist arrivals

A breakdown of the number foreign people (unit in million) who come in five countries during 15 years. overall, it can be seen that the number of visitor in all countries illustrated upward trend, eventhough 2010 saw a slight decrease in international tourist arrivals in USA.

Foreign visitor arrivals in Egypt and Brazil stood at quite same number about 10 in 1995, eventhough both of them saw the lowest number at that time. Meanwhile, in the 5 years later, France comes at 60. However, USA still become the most popular destination country.

On the other hand, in 2005, all of destination countries illustrated a steady rise and peaked at 5 difference point. However, Brazil became country that was visited by the fewest number of visitor at that time. In 2010, France and USA number of visitors illustrated same point in about 90 and both of them demonstrated higher number of comers than Malaysia that just experienced about 50 visitors. Whereas, Egypt still became more popular than Brazil. (167w)

Writing Feedback / Cable News Ratings - daily viewings of the Channel One [3]

A breakdown of figure for daily viewing Chanel (unit in million viewers per day) one news based on 4 different times in a day during a year. Overall, it can be seen that the number of viewer in three different in a day stand at not the same point in January while news that on screen in 11 pm start to be viewed by people in Malaysia suddenly it show the most dramatic increase.

6 pm is the most favourite time to watch news in January while number of people who watch news in 9.30 pm are 3. In the next two month, the number of viewer in 6 pm fall at about 4, but it still became the higher number viewers in 1 pm tent to stable by previous month. In May, the number of people who tend to watch news in 6 pm and 9.30 pm illustrate the close number while 1 pm show the lowest viewers.

Meanwhile, in August both of viewers in 6 pm and 9.30 pm decrease while the number of viewers in 11 pm incline sharply and peak at 4. Furthermore in December most people tent to watch news in 1 pm show quite same point with previous period, and 11 pm is the most unpopular time to watch news. (216w)

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Writing Feedback / A perception of several people, that building new libraries is impractical and just waste money. [4]

Some people think it is waste of money to establish library since the public can use the internet at home to obtain information. Do you agree or disagree?

reading traditional books today

Developing technology lead people to utilise the internet to get the information and this reason bring about perception for several people that building new libraries is usefulness and just waste money. Personally, I disagree with this notion owing to the fact that spending much time to read some information on screen bring about worst impact for healthy eyes. Furthermore, not all part of this country, the internet can be used easily.

First of all, developing knowledge by reading book directly gives more constructive effect than reading book on screen. The most important in this case is healthy eyes. Based on research in USA about 78% myopia suffers comes from the internet addiction, and just very little proportion that get this illness by reading book directly. Despite this, book lovers will say that if establishing libraries is usefulness, newspaper company should be closed too.

On the other hand, the internet cannot be accessed by all of district in world wide in as much as signal cannot through all of areas. Syukron, researcher form Egypt, say that about 42% area in this universe that cannot be reached the signal. Another reason why is not the best information source is many worse information in the internet or can be called as invalid info form unknown blog.

All in all, reading books directly give benefit effect for readers. It is reason why establishing library is not worse activities. Furthermore, the internet can not be access in all of part in the world and also not all information from the internet can be trusted.

Writing Feedback / The drought is the crucial problem for some areas in the globe like in Papua [5]

Recent year, drought is the crucial problem for some areas in this country like in Papua. Many reasons why it happen and deforestation is one of these reasons. In many perspective, reforestation and forest preservation are the best way to deal with this problem.

First of all, Water is the most important of human needs, but many areas in this country just have little water providing. Deforestation is the main cause of this problem. Marchela, scientist from UGM that focus on plant in her research, say that about 46% trees in this country have been deforested and it makes that area becoming scarcity. Owing to the fact that water can flow easily with subsurface If trees still exist, root of these plant can persevere underground water.

Perserving forest and reforestation are the best way to tackle this problem. Hutama, professor from Upsalla University, say that trees can keep water within subsurface, more tree that still live, more water that is provided. For example, in Borneo, two years ago, this area had a long drought. After there is action to plant trees simultaneously by massive man, right now this area has enough water to fulfil inhabitant needs. On the other hand, deforestation in this country is caused by illegal logging, so to deal with this problem, government should make rule and punishment about that.

All in all, water scarcity is the crucial problem in this country. The main reason of this problem is deforestation and this is caused by many illegal logging. Making rule government about that is the best way to tackle this problem, besides reforestation is needed.

Writing Feedback / The outcome in five countries including UK, USA, Canada, and Japan based on five categories in 2009 [3]

A breakdown of figure for outcome in five countries including UK, USA, Canada, and Japan based on five categories in 2009 is provided by bar graph. Overall, it can be seen that the highest proportion of spending money in all these countries was for housing. In contrast, the figure for health care and clothing demonstrated both of lower proportion than others.

First of all, expenditure of food showed that the United States spent less money for it than Canada while Japan experienced the highest proportion for it. Meanwhile, out coming for housing in US demonstrated the highest proportion about just over 25%, and other countries illustrated the percentage for it no more than a quarter. Furthermore, spending money for transportation showed quite big different of the percentage and all of these countries experienced no more than 20%.

On the other hand, out coming for health care in the United Kingdom showed the lowest proportion and the United States demonstrated the highest proportion. Meanwhile, both of Canada and Japan illustrated quite the same proportion in that case. On one hand, figure for clothing experienced slight different proportion for all these countries about no more than 6%.

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Writing Feedback / Teenagers are needed to involve voluntarily into certain community [3]

Teenagers are needed to involve certain community. In my view, working people for developing certain grub should be paid by rational salary owing to the fact that they have spent much time and thinking for it.

First of all, in this era people have the highest needs that should be fulfilled, and working is one of ways to achieve it. moreover, when youths work for certain community, they should be paid in as much as they have spent much time and thinking for it. if their efforts are calculated, they will get much money from it when they work in company. furthermore, this money can help them to fulfil their needs. In which, money can make people to be more spirit to do their job and achieve the target.

On the other hand, developing community cannot be achieved by ordinary effort. It need money and expert teenagers. Money make this community easy to prepare their equipment that is needed to develop their grub. Moreover, developing community needs big thinking from influences people who should be paid by higher tax than other people. Regarding to Syukron from Nancy University that say money become basic perspective for developing something in this world because everything need money, and without money, people cannot do anything.

All in all, everything needs money and to develop certain community, people should be paid for it because each people has needs that should be fulfilled. Moreover, the effort of certain people should be appreciate by giving salary.

Writing Feedback / In the globalisation era, children are pushed to be ready for their future live [3]

In the globalisation era, children are pushed to be ready for their future live, and this reason causes more pressure for students from academics, social, and also trade perspective. In my view, the main problem of this pressure is that youths should prepare their self to survive in their future live and giving suggestion that it can be solved easily by children is the best way for reducing pressure In young generations perspective.

First of all, in the modern era, the human needs always grow by the time, and people are pushed to be more ready for all changing in their future life. furthermore, children are the first people that should prepare about it. Hutama from Nancy university say that 20 years later, this world will be totally different from right now. If young generation do not prepare it, they cannot survive in that time. this reason put the youths in the pressure circumstance from economy, academic, and also social perspective.

On the other hand, this pressure can be reduced if students enjoy when prepare it. Syukon from Uppsala university say that if people do something that they love, they do not get pressure even just a little. Thanks to this statement, reducing this pressure in students can be solved by giving suggestion that they can prepare it for their future live, and it is their necessity. Moreover, children should be given motivation about that and also inspiration from previous people.

All in all, pressuring children from academics, social and economic perspective is caused by children needs for their future life. suggestion that they can prepare it easily is the best ways to reduce the pressure about it.

Writing Feedback / The proportion of pupils who passed the final examination in their secondary school [3]

A breakdown of the proportion of pupils who pass from final examination in their secondary school based on subjects and sexes during the period 2010-2011 is provided by bar graph. Overall, it can be seen that computer science was the easiest subject for the girls, and geography was the hardest one for them. Besides, the boys tended to get difficult in chemistry.

Regarding to science program, the students who could pass the physics examination about 36.7% for boy students and for girl students, the graph showed quite little different proportion. Furthermore, the figure for mathematics demonstrated quite the same proportion for both of sexes. Meanwhile, the proportion of boy pupils who success in the chemistry examination was about 14.1%. whereas, the figure for computer science demonstrated about over than 42.1 % for both genders.

On the other hand, in social science program, the percentage for the boys who success in history exam was about 22.9%, and this proportion was lower than the girls percentages in same case. Meanwhile, both of genders experienced quite the same proportion in foreign language subject, and in geography, the boys showed higher than the girls.

Writing Feedback / Writing IELTS Task 2- hard willing and hard working as the way to successfulness [2]

Some people think that hard work and determination are the keys to success in life. Some, on the other hand, think that there are other factors behind a successful life. Give your opinion

Hard willing and hardworking are both keys to success in reality life. However, some people think that not just these couple of factors that make our dream come true. In my perspective, hard effort and determination are the most important factors that can deliver people to be success owing to the fact that both of them can push people to always struggle with their dream and never give up until they can achieve what they want.

First of all, a result is always based on how people do it, and both of factors always give a turning out that has same proportion with what has been done before. There are many well-known people who achieve their success just by doing it. For example Erwin Schrödinger, the most influences person in science. Previously, he is humble person who has not extraordinary talent. In as much as he always study more and more, he can find novel invention in science that no one made it before.

On the other hand, many gifted people with their extraordinary talent who lose their dream just because they have not hard willing and hard working. Thomas Alfa Edison said that to be success, people just need 1% intelligence and 99% effort to make it happen. Thank to this statement, talent do not give much influences and it cannot change anything without action.

All in all, hard willing and hardworking are both of the essential factors to achieve well-being in reality life, and without action a dream never happen.

Writing Feedback / 'Head hunting' - solitary and work in a team [5]

Some people think when recruiting, companies should aim to take on people who are innovative and able to work independently while others considered they should recruit people who are able to work in a team and follow instructions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that solitary and innovative people are the best one to be recruited as employees in certain company while others think cooperative people and always following the instruction can give more beneficial effect in company. in my view, company more needs people who can work in a team than other type persons in as much as it brings about affirmative effect like sharing knowledge and supporting each other in their work.

First of all, recruiting is the essential part to choose the best employees who will develop this company. Choosing independent and innovative people as workers will create competitive circumstance in the office. Moreover, it will bring about novel invention that gives beneficial impact for developing this company. However, it also brings about drawback for company that to be the best one, employees will fight each other. As a result, it will make a broken company.

On the other hand, team work is the essential one in a company due to the fact that it bring about affirmative impact for this company like sharing knowledge. As we know that employees will come from various background and have different knowledge. it will give new invention when they discuss together. Furthermore, all of them will support each other to make it happen. Whereas, following instruction that has been discussed is the important one to achieve the target.

All in all, working together in a team will give beneficial effort for this company like sharing knowledge and supporting each other in their work, and individual people just will give negative impact for a company, eventhough they have a great idea.

Writing Feedback / Parkinson's disease may start in the gut and travel to the brain - speaking punishment [4]

Parkinson's disease may start in the gut and travel to the brain

Previously, people think that Parkison's disease is caused by brain cell damage, and these day it is predicted that it come from gut. This disease is one of sort deadly diseases. Eventhough, it can be prevent by some medicine, the influence of this disease can kill neutron within brain.

Thank to turn out of research that use mice as animal experiments, this disease is caused by unique bacteria in gun that maybe come from misconception medicine or influences of pesticides for farmers who use it . These bacteria are named synuclein which are able to travel to brain. If people can identify first location of this disease, patients can be saved by injecting certain medicines or antibiotics.

Writing Feedback / A breakdown of mechanism to produce electricity using wave is provided by the charts [4]

A breakdown of mechanism to produce electricity using wave is provided by the charts. Overall, it can be seen that electricity can be generated by moving air within column to rotate the turbine.

First of all, using wave as source to generate power can be done by preparation the equipment at the first. The tools that are needed in this process are chamber, turbine, column, and lamp. After that, all of these tools are assembled on the cliff or sea wall that separate between land and sea , and the instrument is ready to be used.

On one hand, generating electricity process is started by entered sea water into chamber that causes air within chamber moving up through column which can stir the turbine. This process can turn on the lamp. And then, when water go out from chamber, pressure within chamber increase. As a result, the air in the outer of column enter into chamber again trough column and rotate the turbine in same direction that can make lamp remain lit as indicator that electricity can be generated successfully.

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Writing Feedback / The information about the transformation of area shrouding the lake from 2000 to 2009. [2]

The couple of figures provide information about the transformation of area shrouding the lake from 2000 to 2009. Overall, it can be seen that lake in 2009 was becoming narrow as pond, and many public facilities was added around this area, even though residential areas ware decreased in that moment.

First of all, in 2000, west side of lake was old town where nine-years later this area became office and university. Meanwhile, previously, north-west side there was derelict warehouse that has been changed as car park in 2009.

On the other hand, in 2000, art centre can be looked in south-west direction from lake that on more than a decade, it has been changed to be cinema. Furthermore, industrial area in front of art centre in 2000 has been renovated to become shopping centre. On one hand, industrial complex that can be showed in 2009 has been widened from residential area and industrial complex before.

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