Writing Feedback / Nowadays, as the world becomes more global, there is a new tendency to learn English [3]

The world's English mania-Jay Walker

Nowadays, as the world becomes more global, there is a new tendency to produce language which can be accepted globally. This inevitably brings the mania to learn English. Mania itself can be beneficial or even harmful. The mania of learning English affects billions of people all around the world, particularly in China. In China, learning English is instructed and managed by the state, thus taking China as the largest English speaking country worldwide.

There are several reasons underpinning this mania. Generally, the people believe that by learning English it will evoke the opportunity for a better life, better job offer, and better education. Despite, it is actually have to be recognized that our first language is our mother native language in which English is just the second one. Knowing English of course a merit, as the individuals can engage in wider conversation concerned with the common problem of the world, but it is also important to take into account that there are still other languages such as music and mathematics that allow us to connect each other.

Writing Feedback / How to stop the deadly disease that is spread by mosquitoes? Mosquito, malaria, and education [3]

Every problem has its way to be solved. In this recent decade, the number of childhood death experiences a decrease. The predominant factor that brings this number get lower is related with the increase in income, so that the vaccines can be used globally. Concern with this issue, there is also a question of how to stop the deadly disease that is spread by mosquitoes? Answering this question, there are several ways that people generally do, such as get the bed nets, use spray with DDT, and treat the patients with quinine. This kind of thing can cut deaths by over 50 percent, but the most significant way in order to get rid of this problem is we need the cooperation from scientists and drug companies.

Moreover, talking about education, if we want to make a good education, the key point is by having a great teacher. Also in learning system, everybody needs to be involved. All in all, invest in education is the most important matter to have a strong future of the country.

Writing Feedback / A new study reveals that happy people have a great sense to cheer their spouse up [3]

Happy People Make Their Spouses Healthier

Happiness related to physical well being. The individuals who are happier usually also healthier and less physical problem. At the moment individuals fell good, they tend to be more active. Related with this, a new study reveals that the happy people have a great sense to cheer their spouse up. The people whose spouses are happier have predominant factor to have better in shape. Data confirm that people with a happy spouse are 34% more likely to be healthy.

There are several reasons why a happy person has the possibility to improve their partner's health. Firstly, it is because a happy partner has a number of positive energy to take care the significant others. Secondly, happiness correlates with better diet, routine exercise, and a good quality of sleep, it also leads the individuals stay away from self-destructive behavior. Thirdly, of course the happy people will make their partner's life easier by enjoying all the activities that they have.

Writing Feedback / Restricting the air travel to prevent air pollution [3]

There is an opinion that the prevention of air pollution can be reached by restricting the air travel. Regarding this issue, I stand on the line that I firmly disagree, as there are other major causes that promote the air pollution.

As there are myriads of nonstop flight services every day, it is clear that this may the major contributor of air pollution. Annually, the report reveals that there is a necessity to have control the emission of this air transportation. For example, the type of boing 737 as the common use in some cases experiences the disturbance in gas emission system. As result, it produces more damage output of fuel burns. Therefore, it may consider that this will bring a number of pollution in air.

However, there are also arguments that reveal if actually the other factors contribute more to the air pollution rather than the air transportation. Firstly, the research conducted by the green peace scientists found that the number one major cause to trigger this degenerative pollution is related with industrial works, as the number of company's factories increase every year progressively, it is of course in line with the result of emission that they release to the air. In addition, the second contributor is CFC or Cloro Fluoro Carbon, in which result from the use of air conditioners, refrigerators, and the other devices that we use as our daily instruments.

In conclusion, even though the air travel contributes to bring pollution, the others contribute more than that. Concern with that, it is imperative to start eco-friendly lifestyle as we can save the environment.

Writing Feedback / The causing related to the escalating number of crime rate and some possible solutions to tackle it. [2]

Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?

Significantly, the rate of criminality increase every year. In keeping with that, this is essay will elaborate the causes related this escalating number of crime rate and some possible solutions to tackle it.

There are three approaches to explain the increase in crime rate. Firstly, from economic point of view, it is because of unemployment and the lack of job demand, in case of that the people take a shortcut to commit crime due to fulfill the daily needs. Secondly, from social point of view, the tendency toward social inequality in which the people from lower economic class feel oppressed by the upper and middle class. Thirdly, from the standpoint of culture, the lack of tolerance among the diverse culture tends to cause conflict and leads to a crime.

However, there are several ways can be done due to overcome this problem. Firstly, enabling participation of parents and educational institutions in educating the children as the future generation to have a high value of morality. In addition, it all coming back to the legal sanction, provide strict penalty is required to bring a deterrent effect to other people in order that they do not do the same. Furthermore, it is of course regarding with improvement to the previous three area; economic, social, and culture that cause the preference to involve in criminality.

In conclusion, even though criminality is a serious issue, there are several steps that the government can do to prevent the increase of its rate. Concerns with that, as the whole society have willingness to join hands, it may be possible that the crime rate will decrease.

Writing Feedback / How the parents endangering their children imagination [2]

Children nowadays are becoming overwhelm with numerous school activities and abundant pressure related their performance. This is indirectly demolishing their opportunity to develop creative thinking to explore their world and to discover their self. Children spend about eight hours per day on modern technology devices, besides the scheduled program that they have.

Related this issue, the parents need to be more sensitive to realize how their children want to get free from all this rigid agendas. As the result of this kind of manner, children become passive in their leisure time, involved and engaged in passive entertainment by using their fingertip on the surface of tablet, instead of have time to dream and imagine. This is undeniable coming up with the parents desire, as they are very scare if their children not having an excellent in academic or other fields. Something important that the parents should take into account in which imagination needs free room and time to thrive, and this is absolutely based on their support. Therefore, as the parents want to develop their children imagination it is imperative that they give them space to have it.

Writing Feedback / Sir Ken Robinson stated that every child is born as a talented artist. [2]

Sir Ken Robinson-Do Schools Kill Creativity

Sir Ken Robinson stated that every child born as a talented artist. Most of the people just forgot that as they were children, they had an extraordinary capacity for innovating. Children is remarkable due to their bravery, they do not even afraid to get wrong and this is important that if you are not getting wrong you will not come out with anything original. However, unfortunately, as the people growing up this sense of fearlessness to explore the world starts to fade away.

As individuals become an adult, they start to be a rigid on thinking and less creative, this is something inevitable as it results from school processes. Nevertheless, it is generally realize that everybody has interest in educational issue. Along with that, the purpose of a study nowadays focuses on how the institutions produce university professors. There is also tendency to pay more attention to particular subject concern with math instead of arts, in case of the future preparation. Covering the issue, it is important to have a note that creativity also important in education as well as literacy.

Writing Feedback / Comprehending communication relies on cultural mastery of the local language. [2]

Writing Task 2-Understanding the culture by speaking the language

Culture is a complex heritage that runs in the blood across generations, it includes the way individuals communicate, this terms leads to the opinion in which individual may only understand what the others talk about if they understand the language. Relating this issue, I stand on the line that comprehension in communication not only relies on cultural mastery of that local language.

Being connected with the people is not merely about language itself, there are several instruments within individuals that allow us to engage in. Firstly, as a remarkable creature, human nature enables individuals to recognize expressions. Research shows that expression is a universal media across all the cultures around the world that gives occasion to get the meaning of someone's feeling. Furthermore, there is also cross culture intelligence, according to the review of some literatures, this kind of intelligence brings the individuals have the ability to aware and notice other cultures manner without have to be a part of it.

In addition, it is something generally admit that it is very hard to understand the culture of a country as a whole package, it is due to the numerous of local languages and cultures exist. For example, in Indonesia every region has local tradition and particular language to communicate. However, this is not making a relational problem, because this varies result in a national language. Therefore, even though the people come from different background they still can contact each other.

In conclusion, as there are myriads of cultures in each country, it does not become a boundary to get along. Concerned with this, preserve the cultural components is beneficial regarding that contrastive tradition teach us to fully functioning in appropriate way to appreciate the diversity.

Writing Feedback / The table shows secondary school attendance during period of 2000 to 2009 [3]

The table shows secondary school attendance during period of 2000 to 2009. Generally, the trend reveals gradual descent of attendance in Specialist Schools, Grammar Schools, and Voluntary-controlled Schools. Meanwhile, in Community Schools the tendency of attendance has risen from 2000 to 2009.

Specialist Schools experience 2% of descent from 2000 to 2009. This is suggested that there is a decline about 0,2% related with attendance every year. Moving over to Grammar Schools, from 2000 to 2005 the change was lower than the period of 2005-2009; those are 5% and 7%.

Moreover, in keeping with Voluntary-controlled Schools, the alteration over 2000 to 2005 and 2005-2009 gradually increased 14% and 18%. One interesting fact, that in Community Schools, the progress was different with increased preference number concerned with secondary school attendance. From 2000 to 2005, the increase is 20% and from 2005-2009 is 26% which on average, there is 5,1% of increase in secondary school attendance annually.

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Writing Feedback / The shortage of nurses largely affects the health care system around the world [3]

IELTS Summary 12: Nurse Migration

The shortage of nurses largely affects the health care system around the world. In developing countries, this shortage primary because nurses migrate to developed countries searching for a better prosperity. Different with developed countries, the shortage of nurses related with an aging population that requires more health care services.

The nurse migration itself left unfilled position in origin country. As a result, there are only a few number of qualified health care practitioners who have to face many patients. Concerned with this condition, health care services often administered by assistant nurses who have only basic skills. Thus, this migration actually leave some problems behind both in developing and developed countries.

Writing Feedback / Hula dancing plays important function as an important aspect of Hawaiian culture. [2]

Hula dancing plays important function as an aspect of Hawaiian culture. The origin of hula dancing has its roots in Hawaiian mythology. History suggested that formerly hula performed as part of ritual in honor of god or goddess. Traditionally, men and woman can perform this dance.

Hula is well-known dancing from Hawaiian culture, which catches the attention of many people around the world. Hula dancing still exists until this modern era with different touch from the ancient. The ancient hula relies on energetic movement, whereas the modern style is slower. This day, hula function move from ritual ceremony to form of entertainment. However, the transformation of hula is a way to maintain Hawaiian culture identity.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Summary 10: Origins of Writing [2]

Ancient civilizations believe that writing helps to deliver messages to God. As a communication media to God, ancient peoples gave a high value for writing activities. When the people started to establish permanent place in farming communities, writing system also developed.

The documentations reveal that writing system independently developed in three parts of the world; Mesopotamia, China, and Mesoamerica. Ancient Sumerians in Mesopotamia created the first writing system in 3000 B.C. in case of land ownership. Furthermore, Ancient Chinese began to write on metal and bone around 1500 B.C. and Ancient Maya created writing system as they applied symbols on religious structures and recorded the deeds of their rulers. Yet, the scholars proposed that Zapotec culture was the oldest civilization that used writing system. However, related with the facts, the writing system that we use today can't be apart from the previous history of ancient civilizations.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Summary 8: Terri Trespicio-Stop searching for your passion [4]

Most of people believe that they have to follow their passion. This kind of thing makes people stand still. After graduate from school, many people do not know what to do because they don't know their passion. Related with that, it is important to know that passion is not about a plan, passion is a dynamic feeling. Too busy searching for passion can lead the people lost the opportunities in life.

Passion created by living it not by organize it. Passion is the entire energy that we use to solve whatever in front of us, so that we don't need to search the passion. Passion related with something that we can use to contribute. Finally, in keeping with that, there's a saying, "You don't need to follow your passion, your passion follow you".

Writing Feedback / One of the major public transportation in Europe refers to subway. The first one was opened in 1863 [3]

Transportation is a vital aspect numerous modern big cities. One of the major public transportation in Europe refers to subway. The first subway was opened in 1863 and located in London.

In Europe, three of largest underground rail services are located in London, Paris, and Moscow. Each of the cities has its own uniqueness. London was the first city that launched the underground rail system and introduced the method for subway tracks called "cut and cover". Paris has a beautiful decoration in the station with myriad of artworks, such as paintings, mosaics, and sculptures. The last, Moscow the city with a large number of tracks lying above the ground. Eventually, the underground rail system expanded the service in case of its benefit for the people.

Writing Feedback / Sarah Lewis - Embrace the near win (TED) [2]

Sarah Lewis, an art historian, describes the line between losing and winning. That line called "the near win". We convert success to mastery when we value the gift of the near win. If success is about hitting the target, then mastery is not about having a commitment to a goal, but a constant pursue.

Mastery closely related with the near win. Both of that focused on what we plan to do to reach out our goals right now. Near win is the reason to continue, also it makes us never feel enough to overcome the problems. In keeping with that, embrace the near win means that we still have more to do.