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Nov 2, 2017
Scholarship / Chevening Leadership Essay - A physician leading a team to save a life [5]
Attika, this essay is not totally a leadership and influencing essay because you referred to uncertainty on your part. A true leader does not second guess herself. A true leader never feels uncertain. A true leader takes charge without a second thought. Unfortunately, that is not consistently presented in your essay. Possibly because you are trying to serve up one too many "stories" at the same time. Why don't you try focusing more on explaining how you developed your leadership and influencing skill instead? Only this time, do it with an air of confidence in your writing and a strong example that shows you taking charge and influencing the nurses instead. The way it looks, the nurses don't really consider you a leader and neither were you able to influence them into respecting you as their leader since they wanted to call the GP instead of simply taking their cues from their "leader and influencer". Try to make a more solid representation as the essay at the moment badly needs development.
Attika, this essay is not totally a leadership and influencing essay because you referred to uncertainty on your part. A true leader does not second guess herself. A true leader never feels uncertain. A true leader takes charge without a second thought. Unfortunately, that is not consistently presented in your essay. Possibly because you are trying to serve up one too many "stories" at the same time. Why don't you try focusing more on explaining how you developed your leadership and influencing skill instead? Only this time, do it with an air of confidence in your writing and a strong example that shows you taking charge and influencing the nurses instead. The way it looks, the nurses don't really consider you a leader and neither were you able to influence them into respecting you as their leader since they wanted to call the GP instead of simply taking their cues from their "leader and influencer". Try to make a more solid representation as the essay at the moment badly needs development.