Writing Feedback / The Relationships of Employees with Their Manager and Co-Workers [6]

Writing Task I (November 3, 2016)

The charts describe the results of questionnaires about employee relationships with their managers and colleagues in workplace after five years gap in 2005 and 2009. Overall, both of pie charts show that "very good" is the most choices of employees as the description of their relationships towards their managers and peer-workers and had been slightly increased over the years in 2005 and 2009.

Based on the grouping of pie charts first type which describes of relationships between employees and their managers had shown that there are less 10 % of employees who give answers "fair" and the employees who not have managers has been fewer in 2005 with 1% than in 2009 with 5 % after had increased by 4 %. Almost the answers of employees around on extremely "very good" choices which had been steadily above 60 % since in 2005 until 2009 %.

Same conditions with the pie charts second type which provides information on relationships between employees and their colleagues had shown that there are less 3 % of employees who not have co-workers in their jobs. A closer look reveals that "very good" answers is the highest percentage of employees opinions about their co-workers with consistently above on 60 % after had increased significantly by 7 % from 2005 t0 2009.

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Writing Feedback / The People Perspectives to Others by Their Clothes Wear [3]

Writing Task 2 IELTS (Cambridge IELTS book Unit 8D page 52)

Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, the innovations of fashion styles have rapidly changed, Every people as a part of fashions marketing targets certainly have any perspectives for their outfit looks. The fashion styles of people are depending on their favorable fashion trends. But, the judges of others who seeing the people by his covers seemingly have contradictive views.

Firstly, based on people views that have given evaluations the person just by his clothes. There are many people who have typically like this and usually use this way to giving interpretations for other social groups. Ordinary people who have narrow perspectives often use some attributes of the person as tools for makes classification states. They had made the standard criteria for separated people class by their fashion styles. For example, the society that come from high economic class have been identified by their clothes styles that includes any luxury or branded things, such as branded clothes, luxurious watches, original leather things, branded shoes and another high-level class things and this standard automatically applied towards them with lower class background as their measurement social class. Even though this way is not usually ensured people real backgrounds but it has affected many people perspectives today.

On the other hand, secondly, views come from the people who have the contrary perspective or disagree with the statement and have a principle for never judge people by his covers. Actually, the people who have opinions like this usually wiser than others and also have a wider perspective than generals in giving a label or a judge towards other. For instance, they do not directly judge the people by his outfit looks but outweigh giving evaluations from the people personality characters. However, they probably do not look people in their luxury dresses, casual clothes, originals branded or imitation brands that people wear before known the people personality and the clothes is not tools for them measure other personalities.

To sum up, every people have difference views depend on their standard criteria in judging people by clothes wear. However, the appearance of people from outside is not always shown their exact personalities.

(348 words)

Writing Feedback / The air craft passenger satisfaction rate toward the main services of air travel in the US [4]

CUSTOMER SATISFACTION LEVELS IN THE US AIRLINES

The chart and the table show the information of air craft passenger satisfaction rate toward the main services of air travel in the US between in 1999, 2000 and 2007. Overall, the satisfied of the passenger has shown upward trends or has increased steadily and the dissatisfied has dropped together with increases of the passenger satisfied, and during in 1999 until 2007 the satisfaction rates of customer air agency has increased gradually by 5 % as average increases.

Based on the table data, the schemes of data almost had shown a similar trends where there are upward and downward trends in each years or in every passenger's satisfied up then the percentage of dissatisfied will be down consistently until in 2007 which the satisfied had increased by 7 % and the dissatisfied had declined by 8% smaller than in 1999.

While, based on the chart data, we can seeing the amount of customer's satisfaction towards air agency also has inclined percentage during the years, where there are upward trends of satisfaction towards any services provided, but only the comfort of seats that had not shown the data comparison of its satisfaction before 2007. Almost of the customer's satisfied had been inclined by 1% until 20 % for each of air agency services.

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Writing Feedback / The healthy food can affect the learning ability of children. [4]

To learn effectively, children need to eat a healthy meal at school.
How true is this statement?
Whose responsibility is it to provide food for school children ?

The healthy food can affect the learning ability of children. Today, manage the child foods to keep healthy certain have some difficulties. However, the child maybe not only doing activities in the home, but also spend much their time in the school. Thus, the problem of healthy foods for children is the parents and schools responsibility.

The parents can control the child foods by giving attention to the favorite food of their child. In additionally, the parents can makes some meals for children before going to school. By this way, the child can save their pocket money to do not buy something snack that unhealthy or not hygiene in outside of parent's guide.

On the other hand, the teacher can took their roles in giving children some acknowledgment of healthy food compositions by studying process in the class. For example, the teacher should be explaining the child about the effects of consume unhealthy foods for their brain and growth stage, and giving warn to the child for avoiding the foods that contains too much flavors. The school also can provides any healthy foods in the canteen such as reduces some snacks with sweeteners and keep produces hygiene and nutritious foods like pour chicken, egg rolls or meatball in food stalls that around of the school.

To sum up, the healthy foods is not mean problem for the child as long as the parents and the teachers in schools took their right position as children's guide in selection the best food to be consume for their child maximum grown and brain capability as long as childhood stage.

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Writing Feedback / The budget and calculated spendings by a certain UK school during three decades (1981 to 2001) [3]

The charts illustrate about the modifying of detail expenditures which relatives by a certain UK school during three decades started from 1981 to 2001. Overall, all of the features had been gradually increased step by step during three decades, where the teachers' salaries had been the highest percentages of the school expenditures in each decade.

Among to the next decades in 1981, 1991 until 2001, the expenditure of features had been changed inconsistently where the insurance budget's had been gradually increased by 1 % until reached 6 % in 2001. Contrast with other features that had been changed in every decade where others staff's salaries had been declined gradually with fair significant by 13 % in 2001 than in 1981. But the book's provided, school's necessary and teacher's salaries had been fluctuated trends with up and down expenditures during decades where the books provided had been dropped to 9 % and the school's equipment had been jumped to 23 % otherwise the teacher's salaries had been dropped to 45 % in 2001 after had been declined by 5 % since in 1991 but still had been the highest percentage of all the expenditure features over the decades.

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Writing Feedback / The traffic jam and highly emissions of exhaust fumes are the crucial problems in big cities [3]

WRITING TASK 2 (November 5, 2016)

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

What other measures do you think might be effective?

The policy of the government in increasing the price of petrol can be the one's solutions of traffic improvements and emissions problems today especially in big cities. However, the traffic jam and highly emissions in the big cities had been already public crucial problems which should get right solutions immediately.

In some things, traffic jam can be seriously obstacle for have been beginning some works in a timely. Moreover, the people needs for studying or working in time efficiently cannot happen if the traffic jam yet getting the solutions soon. For example, in Jakarta which as the capital of Indonesia, automatically make it had been the highest traffic's rate. As an impact, the people who have been staying in Jakarta should begin their day earlier than other people in other regions such as going to the office or school at 4 or 5 am for avoiding the traffic jam but should be arriving home in the night at 7 or 8 pm depends on their home distances. They have been passing these conditions in every day repeatedly as their routine activities. Not few people feel to be exhaust with their activities. For instance, the people have been experiencing psychological problems potentially such as become stressed or frustration, and the last results their productivities in works and studies had been influenced too.

As a solution where the government has been increasing the price of the petrol can be used for makes the roadway becomes wider than recent or can to make some free-way roads such as building the monorail-way or bypass-way. Otherwise, the fund can be used for developing some green spots in the city center such as the greening actions for reduces emissions in the big cities.

To sum up, undergo the raising of the petrol price, the problems of traffic jam and high emission produces in the cities will be declined.

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Writing Feedback / THE CEMENT MAKING-PROCESS AND HOW TO USE IT as the component of buildings [5]

Writing Task I (November 6, 2016)

The diagrams illustrate the processes of cement produced and how to use it as the component of buildings. Overall, the cement is produced and have treated by using some equipment which haS cylinder form and in rotated processes or by mechanic processes by some of the cylinder spin machines.

To begin, the limestone and clay are crushed by a crusher machine before mixing it with the powder by a mixer tool. After that, the blend of those materials is spin into the rotating heater by flame on the end of the pipe for heating processed. The last process that is grinded the raw materials until be formed the cement powder before the packaged process.

On the other hand, the cement then readily used for the components of buildings and the processes how to use it is simply enough. To make the good quality of bricks, besides of cement, we need water, gravel, and sand with each composition. In produces solid bricks we must blend gravels as the most component maybe 50% of the blends and then adds sand and cement in smaller composition than gravels where is just 25 % and 15 % severally and as the last pour water onto the blends but not too much just 10 % from entirely of the cement compound.

(215 words)

Writing Feedback / 'deciding by depth considerations'; People perspectives of fixed punishments for each type of crime [3]

WRITING TASK 2

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances ...

Today there are many various cases and motives of criminals in around of us. Some of the criminal action had the fixed punishment based on our laws. But, sometimes the application of the law can be change based on another aspect behind of the criminal cases. Besides that, the people should have the difference point of views toward some criminal cases.

For the people who being strict with the fixed punishment usually, have their own perceptions. However, they maybe think that there is no forgiveness for criminal actions that have been harming the others life. For example, the pedophilia case that happened in several months ago in certain elementary school where the offender is the teacher who has disorder sexual orientation and uses his students as the victims. The strict people would certainly don't need to add explanations of that case and directly had been decided for given the offender some of the hard punishments because he had been done a nasty and dissolute actions to the children. They would totally agree with the death penalty or life imprisonment convinces.

On the other hand, the people who being wisely with fixed punishment usually have their own views. Occasionally, the people who have this typical would be more have some considerations before judge the offender by his actions. For example, they would particularly disagree with the death penalty for the offender who has the psychological disorder such as purely pedophilia in his actions. However, they are still thinking about what the motives or how the background life of the offenders and usually have alternative punishments and keep agreeing with imprisonment convince but also with giving some psychological treatments.

To sum up, all of the criminal cases must have the punishments but should be better if the punishments are decided by depth considerations based on any factors which influence the people doing criminal actions.

(313 words)

Writing Feedback / The figures of commodities transported in the UK from 1974 until 2002 [3]

The graph reveals information about the figures of commodities transported in the UK from 1974 until 2002 by using four kinds of transportation. Those transportations were the road, water, rail and pipeline. Overall, most of the goods transported via those transportation systems presented the upward trends which increased gradually for 28 years.

Looking at the details, the highest amount of commodities transported was shown by land transportation which was around 70 million tonnes in 1974 to approximately 100 million tonnes in 2002. As a result, it can be stated as a vast improvement among other mentioned transportation. In the second place, there was water transportation which gained about 20 million tonnes of goods in the observed years.

Furthermore, the fluctuation trend came from rail transportation. In 1974, the usage of the train for transporting goods was quite similar with water transportation about 40 million tonnes, however, during the following years, it gave a tiny increase. Inconstantly, the pipeline had been the lowest amount of supplies in 1974 which was around 10 million tonnes and just steadily inclined a bit of 20 million tonnes in 2002.

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Writing Feedback / The consequences of Work or Travel before Starting New Study Life in University [3]

WRITING TASK 2 (NOVEMBER 7, 2016)

In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
Young aged is the critical periods in people live. The young people needs to improve their valuable experience in this stage. Choose to spend the time by searches something new life experience in work or do travel in a pastime during finishing study or starting new study life in university becomes one's confused desires of them.

Related to the cases, looking for a new life ability through the work after graduated from senior high school would give individuals some advantages. The individual have gained more time for beginning their skills from zero levels. Besides that the individual also can earlier be independent in their financial matters rather than others who decided the studies is them priority before work. However, the choices should have other disadvantages. According to Prof. Dr., John Davidson as the Head of Industrial Psychology Departments at Queensland University argued that the young people who started works after graduates from schools usually trapped into the comfort zone of their works. They would be more underachievement in their jobs because it is unwilling in improves their knowledge in high education more if they have been satisfied with incomes of their jobs.

In contrast, the individual who has chosen for traveled after studying or before starting to learn in the university should have several benefits. They will have more time for considering what the best step for continuing their life after graduated. They will get some experiences from any new people that they have met and that's would make them easily to create several comparisons of their references in study majors or work choices. Even though they need more time for beginning their study, but usually the people like this have mature plans about their futures.

All in all, every choice that the young people have to decide will be related to their successfulness in the future. Work or spends time for preparing to continue study surely have plus and minus respectively, just depends on the individual decided of which the best chosen for their life.

(336 words)

Writing Feedback / There are factors which can increase the potential of water deficit, like eg. environment condition [2]

What are the causes of water scarcity? What are your solutions?

In this world, water is ones of the essential source which obviously important to all organisms mainly for people lives. However, today, the declined of water becomes the serious problem for people. There are factors which can increase the potential of water deficit that included the fact of environment condition which is dry and the less awareness of people to solve their problem in the water supply. Several active steps to fix the problems can be consist of the people initiative in to create the new sources of water by technology and try to use the water more efficiently.

However, Indonesian is the ones of the tropical country which almost of its areas are drier. For example, according to the report of Bandung Technology Institute in 2014 had declared that Java Island in Indonesia has higher potential in water decline because of the geology of the soil and it geographic did not support for enormous water supplies. As the impact, several areas in Java experienced a water drying since in 1955 until right now. Furthermore, several people acts which are ignoring with their environment also become the main cause of water problem. As the example, based on the Association of Sociology Research in Diponegoro University in 2013 had presented that people usually use water intensively rather than use water appropriately with their necessities. There are more than thousands of household in Semarang city which use the water more than 15,000 m3 in one month.

Some solutions such as use the modern technology in producing water are very useful for directly preventive these problems. According to Kyoto University in Japan had been presenting their new invention for water scarcity in Hiroshima in 1997, which can filter the rainwater into the pure water that can direct to consume. This equipment had succeeded the Japan people to solve their water problems for many years until at present.

In conclusion, the problem of water scarcity actually can solve by some efforts in using technology which sufficiently to produce the necessity of water in certain typical of the country. (344 words)

Writing Feedback / Writing Task II IELTS : Some people perspectives about Libraries and Internet to obtain information [3]

Some people think it is a waste of money to establish libraries since the public can use the Internet at home to obtain information, do you agree or disagree?

Some people argue that spend some expenditures to build libraries is only the useless action when today we can use the internet to gain the latest information. This essay disagrees with the statements and believes that libraries as the ones of the substantial media to find the information. This essay will first discuss why the internet is not the best solution for wide to get the information and then talk about how the libraries are more benefit for general people, followed by the reasonable conclusion.

The Internet is not affordable for the general people, mainly who are lives in the villages or for them who have the limited income. However, the fulfillment of the internet necessity need some money and other support facilities such as the appropriate access for it. According to Telecommunication Statistic of Indonesia had revealed that the percentage of people who have been using the internet rise to 69% but it not covered all of the areas in Indonesia. Only the people who lived in several big cities and around it who used it as majority. Additionally, the consumer of internet also dominant for certain people who have the wealth income.

However, the presenting of the libraries will be more suitable for general people which covered the countryside. As the example for showing that libraries are more achievable and affordable for general people especially for the minority people who have the low income. In 2015, several new had published that the libraries today are more flexible than before. Some volunteers in Yogyakarta have been building the new libraries by used the minibus which can be operated until to the remote areas of countryside. By this action, more than thousands of the children and adults who still illiterate and less facility in education can be more helped.

To sum up, it may be true that several benefits of the internet can help people for gain widely information as much as possible, but there are some people who still cannot get it easily. So, there is no other best alternative in spread the information by reading books in libraries.

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Writing Feedback / The comparison of electricity productions by original sources in New Zealand and Germany [2]

Writing Task I
The pie charts below show electricity generation by source in New Zealand and Germany in 1980 and 2010.

The comparison of electricity productions by original sources in New Zealand and Germany during three-decade periods is revealed in the pie charts. Overall, both countries experienced a fluctuation trend in electricity produces between 1980 and 2010. Then, as can be seen, that New Zealand was the major of coal production during the years which became the highest rather than the production of Germany in 2010, but contrary the nuclear was totally produced in Germany during the periods.

As can be seen that, there are four main productions of electricity sources are provided in New Zealand, where in Germany has five electricity sources. According to the results, in New Zealand there are two main resources included hydro and coal which rose gradually during the years by approximately three times for coal and by 16% for hydro sources between 1980 and 2010. While, in Germany, both of those production sources saw a steady trend for coal and fell sharply in hydro sources by one in twenty.

On the other hand, both of natural gas and petroleum original sources in two countries saw a fluctuation trends. In New Zealand, the production of natural gas experienced a dramatic fall by 28%, and the petroleum productions also dropped in 2010. These conditions were similar to Germany, where both of petroleum and natural gas also witnessed a significant drop in 2010. (226 words)

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Writing Feedback / The number of foreign visitors who come to the five countries between 1995 and 2010 [4]

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.

A breakdown of the number of foreign visitors who come to the five countries between 1995 and 2010 is revealed in the line graph. The total data of visitors are presented in millions. Overall, the United State has been the highest visitors which was a steady rise from 1995 to 2010 if is compared with other.

As can been in the line graph, the USA and France saw an upward trend which experienced a marginal rise and France witnessed a sharp incline during the years. Among one-half decade, in the USA started at just over 70 million visitors in 1995 and climbed to about 80 million in 2010, while France reached a peak of 80 million in 2010 after soared by 30 million between 1995 and 2010, and then experienced a significant increase to that point.

Whereas, Malaysia saw a slight increase during one first decade and then rose dramatically to peak at just under 50 million of visitors. While, both countries included Egypt and Brazil had started in the number of visitors that close behind and saw a slight incline with small gap in the end point, where Egypt has been higher than Brazil by about one in twenty of foreign visitors. (204 words)

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Writing Feedback / Writing Task I IELTS : Average daily figures for Channel One News over a 12-month period [2]

A comparison of the average of regularly day programs for Channel One News during one year period is depicted in the line graph. The ratings of channel figures are illustrated based on the number of viewers per day in millions. Overall, almost of the figures fluctuated and only the figures for the 1pm which remained fairly stable.

The figure for the 6pm News began the year at 4.8 million. It fluctuated, but the general trend was downwards until ended to just over 3 million. The figure for the 9:30pm experienced a gradual rise from 3.2 million in January to a peak of 3.8 million in May. However, this month saw the introduction of the 11pm News, and the figure for the 9:30 News plummeted, hitting a low-point of 1.1 million in August.

In the same period, the figure for the 11pm rocketed from 0.2 to 4.1 million. At this point, the trend reversed. From August onwards, the figure for the 9:30 grew steadily. Meanwhile, the figure for the 11pm News declined sharply, and in December fell under the 1 million.

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Writing Feedback / Perspective of Homeschooling and General School for Children Education [3]

Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, several people argue that homeschooling is the best way for teaching the children and observe their improvement in studying, while other people believe that the best method for children's education is in the general schools. This essay will discuss the perspectives based on those both methods with accompanied by a reasonable conclusion.

To begin with, the several statements which reveal that homeschooling is more advantage based on its methods which exclusive and obviously private for discovering the children competency. For example, homeschooling as well known from its private teaching methods where occasionally on teacher only handling one child for certain time duration each day. Hence, there is more opportunity for the teacher to explore the best quality of the child in academic and also can give the child the best method in teaching which suitable for the learning style of the child. Additionally, according to the research of Educational Psychology Association in Britain has presented that the children who got the education by home schools became easier found their talents or more understandable with their self-competency in the study rather than the child from general schools by 7 % gap of both methods. Thus, sometimes the parents more attractive to select the home schools as the best method for the education of their children.

On the other hand, some people believe that general school is more benefit because in there the children are not only exercised for exploring their knowledge but also be combined by several methods for developing the social skills of the children. However, in the children developmental stages, the ability of social interaction in child-self is the ones of the best and the important matter of creating the optimal of Emotional Quotient (EQ). In addition, a reference from the statement of Developmental and Educational Children Association in the USA has depicted that the children who got the education by general schools method or gain the opportunity to interaction with another child in the class will be more adaptable and sociable rather than the child who not gain this experience. Therefore, the children who learning in general schools have higher EQ score by 26 % than the child which gain the private class.

To sum up, both of educational methods have each benefit for giving the best solution to increase the development of children academic skills. But the consideration of the parents in preparation the educational for their children also be needed for this decision. (404 words)

Writing Feedback / The ability of children to comprehension of a foreign language is much better at the primary school [4]

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

It is believed that to start the ability of children in comprehension of a foreign language better during at the primary school rather than at secondary school. This essay will discuss the advantages of the case where the children would be better take the foreign language subject since in the early education stage, and then will discuss why the advantages outweigh the drawbacks.

Today, additional subject in the academic curriculum such as a foreign language competency had been urgent for children as the student in their schools. So, it should be preparation since in the early of academic stages. The several reasons as the background of this decision included the self-ready condition of the child and the optimum of brain capability in earlier aged. For instance, according to the research of Children Developmental Psychology in 2013 had revealed that the range aged from 3 to 11 years old is the best moment for increasing the language comprehension skill of the child because in this stage, the child brain still easier to code anything of language pattern into long term memory which is located in right side of the brain. This study resulted that more than 22 % of the children who studying a foreign language in primary school have been more potential became the expert of the language in 18 years old rather than another child who don't study since in the basic schools.

However. Several facts may be there in the real life where occasionally the child are not ready enough for learning a strange language in their early age. Several children may be difficult for following the language which not their mother language. Moreover, several schools sometimes not too strict with their curriculum of foreign language competency. Thus, some students become aware of their purpose to study a foreign language when they had already sat on the higher degree. In fact, this condition had been more difficult for them to be more adaptable and memorable the new vocabulary of the foreign tongue.

All in all, it should be better if the curriculum of a foreign language had been available since in the primary school for improving the child comprehension since earlier. (360 words)

Writing Feedback / To have a successful life we need to give our maximum capability and effort in work [2]

Some people think that hard work and determination are the keys to success in life. Some, on the other hand, think that there are other factors behind a successful life. Give your opinion.

It is the opinion of some people that believe in successful life we need to give our maximum capability in work and is followed by our extra effort to raise it, whereas there are several keys to obtain the successful life without only do them. This essay will include some reasons why we need optimum effort and work to get our dreams and when we don't just need them to reach our prosperity in life.

To begin with, I personally agree that some essential factors such as willingness to success which must be accompanied by hard work and determination are worthy for our path live. As we can see, there are enormous people who have proven that the background of their successfulness reveals that they all need to give their best in works and their endless efforts. Usually, people who have the limit income or live in poverty condition occasionally have assiduous efforts for changing their lives. The real examples of people who can success by their determinations even without money or power since their born are likely Steve Jobs and Jacob Arabo who today already being fantastic popular because of the prosperity of their businesses.

However, it may be true if somebody else thinks that we need other keys for getting successfulness or we cannot just depend on our extra powers in work and the extremely efforts because of huge things of possibilities that we can find in our real life. Several factors such as the luck and the opportunity can be the part of people successes. For instance, in several countries mainly in the development countries, still there an enormous number of unemployment who jobless and cannot reach the best live standard as the general people. It is not happening because they are lazy or less effort, but some of them already release their maximum energy for surviving their lives by hard working as labors only just for continuing their lives and fulfilling the demand of life. Nevertheless, there is no job opened or limited of job fields make them encouraged for hard working in an uncertain condition in every day.

Based on my view, there are some real facts which describe that the lucky people can obtain their successes faster than the hard-worker people, and also even the people have already done the best of their capabilities but if there is the opportunity, sometimes their efforts will be useless at the time.

All in all, the willingness for hard work and extremely efforts are needed to back up our dream to obtain the successfulness, but we must be realistic that the key factors of prosperity sometimes are followed by the luck and the exact opportunity for getting it. (450 words)