Writing Feedback / In 1999, sixty-five percent of the customers were satisfied with the airlines in the United States [4]

The chart and table below show customer satisfaction levels in the US with airlines and aspects of air travel in 1999, 2000, and 2007

The bar chart and table inform the percentage of the passengers' satisfaction and the aspects which are related with the flight experience in the US in 1999, 2000, and 2007. Overall, the customers were getting more and more satisfied with the airlines and the satisfied level of the flight aspects were above a half in 2007

In 1999, sixty-five percent of the customers were satisfied with the airlines. There is a slight increase by four percent in the next following year. Then in 2007, it reached a peak at 72 percent. Back in the beginning of the period, the unsatisfied passengers' level stall at 32 percent. In 2000, there is a slight decrease by 3 percent. It can be seen that the satisfactory level had an upward trend while dissatisfied level had a downward trend.

The flight attendant and price tickets had a similar upward trend and it reached peak at the same year in 2007. The former had 92 percent while the latter had 65 percent. There was no significant difference of satisfied level for check in agents and stayed at 88 percent as the median value. Schedules satisfaction level had 75 percent in 1999 and had the same number in 2000 and 2007. The data for comfort of seats factor started in 2007 with 47 percent.

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Writing Feedback / Some people say that a healthy food can accelerate the studying process [3]

To learn effectively, children need to eat a healthy meal at school.
How true is this statement?
Whose responsibility is it to provide food for school children?

Learning is the key process to obtain the knowledge from knowledgeable people to the student. Learning effectively is extremely needed because it is the way that the smart person did. Some people say that a healthy food can accelerate the studying process. I briefly agree that the food is an essential factor and should be served by school side.

There is an opinion that the brain which is the core of learning process consumes at least one-fifth of our body energy. Scientifically, it is true - according to the data served at ted.com. it can be dangerous for our health, especially for our brain if we serve the people with the unhealthy one. The research conducted by Mr. Fujinoma Satoru from Kyoto University reveals that there is a correlation between the student having an unhealthy food with the grade in the school. Almost 75 percent of the children without the better food had the grade below the standard. This is the evidence that having a good meal is a must in order to learn effectively.

Then, whose responsible to serve a serve a healthy food for the children? Is it their parents? The answer is the school. The school is only the one having the responsibility for the pupils in the school. Parents are not able to monitor their children everytime they are living in the school and they cannot control it. As the one who is responsible, the school should provide the healthy food to make sure the development of children is going better.

All in all, I briefly believe that the healthy food is the "basic ingredients" for people who wants to learn effectively. The school having the most time interaction with the children should provide the healthy food to ensure the children have the best development in the school life and their future.

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Writing Feedback / It can be seen the variability of the annual expenses by a school in the United Kingdom [4]

These three pie charts show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

According to the charts, it can be seen the variability of the annual expenses by a school in the United Kingdom in 1981, 1991, and 2001. Overall, it is apparent from the graph that the total school spending in salaries was the biggest expense from the year given, while the second largest cost was infrastructure such as resources, and furniture and equipment.

Started in 1981, salaries that had been given by school started at 66 percent. In the next decade, the salaries rose significantly to a half of the total school spending for teachers' salaries. But unfortunately, the percentage of other workers' salaries decreased by 4 percent to 22 percent. There was a slight decrease for salaries to 60 percent of school's expenses in the next decade.

Infrastructure such as resources and equipment took the second highest expenditures. Started in 1981, almost one-third school spending had been allocated to this sector. Then, in the next 10-year, there was a slight decrease for infrastructure allocations by 5 percent while the furniture and equipment reach a low point at 5 percent. However, in reverse, the spending for resources bottomed out at 9 percent meanwhile there was a significant increase for furniture and equipment to 23 percent. Insurance had the percentage below 9 percent all the data given.

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Writing Feedback / The rising of transportation usage, the traffic and CO2 emission [2]

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
What other measures do you think might be effective?

In this industrial era when people move so fast, transportation becomes one of the most important factors to serve the human need to go to other places. But, as the rising of transportation usage, the traffic and CO2 emission are the drawback and it can be extremely dangerous for us. Then, there is an opinion that rising up the price of fuel will significantly solve the traffic jam and pollution. However, I briefly disagree the price will change our habit as the main cause of these problems.

Petroleum is the basic requirement for the machine to power up. People are used to buying the petrol. This leads the people to choose the private rather than the public one. However, According to research, there is no correlation between price and solving growing traffic. So that increasing the price will not make a significant effect on their ways of using their own transportation.

Now we are talking about the solution of this problem. The one that could be effective is serving public transportation to public. Using public transportation will effectively decrease the number of congestions level in some cities. Also, survey proves that if the transportation is fast, secure, and easy, almost 85 percent of respondents are ready to use the public transportation. If this research is true, then it can make a tremendous effect to solve the problem known that hard to be solved all time.

All in all, providing the mass transportation and improving it are the way that can be adopted to overcome the traffic congestion and pollutions problems. Rising the price of petrol will not effectively solve the problem because, according to research, there is no correlation between price and using transportation. Using public transportation will significantly reduce the problem.

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Writing Feedback / Cement and concrete processes - both use rotating force to make the cement and mixing the concrete [3]

The diagrams show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams inform how the cement is produced with the tools explained, and the production process to make the concrete for building materials. It can be seen that both of processes use rotating force to make the cement and mixing the concrete.

The equipment of cement production consists of the crusher, mixer, rotating, heat producer, grinder and bags. The process starts when limestone and clay as the raw material are crushed by the crusher to be powder. The powder is gone to the mixer and rotated in the rotating heater along with heat that created by the heat source. After that, the material that had been processed in the heater is grinded in the grinder. Finally, the cement is created and ready to be packed with bags.

For the production of concrete, less than a fifth of cement, a quarter of sand, and a half of small stones are used to make the concrete. One in ten water is used as well. Then after all of the material is placed in the concrete mixer, the material is rotated by the mixer to create the mixed concrete.

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Writing Feedback / The reason and motivation of commited crime should be considered to decide on the punishment [3]

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should be always taken into account when deciding on the punishment.

In all parts of the world, the criminal matter is the problem making the controversy topic for people around the world. Some people think that the fixed punishments for all crimes are the must. However, I believe that the reason and motivation of crime that is done by people should be considered to decide on the punishment.

Fixed punishment for certain crime is very helpful for the small level of criminal. It can be a brilliant idea for the nations which have the high-criminality rates. In Indonesia, for instance, all cases have to be decided in the court, from the light level to the high level, so that sometimes, the court is too hard to be decided. This idea can reduce the problem of the court and the court's overload can be reduced.

However, including the reason and the fact of the cases is more important. Each people have the presumption of innocence. How about the person having murdered the criminal sneaking to the house and threatening the family's life? If we are thinking that fixed punishment is better, then we will punish the person murdered. But how about the principle of fairness? is it fair for them? No. The facts in the field and the circumstances should be included in order to give the equality of law for all of the people.

All in all, I believe that before we decided the person is guilty or not, we should involve the facts and the motivation why the people did. Although fixed punishment is a good idea, it will be better to provide the equality of law to all of the people around the world.

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Writing Feedback / The use of road transport in delivering some goods in Britain is constantly growing [4]

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The line chart shows the quantities that are transported with four different methods such as pipeline, rail, water, and road (unit in million tonnes) between 1974 and 2002 in the United Kingdom. Overall, it can be seen that the majority of the goods were transported by road while the pipeline was the least accommodation that was used to transfer the goods.

In 1974, the goods were transported by road started at 70. Between 1974 and 1990, there was a fluctuated increase and stayed at 80 in 1990. There was a slight decrease by 5 in 1995. 4-year later, the good transported increased significantly to 90 and reached a peak in 2002. For the water and rail transportation, at the beginning of the period, the rail got more goods in 40 than water that just only 3 million gaps. However, in 1998, water started to get more than the rail got. The water reached a plateau between 1986 and 1992 at 60. There was a slight decrease to 50 in 1998. Then it reached a peak in the last 2002. For the goods that were transported by rail, there was a fluctuated decrease to 30 from 1978 to 1995. Then, it increased significantly just above 40 in 2002. However. Pipeline was the unpopular one that got below 30 from 1974 to 2002.

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Writing Feedback / Some countries such as the United States and the United Kingdom have the special "gap" policy [4]

In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

Some countries such as the United States and the United Kingdom have the policy that the youth should go to work or take a leisure time for a year between finishing the high school degree and starting university studies. I strongly believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.

There are a lot of advantages for people doing the work in this period. The most important one is having more experience. This is important for the future student because the experience will lead the student to get the skill more than the others so that they can reach the grade better. Also, it is popularly believed that the experienced student will ready to study in the competitive surroundings. They are used to do the routines under pressure and it can be helpful for the student because living as the college student need good management skills. Furthermore, this experience will form the mentality of the hard worker to do some task that will be given when they are studying at the college.

However, some of the disadvantages should be paid more attention. Many of them are spending of the time to go to the leisure than learning new experience. Research conducted by Mrs Asuna from Tokyo University reveals that after spending most of the time in the school, the children tend to spend the time to focus on leisure. This will lead to consuming much money as well. Some complaints have been reported so far by the parents that they cannot afford the expenses because of this policy. The family also worries about their child when they are away too far. It could be dangerous for the children because it can make the children out of parent controls.

All in all, I believe that the policy about this should be revised in the future. From the points that I have mentioned before, the disadvantages are more dangerous than the advantages. The government should make the policy or instrument to control the children when they work or leisure so that the children cannot just spend their time without obtaining the experience that can be useful in the next stage of education.

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Writing Feedback / The wares on which consumer spends in five countries, located in Europe in 2002. [3]

The table above gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table informs the goods on which consumer spend in five countries which located in Europe in 2002. Overall, the most obvious fact is the most of food, drink, and tobacco were sold in Turkey, meanwhile most of clothing and footwear were sold in Italy. However, leisure and education were the smallest items were sold.

For food, drink, and tobacco, most of those were sold in Turkey and Ireland with 32.14 percent and 28.91 percent respectively. The percentage of the goods sold in Spain and Italy was 18.80 percent and 16.36 percent meanwhile Sweden was the least consumer of the goods with 15.77 percent.

Clothing and footwear were the loads that had a significant decreasing gap with the previous mentioned goods, having no more than nine percent. The percentage of the freight bought by Ireland, Spain and Turkey was just above 6 percent meanwhile Sweden was 5.4 percent. The other items were leisure and education. Turkey spent 4.23 percent while Italy and Sweden had the same number approximately at 3 percent. Spain spent the least number on it with only spending 1.98 percent.

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Writing Feedback / There are some reasons why the happiness is hard to be explained [4]

Happiness is considered very important in life.
Why is it difficult to define?
What factors are important in achieving happiness?

Happiness is one of the essential factors in life. Some people want to just happy in their entire life. However, there is an opinion that it is quite difficult to define the happiness. There are some reasons why the happiness is hard to be explained. Some factors will influence the way to grab the living satisfaction.

It is so difficult to be explained because there is no standard level of happiness. Some people might think that leisure, for instance, is the key to happiness while others say that wealthy level is more important. This is because every people are different in the way that they define the satisfaction. Also, feeling is one of the keys that will lead someone to the happiness. If you do not have the great feeling on the thing that you say that it would make you happy, you will not get the happiness. For example, you love watching TV and you believe that this will give you an enjoyment. But if you have a un-mood feeling, you will not find the happiness on watching TV.

Even though it is difficult to give a definition of happiness, some factors are important in order to achieve happiness. The most important are your environment. You will get an enjoyment if you stay at the place where you have a positive surrounding. People you want to share your happiness is important as well. Psychologically, it will make you happier than before.

All in all, for the points that I mentioned before, it is clear that happiness is hard to be explained. However, other factors can also accelerate the way to get the happiness such as our surrounding and the object that we can share our happiness with others.

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Writing Feedback / The water shortage is observed in the most of countries over the world [2]

What are the causes of water scarcity? What are your solutions?

In the modern age, water is a crucial factor needed by everyone. It is popularly believed that water scarcity happens to most of countries over the world. This essay will first discuss about the causes resulting water scarcity caused by over water use and El-Nino, then present the seawater and weather modification can be the solution to overcome the problem.

We live in the situation when we cannot stop the use of water. The company can also get the soil water and give the adverse effect such as the lack of water. Research conducted by Mrs. Yui Yoshioka from Fukuoka University found that over usage of water is the cause causing water scarcity in most countries. However, she also stated that El-Nino, the weather condition which summer takes longer than raining season, was another cause as well.

Here are my solutions. Firstly, the company should replace soil water from seawater with using the salt filtration and convert it to be the water without salt. It can scientifically increase the water storage level inside the soil just above 35 percent according to newscientist. Also, weather modification such as giving salt to clouds can solve the dry season although it cost much money. This can be the solution for drought in a particular country. These are the suitable solutions and proved by science.

All in all, soil water used by company should be converted to sea water to preserve the water level in the land. Also, El-Nino condition can be overcome by spreading salt to clouds.

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Writing Feedback / It is a waste of money to establish libraries since the public can use the Internet at home. [5]

Some people think it is a waste of money to establish libraries since the public can use the Internet at home to obtain information, do you agree or disagree?

people choose libraries to find information

There is an opinion that starting to build a library is a throwing of money since the citizen can use the internet to find information anything they want. I really disagree with the opinion because not all data from the internet are valid. However, statistical result shows that many people still place the library as the first place to find reference.

Anyone can connect to the internet, and we can search anything that we want from the internet. However, the information from the internet sometimes is not valid because anyone can provide information without being proved. Research conducted by Ms. Urara Shiraishi from Tokyo University gives the result that almost 72 percent web sites except journal website provides the wrong information about the earth (used to be a controlled variable). This is the evidence that we cannot use the internet as our "first reference."

Although to build library costs a lot of money, in fact, since 2000, the number of visitor searching a book a valid journal has increased so far according to the research conducted by Mr. James Goods from Leeds University. He mentioned that there is no point to tell that making libraries is just spending the budget. He also stated that in the future, all academic source should be cited from library. So this is non-sense to tell that establishing libraries are wasting a money.

All in all, I believe that we cannot find a perfect reference from internet. Because of its prospect, making libraries can be acceptable because people, now, tend to choose library to find any information as their reference.

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Writing Feedback / A breakdown of the figure for generating electricity using many sources in two distant countries [3]

The pie charts below show electricity generation by source in New Zealand and Germany in 1980 and 2010.

A breakdown of the figure for generating electricity with many sources in New Zealand and Germany in 1980 and 2010 is shown in the pie charts. Overall, it can be seen that the units of both countries increased significantly, even though there was a difference in electricity they used.

In 1980, coal was used to generate the electricity, having 56 of the total 127 units, increasing to 150 of the total 200 units in 2010. However, there was a difference in Germany which they mostly depended on nuclear power plant with 155 out of 214 units in 2010.

Hydropower also became the second largest electricity source in 2010 although, in France, hydro-power lost the usage falling from 7 to 2 units. Both countries, however, did not depend anymore on natural gas, indicated by 2 percent for both. The same condition happened to coal electricity source in New Zealand, but in Germany, it increased to 27 in 2010.

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Writing Feedback / International tourists coming to five different countries, measured in millions [2]

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.

A breakdown of the figure for international tourist coming in five different countries, measured in millions, over a period of 15 years is shown in the line graph. Overall, it can be seen that total tourist arrivals increased from 1995 to 2010. We can also see that all countries got the highest arrivals in 2010 except the USA.

In 1995, around 70 million visitors come to the USA while the figure of France stood at around a half of that amount. The tourist coming to Malaysia was at just above 20 while Egypt and Brazil stood at relatively the same number in just below 10.

Between 1995 and 2010, it can be seen that the number of visitors coming to the USA was relatively the highest among other countries although 2010 saw the same number between France and the USA. It was caused by the significant increase of France, jumping from just above 30 to around 90. There was a steady growth to around 50 for Malaysia while Brazil and Egypt remained the same below 25.

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