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"to have three years of studying a foreign language" - my toefl essay !

4 - Learning a new language in high school can be very helpful when traveling to foreign countries or for study...

Writing Feedbackadoh - Aug 7, 2010 / oceanyang - Aug 10, 2010
Only by questioning accepted wisdom can we advance our understanding.

4 - That is great, but you should revise a little so that the reader can appreciate the significance of...

Writing Feedbackprakharsingh - Aug 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 10, 2010
IELTS ESSAY: GUN CONTRAL

5 - Hey, that makes sense. I see now that per cent used to be 2 words and that people gradually...

Writing Feedbacklin54390 - Aug 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 10, 2010
Friends, knowledge, purpose: people attend college for many different reasons

5 - You should add a sentence to that first paragraph. You can say it is indispensable... then give a sentence...

Writing FeedbackMrTom - Aug 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 9, 2010
Advertising nowadays has more and more affects in our lives.

6 - Advertising nowadays more and more affects in our lives. We can see advertise everywhere, such as: televisions, newspapers, radio,...

Writing Feedbacknhoc_tini - Aug 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 9, 2010
Topic:Is telling truth always better than telling lie or only partial truths?

5 - Yep, every article I have seen about this kind of issue involves a reference to Kant. You can...

Writing Feedbacktrungandhoai - Aug 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 9, 2010
'Love, money, career and faith in God' IELTS Happiness essay

4 - your essay is good enough I think the happiness is to pursue what we love and fulfill a meaningful...

Writing Feedbackjulieta4648 - Aug 5, 2010 / lin54390 - Aug 9, 2010
Topic: Which is the most effective method to bring people to peace?

7 - Well, you explain very well, but add a conclusion sentence to paragraph 2: This gradually ceased the hostility of...

Writing Feedbacktrungandhoai - Aug 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 8, 2010
The best way to improve education is to raise teacher's salary.

4 - Not only can it lead a person walk to success, but also supply a gorgeous life this is not...

Writing Feedbackhonghee - Aug 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 8, 2010
How to write an argumentative essay about the advantages of recycling water?

2 - This part is boring and too obvious. Can you think of a clever way to start the essay?...

Writing Feedbackarquimedesamaya - Aug 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 8, 2010
'Digital life' -The 21st century has begun. What changes this new century will bring?

3 - Hi Vaishali, I am so impressed with your diligent practice of English writing! I notice here that you...

Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Aug 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 8, 2010
leader you think is important

9 - Ha ha... that is so funny. Actually, when I saw you spelling it that way, I thought that must...

Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Aug 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 7, 2010
"Love is a universal constant" - Essay About Love in Literature

7 - This is great. I think it helps writers a lot when readers tell their impression about the message...

Writing FeedbackAcinonyx - Jul 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 7, 2010
toefl--athletic departments should receive the same amount of funding as libraries

11 - Good luck on the test! Ha ha, I don't want to add to your list of things to...

Writing Feedbackmonicacho - Jul 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 7, 2010
IELTS essay: High sales reflect Power of Advertising and not the Real Need

4 - Google this: how to write a concession paragraph. I usually call it "refuting the counterargument." You probably already...

Writing Feedbackadriennelin - Aug 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 7, 2010
GRE-is history relevant to our daily lives?

3 - Dear Trung Mickey: I really appreciate your valuable comments. There's much for me to learn. I have to admit...

Writing Feedbackbroad - Aug 5, 2010 / broad - Aug 7, 2010
What do you want most in a friend -toefl feedback

3 - Tanks for your advices,they are very helpful :)...

Writing FeedbackMrTom - Aug 5, 2010 / MrTom - Aug 7, 2010
"Learning is power" - toefl-why people go to colleges or universities?

4 - As a novice of English writing I am shocked by those feedbacks .They are so specific and strict...I think...

Writing Feedbackmonicacho - Aug 3, 2010 / MrTom - Aug 6, 2010
Favorite song - Kitto Mata Itsuka

4 - Hello, Boataaa, I see that Shin and Sara fixed the errors for you! Is your brother able to retype...

Writing Feedbackmamaki - Aug 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 6, 2010
Topic: What is one great question that every well-educated person should ask?

6 - A quick note before I start, revise your use of punctuations (the colon that you have placed there), for...

Writing Feedbacktrungandhoai - Aug 3, 2010 / triplesmickey - Aug 6, 2010
Are people held back by doing things in the conventional way? SAT essay. Advice.

4 - You have a great way of writing. I think this is redundant when you say nor---either. There isn't enough...

Writing FeedbackAmbermutt - Aug 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 5, 2010
Media for communicating information: • comics • books • radio • television • film

6 - Thesis sentence at the end of paragraph 1: Add a comma: However, I believe not all these provide good...

Writing Feedbackjulieta4648 - Aug 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 5, 2010
Issue about General Welfare/ SUREST INDICATOR OF A GREAT NATION

7 - EF_Kevin Sounds like a good book~~...

Writing FeedbackDingDang717 - Aug 1, 2010 / DingDang717 - Aug 5, 2010
Students should not be told political & social views of the teachers.

NEW - Admittedly, as we all take for, teachers aim to provide knowledge to students. Teachers should confirm the scope of...

Writing Feedbackgarnekuan - Aug 4, 2010 / — -
wealthy nations best help: food, money, education, technologies, health care

4 - well, here are some of my personal opinions below I think your main paragraph is a bit irrelavent,...

Writing Feedbacknanudom - Aug 3, 2010 / lin54390 - Aug 4, 2010
Qualities of good co-workers - first of all, it is most important how they treat their work.

8 - I understand why that is scary! Many other students said the same thing you said. They are afraid to...

Writing Feedbackmonicacho - Jul 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 4, 2010
'thank to god not being sick' IELTS - What factors are important in achieving happiness?

3 - For the human being, happiness is the most valuable achievement, in their life but happiness is very difficult to...

Writing Feedbackakyuznet - Aug 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 4, 2010
Essay about Frienship- Judith Viorst

6 - Hyphen: He is thirty-eight years old... Furthermore, the moment when Duong and I won over the previous champion...

Writing Feedbackmathanvn - Aug 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 4, 2010
SAT Essay:Do changes that make our lives easier not necessarily make them better ?

5 - It seems that your thesis statement is that the innovations bring negative side effects, such as loss of personal...

Writing Feedbackdo2puff - Aug 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 4, 2010
Essay: The Essential Characteristics of a Good Parent

3 - Here is an idea: One technique I think everyone should do use is to spend quality time with...

Writing Feedbacktonton842004 - Aug 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 4, 2010
Communicate effectively through the use of images, not language - GRE

2 - Introduction edit The intro is nice, except I think you can change a few things. First of...

Writing Feedbackprabudhakshin - Aug 4, 2010 / freezard7734 - Aug 4, 2010
Traffic accidents: The best way to reduce the number (ELTS)

2 - Being involved in a r oad traffic accident is one of the cause among the list of causes of...

Writing Feedbackenigma - Aug 3, 2010 / katebrewster - Aug 3, 2010
GRE (argument): Recommendation to change the marketing style of a company

11 - The sentence was like this: We must revert back to net marketing. My high school teacher would have...

Writing Feedbackershad193 - Jul 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 3, 2010
My position is that teachers mustn't talk about political/social views with students

NEW - We can not deny that much knowledge we gained from our teachers, including the views about society and politics....

Writing Feedbackfeinvwenwen - Aug 2, 2010 / — -
Most beneficail discovery in the last 100 yrs; Transportation, Communication

20 - Thanks EF_Kevin and linmark...

Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jul 16, 2010 / vaishali1980 - Aug 2, 2010
To what level do you agree that Unis should accept equal numbers of male and females?

7 - Oh... I didn't know about the changes that were made with the policies. Okay, well the thing I need...

Writing Feedbackphanhuyen - Jul 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 2, 2010
why people attend college and universities

3 - Students who attend colleges or universities can become experts in some certain fields so that it will be...

Writing Feedbackgolnaz_ghp - Jul 29, 2010 / cathyliu - Jul 31, 2010
when and where would you like to go back in the past and why?

4 - This is what I would do: That period was full of dreaming and dealing with goals of own life...

Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jul 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 30, 2010
The Story of the Hour -would like someone to review it and tell me what they think

3 - only to find out that her husband was a live this news kills her the moment she sees him...

Writing Feedbacklilgary104 - Jul 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 30, 2010
IELTS ESSAY: salaries of sportspeople

2 - Moreover, some sports stars are keen to hold and participate in various social activities. Take Yaoming as an example,...

Writing Feedbacklin54390 - Jul 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 30, 2010
imagination vs. perspiration - CBEST

2 - Therefore to have a bit of creativity, and imagination is the key and purpose for endeavoring. Therefore, a...

Writing Feedbackflavia03 - Jul 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 30, 2010
Friend with a characteristic trait - CBEST

2 - Hello, Flavia Since you used the word "perseverance" specifically, I think it would help your essay if you...

Writing Feedbackflavia03 - Jul 30, 2010 / Yayz - Jul 30, 2010
minimum wage in America - CBEST

2 - There is a large category of people in whose opinion the sharp increase of the minimum wage should be...

Writing Feedbackflavia03 - Jul 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 30, 2010
Computers: good or bad in using it for education - CBEST

3 - That first sentence is very impressive. Indeed, r eliance on computer grows every day . This explosion in...

Writing Feedbackflavia03 - Jul 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 30, 2010
GRE Essay:- "Laws should not be rigid or fixed. Instead, they should be flexible

6 - I like this way of introducing a term! That is quite poetic and clever. I see what...

Writing Feedbackrajeshaaidu - Jul 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 30, 2010
Three reasons for studying in a diffrent country

4 - thanks a lot guys! I am very glad that I am signed up hier and met so nice guys...

Writing Feedbacknew writer - Jul 28, 2010 / new writer - Jul 29, 2010
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of travel or work after high school.

3 - Hellow Lynn, There are two disadvantages on the other hand. [b]Could be better: On the other hand, there...

Writing FeedbackLynn Truong - Jul 10, 2010 / George1 - Jul 28, 2010
As the light begins to dim, Faith.

9 - You can find them on the YMAA website and on ebay! All you need is one book or video...

Writing FeedbackRajiv - Jul 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 28, 2010
IELTS: Goverment should write laws for using vehicles and everybody should follow them

5 - Sure, just post your new draft here! :-)...

Writing Feedbackruhi - Jul 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 28, 2010
Essay about 2 kinds of friendship - Judith Viorst

7 - sorry I didnt point out where did i make a change because i didnt know thatI cannot edit my...

Writing Feedbackdvtq - Jul 26, 2010 / dvtq - Jul 28, 2010
SAT: QUESTION DECICIONS OF LEADERS

5 - You make your point in the first paragraph. In each body paragraph, give ideas to support your main...

Writing Feedbackalooo282 - Jul 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 27, 2010
Male to Female ration in University admissions

2 - Ma Li, please try to write a new draft with the corrections Maria made. Do you understand the corrections?...

Writing Feedbackmary1lucky - Jul 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 27, 2010
IELTS writing ---to what extent do you agree or disagree? modern or old building ?

3 - I see that you are already proficient, and you need "fine tuning." Here is something to help you...

Writing Feedbackcosmopolitan - Jul 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 27, 2010
IELTS writing_International sporting occasions help to ease international tensions

2 - This is already a good essay. You showed that you understand the prompt, and you responded clearly: It...

Writing Feedbackngcanh - Jul 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 27, 2010
Topic: Are we defined by great challenges or by everyday challenges?

3 - Here is another idea about that intro: Life is just like a journey in which we try to...

Writing Feedbacktrungandhoai - Jul 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 26, 2010
TOEFL Essay: Art or environment

2 - I had another idea for correcting the first sentence: Obviously, both of these choices are based on reasonable...

Writing Feedbackmenkim1 - Jul 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 26, 2010
Favorite Word and why-Rate/give advice for my college essay

4 - Thank you both of you for your advice pertaining to my essay. It will help a lot, not only...

Writing Feedbackmrkay66 - Jul 17, 2010 / mrkay66 - Jul 26, 2010
Preserving its old, historic buildings means respecting the previous generations

5 - That is an interesting topic. But I think that a city should preserve its old, historic buildings. Since those...

Writing FeedbackEhmet - Jul 22, 2010 / annmichelle7 - Jul 26, 2010
Sport personalities' salaries + blaming crime on media - Writing task 2 for Ielts

NEW - Next time thread will be removed again; you must learn about composing a relevant thread title. EF ...

Writing Feedbackphanhuyen - Jul 26, 2010 / — -
You'd find yourself at this spot each day! ; A Book and Coffee-shop

3 - Yeah, I noticed that verb tense thing, too. That is the kind of mistake I make all the time....

Writing FeedbackRajiv - Jul 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 25, 2010

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