Writing Feedback / Writing task 1 give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began [3]

The bar and line charts indicate 2 different and specific data representations that are not interchangeable. Therefore, the data identification must be specific for each one. Otherwise, the image data identification is incorrect when specific data requirements are considered for the TA section. The difference cannot be identified in the trending statement.

The writer over analyzed the bar chart and under analyzed the line graph.There should have an equally balanced presentation of 3-5 sentences per paragraph. Kindly remember that the score for this essay is heavily based on the analytical abilities of the exam taker. It appears that the writer has difficulty studying line graphs so he should do more line graph analysis exercises.

Writing Feedback / We should not and must not replace teachers with computers [2]

The first paragraph has conjunction usage enors and punctuation mark errors. The word"because" cannot be used to start a sentence being a conjunction. a comma cannot be followed by ellipses. Only one punctuation mark can be used at a time. The student fails to properly use capitalization in certain parts of the presentation, capitalizing non-noun words in the middle of sentences. These will cause severe G R A deductions as evidence of a lack of grammar inles knowledge can be seen.

Failure to proofread and correct several spelling errors will also result in a failing L R score. There is no English word spelled as convienient. Word usage problems appear when he uses 2 words I can not" to refer to " cannot", one word. Review adverb and auxilliary verb usage..


This idiom might make better sense in the writer's native language. It lacks coherence and logic in English. It is not well explained in the presentation either.

The essay proves to be too problematic in terms of scoring. I doubt it will even come close to a passing overall score.

Writing Feedback / Punishment is believed as requirement in educating a child on the differences between right and wron [2]


This is not partof the orginal presentation. Due to the siteis personal opinion being included here, the prompt restatement is now inaccurate and has failed the first criteria for scoring. It is no longer task accurate.

The opinion statement is well presented but, it is missing a question response. The overall paragraph presentation is weak, inaccurate, and incomplete. It will have a failed starting score.

The opinion explanation paragraph is well developed and uses good examples. This paragraph accomplishes it's purpose well. The punishment part deviated ffrom the actual response for the most part. Focus should have been solely placed on the punishment discussion as indicated in the instructions.

Writing Feedback / Money parents spent on their children's sporting activities and how many kids participated in sports [3]

The summary overview will recieve a failing score in 2 sections: TA and G R A. The reason? Lack of clarity in the summary due to a run-on presentation. Each line graph summary must be individually identified and presented. 5 sentences should have been used. The essay will have failed even before other considerations are applied. The overall presentation is difficult to follow. Since the writer does not refer to the image in the paragraph, further G RA deductions will apply based on the degree of confusing report presentations.

The writer is only focused on completing the task in whatever way he can.That is why the essay clarity, focus, and coherence in relation to cohesiveness was affected negatively. This type of jinbled presentation may not pass the test.

Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TEST - accepting a bad situation or trying to solve it somehow [2]


What is the writer's opinion? After the restated public opinion, the writer must present his thesis opinion as the final part of the paragraph presentation. It is a clarity of opinion requirement.


Better what? Complete the thought presentation or revise the sentence for reference clarity.

At this point, it is best to point out the writer's problem with clarity that will lower the coherence score of the presentation.

The writer clearly does not follow the comparative consideration + personal opinion format. The full discussion is personal opinion based. Without the public ' analysis, the discussion format will be deemed either incomplete or in an incorrect format. It will fail the test. Always follow the indicated paragraph discussion format.

Writing Feedback / The energy used for various purposes and the amount of gas emitted in average Australian household [2]

Refer to the number of pie charts and enumerate the divisions seperately for a clear summary overview. Assume the reader cannot see the images. What would be the best explanation presentation? Present it that way. Assume a worst case scenario for the presentation, as in, a lack of image, and discuss appropriately. These are the best ways to meet the clarity requirement.


Where did this reference come from? Not only is the spelling wong, but this data cannot be found in either chart. This is inaccurate information that will pull down the TA, L R, and G R A scores. Do not make up information and look out for accurate word usage.

Undergraduate / Study plans to learn something new everyday by learning Korean and also about the country [6]

This is not a usable language plan. There is no reference to language studies before or after annual in Korea. This is only a personal statement regarding the applicants language exposure. The language references in this essay are all part of the applicants memories.It fails to show an interest in Hangul in reference to learning the language which is a must for a GKS applicant. Nothing can be added to the essay because this should be deleted in its entirety. Unless existing language lessons in English and Hangul can be represented either through formal lessons or self learning, the applicant fails to qualify himself as an existing language learner of any sort.

Writing Feedback / The population numbers in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon over 60 years [2]


What type of graph?This is going to be seen as a memorized or cut and paste presentation as it lacks a full image identification in the realaliment. It is a line graph.



At some point in the summary overview or trending statement, the writer must list the 3 counties for TA purposes. The short information presentation is incomplete without it.


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Just Columbia county. A definite article is not needed to identify the counties.

Review singular V. plural word usage. Reference should be made to thousand rather than thousands. Proofreading is necessary as there are capitalized non-nown presentations in the essay.

Writing Feedback / Toefl writting for beginner: Why go to the university? [2]

There are 2 things that seperate the TOEFL and IELTS essay tests: IELTS requires a prompt restatement + opinion, TOEFL does not. The latter is a direct discussion method so the flowery introduction and conclusion in this essay is not really necessary. Go directly to the discussion.

Do not offer advice to the reader lither. The commonality of the2 essay tests is that it should present an opinion withouttrying to influence the decision of the reader. Inform but never dictate the reader's action.

Use a uniform method for numerical ordinals. Avoid mixing the reference styles to avoid confusing the reader. Consider the clarity of the presentation which is affected by the mixed style presentation.

Review singular V. plural word use. "These" is the plural form of " this" so "pressure" should be plural, "pressures ".

Writing Feedback / The chart below shows the Japan's population by different age groups 1960-2040 [2]


I do not see any. Do not refer to an image location as you are required to use descriptive means for the content presentation in the summary overview. Assume no image is provided to the reader.


Which are? The data presentation is incomplete.


Which color code refers to what? If mentioned in order, end by saying " respectively ". Be precise. Be clear.


This extra statement is not required. The image does not contain enough data to warrant a 4th presentation. This does not provide the required 3-5 sentences as a paragraph representation. If this was meant as a conclusion, please be advised that a Task 1 essay does not require it as this is a report rather than opinion essay.

Writing Feedback / The notion that oral transmission is more effective than written language is a matter of controversy [2]


This is unclear in reference to information. Which particular side do you partially agree with? Why? Complete the restatement + opinion presentation by including the reasoning reference(s) for discussion. Remember that the TA score is based on clarity of thought more than anything else. So be precise in the presentation paragraph. Do not leave that clear opinion for the concluding summary. It is most useful in the restatement portion.

The response should start with : I partly agree with the statement that ... in so much as it applies to...

This is still a single opinion defense. Do not confuse a partial opinion with a comparison writing instruction. Those are 2 different discussion instructions

Writing Feedback / The task below shows reasons migrants have for moving from rural to urban areas, in one country [2]

The summary overview needs more work. The writer is required to outline the divisions of the image to inform the reader of the overall information basis. This is completed prior to the trending statement. Without the outline, the reader will be confused by the discussion references. A proper outline is required to create a mental picture of the image for the reader.

The writer is referring to only one area, so it is singular reference to countryside. Countrysides are plural in form and does not apply in this comparison reference.

Use a chronological reference for the discussion. The writer is skipping around the years in the presentation. To make the discussion easier to follow, use the correct sequential listing.

Writing Feedback / People are damaging the environment. What goverments and individuals can do to address this problem [3]

If the writer reviews the prompt requirements, it will be clear that this is a 5 paragraph essay composed of:

- Prompt restatement + question responses / answer outline
- What governments do to address these problems?
- What can individuals do to help?
- Reverse paraphrase / concluding summary

The response of the writer does not adequately present developed responses because of the incorrect discussion and response format. The explanation could be better explained if the individual response paragraph format was used. While the writer does provide proper responses. These are not adequately explained to warrant a stronger overall score. That is because of the compressed discussion topics. Separating these would have created a better developed presentation.

The conclusion does not have the correct format either. It must be presented within 40 words comprised of 2-3 sentences (at least).

Writing Feedback / Different views about the funding of traffic system - money on railways or on new roads? [3]

The extent response is missing in the essay. The degree of (dis) agreement with the statement should have been presented prior to the reasoning topics.The writer neglected to present the required discussion format in the required sentence structure in the first paragraph, weakening the paragraph discussion restatement. Although the proper format was used in the reverse paraphrase, the score increasing function for the response happens in the first paraphrase presentation. The thesis statement however, gave an idea as to the actual opinion of the writer. A more direct approach would be better next time.

The reasoning paragraphs further add to the failure of the presentation to provide clear supporting opinions for the writer's point of new. There should be 2 supporting paragraph presentations . A comparative discussion format is not acceptable in this single opinion essay. scores will be deducted from non-supporting paragraphs. Specifically in the word count section.

Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 2: HOW CAN SOMEONE ACHIEVE HAPPINESS? [4]


This is the writer's personal opinion. A personal opinion should never be included in the restatement due to paraphrasing alterations. It lowers the TA score as this presentation redirects the conversation in a manner not in line with the orginal presentation. Save the personal opinion for the reasoning sections.


No. There are direct questions presented. These indicate the need for direct responses. One topic for each question that will create a clear discussion thesis.

The prompt restatement + response portion is incorrect as it has 2 clear scoring violations present.


Redundancy. Both a GRA and LR violation. The words have the same meaning. There is no need for over- emphasis.

Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 2: BALANCE BETWEEN WORK AND OTHER ASPECTS OF LIFE [4]

"On the one hand" and "On the other hand" are comparative phrases.There are used to connect the same topic coming from opposing points of view. The writer is assessing 2 different topics so these paired references cannot be used. This will be considered an error on 2 fronts, the C + C and GRA scoring sections.

The writer must review his vocabulary skills because he shows signs of word usage confusion (employer v employee), even as he often tries to use big and unnatural sounding words ( portends, detrimentally ) in the presentation. While there are considered advanced English words, these are not used in everyday conversation. So the reference sounds unnatural. The LR score is increased through the use of everyday English words in the right context.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2: Public Transport, convenient metro [5]

The writer did not respond to the discussion prompt. There is no agree or disagree reference in response to the question. This essay fails to follow the response format requirements. For the writer's reference:

Discussion Question: Do you agree or disagree?
Response: The convenience of underground rails could be proven via two main aspects (Prompt Deviation ) , which this essay would discuss.
Final Response: ... this essay has advocated the practicality of subway stations in the urban environment based on the mentioned argument (Prompt Deviation)

The essay has not addressed the discussion requirement because it has changed the discussion topic. Since the writer's response is not aligned with the requirements, the essay will not be able to achieve a passing score in 2 sections; TA and C + C. Both of these sections require on point discussion targets in relation to the prompt. The essay will fail.

Writing Feedback / Graduation from college versus possession of skills and experience [3]

The prompt in question uses a comparative discussion + personal opinion format based on the following discussion:

Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important.

There is no comparative discussion represented. The personal opinion justifies only the writers perspective of one side as opposed to the personal opinion based on each public opinion. The writer wrote a good essay and could have gotten a great score, if the scoring were based on the prompt deviation that the writer created. Since the discussion does not follow the scoring expectations, this work may not get a passing score.

Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2: TRAFFIC PROBLEMS AND SOLUTION [3]

The statement made in the orginal prompt is not a final solution. The sentence should have been presented as a "suggestion" or "suggested solution". The word "suggestion" makes a big difference in the meaning and emotion of the sentence. It creates a pure restatement rather than an altered paraphrase. The first reason presented is relevant to the "traffic" situation that is central to the discussion. However, the second paragraph focuses on the environment, which did not connect to the traffic concern of the statement That paragraph is a non-scoring presentation as it is a prompt topic deviation. As this paragraph will not recieve a score, the essay is lacking one relevant topic discussion. It will score less due to under-development.

Writing Feedback / International travel is becoming more and more affordable for everyone, even for the ordinary people [2]

It is important that the writer preserve the original presentation topic by not adding a personal opinion in the restatement. Not only does adding information that is not in the original and thus, have no supporting basis, it also alters the sentiment of the orginal. It goes from a neutral to bias tone, which lowers the T A score of the essay. The essay could have been stronger if the writer had properly formatted his response.

Do you think the advantage of this trend outweight the disadvantages? The question needs to have a response that will convince the reader that the uniter has the correct opinion. How is this done? User paragraphs that accomplishes the following:

- Present an advantage
- Why is it an advantage?
- Contradict / oppose the reason
- Offer evidence /an example to prove the contradiction correct
- Add a supporting reason based on the example or, transition into the next paragraph reason that aligns with the Advantage V. Disadvantage format.

The first reason of the writer follows a similar discussion to above format. The writer should have continued to follow that presentation line.

Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 2: Should government funding be used for new house instead of restoring old building ? [7]

The essay is well- written and addresses the prompt considerations quite well. The writer has a good grasp of the English language and has minimal grammar errors. The reasoning is sound based on believable reasons. It is obvious that he put great thought into the analysis of valid discussion points. The essay is well-developed. In as much as the writer did an admirable job in writing this essay, these are not all plus points that will result in an ideal score. The essay has a major flaw in the presentation, the word count.

The main consideration for scoring well in this essay is the writing time. The essay needs to be concise and precise in writing style within 300 words or 40 minutes, whichever comes first. Ideally, the writer should be able to analyze the prompt, outline the discussion, and draft the essay within 30 minutes. The final 10 minutes should be spent proofreading and editing the essay. It is this writing procedure that helps meet the all important C + C requirements. 3-5 sentences, direct to the point, will produce the needed results.

Do not overdiscuss as done in this presentation. Over-analysis does not help in a task 2 essay because the presentation tends to focus on unnecessary fillers and LR presentations as well. Balance the presentation across all requirements. The format I am suggesting can help achieve that.

Writing Feedback / Essay about scientific research were manage by the government or the private company [4]

The original discussion topic centers on the question " To what extent do you agree or disagree?" This essay failed to provide a strength of belief response based on the discussion question. However, the thesis topics presented are interesting and highly applicable to the discussion. Without a proper question response though, the thesis topics loses impact.

Discussion paragraphs are mostly on point but can use more explanation development. Attention must be paid to the sentence structures as these tend to lose clarity as the writing progresses. The writer must learn to proofread, spot, and correct errors in his writing. The writer shows a gift of logic. The problem, is that he does not have the ability to develop well structured sentences yet. Focus on grammar development, sentence variation, and clarity through basic writing exercises first.

Had the writer avoided these problems in the presentation, the essay would have recieved a passing mark.

Essays / Help with common app essay idea - my name as a challenge I faced [3]

A problematic name is not representative of an obstacle you had to overcome. From the provided description, it is something that makes you a unique person. My suggestion, is that the prompt in relation to:

Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.

The name reference can be framed to represent your identity. How it confused people but, helped you become a better person in the process , Allow yourself to better understand who you are through your name and how you are percieved because of it. Remember that your name can help you stand out during the application process. Use it to call attention to yourself.

Letters / Motivational letter for congressional nomination [3]

There is no clear motivation referenced in this letter. The student does not have a clear connection between academic and career goals. The presentation glosses over the actual motivating factors in favor of tourist preferences /reasons. A specific career goal, that can only be achieved by joining the Merchant Marine Academy must be indicated. That means, keeping in mind other options aside from the Navy is not possible. The letter fails to convince the reader of an honest desire to serve the country. Consider reversing the essay by trying to sound less like a person interested in going on a tour and more like a person who will use the Merchant Marine experience to become an exemplary Navy officer in the future. sell yourself as a future Navy officer , who will get his sea legs as a merchant marine.

Writing Feedback / Teaching only academic subjects that will be useful for students' future careers [4]

There are certain keywords that clue in a writer when it comes to the writing format. Where the phrases " some people" and " other people" are seen, these are representative of public ideas regarding the given topic. So the "discuss" part means the writer should explain what evidences these 2 general opinions are based on, within 2 seperate paragraphs. The writer's opinion must be presented in a manner evident of the public opinion analysis prior to his final opinion decision. This writing process cannot be seen in this presentation. Discussion shortcuts were taken which made the essay response lack in proper analytical consideration ppresentation. While the personal opinion is acceptable, it could have carried a more considerable scoring potential if the correct logical discussion format was followed.

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Writing Feedback / Some people think that video games are really bad and should be completely banned (view 1) [4]

The first sentence of the restatement is a incoherent. Note that there is no subject - verb reference indicated, leaving the sentence as an incomplete thought. Every sentence is considered as a part of the logical thought process of the presentation. Where an illogical presentation exists in either sentence or paragraph presentation, C + C and GRA deductions are sure to follow.

The succeeding sentences and paragraph presentations show that the student needs to gain more understanding of English vocabulary and develop his sentence structuring abilities more. The specific weaknesses do not matter at this point. Both need to be equally developed based on general grammar and vocabulary rules.

Writing Feedback / Many people believe that rather than railways, the authorities should invest their money on roads [2]

The writer has not provided an extent response as representative of his opinion as required for the restatement + response paragraph. That paragraph is incomplete as it does not properly deliver an appropriate version of the original. The thesis statement is completely missing so there is no acceptable opinion stated at the start. That is a TA failure.

Rather than a single opinion response explaining an extent opinion, the writer has used a comparative general and personal opinion format. A prompt discussion change that highlights the degree of low English understanding on the writer's part. His comprehension skills are weak and he is incapable of functioning as expected in an English academic setting. He will fail the test.

Writing Feedback / Essay about whether criminal is a human nature and ways to stop a kid from becoming criminals. [3]

The writer has not answered the discussion question. The writing is to be based on 2 questions:

- To what extent do you think crime is determined by human nature？
- Is it possible to stop children from growing up to be criminals?

The responses provided by the writer fails to respond to either question and in fact, does not relate to the topic as outlined. The student created his own discussion topics based on an unrelated set of discussion topics. The error shall result in a failing TA score. That means, even if the essay were to recieve partial scores based on the unrelated discussion, the total will still not tally to a passing score. Failure to understand the prompt will always lead to a failing final score.

Writing Feedback / Getting new information on the internet is much more popular than reading in books or magazines [2]

The writer has over-extended the restatement + opinion section in an incorrect manner. The paragraph should only reference the original topic and response requirements. In this presentation, the writer included information that was not originally mentioned. The first sentence is clearly not needed in the restatement as it is a reasoning response rather than a piece of originally presented information. The response statement, though somewhat correct in content , was not properly presented in the extent format as indicated.

The writer was asked to present 2 reasons.that show the extent of his disagreement and why the opinion should be opposed. Instead, I am reading one supporting reason each for an agreement and disagreement. This negates the established opinion and creates a confusing defense of the wileis point of unew. So the essay will be seen as not really having a solid single opinion. No score for the agreement paragraph. The only paragraph to be scored is the one in support of the thesis statement.

The essay will confuse the reader based on discussion clarity. These 2 presentation errors are the top reasons why this essay will deliver a failing score.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2-Essay about citizens should only consume local food and drink [2]

I am not sure what essay topic the writer has developed here. Whatever it is, the presentation is incoherent for the most part, and unrelated to the original discussion. The first paragraph alone does not contain a coherent thought and does not respond to the discussion question either. The writer is incapable of creating understandable English sentences for some reason. It could be that he is translating his thoughts, word for word from his native language to English, which will automatically create unusable discussion references due to lack of coherent word usage. The writer should first, learn how to write simple sentences in English, then practice writing random essay topics, before finally concentrating on specialized essay writing for the Task 2 part of the IELTS test.

Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 1 Given are maps which illustrates the plan change of Islip town and its current layout [6]

The writer does not have a good command of the English language. He often creates sentences that require better structuring to create more coherent thought presentations. For instance, the reference to plan change, what does that mean? Did the writer mean "proposed changes?" or "Redevelopment plan?" or some other vocabulary that would have made immediate reference to the changes and when these are to take place? This problem is not just a vocabulary issue, it is a GRA issue as well.

This is supposed to be an image representative report. That means, the assumption is that the reader will not be seeing the map as he reads this description. Therefore, there should not be any reference to "As seen on the map", because there is not supposed to be an available map for the reader. The writer needs to use a more descriptive opening sentence. Maybe a reference to a notable indicator in the image.

Writing Feedback / Residents living in their buildings start researching the history of them [4]

The writer has provided an acceptable restatement + opinion response to the essay. It created a very strong basis for the succeeding discussion. Then, the discussion fell apart.

It will be best not to confuse the research of architectural history with the past time of people. That presentation really confused the paragraph as it is not relevant to the question being asked. Referring to historical architecture interests would have been the best place to start the discussion. The reasons for the interest were okay at first, but the mention of "gossip" was out of place. "Discussion" or "shared interests" would have created a better reference point. The term "gossip" is not academic and has a negative connotation that should not be attached to the discussion.

The explanation about how these interests can be pursued is severely under - developed. It does not offer a solid explanation in the same manner that was developed for the previous paragraph. The writer should always present a balanced and well connected discussion from one paragraph to the next.

Writing Feedback / The importance of natural talent and training - different levels of ability in sport, art and music [2]

The topic restatement is inaccurate and does not reflect the 2 points of view as referenced in the original prompt. There is no clear opinion statement that could be seen as a proper thesis statement. The full essay does not follow the required discussion format (discuss both views and give your opinion). The writer presented a general analysis of the public opinions, without proper referencing. It made the discussion appear to come only from one analytical side, that of the writer. The importance of the public reference will help to show a logical analysis of the discussion prior to the build up for the personal opinion. In this case, there is a confusing mix of personal opinions, comprising majority of the essay, and little to no reference, to the public perception. So the essay response is only partially correct and could be deemed confusing by the examiner. There must be a 2 paragraph consideration of the public opinion and the writer's view on the public opinion to create a logical and valid writer's opinion statement.

Scholarship / Essay Chevening - Leadership - encourage and enable others to learn, grow, and improve their skills [4]

The references are all for assistant roles, not leadership roles. Was there an influencing reference? Yes, that can be clearly seen in the presentation. However, both references to leadership and influencing are on the low end of the leadership and influencing scale. The way that the applicant functioned is more of a rank and file person who was following an order list, it does not represent any leadership skills or talents. The applicant is an implementor, not a leader. There is a big difference. The only part that could have a true leadership and influencing representation is the one with regards to the macrame business. If the applicant can better explain the leadership and influencing role in that portion, then a real L&I essay might be developed. The first paragraph in particular should be deleted because it is a plea for scholarship acceptance based on a "pity me" story, which will not help in the consideration of the actual required skills and abilities for this written interview.

Writing Feedback / Is hard work always good? Children are told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough [3]

Undoubtedly and "there is no doubt" have the same meaning. It is best to avoid redundant references in the essay because, as the words convey the same idea, there tends to be a conflict within the statements provided. The lack of doubt should exist for one only of the two points of view. When there is a lack of doubt in one statement, a reference to doubt should be made in reference to the next idea that is counter to the first. It would be better if the writer does not refer to factual vocabulary instead since it is not necessary to give a conviction for this statement. There is no reference to the writer needing to convey his opinion on either matter in the discussion instruction. So words of strong opinion (undoubtedly, there is no doubt) are not required to create a strong A v. D discussion. The representations are convincing enough, even as there are some word usage errors in the presentation. These errors ( samed aged v same age) do not confuse the meaning of the sentence.

Writing Feedback / The illustrations detail changes that occurred in the town of Langley from 1910 to 1950 [3]

The writer should have identified the number of illustrations provided to add clarity to his claim that the comparisons cover progressive years rather than 2 exclusive years. The comparison statement made in the summary overview is inaccurate because the reference to "from 1910 to 1950" indicates several images depicting the slow progression or development of the community over a period of years. However, only 2 images, explaining the differences in the town during 2 specific years were made. There is no steady progression involved so a reference to such must not have been made in the summary presentation.

the phrase "readily apparent" should not be used when a comparison of 2 images is required. There is nothing readily apparent because the differences in images need to be studies, analyzed, and reported to the reader. The writer should not exaggerate the presentation by using presentation words that do not truly apply to the procedure of comparison. The "readily apparent" reference can only be safely used in single image representations as those are more scannable than multiple images data.

Writing Feedback / A ban on dangerous sports or freedom to do any sports or activity [3]

I beg the writer to stop with his practice essays. He is incapable of properly responding to the task requirement. He is constalty writing an agree or disagree response for a discuss both points of view and offer an opinion presentation. Those are 2 different types of essays. I am repeatedly pointing this out, but the lessons are falling on deaf ears. The best thing that this writer can do is postpone his IELTS test if he has one scheduled already, and then enroll in formal IELTS classes to help him learn how to respond to the questions. Actually, he does not even have to enroll in lessons, provided he reviews the sample essays that are freely available at this forum. He can easily learn the proper and improper way to respond to the essays just by reading the worth of others, paying attention to the corrections, and applying it to his own work. I am not confident of his ability to pass the IELTS test at this point. He will definitely have a problem passing the essay portions.

Writing Feedback / Developing countries need financial help or practical aid and advice [5]

I do not know what else to tell this writer. He is constantly making the same mistakes in his presentations regardless of the advice that I provide to him. He is obviously not reading my comments / listenting to my corrections, which is why the same mistakes are made repeatedly, regardless of the advice received. The student is partial to this discussion type for his practices, even though he fails to correct his presentation in any way. Repeated mistakes means the student is incapable of learning from his errors. I am slowly being convinced that this student will not be able to pass the IELTS test because he is incapable of learning how to respond to the essays.

Writing Feedback / Car-free day is an effective way of reducing air pollution, others think there are some other ways [4]

For some reason, the writer has failed to deliver the required discussion requirements of this essay. The discussion instructions indicates one thing, and the writer delivers a different response. So the essay cannot be seen as providing a proper discussion based on expected discussion content.

Discussion Instruction: DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.
Response: I do go along with this notion; however, I do believe there are other equally or more efficient methods.

As the writer has deviated from the prompt requirements, the essay will be scored, but will not recieve a passing consideration. The writer should learn to review his response in comparison to the discussion instruction. Failure to do so results in incorrect prompt response presentations.

Writing Feedback / The number of students graduating from university in Canada in a period of 15 years [3]

Avoid exaggerated references such as "vividly depicted". This is an academic or professional report. Keep the tone formal and use only relevant wording in the report presentation. Do not use creative writing references as these tend to reduce the formality of the presentation. The use of the word "obviously" is also out of place in this essay for the very same reason. Additionally, the writer should assume that the reader / examiner will not have access to the image / cannot view the image, so references to what is seen clearly in the image should not be made. These references should be clear, without making the reader feel "dumb" or stressed out due to confusion, if instances do not allow the reader to view the image along with the report.