Writing Feedback / Women read more books than men. The Number of Burnaby Public Library Readers [3]

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates books read in Burnaby Public Library over 4-years period based on gender. Overall, it can be seen that although both men and women reading books showed an upward trend, an increasing rate was witnessed by them is different.

In 2011, there was a close gap between man and women readers with books read by men at 3000 and 5000 for female. However, three years later, the Burnaby Public Library books read by men rose significantly to 14000 books whereas a less marked increase was shown by the other figure. This leads to a widened gap between them.

In 2012, there were 4000 and 9000 books read by men and women respectively. Between 2012 and 2013, a slight increase was seen the female readers, while man reading book rose significantly to 10,000, making their rate level at the year 2013. In reverse, a sharp slum by 7,000 showed in female rate, whereas a significant growth of 4,000 was seen in males. This leads the male figure to surpass the women readers and reached its peak at the end of the period.

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Writing Feedback / Appetite for fish and chips in Britain. How much money spent people there? [3]

The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods.

The bar chart and line graph illustrate the amount of money spent on fast foods classified by citizens' earnings and the number of its consumption during two decades in UK. At a glance, apart from fish and chips, people with high income dominate the number of expenses, meanwhile from 1970 to 1990, two kinds of the fast foods experienced a considerable rise.

With more than 40, hamburger far dominated people's expenditure in high level income, twice higher than the other food. Those earning average only outnumbered the figure for the former in fish and chips at 25, 7 times higher than the amount of money spent by high level earners on some food. Spending the lowest rate on both hamburger and pizza, the low level income showed the same rate of fish and chips as people with high income salary had.

Meantime, for the first decade, fish and chips showed its number of consumption rising steadily to 150 and it rocketed by 350 for the following decade. Similarly, occupying the lowest rate in the first year, hamburger saw an increase of 270. By contrast, over the 20-year period, the trend of pizza fell dramatically to 210. Even though it increased during the last five years, it did not offer a significant difference.

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Writing Feedback / Today, many people rely on utilizing renewable energy in order to produce electricity [2]

More renewable energy sources are harnessed to generate electricity these days. What are disadvantages and advantages of this trend?

Today, many people rely on utilizing renewable energy in order to produce electricity. While this trend can reduce the number of CO2 released on the atmosphere, such trend also has limited energy production.

It is generally known that a latest method to produce electricity will not contribute to be one of global warming causes. Compared to the unrenewable energy that should be burned first, this energy does not require the technic that hostile environment as it utilizes energy generated by natural resources. A conducted research in United State shows that due to there are many countries that are using this trend, the level of erosion ozone layer decrease 4% during the last 3 semester. Hence, it is clear that by using natural resources, CO2's number that destroy ozone layers are declining.

However, as this is still a developing trend then it only produce less than what conventional system has. The reason for this because renewable energy relies on dynamic weathers that results fickle volume of energy. Besides, there is still lack of experiences how to generate those natural resources that limits people to utilize it well. China has taken advantages through wind power, a national researcher then states that Chinese who live in countryside are still struggling in generating electricity through this method as they have no idea what to do when the wind power ran down. Thus, it proves that this trend still needs to be developed.

In brief, it is a good idea to utilize natural resources besides it can save the earth, it will not be finished as well. However, the disadvantage like small volume production is still faced.

Writing Feedback / Writing Task II _ Teachers are struggling to give equal attention in a large class [2]

When students are in large classes, it is very hard for the teacher to give every student individual attention. What can educational authorities do about this?

The huge number of students in one class affects them receiving attentions unevenly. Teacher's capacity which is inevitably limited results unequally treatments, thus educational institution should formulate a teaching approach that can cover it like discussion group, besides, advanced facilities like internet access should be utilized.

It goes without saying that educator should have a creative method like making a group when teaching in a big class in order to give fair attention to each student. It is because each child has different need about attention thus teacher should not try to give them same rate but based on their needs. Dividing students into three different categories and getting them individual task exactly ease teacher to give objective attention. UNESCO has conducted research through Finland National School system that frees their teachers to use any kind of approach; so teacher A, for example, has different method when teaching in Daisy class and in Edelweiss class, then it results that there is no students who feel being exiled and the teacher enjoys his teaching time as well. It is true then that a creative teaching method can help teacher to give fair attention during study time.

Moreover, available facilities like using internet in a large class also can be another way to offer sufficient attention for children. The reason for this is that this advanced technology can be used to monitor each student effectively meanwhile, at the same time, each of children also has same right to ask and discus to teacher. Besides, through this tool, teachers are not suffering to think too much about equal attention to be given since they are easily can supervise each student's improvement. South Korea has applied this sophisticated educational system since the last decade and found their teachers are less worried about individual attention in class compared to the past decade. Thus, it is clear that utilizing internet access in a class during study time is completely ease teacher to give fair attention toward children.

In conclusion, attention may not be given equally in term of mathematical value but it depends on individual needs. Thus, creative teaching method and by utilizing internet access are the best way to get students find equal attention.

Writing Feedback / Writing Task II _ Contrusting dams to solve one of global warming's impacts [2]

Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions.

In 2000s, people witness the increasing sea levels at alert status as one of climate change's impacts. Inhabitants, then, experience flood as the most obvious matter that is being inflicted, thus building dams are the best solution for this phenomenon.

It goes without saying that due to the increasing sea level, wherever citizens go, flood is found. It is a situation when a large amount of water is covering settlement house and it completely interferes inhabitants. Later, it makes inhabitants difficult to do their activities like inability to go everywhere since they are trapped, and/or catching some disease like diarhea, malaria or cold. Reported from Queensland National Hospital, Australia, the number of patients suffering diarhea and malaria are jumping by 30% even when the city has been rained for two days.

However, this serious problem can cope with constructing dam in order to block the large amount of water. This is storage for the plenty of water to get the river flow be good, so there is no more water goes to land. This step in commonly believed as an effective solution as Egypt, New Zealand and Canada have applied it. In Egypt, for example, a dam built across the Nile has worked since 1903 till now to prevent flood.

Overall, global warming which raises sea levels inundates residences and bears problems. Nevertheless, sea barriers are proven to be a long-term solution to solve this phenomenon.

Writing Feedback / People Tend to Have More Than One Job because of the increasing cost of life [2]

The world of work is changing rapidly. Working conditions today are not the same as before and people no longer rely on taking one job for life. Discuss the possible causes for these changes and give your suggestion on how people should prepare for work in the future?

These days, workers are found to get themselves involve in a lot of works. Living cost standard that keeps growing triggers people applying more than one job, hence ministries should ban the rising cost without governments' authorization.

It is needless to say that inflation that is pushing up the cost of living becomes the reason why people tend to have multi jobs. Inhabitants are forced to meet the enormous cost because there is no national standard of goods prices in market, thus sellers arbitrarily determine the price of goods. Data from district 11 have shown that during the first semester of 2015, there are 189 civil servants who finally has an online shop account owing to the fact that basic needs costs such as food and clothing sold in markets change rapidly. It is true then that living cost standard holds main roles in work world.

Nevertheless, this matter would not be worried unless stuffs prices have restricted standard formulated by the country. This completely helps inhabitants to manage their finances hence they do not need to take a second job. International researcher states that compared to the past, Franch and German now live prosperous financially since their country has strict regulation for goods prices. Hence, it is clear that through this policy, household need can be fulfilled by one main job.

Overall, the costs changes in market force societies to apply for other new jobs. Menawhile, if ministry makes a strict rule for goods prices standard, there will be no willing to take more than one job anymore as people's needs can be covered by the income of a job.

Writing Feedback / Writing Task II _ Online Computer Games can Broaden The Horizon [2]

Some people think that online computer game is useful for children, while others claim is bad. What are advantages and disadvantages of online computer game for children?

The trend of online computer games is becoming common among children and being debated by some societies. Some people assume that it is worthwhile as it can be a fun way to acquire knowledge like foreign languages, whereas the rest of them argue the opposite since it makes its users being addicted.

It is commonly thought that through online computer games, people will obtain new knowledge such as culture and language. Since this sophisticated plays are created mostly by other countries and being globally used, so the creators must be function it as a chance to introduce their country. Moreover, owing to the fact that online games are played repeatedly, it is an affective way, then, since it will unintentionally be trapped in users' mind. In China, a current study presents that there are more than a half (59%) of pupils who understand verbal English and Japanese as they are genuine gamers. Thus, it is simply beneficial to play online computer games since while having fun, people also broaden their horizon.

However, it is not a small number of people who often reported that playing online games bears demerits and the most being complained is that it is addictive. This kind of game is considered to drag too much time because it provides many levels of challenges where it makes gamers' curiosity is gradually increasing and leads them to play it over again. Furthermore, people find online computer games are enjoyable because this happens in cyberspace that makes them can interact to other gamers globally. A conducted survey in Japan 2015 shows that there are 76 parents of 100 total interviewee parents admit that their teenagers mostly have their leisure time in front of their computer screen for hours. It is true then that online computer games offer drawback for users.

To conclude, through online computer games, children have their play time while gain knowledge. Even though it has possibility to make users addictive, but parents control can be counted on.

Writing Feedback / Moving manufaturers to suburban areas bears demerits [3]

In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

The ministries in some countries are recommending industries and businesses to be relocated in suburb area rather than in rural area. Even though the movements of industries and businesses directed to outskirt area is a good idea to reduce the number of people moving to city. The disadvantage of traffic congestion and flood encountered in the relocation point far outweigh any benefits

It is often said that the order to move industrial and business buildings to suburb area is to draw up the population density in the city. As industries and businesses offers work field, the numbers of citizens who migrate to rural area keep increasing. Besides, Industries like shopping centers also provide entertainments which then attract inhabitants to move in the countryside. South Korea citizens proves it where there are 2,5 million people are habituated to live for a while in Busan or Incheon, beside Seoul as its capital city, in order to work. However, this seems to create another density population in the countryside as more people migrate to this place.

Nevertheless, reallocating industries and businesses out of rural area makes it bears urban areas' common problems such as pollutions and flood. It is because moving those buildings do not only bring themselves but all of the things involved like employees and congestions also move. Likewise, having big number of industrial and business buildings triggers flood because there only a small number of lands that can be functioned as landfills. A lecturer from Al-Azhar University conducted a study that examine the merits and demerits of moving industries from Cairo to Alexandria presents that now Alexandria becomes Cairo's twin. This means that its advantage should more concerned and therefore it outnumbers its benefits

In brief, it is undeniable that through the policy to move manufacturers is one effective way to solve population density in rural area, but this idea bring demerits for outskirt as the movement target. Hence, I believe that this policy has greater drawback than its merit.

Writing Feedback / Writing Task II _ Pediatric care centers offer best service for children [3]

Some parents think that childcare centers provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better cares for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Childcare centers are considered by some parents for their children to be entrusted while they are in busy hours. Some people agree about it while others believe that grandparents' role is much better. Although relatives inevitably educate these children well, I firmly believe that pre-school age children will obtain sociability skill in childcare centers and be educated by perfect services since professional and experienced people are involved.

It is commonly found that there are many working parents out there who bring up their children by relatives' complicity believe that it is not a bad idea as relatives surely will be well-being through the nurture and it relieves parents. It is because parents have experienced it, consequently children growth would be as like them as possible. Besides, using other family members' service does not require high cost which can be used for children's next education needs. Lee Kwang Soo, an educator who teach in 4 renowned schools in Seoul, South Korea, states that children who are being nurtured by their grandparents behave well in school.

Nevertheless, fact proves that it is not a small number of toddlers who spend their days in a playgroup in order to gain sophisticated education system. The reason for this is that there is no doubt that pediatric care centers offers professionals who are accomplished in nursing toddler. Besides, its contemporary method can lead pre-school age children to be well-prepared people facing the world because children naturally learn cognitive skills such as how to adapt with others and how to solve problem with peers. A researcher from University of South Korea studies toward triplets children where Song Dae Han and Song Min Guk are being nursed by their aunt while Song Man Se joins a pediatric care center. The study finds that the latter child is more energetic than the other two who tend to be calmer which means that who is in pediatric care center socialize better and faster compared to them who are nursed by relative .

Moreover, I also assert that there are many childcare centers today who offer both conventional and modern method to nurse children. It is because people still believe that the way our ancestor raise children have many merits indeed. Thus, it can make children be better then.

Overall, it is a good idea to have relatives' role in nursing children since their parents have busy days, but it would be great for children to be explored their skills while they are being nurtured as what is offered by pediatric care centers.

Writing Feedback / Writing Task II _ Smokers should leave building to enjoy their cigerettes [2]

In some countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree?

A regulation to smoke out of public areas has been applied in some countries. I am a firm believer through this statement because this kind of activity causes unhealthy surroundings and accustoms a good attitude for smokers as well.

It is often said that this irritating habit is prone to create unhealthy air. The reason for this is because cigarette bears many bad chemicals that it does pollute the environment. Besides, it also harms people who inhale its smoke. Medical officials' records say that there are many citizens suffer serious disease due to become passive smokers. Thus, it is a good trend not to let smokers inhale cigarette in buildings.

Moreover, pulling on cigarette out of public spaces is sensible way to meet the right between the smokers and people who do not. It leads smokers to have a big respect toward other people who do not smoke and vice versa, creating the harmony between them. Besides, while this policy would lessen the number of passive smokers, it also directs the smokers to leave this habit gradually as the place where they can smoke restricted. In some supermarkets, for example, it is now rarely found people who argue each other because of cigarette's smoke as smokers has special place to enjoy their cigarettes.

To conclude, besides to maintain fresh air in enclosed places, this regulation must be an effective way to create good habit for smokers to respect people who do not smoke. Moreover, through this policy, there will be a reducing number of passive smokers as an additional benefit.

Writing Feedback / 'They are not ready psychologically'. Writing Task II; Children are Encouraged to Have Paid Work [4]

In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong while others consider it as valuable work experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It has been commonly known that some countries encourage children to work. Some people find it is completely useful, while others believe that children have not had a responsibility to work. Even though they will gain priceless experiences through paid work, I believe that psychologically they have not been ready yet to face work world indeed and should obtain more knowledge from school.

It cannot be denied that having worth experiences become another additional point for children who have worked. Owing to the fact that the more extra-activities they join, the better person they will be, it makes them gain many kinds of skills such as sociability, problem-solving skill and/or being a good time manager. For instance, children who help their neighbor selling goods in a market and earning money definitely have many conversations with new people more than ordinary children have.

However, children should get their right to gain knowledge in institutional education as it is their golden age. Studying in early age involves long term memory which is absolutely good for children's future. Besides, live lessons also are gotten in school, they are not only studying a subject but working together, taking responsible, making friends, learning attitudes and having self-reliance are also obtained. A conducted research held by an NGO finds that people who spend their childhood by studying in school are more likely to be ready to face adult's life. It then, illustrates how important taking school in early age.

Moreover, I also claim that they are not mature enough to face the hardness of working atmosphere. Taking a job in that age must be difficult to engage with the stuffs as those young people are in charge to play. Then if they have to work in a car wash, for example, they must have less experience which results children got anger by the boss. Thus it can affect them to become introvert.

To recapitulate, even though encouraging young people to work in their golden age in order to have valuable experiences is a good idea, but as long as educational institution offers them to have other more worthwhile experiences there is no reason for them to have a job then.

Writing Feedback / Money is the only reason why people rely on a same company for a long time [2]

Do you agree that money is the only motivation at work why people prefer working in the same company for many years?
It cannot be denied that the main reason why workers work and stay for ages in a company is to earn much money. This essay would firmly disagree about this idea since co-workers as whom they work with and the atmosphere at workplace also hold big role in it.

Workmen would stay within years in one company due to the fact that they have made a close relationship with the colleagues. As social beings, workers agree that having a break with fellows that they are comfortable with becomes other reason why they still work at the same workplace. It is a burden to build a new other relation when workers have to move to another company. A conducted research that has been done on a cosmetic company in Korea two years ago proves that the huge numbers of employees are loyal to their company because of their colleagues' roles. Thus, it is not true that income is the only one factor that makes workers stay longer.

Furthermore, the situation in a workplace also has pivotal influence on how long employees work in a company. Having a pleasant atmosphere could determine the working quality of employees. Since people who work must have busy hours, the company's atmosphere could relax and refresh them. A writer or an illustrator in a magazine company, for example, needs to meet a quite quiet or even a fun atmosphere in their company. Therefore, money is just one of many factors that encourage workers to stay for couple years in the same company.

To sum up, being a loyal employee for a company does not always be determined by the amount of salary. Other factors such as works fellows and the atmosphere in the office can make workers cozy to work longer.

Writing Feedback / Result of the survey on workmen's relations with the chiefs and colleagues [2]

The given pie charts provide information about the percentage of the workmen's relations with the chiefs and colleagues. The surveys is conducted in 2005 and 2009. Overall, it is seen that working men tend to maintain very good relationship to their leaders and colleagues.

The data presents that in 2005, there were 61% workmen stated that their relation with their boss was completely good and so was with their co-workers which took 63%. Meanwhile, 26% and 28% of workers felt that they kept a good relationship with leaders and colleagues respectively. Then, the rest of the percentage showed that workers had fair or even poor relationship with them.

Besides, the next four years, the survey's result have no significant difference. Employees keep their relationship with supervisors and co-workers on very good level, where there were 65% of workers had it with their boss and 70% kept it with their colleagues. Next, 22% of working men were having a good relation to their leaders and 25% of work men owned a good link to their co-workers. A poor and fair relations, that were addressed to supervisors and co-workers, took only less than 10%.

Writing Feedback / Being a workman or student? Graduates are easy to find in coffee shops, boutiques or other companies [2]

Some suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university.

Discuss what the advantages and advantages might be for people who do this.

In today's world, many students who are freshly graduated from a senior high school are found easily in a coffee shop or boutiqe or other companies. However, it is not less students who continue their study to a university right after their graduation. Which one is the best choice?

For me, it is obvious that there are two main advantages for students to work before being a university students. The first one is they must have experiences that cannot get from formal institution such as how to be a good employee and colleague, how to deal with new societies , what manner to be shown when meet the boss and how to overcome any demanded works. A further positive point is they might be more responsible and wiser to use and spend money. It is because they experience the challenges in earning money.

On the other hand, being a workman after 12-year formal school is completed might cause them to have less desire to take class formally. It is because they have witnessed the joy of work with personal income. Besides, age becomes a matter also. Spending a few years handling a job means they will not meet their counterparts in a same class when in college. Then, in some times, lack of intent would appear because of it.

To conclude, deciding to be a university student after finishing study at school is better than to be a working man. I am a firm believer that individual who get higher education would be hired a better job.

Writing Feedback / Communication skills and your performance at a work place [2]

The table below gives the results of two surveys, in 1997 and 2006, in which people were asked which communication skills were essential in their jobs.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table presented illustrates the percentage of two conducted surveys in 1997 and 2006 about the significant level of communication skills in work place. The skills are grouped into external communication and internal communication. At a glance, it can be seen obviously that both of trends witnessed a dramatical increase.

The data shows that internal communication skills saw a considerable rise to 10 percent in instructing or training people. Then, persuading or influencing others skill went up to 21% from 16%. Moreover, the ability of making speeches or presentations climbed by 4 percent. The next three skills; analysing problems together with others, planning the activities of others and listening carefully to colleagues as well experienced an increase of 6%, 1%, and 9% respectively.

Furthermore, the other communication skills (external communication skills) have no significant difference in its change. All of the external communication skills improved unless the ability to sell a product or service. The latter skill dipped by 3%. Meanwhile, knowledge of particular products or services and advising or caring for cutomers or clients and dealing with people witnessed a rise of 6%, 3%, and 5% respectively.

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Writing Feedback / Writing task 2 _ Some people think having healthy lifestyle is difficult while others think it is ea [3]

Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

These days, healthy lifestyle has become a trend among most of inhabitants. What kind of food they eat, how many time they go to gym and what yoga course they take are being concerned mostly by the majority of citizens. Thus, this new trend eventually lead them to a healthy life even though another group of people find it is still difficult to be run.

Many people assume that healthy lifestyle means improving lifestyle cost. Consuming oorganic food, for instance, is something that is considered asa luxury. Besides, bad habit like consuming junk food which has been being done by most people also takes big role of the reason why live healthy life is difficult. Nevertheless, I am convinced that it is not hard to live healthy lifestyle as long as the subject itself has a strong willing for it.

On the other hand, some societies find it easy beacuse they only need to be discipline to live healthy life. Exercise, taking some rest, and balanced diet are the main points that build healthy lifestyle, I think. People do not need to go to gym to do exercise, even walking pass some metres around office to find a restaurant in break time can be counted as an exercise. It is as simple as that.

All in all, it seems that the intention determines ifhealthy lifestyle is difficult or easy to be run. Either he/she is busy or not, they first thing should be questioned is how far someone wants a healthy lifestyle.