Writing Feedback / Logging industry needs supply from environment to deliver products which leads to the massive damage [2]

IELTS Summary 1: Environmental Impacts of Logging

Fitting together, industry and environment nowadays become indivisible. Logging industry in particular, needs supply from environment to deliver products. Unfortunately, the logging brings the environment closer to massive damage. Environment such as rainforest is habitat and patron for the living thing.

The ecosystem of rainforest covers the soil from erosion. The root helps to protect the loss of fertile soil and trees have canopy branches to conserve the soil surface from heavy rainfall. Concerned with that, construction for logging accesses brought heavy compression on the land and endangers the water.

Logging industry activities inevitably had affected various areas. As a filter of the air pollutant, trees give myriads of advantages, but by cutting down the trees, it can lead to rain acid and climate change. In the water, eroding soil has disrupted the viability of aquatic organism. Thus, the logging industry should consider reforesting for environmental sake.

Writing Feedback / Some birds migrate from the breeding ground to the other area for the rest of the remained season. [4]

IELTS Summary 2: Bird Migration

In life, there is a kind of situation brings us to make an alteration. The same thing as what the bird follows through in its life. The bird migrates from the breeding ground to the other area for the rest of the left season.

Birds migrate in two kinds of forms, across latitudes and altitudes. When birds migrate across the latitudes, they travel head off higher latitudes to lower latitudes. Subsequently, in the term of birds migrate across altitudes, the phenomenon shows birds alight from higher to lower altitudes.

Birds navigate the location by looking at the nature cues. At the time birds migrate, they also exert their body fat to fuel this remarkable escapade. Thus, this bird's movement always overawed observers for centuries.

Writing Feedback / Successful performance is not merely physics, it's also a multitude combination of supporting skills [3]

IELTS Summary 4: Peripheral Vision in Sports

Successful performance is not merely about physical predictors, it also about a multitude combination of supporting skills. One significant skill can be refers to visual ability. Athletes, for example, have to be able to utilize this visual ability, especially the peripheral vision in order to be fully functioning during the game.

Peripheral vision enables the athletes to observe the boundaries of visual range, which help them to attain the best effort. Peripheral vision involves the ability to process stimulus quickly. A simple example of peripheral vision can be seen when a basketball player must dribble the ball toward the ring and stay bring to notice the position of the other players by using the edge of eyes. Thus, such a kind of peripheral vision capacity brings advantages for the athletes' performance.

Writing Feedback / The best way to refresh mind and body conditions is to spend the leisure time in natural environment [2]

IELTS Summary 5: Using Leisure Time

Research shows that mostly people are not optimizing their leisure time. In keeping with this tendency, health practitioners suggest that the best way to refresh mind and body conditions is to spend the leisure time in natural environment, which lead the people to have physical activities. It is related to the fact that mostly population in the world living in a city with abundant stimulus.

Having vacation is one of the ways in which the majority people do to spend the leisure time. Italia has the most vocation time; it is forty-two days per year and America has the least with thirteen days per year. However, the highest satisfaction for vocation time comes from the British due to the outdoor physical activities that they choose.

Therefore, it is should be deliberated to make the most of leisure time for outdoor activities regarding its benefit and satisfaction.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Summary 6: Carrie Green-Programming your mind for success (TED) [2]

Carrie Green, founder of Female Entrepreneur Association, stated that the most common reasons that stop the people to reach out what they desire are fear, obstacle, and lack of motivation. Self-limiting thought and procrastination restrict the people from make the most of their available opportunities. In keeping with that, it is clearly seen that what we are thinking about impacts our behavior.

Became aware about what's on mind is the first step to program our mind for success. After that, learn to replace the negative thoughts with the positive and empowering mind. The last, don't forget to believe in, it helps us to endure the hard situations. Over all, being mindful and positive are the key points for success.

Writing Feedback / Sarah Lewis - Embrace the near win (TED) [2]

Sarah Lewis, an art historian, describes the line between losing and winning. That line called "the near win". We convert success to mastery when we value the gift of the near win. If success is about hitting the target, then mastery is not about having a commitment to a goal, but a constant pursue.

Mastery closely related with the near win. Both of that focused on what we plan to do to reach out our goals right now. Near win is the reason to continue, also it makes us never feel enough to overcome the problems. In keeping with that, embrace the near win means that we still have more to do.

Writing Feedback / One of the major public transportation in Europe refers to subway. The first one was opened in 1863 [3]

Transportation is a vital aspect numerous modern big cities. One of the major public transportation in Europe refers to subway. The first subway was opened in 1863 and located in London.

In Europe, three of largest underground rail services are located in London, Paris, and Moscow. Each of the cities has its own uniqueness. London was the first city that launched the underground rail system and introduced the method for subway tracks called "cut and cover". Paris has a beautiful decoration in the station with myriad of artworks, such as paintings, mosaics, and sculptures. The last, Moscow the city with a large number of tracks lying above the ground. Eventually, the underground rail system expanded the service in case of its benefit for the people.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Summary 8: Terri Trespicio-Stop searching for your passion [4]

Most of people believe that they have to follow their passion. This kind of thing makes people stand still. After graduate from school, many people do not know what to do because they don't know their passion. Related with that, it is important to know that passion is not about a plan, passion is a dynamic feeling. Too busy searching for passion can lead the people lost the opportunities in life.

Passion created by living it not by organize it. Passion is the entire energy that we use to solve whatever in front of us, so that we don't need to search the passion. Passion related with something that we can use to contribute. Finally, in keeping with that, there's a saying, "You don't need to follow your passion, your passion follow you".

Writing Feedback / IELTS Summary 10: Origins of Writing [2]

Ancient civilizations believe that writing helps to deliver messages to God. As a communication media to God, ancient peoples gave a high value for writing activities. When the people started to establish permanent place in farming communities, writing system also developed.

The documentations reveal that writing system independently developed in three parts of the world; Mesopotamia, China, and Mesoamerica. Ancient Sumerians in Mesopotamia created the first writing system in 3000 B.C. in case of land ownership. Furthermore, Ancient Chinese began to write on metal and bone around 1500 B.C. and Ancient Maya created writing system as they applied symbols on religious structures and recorded the deeds of their rulers. Yet, the scholars proposed that Zapotec culture was the oldest civilization that used writing system. However, related with the facts, the writing system that we use today can't be apart from the previous history of ancient civilizations.

Writing Feedback / Hula dancing plays important function as an important aspect of Hawaiian culture. [2]

Hula dancing plays important function as an aspect of Hawaiian culture. The origin of hula dancing has its roots in Hawaiian mythology. History suggested that formerly hula performed as part of ritual in honor of god or goddess. Traditionally, men and woman can perform this dance.

Hula is well-known dancing from Hawaiian culture, which catches the attention of many people around the world. Hula dancing still exists until this modern era with different touch from the ancient. The ancient hula relies on energetic movement, whereas the modern style is slower. This day, hula function move from ritual ceremony to form of entertainment. However, the transformation of hula is a way to maintain Hawaiian culture identity.

Writing Feedback / The shortage of nurses largely affects the health care system around the world [3]

IELTS Summary 12: Nurse Migration

The shortage of nurses largely affects the health care system around the world. In developing countries, this shortage primary because nurses migrate to developed countries searching for a better prosperity. Different with developed countries, the shortage of nurses related with an aging population that requires more health care services.

The nurse migration itself left unfilled position in origin country. As a result, there are only a few number of qualified health care practitioners who have to face many patients. Concerned with this condition, health care services often administered by assistant nurses who have only basic skills. Thus, this migration actually leave some problems behind both in developing and developed countries.

Writing Feedback / The table shows secondary school attendance during period of 2000 to 2009 [3]

The table shows secondary school attendance during period of 2000 to 2009. Generally, the trend reveals gradual descent of attendance in Specialist Schools, Grammar Schools, and Voluntary-controlled Schools. Meanwhile, in Community Schools the tendency of attendance has risen from 2000 to 2009.

Specialist Schools experience 2% of descent from 2000 to 2009. This is suggested that there is a decline about 0,2% related with attendance every year. Moving over to Grammar Schools, from 2000 to 2005 the change was lower than the period of 2005-2009; those are 5% and 7%.

Moreover, in keeping with Voluntary-controlled Schools, the alteration over 2000 to 2005 and 2005-2009 gradually increased 14% and 18%. One interesting fact, that in Community Schools, the progress was different with increased preference number concerned with secondary school attendance. From 2000 to 2005, the increase is 20% and from 2005-2009 is 26% which on average, there is 5,1% of increase in secondary school attendance annually.

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Writing Feedback / Comprehending communication relies on cultural mastery of the local language. [2]

Writing Task 2-Understanding the culture by speaking the language

Culture is a complex heritage that runs in the blood across generations, it includes the way individuals communicate, this terms leads to the opinion in which individual may only understand what the others talk about if they understand the language. Relating this issue, I stand on the line that comprehension in communication not only relies on cultural mastery of that local language.

Being connected with the people is not merely about language itself, there are several instruments within individuals that allow us to engage in. Firstly, as a remarkable creature, human nature enables individuals to recognize expressions. Research shows that expression is a universal media across all the cultures around the world that gives occasion to get the meaning of someone's feeling. Furthermore, there is also cross culture intelligence, according to the review of some literatures, this kind of intelligence brings the individuals have the ability to aware and notice other cultures manner without have to be a part of it.

In addition, it is something generally admit that it is very hard to understand the culture of a country as a whole package, it is due to the numerous of local languages and cultures exist. For example, in Indonesia every region has local tradition and particular language to communicate. However, this is not making a relational problem, because this varies result in a national language. Therefore, even though the people come from different background they still can contact each other.

In conclusion, as there are myriads of cultures in each country, it does not become a boundary to get along. Concerned with this, preserve the cultural components is beneficial regarding that contrastive tradition teach us to fully functioning in appropriate way to appreciate the diversity.

Writing Feedback / Sir Ken Robinson stated that every child is born as a talented artist. [2]

Sir Ken Robinson-Do Schools Kill Creativity

Sir Ken Robinson stated that every child born as a talented artist. Most of the people just forgot that as they were children, they had an extraordinary capacity for innovating. Children is remarkable due to their bravery, they do not even afraid to get wrong and this is important that if you are not getting wrong you will not come out with anything original. However, unfortunately, as the people growing up this sense of fearlessness to explore the world starts to fade away.

As individuals become an adult, they start to be a rigid on thinking and less creative, this is something inevitable as it results from school processes. Nevertheless, it is generally realize that everybody has interest in educational issue. Along with that, the purpose of a study nowadays focuses on how the institutions produce university professors. There is also tendency to pay more attention to particular subject concern with math instead of arts, in case of the future preparation. Covering the issue, it is important to have a note that creativity also important in education as well as literacy.

Writing Feedback / How the parents endangering their children imagination [2]

Children nowadays are becoming overwhelm with numerous school activities and abundant pressure related their performance. This is indirectly demolishing their opportunity to develop creative thinking to explore their world and to discover their self. Children spend about eight hours per day on modern technology devices, besides the scheduled program that they have.

Related this issue, the parents need to be more sensitive to realize how their children want to get free from all this rigid agendas. As the result of this kind of manner, children become passive in their leisure time, involved and engaged in passive entertainment by using their fingertip on the surface of tablet, instead of have time to dream and imagine. This is undeniable coming up with the parents desire, as they are very scare if their children not having an excellent in academic or other fields. Something important that the parents should take into account in which imagination needs free room and time to thrive, and this is absolutely based on their support. Therefore, as the parents want to develop their children imagination it is imperative that they give them space to have it.