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Name: yurike ika cahyo
Joined: Nov 10, 2016
Last Post: Dec 6, 2016
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School: Sepuluh Nopember Institute of Technology

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yurikeyuri   
Nov 23, 2016
Writing Feedback / GRE Issue Topic : "All too often, companies hire outside consultants to suggest ways for the [7]

Hello, let me give my correction for you

Now a days consultancies are increasing day by day Nowadays

opinions to other companycompanies who hire their services (other indicate the plural form so the word "company" must in plural form too)

so they have good experience in the there field

view pointsview point and suggestions

wasting a time to hire a full timefull-time employee or (...) employee who don'tdoesn't have prior experience ...

they hire a consultants from the outside

have spendspent
yurikeyuri   
Nov 23, 2016
Writing Feedback / "Inventors are not as important to society as doctors, Agree or disagree?" [3]

The talking about the position or function of the scientist to society as same important as the doctors. The inventors or the doctors just have the different way in the society, but these work have same important to increase the good quality of society life. In my view, I disagree with the statement that the doctor is important to society and not for the inventor.

The doctor has a job description to solve other problems in the environment, particularly in the health field. The health sector is one of the big problems which occur the body of the human in their population. For example, many diseases have damaged the society like cancer, diabetes, hypertension etc. which need the medical treatment from the doctors. Therefore, the doctors have the main job to reduce the percentage of disease risk or to solve many problems only in the medic subject. However, it is different of the way to solve other problems in outer the medician, like agriculture, technology, or the environment. The doctors can't solve these problems.

The inventors have many skills to solve the problem in society which the problem can't be solved by the doctor. For example, to make many solutions to solve agriculture problem like the drought is increased the cloud seeding which has researched by the scientist in order to occur the not nature rainwater. Also, to increase eco electricity power system, so the scientist makes the outline research of wave electricity. In many cases, there is work which can't be solved by the doctor but can be done with another person, mainly scientist

Finally, the conclusion of this problem is the inventor as more important as the doctor. The inventors have many skills to solve many problems in the society which can't be solved by the doctors. I suggest that these jobs must be work together in the society.
yurikeyuri   
Nov 23, 2016
Writing Feedback / The total demand on hybrid vehicles in 2009 was twice as much as three years earlier [7]

The global sale of hybrid vehicles is showed in below chart between 2006 and 2009. The kinds of countries which participate in this survey that are Japan, US, and other. Overall, the total sales in 2009 were the twice amount of the total sales in 2009 and it includes the upward trend.

Firstly, Japan always increases the sale of hybrid transport between 2006 and 2009, which it has the highest number of sales at almost 350 thousand that it increased extremely from 2008 to 2009. Not only Japan has highest sales, but also it has the lowest number of hybrid vehicle sales approximately 50 thousand.

Secondly, Ushas up and down trend of the hybrid transport sales which it has the lowest number of sales about 250 thousand vehicles and also the US has the highest number of hybrid sales by 100 thousand in 2007 or from one year before in 2006.

Thirdly, the other countries have the gradual increase about 50 thousand transports from 2006 to 2009 which the smallest number of hybrid vehicle sales at 50 thousand, also the highest number is over 100 thousand and below in 150 thousand of the hybrid vehicle.
yurikeyuri   
Nov 22, 2016
Writing Feedback / How cement is made? Which materials are used in the manufacturing process? [4]

Hello, let me give my correction for you

results in the concrete mixer (the word "concrete mixer" need an article "the")

... cement production was insertinserted (because the both of was and insert are verbs, and two verbs must be separated by connector)

Afterwardsafterward , the powder

Another steps step, ("another" is indicate the singular form)

will produce the source of cement.

the material was grindedground by grinder (ground is verb 3 of grind not grinded)

the it will produce the concrete

thank you
yurikeyuri   
Nov 22, 2016
Writing Feedback / Ielts academic task 2: some people say that we do not need printed newspaper anymore. agree/disagree [4]

Hello, let me give my correction for you

there isare many (the word "many" indicate plural form, so need plural verb is "are")

many kindkinds of (the word "many" indicate plural form, so need plural verb is "are")

informs you withof all the news (the best preposition after "you" is "of")

my coffee inon the balcony (the best preposition after "my coffe" is "on")

two puzzlepuzzles nearby (the word "two" indicate plural form, so need plural form of puzzle is "puzzles")

thank you
yurikeyuri   
Nov 22, 2016
Writing Feedback / 30 Days Method to Try New Something [3]

The new something can add to our life with many ways, mainly think or planning and try it for the next 30 days because this way is very effectively to support our self-do more, pressure and harder 30 days challenge and finally be much more memorable about something. We can keep thinking of self that one small thing is sustainable changes.

Source : TED
yurikeyuri   
Nov 22, 2016
Writing Feedback / Bleached corals in the Pacific have started bouncing bac [3]

The scientists make a research about coral around the island of Kiritimati and proved the coral about 85 percent was dead, 10 percent was sick and bleached, but only 5 per cent was doing okay. It occurred because of hot water phenomenon from El Nino. this is natural warming which sometimes occurred in the Pacific ocean and has the influence to change weather worldwide and also made global warming effect which coral damage in the sea. Meanwhile, the coral species are able to rebound and recover their life, but it still susceptible by El Nino threat, finally need to protect the coral with any natural systems.

Source : New Scientist
yurikeyuri   
Nov 21, 2016
Writing Feedback / Traffic jumps are observed in many cities in the world. Writing IELTS task 2 about car belonging [4]

Hello, let me give my correction for you

large numbers of minibusesminibusses for

inthe quality of service (this word "quality" need article "the")

the amountnumber of demands (demand is countable noun and must use quantifier "number")

credit payment services that is provided (credit payment services are plural noun, so use verb in plural too, like are)

encouraging the public to take the chance to have the car even (these word, like public and car, need article "the")

the laws regarding to

In summarizesummarizing

management inof("in" not right preposition for management)

by the government to solve (the word "Government" nedd article "the")
yurikeyuri   
Nov 21, 2016
Writing Feedback / Summary Article - Airbnb launched new service [5]

Hello Alfin, let me give my correction for you

... traveling to many placeplaces(becauses "many" indicate plural noun)

people who hashave the house ("people" indicate plural noun so use "have" verb and must use article "the" for house or apartemet"

called airbnb Airbnb trips.

If the previous airbnb Airbnb (need article "the" and the name of place or instrument or vehicle must write on capital size in first letter)

owner house became the tour guide (need article "the")

company promised will launchedlaunch until 50 cities next year (after modal is V1)

thank you
yurikeyuri   
Nov 21, 2016
Writing Feedback / Donald Trump's Team Won't 'Rule Out' and not Planning to Create a Muslim Registry [5]

The establishing of registry based on religion, particularly Muslim, wouldn't go to rule out and not planning on it too, but the Donald Trump's team will say to some people who radicalized have to be prevented from coming into the US country. Moreover, The "extreme vetting" in Trump campaign will always defense, and it is one reason the creation of Muslim registry based on the National Security Entry-Exit Registration system

Source : Time
yurikeyuri   
Nov 21, 2016
Writing Feedback / It is a waste of money to establish libraries since the public can use the Internet at home. [5]

Hello, let me give my correction for you

However, the statistical result shows (...) place to find the reference (because need article "the" in this sentence)

almost 72 percent websites (plural form) except journal website providesprovide(because the websites is plural noun so use verb "provide". provides is singular verb for singular noun too)

should be cited from the library (need article "the" in this sentence)

... can be acceptable because of people (need preposition "of")

now, tend to choose the library (need article "the" in this sentence)
yurikeyuri   
Nov 21, 2016
Undergraduate / Being biracial is like fighting a war within yourself - COMMON APP ESSAY REVIEW [12]

Hello, let me give my correction for you

Feeling as if I had no place and I fit in often made me feel lost (need connector two connect two sentences)

There were times wherewhich/that I felt I should deny parts ("where connector" is relative pronoun which followed by place not things, like times)

the feelings formake confusion increased

Over time and a lot of self searchingself-searching

thank you
yurikeyuri   
Nov 21, 2016
Writing Feedback / Sea water is the Resource of Mining Mineral Industry [2]

The environment produced the amount of minerals which is accumulated by bacteria during an hour of the period. If it is occurring, the fulfillment of clean drinking water in other countries will deficiency. One of the best ways to solve this problem to produce the clean is called desalination process which water take out water from seawater with remove the salt before by reverse osmosis (RO) technique.

This membrane filtration technology takes the seawater, then spread on the pressure to force it through a membrane and this process will result in energy to produce clean water which reduces the salt from seawater. This process is known reverse osmosis. Because this process is very expensive, finally it doesn't use by many countries. Also, it is resulting brine which pumped back out into the sea and it damages the local sea ecology. The future desalination place will build in 2060 and it has target produce 900 million liters per day of desalinated water.

This project is researching about the number of metals, particularly calcium, potassium, and magnesium from out of desalination brine, which defiling the Earth. This research is beginning of mining industry in harmony with nature which is occurring in a test tube.
yurikeyuri   
Nov 21, 2016
Writing Feedback / Cable News Ratings - daily viewings of the Channel One [3]

Hello Pram, I will try give my correction for you

three differentsbecause is plural "three differents"

it shows the most dramatic increase because is singular "it"

... while 1 pm shows the lowest viewers because is singular "it"

thank you
yurikeyuri   
Nov 19, 2016
Writing Feedback / The Relation of The Amount of Money and The number of Book Club Members [4]

The line graph shows the amount of money which have donated by the Council and the number of book club members who had joined. Overall, the two graphs have increasing in third year significantly.

The first line graph informs about the money which has given by the Council that has the highest number in third year above 40 thousand pound. The extremely increase by 15 thousand pounds in second to third year. The graph not only always increase in each year, but also decrease in fourth year at 35 thousand pounds.

The second line graph shows the number of members who had joined in club book. The graph always increases in each year from second to fourth year. The highest number of book club members had resulted in fourth year about 12 thousand people. The opposite said that the lowest number had given at approximately 5 thousand members.
yurikeyuri   
Nov 19, 2016
Writing Feedback / The Fish Caught Result and The Fishing Boats that is Used in Westhaven [4]

The first chart informs about the number of the fish kind that is caught in near Westhaven. The second chart shows the kinds of small water vehicle that used in the same place. Overall, the number of Tuna and Swordfish that are caught as many as fishing boats that are used in Westhaven.

Firstly, the above chart talks the highest number of Tuna fish that is gotten at 110 thousand in 2011 and it has different total with three years before by 30 thousand. The opposite said that in 2008 is the lowest total of Tuna that is approximately 90 thousand. The catching of Tuna always increases from 2008 to 2011 with different total about 10 thousand. Secondly, the another data talk about the highest number of Swordfish which is caught always increasing trend, except is decreasing in 2010 at approximately 70 thousand. The highest number of Swordfish is resulted in 2010, same with the number of Tuna about 100 thousand. Not only the Swordfish has the highest value, but also it has the smallest number between 60 and 70 thousand.

The small vehicle water, fishing boats, that is used to catch the kind of fish, mainly Tuna and Swordfish, shows the lowest number of total of fishing boats which used in Westhaven about 40 thousand in 2010. The opposite said that the biggest number about 70 thousand in 2011. The three data before, from 2008 to 2010, have no different significantly in each year.
yurikeyuri   
Nov 19, 2016
Writing Feedback / Watching and Visiting Methods that are Used to Learn About Country [2]

Aboard traveling is the most famous journey recently. Many people take on their view that learning of the other culture of each country is unique experience that not the all of people can get it. Watching is easy method that to get more information about the another country in the other places, and also there is different way to know anythings about the country that called is visiting the place.

Firstly, the method that needs low cost, easy to do, and has flexible time doing it by are watching television programs, films, or videos. Nowdays, the programs give more information about anythings, mainly the life of other of countries, such as culture, food, destination, or education. This choice only need low cost because we just watch it in house, park, or wherever and whenever that we can do it. Also, many devices which support to get more information about other countries only by watching, such as our handphone that has many features particularly youtube. We just type the keyword of our information of country that we need and finally we can get much informations about it.

Secondly, the another way to learn about the country is actually visiting this place. The traveling option make certain learning for everyone who study a real situation of the state. We can see and enjoy the situation or building evidently. Also, we may make interaction with local inhabitants and learn the culture of life or education too.

In my view, the conclusion is watching that easy and flexible method to learn about the country, but the visiting method is too important thing that can use to get more information about the country on visual sense and maybe unavailable in programs on television, video, or film.
yurikeyuri   
Nov 19, 2016
Writing Feedback / The Main Feature to Get Happy Life is Depending to The Around Factor of Self [4]

Happy is the most important and main feature which be necessary for life today and the next too. Some people be happy because anythings, mainly job factors. However, the area where someone living or working and also there are people who cherish with us which other factors is more important too.

If someone has a job which they love doing, the people will be happy. The life always has many jobs that must be finished very well. On the other hand, some people have to enjoy it in order to be happy. For the example, every day, the students have some tasks, such as science, math, english etc, finally we must do it with the best way to get high score else. If the students loving do this task, they will finish the work successfully and be satisfy. Furthermore, if the students unsatisfied with the job, they will be stress and more lazy to do else.

The other factors are more important in order to someone be happy that are the environment where they living or working, and also there are people who cherish with us. The surrounding of life or work has main factor that make the someone be happy. In my view, the area will give many influences, well positive or negatif impact for someone get their happy. If our area is not support, we will not finish the task very well. The opposite said that if the area is espouse us, we will give the best task else. Furthermore, the people are main important factor which need by needed by someone to be happy. The people who cherish with us will give positive energy for our self and the our brain respon with it, finally we can be happy automatically.

The conclusion is many factors will make some people be happy which depend to love something that we do, the place where are life or work, and people who support us.
yurikeyuri   
Nov 18, 2016
Writing Feedback / The Profit from Losing Money [38]

Hello, let me give my correction for you

in the morning and when I come home from school this sentence no need connector "and" because double connector. the other connector is "when"

..., I knew that it was meant if you no add connector, this sentence contains two verbs, there are "knew and was"

packed them neatly in plastic bags that I had saved ... you must add the connector to connect two sentences

... sent with two picturesplural noun

thank you
yurikeyuri   
Nov 18, 2016
Undergraduate / Barnard is all that I have envisioned [7]

Hello, let me give my correction for you

... and 14 students goesgo to show because ...

exposed to subjects that I can possibly be interested this sentence need connector

I look to it as a chance no need preposition in this sentence

thank you
yurikeyuri   
Nov 18, 2016
Writing Feedback / Here's How Facebook Actually Won Trump the Presidency [5]

Hello Bams, let me give my correction for you

Mark Zuckerberg hard to convincesconvincebecause it is infinitive

as their cmpaigncampaign

to the societiessocietybecause the society is plural and the societies not correct plural of society

thank you
yurikeyuri   
Nov 18, 2016
Writing Feedback / The Launching of 'Post-Truth' Concept in Oxford's Word of the Year for 2016 [3]

The one method to keep the English-speaking public's mood and preoccupations that are the selection of the word by Oxford's editors. The reason of to create this concept is increasing of social media and self-belief on our self that precise purpose to improve language skill, mainly in English word, has been discovering the linguistic footing for some time. The list of the word is adulting, alt-right, brexiteer, chatbot, coulrophobia, glass cliff, hygge, latinx, and woke.

Source : time
yurikeyuri   
Nov 18, 2016
Writing Feedback / The Rare Phenomenon of deliquescetion of Polar Iceberg [4]

The polar snowflake, particularly in Antartica, is about 200 ft. out of the water that is melt be glaciers and it's the amount almost slightly. The liquefaction of the icebergs can result much of meneral in water which come from this polar ice. The average of polar ice is very young which is above one hundred thousand years old.

Source : ted
yurikeyuri   
Nov 17, 2016
Writing Feedback / Teenagers Training for High School Candidate [4]

The new invention dedicate to build training ground that is to change the Honors be Regulars. The purpose of this training is creating the young people to be lead people and can be followed by the other people. Nowdays, the school has many systems, like homework, read textbook, taking test are make stressful, so this training must ignore to and trow the trash or unimportant things of this education system.

Source : TED
yurikeyuri   
Nov 17, 2016
Writing Feedback / The New Forecast which is Predicted After Earthquake in New Zealand [5]

The New Zealand island is surrounded by ocean and consist of many coastal areas, like Kaikoura town where there are almost thousand tourists and habitants. The next disaster has been occurred in New Zealand, mainly in Northern Canterbury and southern Marlborough regions that are consist of 313 quakes in 13 hours and caused soil erosion approximately 100,000. The local business owner, Nick Shewring, talked about the Wellington, the capital of this country, ensued earthquake and flooding too. The others can predict that after 30 days the earthquake, there is the earthquake with bigger than before, almost 7.5 tremblor. Furthermore, the coastal area habitants have to evacuate to safety another place. Meanwhile, the scientist talked that this prediction not true thoroughly because it unconnected with week's supermoon phenomenon.

Source : TIME
yurikeyuri   
Nov 16, 2016
Writing Feedback / (Summary Article) Why Mark Zuckerberg Is Fortune's Businessperson of the Year [11]

Hello Alfin, let me give my correction for you

Facebook, one of the most enormous company...I think you rewrite in this formthe one of the most enormous companies, Facebook, was surprised people in the world

winner many awards of business (you must add letter s because many is indicate the plural)

He has inspiredhad been the most of people.

he leaderlead his company which started since build until now. (this sentence needs verb lead not leader, and the connector "which" to connect two sentence together)

thank you Alfin
yurikeyuri   
Nov 16, 2016
Undergraduate / A story about yourself that you have not already shared in your application [7]

Hello, let me give my correction for you

I was seven years old(if you write only seven, the meaning of this sentence is change)

... SpongeBob toothbrush which is given to the kids as souvenirs (you must add connector "which" to connect two sentences together)

we explored the dinosaur exhibitexhibition in total darkness (exhibition is familiar form to add in this sentence)

thank you
yurikeyuri   
Nov 16, 2016
Undergraduate / Describe your favorite academic subject and explain how it has influenced you. [4]

Hello, let me give my correction

I spent more time memorizingto memorize and rewritingto rewrite the textbook

...comprehend everything that I read and heard (because in this sentence consist of two sentences and must add a connector)

I search for many ideas and ...

My hypothesis wasis proven false, however, the lessons which I obtained allowed ...

thank you
yurikeyuri   
Nov 16, 2016
Writing Feedback / The Early Baby Dragons Comes From Incarceration That Related with Young Range [2]

The young range is the most difficult stage of their life which changed from the elusive pink aquatic salamanders that hatched inside Slovenia's Postojna Cave about four months ago. Finally, it can conclude that the only one which known about the civilization is the baby dragons. It can be explained that they life range until 100 years old and the laying process is once or twice a decade, which their life in small community and in contaminated water.

Source : newscientist
yurikeyuri   
Nov 16, 2016
Writing Feedback / How to deal with narcissist when taking holiday [4]

Hello, let me give my correction for you

Another way is to tryingtrybecause after infinitive is V1

I think this summary must add the data of percentage maybe or many reasons too that many people take the holiday
yurikeyuri   
Nov 16, 2016
Writing Feedback / Seven key takeaways from Donald Trump [5]

Hello, let me give my correction

There are several main points that quickly purpose to conduct quickly

Turning to the specification programs . Firstly, the wall might just be a fence, it meansthat there is a construction

Secondly, Trump has the promise to deport many immigrants

thank you
yurikeyuri   
Nov 16, 2016
Writing Feedback / Chinese children Learning English by screaming it. [5]

Hello, let me give my correction

Ted's video is talking

Chinese children Learning English by screaming it.

provides many opportunities (because is plural and must be add many)

are China since about 25% which graduated (because two verbs must be separated by connector)

thank you
yurikeyuri   
Nov 15, 2016
Writing Feedback / Mathematic and science as the main features in the industrial revolution era [3]

Mathematic and science are as main feature in industrial revolution era like now. TIMSS, or Trends in International Mathematics and Science Study, is researching to 9-10-year-olds and 13-14-year-olds from more than 50 countries every four years which to know about the comparison ranking on mathematical and sciencetific knowledge. The result shows students in western Western be left behind in mathematic and science field from their coeval in countries like Singapore and Japan. This is caused by many reason which unapposite in their place.

Firstly, the education in college in western was included in common average and better than many developed countries. Secondly, the correlation of test scores and future economic success that it isn't decide the measurement of success ways. But, the true of affluence is determined from innovative skills, mainly in mathematic and science field, not only by education rank of their school. The government must be evaluate the standart of curriculum collage, especially in mathematic and science and revolutionary the common test in order to tend to be world based of standart test.

Source : newscientist
yurikeyuri   
Nov 15, 2016
Writing Feedback / The Building of Recent English Words in Our Brain [4]

The English language is international tools of communication to another people in the world. As far as world revolutionary, the words in english is evolute too be new words. The making of the new English word only to make more easily in understanding in our brain. The establishment of new English word can be adopted in many ways. Firstly, the stealing of other languages in the world. For the example is from France, Japan, etc. Secondly, the compounding skill is sequishing the more than one word in English together to form new word, such as heartbroken is come from two word that are heart and broke. Another example is bookworm and sandcastle. Thirdly, blend the english word, fourtly the functional shift is which by changing how they operate. The final way is to take the first letter of something and squishing the words together, like OMG and other example of new word.

Source : ted

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