Maria
May 5, 2019
Writing Feedback / The hardware implementation and software design of the collector based on STM32; Bridge Monitoring [3]
Watch out for the forms of the words you are using in your sentences. I have noticed that you have a tendency to create lengthy sentences when you can omit certain words to create more concise structures. These straight to the point content will help you tremendously evade potential mistakes.
Consistency is the key when you are writing. Academic essays require an informative tone. When you are creating technical descriptions, this is ever-more vital. Ensuring that you do this is vital.
Watch out also for how you transition your sentences. Opting to lengthen sentences instead of using appropriate punctuation can create drastic impacts to your essay.
Let's revise a couple portions in your abstract for your reference.
Traditional electronic sensors are not suitable for long-term, long-distance, and real-time monitoring of bridges. The paper proposes an optical fiber bridge safety monitoring data collector based on STM32.* This can collect data and upload bridge structure parameters.
*I cut the sentence into two portions as the first part is already loaded with a lot of information. Avoid creating these dragging sentences because they do not help the readers understand the content more.
Keep these in mind.
Best of luck!
Watch out for the forms of the words you are using in your sentences. I have noticed that you have a tendency to create lengthy sentences when you can omit certain words to create more concise structures. These straight to the point content will help you tremendously evade potential mistakes.
Consistency is the key when you are writing. Academic essays require an informative tone. When you are creating technical descriptions, this is ever-more vital. Ensuring that you do this is vital.
Watch out also for how you transition your sentences. Opting to lengthen sentences instead of using appropriate punctuation can create drastic impacts to your essay.
Let's revise a couple portions in your abstract for your reference.
Traditional electronic sensors are not suitable for long-term, long-distance, and real-time monitoring of bridges. The paper proposes an optical fiber bridge safety monitoring data collector based on STM32.* This can collect data and upload bridge structure parameters.
*I cut the sentence into two portions as the first part is already loaded with a lot of information. Avoid creating these dragging sentences because they do not help the readers understand the content more.
Keep these in mind.
Best of luck!