justivy03
Nov 11, 2016
Writing Feedback / A breakdown of the information about the proportion of captives in several nations [4]
Hi Andika, please find a few suggestions below to strengthen your essay.
- A breakdown ofthe information abouton the proportion of crime
- punishments in several nations over the 50 year period is shown in the graph below , it is measuredbyin thousands
-is illustrated in the bar chart .
- in others nations .
- Also, USA numbers was by far the highest rate in 1980.
- Great Britainwas by farhas the most significant
- changed in the first 20-years.
-In contrastOn the contrary ( contrast - is for colors / contrary - is for ideas ) ,
- Thefluctuatedfluctuating trend was
- seeninwith Canada offenders.
- ... and Australia stayed with the sameof proportions by ...
There you have it Andika, as you can see there are only minor corrections that needs to be done in order to strengthen your analysis, however, it will be great if this corrections will be corrected properly before submission.
Hi Andika, please find a few suggestions below to strengthen your essay.
- A breakdown of
- punishments in several nations over the 50 year period is shown in the graph below , it is measured
-
- in other
- Also, USA numbers was by far the highest rate in 1980.
- Great Britain
- change
-
- The
- seen
- ... and Australia stayed with the same
There you have it Andika, as you can see there are only minor corrections that needs to be done in order to strengthen your analysis, however, it will be great if this corrections will be corrected properly before submission.