Writing Feedback / Facts about celebrities are always interesting to follow, and the lives of ordinary people? [2]

The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead.

To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Facts about celebrities are always interesting to be followed. Because of easiness to access information from mass media, people are easy to know more about the celebrities' lifestyle. However, some people argue that the media is too much showing the news about the celebrities, whereas they should balance reporting about the ordinary people. I think it is not true, because in fact, the media also perform many interesting things about the people who are not celebrities.

Based on my experience, TV broadcasts have presented many kinds of shows. It is not always about an actor, a singer and a footballer which are a well-known person. Some stations also report about the ordinary people who have a dedication in society. It makes the media interested to report their life story. For example, 'Kick Andy', one of the most famous talk shows in Indonesia, usually invites some ordinary people from different background, but they did something amazing, such as a child has an extraordinary math skill to memorize so many numbers, or a doctor paid with no money but trash. Certainly, it is inspiring and they become famous afterwards.

Television also have managed time to present various shows. For example, people can see the children's station in the morning, the celebrities' show in the afternoon, national and international news in the evening, and so on. Those are the evidences that the media is not always presenting about celebrities. Likewise, a magazine or a newspaper usually has a particular column to highlight some new figures that unfamiliar but appeared in the media because of their achievement.

In conclusion, I personally believe that the media have provided many kinds of information equally, not only about celebrities but also about ordinary people who inspiring. Now, it depends on the audiences about what kinds of information they choose to be paid attention.

Writing Feedback / A wind turbine consist of tower, generator, wind sensor, and blades controlled by a computer. [5]

The diagrams present the components of a wind turbine and where it can be placed. A wind turbine consist of tower, generator, wind sensor, and blades controlled by a computer. The best locations for the wind turbine is in a free landscape area with windy condition. It can be below sea level, on the highland and in domestic area.

The tower functionate as the cantilever of other parts. It is made of steel and constructed high. At the upper point of tower, there is a generator which can produce 1,5 megawatts of electricity. It is equipped with the wind sensor to control speed and direction of turbine, which connected to a computer in a small building not far from it. At the opposite of wind sensor, there is blades which made of fiberglass or wood and rotate when the wind comes then produce the electricity.

The optimum place to install the wind turbines is in the landscape area which is free from any tall buildings and has maximum wind strengths. It also can be located near from houses, called 'domestic turbine' but it only produce the lower output about 100 kilowatts.

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Writing Feedback / French-language teachers were recruied more often from 2001 to 2007, in contrast to English tutors [3]

The line graph illustrates a number of teachers following recruitment in Ontario by year of graduation, over a 7-year period from 2001 to 2007, divided by English-language teachers and French-language teachers.

Overall, French-language teachers experienced a slightly increase from 2001 to 2007 while the percentage of English-language teachers was a significant fall at the same period.

In 2001, both English-language and French-language educators had nearly the same number at around 70 percent, but the number of those who teach French had fluctuated, went down to 50 percent in 2002 and up to 68 percent in 2003, while English-language teachers constantly decreased at 40 percent in the same time.

Between 2003 and 2005, both of them had a gradual increase of 5 percent from 40 percent of English-language teachers and 3 percent from 67 percent of French-language teachers.

However, the percentage of English-language teachers fell again from 2005 to 2007 at 28 percent. In the contrast, French-language teachers reached in peak in 2007 at 75 percent although it fluctuated in the previous year.

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Writing Feedback / Overall, the most Bulgarians who tend to leave their country finished education at secondary level [2]

Writing IELTS task 1 : level of education of Bulgarians planning to leave Bulgaria

The bar chart shows information about the percentage of Bulgarians planning to leave Bulgaria based on level of education between 2002 and 2008.

The highest number of Bulgarians who leave Bulgaria was from secondary level in 2002 at 65 percent. It decreased gradually from 65 percent in 2002 to 59 percent in 2008. On the contrary, the percentage of Bulgarians in primary and lower education constantly went up gradually from 2002 to 2006 and up again dramatically from 2006 to 2008 at 32 percent. Compared to other level of education and other year, the lowest number of Bulgarians was from higher education at only 9 percent in 2008.

Overall, The most Bulgarians who tend to leave Bulgaria was from secondary education, although it had a gradual decrease year by year. The number of Bulgarians from primary and lower education had always increased every year, while the number of Bulgarians in higher education was fluctuated.

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Writing Feedback / It Is Easy to be Healthy - but not for everyone [3]

Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In terms of realising a healthy lifestyle, people today can be divided by two types. One assumes it is hard to do while other believes it is easy, provided they really intend to be healthy. In this case, I do agree that a healthy lifestyle is a possible thing and easy to be practiced if we have a strong will.

Most people in this modern world have a full-time job with sedentary activities. A reason why they think a healthy lifestyle is difficult to do is because they have no time for preparing some healthy foods, doing some exercises, and having enough rest. Another reason is modern technology makes them lazier because many works can be finished by them. Consequently, fast food can be their choice to satisfy their appetite practically. They also forget to exercise and only have monotone activities. They often work overtime to get more salary. Even though nutrition, exercise and enough rest are three essential elements to keep healthy.

Actually, there is a trick to preserve health. It is called 'discipline'. It does not make sense if someone have to work every time. Having no time can not be a reason anymore for people who believe it is hard to practice a healthy lifestyle. It is just about how to use time properly. Being healthy does not mean they have to exercise every day, but the more important is how to balance the time for working, preparing a healthy food, having enough rest and exercising.

In the end, if people try to make it a habit, it will be easy to have a healthy lifestyle. Nothing is difficult to do, provided they truly implement it. Try to be discipline and use the time as well as possible, start from now.

Writing Feedback / From the egg to the moth transformation / "TWIST" as one of the stages of silk-cloth's production [2]

These diagrams illustrate the silkworm's life cycle and the process of silk-cloth's production.

The life cycle of the silkworm starts while the adult silkworm produces eggs. After ten days later, the egg transforms to be a larva. The larva eats mulberry leaf as their food. On the next 4 - 6 weeks, the larva produces silk thread, then changes to be a cocoon after passing 3 - 8 days. It will be a moth after 16 days passing the cocoon age and be able to produce the egg. This perfect metamorphosis needs total time about one and a half month from the egg to be the moth.

Moving on the process of silk cloth, firstly, it is named 'selection stage'. The best silk is selected and to be 'boiled' in the water. After that, the silk is 'unwinded' for a while. It makes the silk has 300 - 900 metres thread. The next stage is called 'twist'. The silk is twisted, then it is dyed. The last, the silk is ready to be weaved.

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Writing Feedback / School and parent, two important things that influence character of children [5]

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Being kind and good citizen of society should be taught since children age. Some people believe that is the parent's responsibility while others tell it has to be learnt in school. In my view, these environments, school and family equally have an important role to build their children's character.

Children is a hope for a nation's future. It is essential to form a good personality for them in order to be a useful people in their society. To make it happens, school and parent have to co-operate each other. They have to take action to avoid the bad influences happened to children. As we know, two places that children spend their time most at are school and home. Children usually study at school about 8 - 10 hours a day. After that, they go home and gather with their family. Therefore, school and family give a big influence to children.

So, what can parent and school do to build a good character for their children? First, the parent have to be a good role model for them, teach them what should do and what should not do, how to act polite and friendly, also helpful to others. Family is the first place to learn something. Everything always starts from home.

Next, teachers in school can facilitate their student to make a good habit such as coming to school on time, behaving discipline, loving their friends and so on. Headmaster can also make some regulations to support their character building such as making a reading programme before starting the class about 15 minutes, obligating the student to bring a healthy lunchbox everyday, gardening time on Saturday, parental meeting, and so on. By parental meeting, school and parents can communicate each other and discuss about their children.

To conclude, school and parents should care and act together to give the best education for their children, in order to build their character and create them to be the best generation in future. Certainly, it should be done together in collaboration.

Writing Feedback / The advanced technology in food production has made them produced fastly with many additives. [3]

Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Unhealthy lifestyle, especially in food, has affected many children to consume poor food. The advanced technology in food production has made some foods produced fastly with many additives. Certainly, both schools and parents have responsibility to prevent this case. Besides that, two other parties that have to control it are government and food industry.

Children age is a stage of human life that they can not distinguish a good and bad thing yet. Their thought is still immature to decide on something. Therefore, they are easier to choose some unhealthy meals to eat even though it consists of additives such as flavouring, colouring and artificial sweeteners.

These four groups -government, food industry, schools and parents- have to pay more attention to solve this problem together but appropriate with each role. Government, as the first power of a country, have to supervise the food manufacture and make a regulation about the food production. They have to ban unhealthy food distribution. The food factory should produce a healthy product, not only notice to the taste but also care about the nutrition. Schools should provide a sanitary canteen for student and deliver the information about health food regularly. Then, one that also important is the parent's role to take care of their children's meal such as preparing a healthy lunchbox and teaching them to be aware in the risk of unhealthy food consumption.

In conclusion, all parties have to take action to face this case start from now. If these four elements work together to prevent it, the children will be protected by unhealthy lifestyle.

Writing Feedback / People experience problems while living abroad, especially those in the middle age (35 - 54) [6]

The chart illustrates the percentage of people living abroad that experience integration problems grouped by their age. It mentions there are three main problems faced by the newcomer which are sorting out finances, sorting out healthcare and finding schools for children.

Overall, the highest number of people who get difficult on all these problems is experienced by the people in the middle age (35 - 54 years old) compared with the younger (18 - 34 years old) and the older (over 55 years old), that have 37 percent at sorting out healthcare, 35 percent at sorting out finances and 19 percent at finding schools for children. People over 55 years old have the lowest number in finding schools for their children at around 3 percent, also they get the smallest percentage compared with the other age in sorting out finances at under 30 pecent. In sorting out healthcare, the young people give the smallest percentage at around 33 percent.

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Writing Feedback / Learning a country by visiting it (IELTS task 2); "the only source of knowledge is experience" [3]

Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching television programmes and films about it than by actually visiting it.
How true is this statement? Is there anything you can learn about another country by visiting it that you can not learn by watching programmes and films about it?

Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own experience.

People know that television shows and films can give much knowledge about many things, one of them is about another country. Consequently, some people argue that they can learn more about the country by watching it than visiting it. It might be true but I have a different side to respond this view.

In my opinion, visiting a place can increase the knowledge about it more than only watching it on TV or films. Learning more about a country can be gained when people can also 'experience' it than only 'know' it. Learning process, if I define, should involve all of human senses. When people are watching news about a place, they only use two senses that are vision and hearing. It will be different if they visit it.

I believe that many things will be missed if they do not travel around the country even want to know more about a country only by watching it. For instance, when they watch a documentary video about indigenous people in a rural area of Sumatera Island, exactly they 'know' it, but if they visit straight to the place, they can feel more. They will learn to adapt with the local culture, try to follow their lifestyle, also sense the atmosphere. Other example, when they travel to India and see Taj Mahal, they can feel the greatness of the building, how exactly the size and the height. However, it is only looked small as a size of television's screen if they see it on television. Also, in my experience, I ever expected that Komodo, an endemic animal of Indonesia, had a slow movement and was looked tame when it was shown on TV although it gave the facts that Komodo has a fast movement and prey the target quickly. However, I could not think it was horrible until I visited Komodo Island and saw it directly.

For sure, let me quote the words of Einstein that said,"the only source of knowledge is experience". The more you experience, the more you learn. Believe or not, visiting another country will give an amazing learning that can not be aquired by only watching.

Writing Feedback / The two conventional techniques to take the water to be flowed into the farmlands. [2]

The diagrams below show two methods of collecting water for irrigation purposes.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams give information about two conventional techniques to take the water to be flowed into the farmlands.
The first method called 'swing basket'. It needs some equipments that are two long strong ropes and a basket made of bamboo or leather. To get the water, the basket must be tied in the centre of ropes, then the ropes are held by two persons in each point. This way can be used to reach the water in 1 - 2 metres depth.

The second technique is named 'rope and bucket'. It needs pulley, rollers and bucket as the equipments. It also use the strength of an ox to take up the water. The ox is placed in the slope that the body is banded with the pulley. Because of the power of the ox and the gravitation of the sloping plains, the water can be gained even in 50 metres depth. By these methods, there are three main differences that are the equipments needed, the depth can be reached and the power sources to get the water.

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Writing Feedback / Traveling is a favoured lifestyle today, but we need to be aware that visited places suffer from it [3]

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Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments?

Traveling has been a lifestyle which is more favoured today. Most of people, both young and old, do like to travel especially going to a famous destination. No wonder that people generally need to have an enjoyable time or a different experience after doing many tiring activities day after day. Furthermore, information about a great place for holiday can be accessed easily. It also makes tourism business is growing quickly so and giving some benefits for the local economy. However, some people argue that the tourists can give some bad impacts to the place that they visit to.

In my opinion, it is really true that the holiday's area can get some disadvantages because of tourism activities. Public sometimes watch on the TV about a national news showing some facts about tourists' bad habits that damage the environment around the tourist attraction. People can see so much rubbish defiling the beaches, the plants and flowers picked by the visitors, the tourists eat and drink then throwing its trash carelessly and many other things that can harm the environment.

Moreover, the visitors sometimes have no attention about the local culture in the vacation place. For instance, they make a party that making much noise and disturbing the local, they are kissing casually in front of public (as we know this is unusual manner in some east countries) or even they dress up unseemly. Certainly, slow but sure it cause a cultural shift and make the local influenced by foreign cultures.

Therefore, it is important to the tourists to look for information about the destination place before visiting them. They have to learn first about what they can do and what they can not do in the vacation area, also try to adapt with the local cultures. Besides that, they have to keep the environmental cleanliness and not to ruin the beautiful creatures around the tourist attraction, indeed.

Writing Feedback / Cities with iconic buildings makes their look special and unique; IELTS Writing Task 2 [3]

Some people think that large, impressive buildings are important for a city. Others believe that the money should be spent on improving schools and hospitals. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

If the people are asked to mention a thing about Paris, Italy, and Dubai, what will they tell about? Probably most of them will give the same answers. As we know, those countries are so popular because of having an iconic building that makes them special from others. Paris has Eiffel Tower which known by the couples in the world as a symbol of romance. Italy has Pisa Tower which is looked slanting and be famous because of its unique architecture. Then what country has the highest skycraper on the earth? Of course, that is Dubai with its Burj Khalifa!

In my view, I agree that an impressive building is one of the important things that should be exist in every city and can be an identity of the city. However, it does not mean that it must be large, high, expensive, and sophisticated. The main point is how that construction can show the local wisdom and the culture of the city.

Indonesia, for example, consists of diverse cultures and has the unique features in every region. We can see 'Rumah Gadang' in Padang, 'Borobudur Temple' -that had been awarded as one of the seven wonders in the world- in Yogyakarta, 'Rumah Honai' -the indigenous' house- in Papua, and so on. Government should not spend much money to build a new one. They can utilize the old building and do some improvements to make it better. If it can be a tourist attraction, it will give a benefit in tourism that increase the local economy.

Finally, it depends on the need of a country. Therefore, instead of spending much money to make a majestic building, it will be better if the government can manage the finance wisely by giving more priority to the other urgent things such us developing the schools and health service centres.

Writing Feedback / A sophistication of technology in communication, nowadays, gives so much easiness to contact others [5]

Writing Part 2

Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In this modern era, technology of communication has developed so rapidly. It makes people changing their way to communicate to others. In the past, if they wanted to convey their feeling or tought, they had to meet them directly. Furthermore, when they could not to see them because of long distance, they would write a letter to exchange the information. Then, how about now?

A sophistication of technology in communication, nowadays, gives so much easiness, even the people can communicate easily although they are in a different continent. The best one of the technology is a smartphone. They only have to connect to wi-fi or top up the balance, then by using many social media applications in a smartphone such us electronic mail, whatsapp, instagram or facebook, they can surf and explore people around the world. It makes people gain many friends from the whole world, even they can send a message just in a second!

However, we realize it gives us a low quality of the relation. In my view, it has a different sense when people communicate 'face to face' than by using social media. For instance, they do not know how their friends' expression when they are chatting on facebook. They just look on the laptop's or phone's screen to see their friend. People can also fake their feeling eventhough they write a message with some happiness emoticons. Beside that, people sometimes has ignored their mates when they are meeting up because of too busy too reply others' messages or emails. They are happier to connect to their friends in cyberspace. That is why a smartphone get an epithet "making faraway friends to be closer and close friends to be far away".

In the end, the new style of communication will not give a bad effect to human life if that is used wisely. So that we can keep our great time to make a high quality communication to our family, friend and relatives.

Writing Feedback / Why genetic research must be more diserve (Ted Talks by Keolu Fox) - Summary [2]

Have you heard about Human Genome Project? It is an international collaboration research programme that aims to mapping and understanding about individual genome in the world. Keolu Fox is a researcher who gets interest to this project, particularly in a sort of research named Indigenomics. For information, Indigenomics focus on improving minority health through methods that respect indigenous knowledge.

It started when he was a child, his grandmother, who had been a nurse, always told about Pastor Damien, a Belgian missionary who had spent his life to Hawaiian society in Kalaupapa, a leprosy village in Hawai. The story made him feeling curious, why did the missionary choose to be outcast in Kalaupapa and where was the leprosy bacteria from? The fact is Kanaka Maoli, the indegenous people of Hawaii, was contracted by leprosy very easily.

Interestingly, the most of genetic research was conducted to European descent at 96% and only about 4% was done to non European. Unfortunately, for indegenous it was less than 1% of research. Although Human Genome Project can possibly help people to know more about health potential, to predict and to control degenerative disease.

One of the challenges was about distrust. To illustrate, history told that in 1989, a researcher from Arizona State University had taken blood samples of Havasupai Ethnic in Arizona. The purpose was to search solution for diabetes type 2 but the samples was abused to other research such us schizoprenia. After all, the research was prosecuted and banned by the local. It gave domino effect and spread to other ethnic in South America. Facing this matter, the main point is to not make indegenous being object of research but partners. It is important to explain to them about potential of the use and misuse of genetic code.

Start from now, the experts should give more attention to conduct more diserve research about genetic especially to non European descent and indegenous to rich the knowledge of human genome. It is the key to avoid a big gap from human genetic at present and past. We do not want to lose any information about genetic code of our ancestor, do we? Then, it can be used for better life.

Related video : ted.com/talks/keolu_fox_why_genetic_research_must_be_more_diverse

Writing Feedback / Writing IELTS part 1 : Average journey time and cost of the transport. [4]

Task 4 (unit 3 page 22)

Writing task 4

The table explains about average journey time before and after improvements based on the types of transport. Tram has a biggest improvements that experiences acceleration at 6 minutes faster than before maintenance. The next is bus that can be quicker 5 minutes than before improvements. Taxi and car are slower than before which have 3 minutes and 5 minutes for each transport. For all, car has the lowest improvement. However, both before and after refinement, we can find that taxi is the fastest vehicle than others and bus is the lowest. Related to the second bar graph, bus is the most economical cost of transport which average cost per kilometre is €0.40. In the second cheapest position is tram which the fee is €0.50 per kilometre, then followed by car that is the third with €1.00 in cost. Taxi is the most expensive vehicle with € 1.80 average cost per kilometre.

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Writing Feedback / Analisys of the chart - transport used by visitors during travel in New Zealand [3]

The chart shows the vehicles used by visitors during travel in New Zealand. The most popular transport is using car which the percentage is almost 70 percent. Plane and coach are the next favourite vehicles which have nearly same amount that are around 30 percent. The percentage of holidaymakers using train is 20 percent and least of all is using boat, with the percentage is 5 percent. For the conclusion, public transportation is more popular than private vehicle which the total is more than 85 percent of visitors.

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