Writing Feedback / Some people think that being fashionable is extremely luxurious. For others it's a reasonable thing. [3]

Some people argue that fashion items cost too much money. Others say that this is acceptable because fashion in an important part of life.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that being think being fashionable is extremely a luxury. While others argue that is reasonable because fashion has essential role in life. I believe that even if fashion items cost too high it holds an important part in life.

Sometimes, some people cots too much money to be fashionista in particularly in women. High price items are reasonable because it have high excellence product. Others believe that branded product is better than common items. For instance, Lois Vuition bag and Rolex watch have high quality material, latest fashion and more detail process than others. As a result, we can use it for a long time, to show social level and more confident than using unbranded items. Finally, the best excellence fashion is cost too expensive but it is very acceptable for it.

In addition, although branded product is an expensive, but it is reasonable price for some people, because fashion is a crucial part in life. Being fashionable makes others more confident and comfortable which affect their work performance. For example when someone looks stylist in the office that influences their work and social level. Some people will have a good socialism with other. Also, when they meet with a fashionable client, it helps to make a good conversation and make the best deal for their business. However, being fashionable need high price but they can purchase fashions item based on their money strength.

In conclusion, fashion items is luxury necessity, but it is acceptable for some people because fashion is essential thing in human life in particularly in work world.

Writing Feedback / Being an entrepreneur has some risks and advantages, however it has more benefits than drawbacks [3]

Question : Some people decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organisation. Do the advantages for people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people think that choose to start new enterprise better than being a worker in a company. Although, there some risk and disadvantages to make a new organization. I believe that the convenience often outweighs any drawback.

There are two main dangers and disadvantages when some people decide to work own business. The one that have risk because it need big financial capital to start it. If their organization unstable work, it will be bankruptcy. A further disadvantage is that some people have unsteady income. It means they sometimes cannot get salary because their enterprise not enough profit. Even though, try at entrepreneurship has several point in its favour.

The first benefit is people who start their business to open a job vacancy. It means that they can help others to find job and decrease the number of unemployment. Also, they can decide how much salary which reasonable for her/his and her/his worker. It can be said that they can control their company fully in compared with working in other's companies. A further advantages is that being a boss can help someone to develop his/her entrepreneurship skills for instance leadership, coping skill, problem solving, flexibility, strangeness. According to Annie Pattinson in Colorado State University found that people who start their career to be entrepreneur than a worker have leadership skill more than the others. It influence their future career as a leader.

In conclusion, being entrepreneur has some risks and advantages. However, it has many benefits than the drawback. Some people who start new companies is better than working people's business.

Writing Feedback / Life satisfaction among married and unmarried people in America - writing task 1 [NEW]

There two charts that provide information about life satisfaction level of people who has been married and unmarried in United States. Also, present the percentage of well-being levels of people couple across the children age. Overall, the married people is happier than unmarried although the difference of their satisfaction in married couple almost in the same level.

The married people shows higher happiness than another. The highest life satisfaction is in people who has 16-29 years old, but it is not significantly different with the medium and elderly people. However, the unmarried people have well-being is lower than another, but the percentage of satisfaction sharply increase from 20 percent to 35 percent.

Another chart present that well-being level in married couple who have children. The highest happiness is in couple who have teenager and the lowest is people with children 18+ years old. However, it not illustrate sharply contrast among them.

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Writing Feedback / The mass media has been more interesting to show well known people's way of life [2]

Question : The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

The mass media has been more interesting to show well known people's way of life than to report people who live usually. I believe that presents extraordinary person take more profit for enterprise media than another who have normally life and I do not believe that unknown people not have advantage not interested and not bringing benefit to others.

Making TV program or news to famous people gives an advantage that added private enterprise funding by advertising. Because most viewers more interested to follow well known people's lifestyle, fashion and activities. For example, some people are more interested to read celebrities news or new songs. Those makes some people think to be up to date person. All in all, it bring more funding for enterprise. However, there some people argue that people who have live usually give more motivation and inspiration to others than entertainment.

The media should pay attention to report ordinary people's life, because it gives more inspire and educate others than famous people. For instance, we can learn about culture and behave from them. These provide a benefit to teach some people more respectful to others life and avoid hedonism lifestyle. On the other hand, those think that not present unreal existence.

In conclusion, the media gives more attention to broadcast people who well known giving high profit to the media enterprise. For instance increasing the media's funding cause many readers and viewers for it. Even though, it is not mean ordinary people program provide disadvantage for most people.

Writing Feedback / A wind turbine works by wind power, producing electricity efficiently when located on a high surface [NEW]

The diagram illustrates about how to produce electricity by a wind turbine and the best place for wind turbines can be worked effectively. Overall, a wind turbine works by wind powers which can be produced electricity efficiently when it located in the high surface.

A wind turbine is made by blade-fiberglass or wood, wind sensor, generator (output 1,5 megawatt), steel tower and computer to sensor blade direction. The process is began when the blade fiberglass is rotated by the wind. At the same time wind sensor is turned on by blade fiberglass to detect wind speed and direction. Finally, the electricity produce by generator and it is detected by computer.

Moreover, getting the optimal output from turbine when it is located in the highest surface, because low landscape is not brought wind speed and direction. As a result of turbine's optimal location, a wind turbine can be rotated effectively by the maximum wind power. It can be produce 100 kilowatt electricity.

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Writing Feedback / SUmmary TEDtalk: the first 21 days of a bee's life [3]

This summary originates from a video told by Anand Varma and it can be found posted in TEdtalks.com. The original title is 'the first 21 days of a bee's life'. Honey have used one third of food crops but it is insufficient because there some trouble on it. Those problems are pesticides practical, diseases, habitat lose, destruction of beehives and immune system in stress and diseases. Bees is insects that have most sensitive growth. Those life processes for 21 day have begun from larva which swim in the white glue, then head and leg differentiate, these body reorganize, pigment are developed in eyes and the last step is body's change to spread out.

Based on the bees problems the scientist has discovered to find alternative solution on it. They used honey bees queen to detect them by remarking. Finally, it has natural resistant from stresses and diseases, although it not have sufficient skill to collect pollination. These result recommended to corporate with industrialist beekeepers which manipulate and exploit them to get highest quality of bees. In conclusion, Anand Varma said "saving bees mean saving our relationship with bees in order, design a new solution to understand basic biologic of bees from stresses and diseases"

Writing Feedback / How I turned a deadly plant into a thriving business [2]

This is summary a video by Achenyo Idachaba which has published in TEDtalk.com. The original title is "how I turned a deadly plant into a thriving business". Idhachaba was to expound on riverine communities in rivers across Nigeria which water ways have been infested by aquatic weeds. Others living problems have been dealt such as economic has blocked, marine transportation has hampered, fishing yields has declined, children have broken out from the school and water hyacinths have dared in this society.

In 2009, she found out to create an alternative solution for it which can turn economic growth by using application for handicrafts. The benefit that is easily to employ for community without technical skills. There are three stage to work out this solution. Firstly, get out into the water lines which can open new access marine transportation. Secondly, dry the water hyacinth stems and the third, wave these in the new product to be long ropes. These way can change financial trouble to the prosperity which teach riverine society to alter their mind in different light.

Writing Feedback / The percentage of first-year teachers with regular teaching jobs by year of graduation in Ontario [4]

The chart gives information about the percentage of fresh graduate who recruited as English language teachers and French language teachers in Ontario from 2001 to 2007. Overall, although, both of them started in the almost same level, but it was present different trends. English educator showed downward trend and other presented fluctuation drift.

During 2001 to 2008, the percentage of English teacher experienced deep by 30 percent. Also other went up and went down from 52 percent to 60 percent. The next, presented the same movement between 2003 and 2005. Start from 2005 both of them showed the opposite movement. The percentage of English teacher was decreased dramatically of 25 percent in 2007 and other was slightly increase of 75 in the same year.

According to over the period, the proportion of English teacher fell by 45 percent. On the other hand other showed the same percentage of fresh graduated educator in French language.

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Writing Feedback / How to produce silk cloth and silkworm life cycle, IELTS task 1 [3]

The diagram presents about silkworm's metamorphosis and how to create silk cloth. Overall, the production of silk is a part of silkworm's life cycle when they transform to be a cocoon.

The stage of silkworm life include eggs, silkworm larva, larva in silk thread, cocoon, and a young silkworm. The process to be a silkworms is began from eggs which is produced from elderly silkworm. After 10 days, those are becoming larva which is mulberry leaves as foods and place of living. Next stage is larvae transformed be a larvae in silk thread for four until six weeks. After that those is becoming cocoons and finally to be a young silkworms after 16 days.

The stage of silk cloth production is began when silkworm as cocoon. That process are select, boil, twist, and wave. Firstly, cocoon is selected which is boiled in the pan. Then, those is unwind throughout 300-900 metres which is twisted in the dye. Silk thread is interweave by weaver. Finally, silk cloth is produced and which is sealed in the store.

Writing Feedback / task 2: children should teach children how to be a good members of society [NEW]

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be a good members of society. Others however believe that school is the place learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Education not only teach how to be a smart but also as a kind part of society. Some people argue that learning to be a good people in society is parent responsible. But others think schools have responsibility about that. In my opinion, both of them have the same role to teach children. However, parents have the highest role on it.

The first stage of people life in their family, start from children. It is affected how to make moral behavior as member of society. Every children learn about kindness by imitating parent's attitude. For example we learnt about bad thing such as honesty, working together, appreciate others, and morals when we was young. Those have influenced the way of thinking and interaction pattern. So, I think parents has the most responsible role to make them be a kind group member.

However, parent has the highest responsibility to their children, but schools have affected them to responsible in country's problem. In the school, children have studied about nationality and assignment as citizen, for example we learn about heroism, nationalism and how to be good citizen by teacher's explaining in the class. We understand about people task as member of society from books and discussion and other activities in the school. It makes to make decision why we must be kind person to others.

In conclusion, learning to be a good citizen not only about parents responsibility, but also schools have role to teach them. Although, the highest role to affect them is parents, because family is the first learning place in their life.

Writing Feedback / The events of 2016 may seem bleak, but the study of history offers some context [4]

This is a summary of an article. An article is written by Paul Lay which posted in historytoday.com. The original title is "the events of 2016 may seem bleak, but the study of history offers some context for those who believe we are living through the worst of times". 2016 has been many bad incident around the world that influenced media statement that "it is much worse year in the history of the world". That statement is reasonable, because there many ugly incident that influenced movement pattern in the world such as terrorism in Europe, racism in US, global hunger in the Africa, wars and conflict in Iraq and Syria and others.

Historical research found that social media's declaration has similarities with historical record in 1347 about Black Death reached Europe. It is about worst year in the history when continent population was death over a three-year period and destroy systematically Asian's people. However, that statement not generally true because in the same year, European spread peace, artistic invention and scientific innovation.

Writing Feedback / Summary : the mission to find the world's rarest cat in jungles of Java [4]

This essay is a summary an article was written by Chelsea white. The original title is "the mission to find the world's rarest cat in jungles of Java". That article has explained about Anthony Giordano's expedition. He found that Java fishing is a subspecies of cat in Java, Indonesia. It use their paws to grab fish from the water which is uncommon cat species in the world.

Java fishing cat has been specific track and we can discover it by semi-retractable claw system. However, their habitat and the destiny of subspecies is unidentified. According to historical record, this cat spread in wetlands and was across South-East Asia. The fishing cat research indicate that the part of rare species has been existence in the world. In conclusion, as the final Giordano's expedition, that he has focused to find on the evidence of Java fishing cat habitat and their spread area.

Writing Feedback / Children are picky-eaters, therefore they have unhealthy lifestyle and prefer to consume junk-food [3]

There many kind of food that can be detectable, especially on its taste, appearance, packaging, freshness, content, type of farming and others. Those products have influenced people's attitude particularly. In children who have problem as picky-eater. As a result, most children have unhealthy lifestyle while prefer to consume junk-food than vegetables, both schools and parents have responsibility to overcome this problem. However, parents have the greatest role of it.

In present time, there many schools which not give a role to protect their students avoiding hyperpalatable-food. Those have independence to choose type of food that the want to consume. In schools, teacher have explained to children about healthy life pattern. However, in school's café, there are many fast-food those sell and children tend to buy junk food than fruit. On one hand, children learn to unhealthy lifestyle from their friends. Finally, schools has responsibility to protect them by new regulation about food in schools café.

Although, schools have responsibility to keep them, but parents have greatest role to control their children from unhealthy life. In fact, many children learn to eat junk food from parents attitude, for example we have seen many families eat together in fast food restaurant that situation not teach them to live healthily. Many children imitate parent's behavior before they decide to control children's diet. This is contrary fact to overcome this phenomenon.

In conclusion, both of them have responsibility to avoid their children in unhealthy lifestyle. However parents are most responsible to protect them than others.

Writing Feedback / The percentage of people's trouble when they live abroad in the other countries, based on the age. [4]

The chart presents information about the percentage of people's trouble when they living abroad in the other countries based on the age. Overall, the most common people which have the highest problems is the middle aged, from 35 years old to 54 years old. That problem are finance, healthcare and finding school for their children.

The highest problem that people who move to live in the other countries is finance trouble, in the aged between 16 years-old to 34 years-old. Then the least problem that society who living abroad is finding school for their children in the same aged. In contrast with elderly people when they live in the other countries, the much higher trouble is healthcare and the least is to find out good education for their children.

In conclusion, the most complicated problem that people have, when they choose to live abroad is people with aged from 34 years-old to 54 years-old. Also, the least problem that people have when they move in the other countries is elderly people.

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Writing Feedback / In the modern era, most people argue if impressive constructions are essential for a city [3]

Some people think that large, impresive buildings are important for a city. Others believe that the money should spent on improving schools and hospitals. Disscuss both these views an give your own opinion.

In the modern era, most people argue if impressive construction are essential for a city. But others think that the money should be spent to improve public facilities such as schools and hospitals. In my opinion, government should be spent of much money to improve public facilities than construct impressive building. There advantage and disadvantage both these views.

Impressive construction building in city is important thing to make modern city, such as landmark, unique feature in the city. It can be popular tourism from other countries. Modern construction building became special feature for tourism. For example, Eiffel in Italy is a one of popular construction and tourism in the world.

However, wonderful building not enough to make a modern city, because public facilities for citizen more important too. The government should be spent much money to improve public facilities for inhabitant such as schools, hospital. It is about societies comfortable to live. The government should be ensure education and healthy for their citizen. For example, although the government success to construct amazing building in the city center, but they do not ensure public facilities for citizen, it cannot help to make a modern city. Public facilities not only about schools and hospital, but also public transportation and towns. In Makassar, South Sulawesi has impressive building such as Phinisi, but the government do not improve transportation network. The result is many congestion in city center every people in hurry. The condition not support to make comfortable tourism for tourist. In conclusion, the government should be construct a good facilities for public before build wonderful building in the city.

Writing Feedback / Lonely experience. Small land in the city center causes urban community to live in the flat. [3]

Some people say that living in a high-rise apartment block is a lonely experience because there is no community spirit. Other say that people who live in high-rise apartments have much better sense of community than those who lives in houses.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Small land in the city center causes urban community to live in the flat. Some citizen think that people who live in the apartment block are isolated, because they are careless from society. But in the other hand some societies say that people who live in the houses have worse sense than people who live in the high flat. Overall, in my opinion that people who live in the houses have better sense than live in the high rise apartment. There are advantage and disadvantage live in the flat or houses.

Living in the apartment makes people to have private life that is needed by urban people who work in city center. When urban community work all the day in their office, after those are finished their work. Some people need to refresh their mind without others. They sleep all the night and have quite flat. Although, when they have leisure times or problems, they will feel lack of socialism and careless person. For example, some people choose live in the apartment because the need quietly life, but sometimes they say I am alone in the flat, I'm isolated person, no one support me.

However, some people argue living in the houses better than living in flat. Some people thinks that people who live in houses have better life specifically in social communication, attention from the others, social support and work together. For example, they have more experience to work together in society. It helps people to make a good actualization in community. In the other hand, the disadvantages of living in the houses is some people believe that they do not have private life that families or neighbors involve to solve the problems, which they do not need it.

In conclusion, I thinks live in the houses better than living lonely in high rise-apartment. Although, some people argue living in the houses lack of privacy life but every people have more advantages such as high attention and living together.

Writing Feedback / There a different systems to produce electricity - by water's power and air pressure. [2]

WRITING TASK 1 HOW TO PRODUCE ELECTRICITY

The diagram shows information about the process to create electricity by hydroelectric dam and wave-air generator. Overall, there a different process to produce electricity based on the diagram that is by water's power and air pressure.

First method to create electricity by hydroelectric dam is used reservoir, gate in the reservoir, penstock, turbine, spindle, power lines, water released, and water groove. The process begin with gate is paired in the reservoir that used to open and closes water from the penstock speed water up. The penstock is entered water from reservoir, while gate is opened. Then, the turbine and spindle are turned by water's speed. Finally, electricity is produced by rotation of turbine and spindle. Now, electricity distributed in the power of line to every houses in city and water from the turbine released into the river and the farmland.

The second method is creating electricity by wave-air generator which is using air pressure. It is made from generator which consist of lower chamber, upper chamber, spindle and turbine. Spindle and turbine are paired in upper chamber which is connected with generator out of the upper chamber. The first step is waves which is filled to lower chamber, and air pressure enter into the gate between lower chamber and upper chamber. Next, turbine and spindle are rotated by air pressure, when air rises out of the upper chamber. Finally, the generator is produced electricity by rotation of spindle.

In conclusion, hydroelectricity dam and wave air generator are process to produce electricity. They have different based on the production process and their resources.

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