Writing Feedback / A wonderfull place of Inca's custom in Peru [3]

I would like to tell you about Inca's custom. Machu Piccu has drawed of prehistorical Incan civilization in the past. An Archeologist Hiram Bingham that has founded in 1911. Overtime, Machu Picchu were famous of travelers. It all buildings of site which was built from hard stone precisely. In site Machu Pichu nearby city of Cuzco around 30 kilometers. The traveler would reached it by transportation mode. The Inca trails of ruins still stand in Machu Piccu mount offer wonderful views; some of flowers and birds. The Inca trails were been tracking since late century when the Peruvian official institution pleased to tourist. To conserve Inca's culture, the local government has published official rule to put a half thousand every one day to guide in the trail. The conclusion, Inca's custom offered a luxury trip and memorable.

Writing Feedback / The difference three foods in China people consumes in year 1985-2010 [2]

These graphs show the differences between three foods in China which is consumes each gram/person/week in period 1985 to 2010.

To sum up, the graphs show amount household consuming trend instability. Meat was gradual increased in the number by 10 percent in five year along periods from 1985 to 2010. Otherwise, Salt consuming jumped steeply from 500 at 1985 to around 200 grams/percent a week in 2010. Opposite, Fish is fluctuated in proportion consuming year by year.

In period 1985 to 1995, Meat consuming slow increased to number 150 gram. However, Salt dramatic decreased in the number 500 to 200 just over to 80 percent. In contrary has shown of Fish graph in the number fluctuated that was slowly increased from 600 gram slightly down in year 1995. Then dramatical increased in number from year 2005 to 2010. These line shown the differences between household consuming Meat, Salt and Fish in China along several years.

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Writing Feedback / Is damaged tropical rainforest caused by Logging industry? [5]

Now days, logging industry had supplied several impact to environment damage. Some areas felt habitat loss, pollution and climate change along countries in Central Africa, Southeast Asia, and South America to northern forest of Canada and Scandinavia. And also Logging activity had caused damage both terrestrial and aquatic habitat in the forest. It can be seen, deforestation contributed pollution in the world. All habitat in forest will be getting bad impact too such us algae growth, removing oxygen that finally will be killing fish and other wildlife. Forest especially the tropical rainfall forest will be contribute to natural resource and biodiversity exist. Responsible logging activity will be guaranty in our nature and habitat still a life.

Writing Feedback / The Information shows of two membership in fitness a five-year period, from year 1970 to 2000 [3]

The bar shows two membership in fitness a five-year period, from year 1970 to 2000. In summary, the first graph illustrates before year 1990 (1970-1990) and the second year shows over 1995 (1995-2000).

The first year 1970 stood at 1000 a women and 2000 male member. Then increased gradually in year 1975 that women enrolment rose amount a thousand member while male increased dramatically twice as much as number of women. However, in year period from 1980 to 1990 has fluctuated in number average 1000-1500 member both boys and girls.

In other hand, in early millennium transition from 1995 to 2000 slow but sure female who enter in sport center has leveled in year 1985 a number of more 2000 on year 1995, in contrary shown male fitness membership that peaked at around 5000 people at the same year. Honestly, in over year 2000 both member male and female has plugged to account of 1000 and 2000 membership.

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Writing Feedback / The incredible trips of Bird Migration [4]

According to passage, migration is commonly movement of animal from breeding ground during of the year. Like other animals Bird--for example--migration has typically unique at the centuries. Birds do migration has responded to the biological imperative of species to survive. The most of birds migration take place between the lower and higher latitudes of the Northern Hemisphere during of the year. Then, Birds breeding area in higher elevations, near or the peak mountains or other nearby low country. In summary, during migration, most birds fly for a limited period each day. Approximately amount six to eighth hours, typically flying distance of a hundred miles. At the start of its trip, around a half percent of its body-weight made up of the fat necessary to fuel this incredible travel.

Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1; Comparison of five are mining sector categories in France during year 1995 and 2005 [2]

The pie charts compare of five mining sector categories in France during year 1995 and 2005. Over all, it can be seen along in one decade Coal and Gas industry have big proportion then following Gasoline. Whereas, Nuclear and other product has increased along ten years. In summary, fuel production has increased in early year and fell down over 1995. Although, Coal has flat but reverse Nuclear and Other production increase a decade.

In time the comparison product mining and gas industry shows variety in number and trend. The pie graph shows coal mining increased gradually in production to around one percent at 1995 to 2005. Yet, Liquid energy only increase at number as much as Coal production is around on in twenty. Interestingly, petrol along ten decade decreased dramatically down twice time amount at 29 to 19 percent. On the other hand, nuclear energy gradually increase in number about one in fifty. While other production increase significantly of number approximately five percent.

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Writing Feedback / The Taklimakan Desert which is a part of Africa's Sahara [3]

The Taklimakan Desert is a part of Africa's Sahara which is about 337,600 square kilometers. Eighty-five percent of the Taklimakan consist of shifting sand dunes, some up to 250 meters tall, and large free vegetation. Yet, open desert and oasis on the desert support plant are scorching summer and frigid winter, drought and high-salt condition. There are three Taklimakan plants be adapted-Populus euphratica, Tamarix ramossina, and Alhagi sparsifolia. They have unique mechanism to survive.

The Populus euphratica, Eupharates poplar, tall tree in Taklimakan has an extensive root that allows to absorb water far from the standing tree. Tamarix ramossima, a small three called tamarisk or salt chedar takes amount of water via a far-reaching root system many times the size of the plant above ground. Then, a spiny shrub, Alhagi sparsifolia uses large amount of water especially during the summer months. Most it roots reach down deep where they take up water around sixteen meters below ground.

However, desert plants able to adapt for their own survival, they also help protect their ecosystem

Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1: The graph line shows which three sectors global water consumed during a century [2]

The graph line shows which is three sectors global water consumed during a century. And table shows two countries which using water in 2000. Over all, global consuming water trend has majority to agriculture unlike household sector leveled to minority. On the other hand, Brazil is watered large people and land while Congo in Africa which is water consumed a few proportion.

In worldwide water, farming sector had been increased dramatically three times since in year 1900 at around 500 to 3000 cubic. Industrial sector had responsible by using water at international scale that increased gradually at approximately one 15000 cubic. However, consuming water in public sector not significantly to 5 percent of total global consumption.

Whereas water consumption around year 2000 in two countries that the first, Brazil they had huge of number people that needed around 26,500 km watering of land and provided 359 cubic water per person. While Congo's republic, one percent total people of Brazil should be provided about 5 million people, square 100 km. interestingly, it was water consuming less than Brazil in year 2000

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Writing Feedback / Find out the peripheral vision in sport [3]

Sometime we simply tolerate the blur. It is important to pay attention to the blur that surrounds the point where we have focused our vision. Athletes, for example must be keenly aware of what is happening all around them. An athlete's performance not only depends on physic but also visual training ability.

On the other hand, the environment also contributes to athlete's visual sharpness such as contrasting court background, adequate lighting, and non-confusing uniform color combinations and less off-court motion. It is that caches the athlete's attention as they gather a quick view of focused on detail. As result the eyes move in and out of focus, there is a blur between each pause.

Writing Feedback / The old map shows no buildings and any other facilities on this area, except the beach and palms. [2]

Writing Task 1: The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facility

The maps shows an area which is provided by travel accommodations previous until after construction that length 100 meters. Overall, previous, the land looked mostly undeveloped that shown trees and beach. Soon after construction, the land developed by variety of facilities.

Based on information on map that looked in previous land look no existing building and other facilities except beach and plant. The layout will prospect in the future that build several public facilities. In On the other hand, after construction there no longer space. Yet, the land replaced by accommodation such as restaurant, public space and road, and leisure. Whereas, the layout shows which was installed by water sport and swimming area near by the beach include boat as well. While cottage built in two places and road trough along restaurant, receptionist and peer. However, coconut tress existed along building. Interestingly, the land used in left side while the right side existed in more trees.

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Writing Feedback / Happiness is not only related to economic success, yet the social and psychology aspect is important [2]

Many people think that happiness is through to economic success. On the other hand, some people support the opinion that happiness caused by many factors. This essay is going to explain two statement and I give my own opinion.

It is commonly believe that personal happiness is depend on financial support. Financial is indicating with money and large of land. Almost all problem can solve problem by money. Some people saying that many accounts in bank and have big salary are symbolize of happiness. Rich people have many advantages when they have more financial base such as have purchase some cars, homes and shops. In urban community for example, rich people represent with a luxury with if they live in flat, apartment, and palace. On the other hand, people having car and eating in luxury place caused by financing support. In addition, land is essential in rural community

However, another people believe that happiness not only economic factor but also many factors. There are social, culture, psychology factors there some essential items by going happier. Nowadays, networking, trust, being love are vital in social and culture. It looks at some people have good relation with another in business, education and so on. However, family time, travel and need for achievement are related to in psychology. People believe that have quality time and holiday with family will support mentally health.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that statement happiness directly not only related to economic success but also many factors such as social and psychology aspect.

Writing Feedback / The brief life of Circus from ancient world in Romans [4]

The circus is one of the oldest forms of entertainment. History of circus started in ancient romans around sixth century B.C. chariot races were more popular and also gladiator fights and display of exotic animals like elephants and tigers. Over time the site was permanently retired and entertainment was reduced to small bands of travelling performers and animal trainers. However, the circus survive to make a return to its former grandeur in the eighteenth century.

On the other hand, during the late 1700s, an Englishman named Philip Ashley founded the first modern circus. We was skilled rider who invented stunt riding on horseback. He performed in a circus ring and expanded his act to clowns, acrobats, and parade of trained animals.

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Writing Feedback / Writing Task 2: There are two factors entertainment editors that it should decide to advertise [2]

There are two factors entertainment editors that it should decide to advertise on TV or print news in magazine. In this essay I has divide in two statements are capital and media interest that is influence of news editorial member to broadcast news. On the other hand I suggest the media would be better to produce a good report.

Broadcasting has change since Guttenberg invented printing in Europe. Yet, TV also have many advantages to spread information at society in latest century. However, nowadays, mass media such us TV and newspaper are ideologist and capitalistic now. Some Medias are reported depend on their owner want. The editor cannot independently because boss media has forced their freedom. Television and radio of this example, there always produce advertisement that it related to owner interest. On the other hand, capital resources can contribute the media existence such as amount of printing and video shooting, operational vehicle and qualified human resources as reporter and so on. Finally capital and interest of media has essential factor that it is influenced editor.

On the other hand, I believe that positive news better than negative report. Media such internet, television, newspaper and radio is responsible to educate people by reporting news. Sadly, some people agreed that media have great bad impact to influence people such kids or teenagers. Some media advertise of their product without moral obligation and uneducated. They sacrificed of their ideology for material reason. In example, media that content are provocation, sex

bias, criminal, and radicalism. Finally, for these reason, I agree that media should release of positive news.

In conclusion, I believe that capital and media interest has responsible of editor decision. Also I agree that media should produce of good news.

Writing Feedback / Being social makes us happier, healthier and we live longer than people who are less connected. [3]

What makes a good life? Lessons from the longest study on happiness

Life is too short sometime we climb from bottom to the top, sometime turning opposite direction. Life teach about relationship so keep happier and healthier. Robert Waldinger by his big lesson talked about relationships which social connection. Social connection to communities, to friends are happier, healthier and they live longer than people who was less connected.

Based on his research, more happily man or women even their physical pain but their mood just still happy. However the people who unhappy relationship reported their physical pain by more emotional pain. This explanation good for us that is relationship good in health.

To sum up human need connected each other. It is practical endless. A good life is build good relationship, he ended his speech.

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