Writing Feedback / TED Talks : Chris Aderson - How Simple To Lead Scientific Discoveries [3]

Chris Aderson presents that a simple question can carry out us of the edge of human knowledge. Columbus reveals the world is circular by only looking his shadow on well while his head blocking the sun and his ideas finish by Erasthones, the discoverer of Geography, find the diameter of the world by measuring the distance between Alexandria and Sweden. Furthermore, Arman F. finishes the speed calculation of light tried to discover by Galileo before. Overall, Chris shows we are not so different with inventors in the past, they are just a little bit more curious. If they can change the world, so do we.

Writing Feedback / TED Talks : Kitra Cahana - A Glimpse of Life on the Road [2]

Kitra Cahana, who currently works as a photojournalist, ever wonders to escape from her routine boring life while she was a little girl. Her dream is to get to know the stranges living unconventionaly on the road. However, she is never able to pursue her dream.

As time goes by, her profession as a documentary photographer is a new opening chapter in her life since she finally can capture the lives of fellow wanderers across the United States such as young hobos, travelers, hitchhikers, vagrants and tramps. Unfortunately, not everyone appreciates the nomads as it can be seen by the law banned them to stay on the road and the law is now existed in many cities across the United State. In addition, she emphasizes the examples of the laws that harmful for the nomads, yet currently applied. It is illegal now for the nomads to sit on the sidewalk, to wrap their self in a blanket, to sleep in their own car, and even to offer food to a stranger.

What she tries to stress is about the way societies badly think about the nomads as many of the nomads that she knew were already hauled off to jail because of the unreasonable laws currently existed. She also add her points that the society should appreciate the nomads since not all people having the lucky life that we have or sharing the same idea with us or even seeing the world the way that we see.

Source: ted

Writing Feedback / Summary: Time - J.K. Rowling Hints That Dumbledore Will Be Openly Gay in the Fantastic Beasts Sequel [2]

Another upcoming movie sequels authored by J.K. Rowling, Fantastic Beasts and Where to Find Them, casts an out of the blue clue. After several rumors mentioned that he will not be appeared in its first sequel, Albus Dumbledore turned out to be emerging as a young gay wizard who has relationship with dark wizard Gellert Grindelwald.

Will be filmed by David Heyman, the producer of the eight Harry Potter films before, this movie will portray how the wizards from American and England capture magical creatures escaped from a magic bag and involving the formative period Albus' life. However, not only the appearance of Albus Dumbledore as quite troubled young gay wizard, but also the image of the early years of Hogwarts what makes the fans cannot wait for the movie that will be released by the end of this year.

Source: time.com/4566727/j-k-rowling-dumbledore-gay-fantastic-beasts/

Writing Feedback / The Pop Parade website break the record with the highest number of visitors [2]

A breakdown of the information about the number's comparison of visitors to the two new music sites on the web in a 15-day period measured in thousand is shown in the line chart. Overall, the both figures witnessed an upward trend while the Pop Parade trends break the record as the highest one.

Initially, the gap between the figures is widened up, with the guest of the pop parade at 120 thousands and approximately 40 thousands for music choice. At more detail to look at, the Pop Parade trend remain at the same point in the third day while it tends to fall down and reaches the lowest point in the ninth day at 40 thousands. Nevertheless, the Music Choice experiences a slight increase trend at the third day with approximately 60 thousands and reaches its lowest point at the ninth day at 20 thousands.

A part from previous comparison, the Pop Parade experiences a remarkable increasing trend in the eleventh day at 150 thousands while the same dramatic raise trend in the twelfth day at 120 thousands. The trends are overtaken in the twelfth and thirteenth day while the Pop Parade trend reaches the peak at 170 in the last day. In reverse, the end of the period shows a considerable rate by 40 thousands for pop parade trend, while a slight increase trend of around 10 thousands witness in music choice making the gap between them narrowed down.

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Writing Feedback / The number of graduated scholars from Canadian schools [2]

The given graph provides the data about the number of university graduates between the two genders in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Overall, the number of graduated scholars experienced the similar pattern for female and male which is the upward trend. However, the female trend broke the record as the high one.

According to the line graph, the starting number of female scholars in 1992 was lower than 100,000. Even though the female trend was sharply decreased in 1998, it was slowly increased in the end of 2000 with more than 100,000 female students released by the university. In contrast, started with 70,000, the growth of the number of male students graduated from university was steadily increased. In 1995, the trend achieved the number 75,000 while it experienced the same decreasing trend in 1998.

At more detailed looked at, both of female and male trends were sharply increased since 2001. However, in 2007, female reached the peak with 145,000 while male remained with 95,000, making the gap between them widened.

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Writing Feedback / Summary: Time - Hillary Clinton Concedes, Leaving Democrats at a Loss [NEW]

Trump celebrates his victory in the Hilton Hotel in Midtown Manhattan and during the triumph speech; he congratulated Hillary Clinton for the competitive and hard-fought campaign.

In contrast, after witnessing a devastating result, Hillary Clinton put an end to her presidential campaign in a Manhattan hotel ballroom, the same hotel as she had begun it. However, she is able to say her final speech, not to soothe her crying supporter, but to reveal that the meaning of this election to her is about building an America that is hopeful, inclusive and big-hearted. In addition, she also encourages the people who share the same defeated feeling with her, as she said, "This loss hurts, but never stop believing that fighting for what's right is worth it."

This loss is not only a deeply painful surprise for Clinton, the first female presidential nominee of a major political party, but also for the Democrats. Furthermore, the Democratic Party should be dealt with the unclear future since most of the potential generation candidates are graying septuagenarians while Michelle Obama has expressed her disinterest for become a president. In the meantime, several questions are addressed to the Democrats for this defeat since the Democrats is the party that nominated the first black president who once discriminated by Trump.

After all, President Obama urges Americans to keep the peaceful transition after the election result revealed and to stay encouraged in politic as they will bring change although the results were sometimes disappointing.

Source : time

Writing Feedback / TED Talks : Suzanne Barakat - Islamophobia [2]

Suzanne Barakat shared her sad experience about the three of her family members were gruesomely murdered in a hate crime; her brother Deah, his wife Yusor, and her sister Razan. Even though the murder was directly turned to the police after he committed the crime, the reason uttered by him does not make sense as he stated that he killed three kids over a parking dispute. However, the investigation reveals that there is parking dispute as the killer was murdered them in their own home where it should be the safest place for them.

Suzanne was falling into a deep sadness not only because of her loss, but also because of the distorted news broadcasted by the media. For this reason, she challenge herself to speak up against the hate crime felt by all of the people who come from different race, religion, and gender while for her, islamophobia. At the end, she asked the audiences to join her in standing up against hate as even the single support gave by them to the their muslim friends or neighbors will make a difference.

Source : ted.com/talks/suzanne_barakat_islamophobia_killed_my_brother_let_s_end_the_hate#t-289647

Writing Feedback / According to cyclical chart, the life of silkworm is started with the moth producing the moth's egg [2]

The diagrams below shows the life cycle of silkworm and the stage of the production of silk cloths. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram illustrates the life cycle of silkworm and the manufacture of silk cloths. Overall, there are four natural phases of the life cycle of silkworm starting from the moth's egg and ending with a cocoon while the silk cloths have five linear man-made stages beginning with the cocoon being processed and finishing with weaving.

According to cyclical chart, the life of silkworm is started with the moth producing the moth's egg and after that the egg will be brood for ten days. With around 6 weeks of consuming mulberry, it would become larvae then silk thread used to cover its body is produced by larvae needing 3-8 days. The fourth phase happened when the full body of the larva has been covered by the silk thread and in this phase the larva becomes a cocoon for 16 days before it starts to be a moth.

Meanwhile the production of silk cloths is initiated by selecting the good cocoon that will be used. After that, the cocoon is boiled in the water in the proper heat. The third process is the thread should be unwind and stretched for 300-900 meters. Then, the twist process is started with the dry thread that is given the dye. Turning to the final stage, the colorful thread is ready to be woven.

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Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK II - LACK ARTISTIC TALENT ON CHILDREN [3]

It is pointless making children who lack artistic talent learn painting and drawing in Art classes at school. Instead, they should concentrate on other creative and practical subjects which they may have more aptitude. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some might think it is useless to push children who do not have any interest on painting and drawing in Art classes at school as it is better for them to focus on other creative and practical lesson that they really love. This essay would totally disagree to such idea because it is too early for children to decide what kind of subject that really loved by them and it is useful for them to develop their imagination by learning art.

It has commonly believe that children should not be pushed on learning something as they may be have their other favorite subject that is more important to learn, but considering their young age, they still need guidance from adults to decide what kind of subject would be loved by them in the future. This statement stand on the actual fact that some adults, who do not love art at their young age, are regretting their past as they do not quite satisfied with the current subject they pursue and are start loving art subject. For instance, the study conducted by Australia Government in 2010 revealed that 75% of adults regret their incompetence to express their feeling by drawing or painting art as they are not willing to learn those subjects while they are at school. Therefore, it is true that children do not yet have sufficient ability to determine what kind of subject that may be really useful for them in the future so that they need guidance from adults.

It also cannot be denied by drawing and painting people are easier to express their imagination. Not everyone is a good painter but every single person, who can paint, is more creative and imaginative than others. A recent research conducted by California University shows as much as 63% of people could paint or other art subjects are more creative and imaginative to solve their life problem. Hence, even if children do not love art lessons, it is important for them to learn the subject.

To conclude, children need to learn art together with other creative and practical subjects as they are still young so that they still need guidance from adults on what kind of subject that really useful for them in the future and the art subjects are important to widen their imagination. Where possible, the adults should give more attention and understanding for their children so that they are willing to learn art without force.

Writing Feedback / Overall, with the exception of Japan, spending money on housing was the biggest for all countries [2]

The bar chart gives the information about the proportion of spending on five different needs in four countries in 2009 and is measured in percent. Overall, with the exception of Japan, spending money on housing was the biggest percentage for all countries.

The majority of the countries respectively United State, United Kingdom, and Canada spent most of their spending on housing while the most expensive spending for japan is food that is as much as 23%. Although japan's expenditure on housing is less than food at 22%, its number was still bigger than canada's expenditure accounting for more than a fifth. In comparison, japan showed the highest percentage on food while united stated was the least. By contrast, in chase of transportation spend, canada's expenditure was a fifth while japan accounted for one to ten.

Turning to the internal comparison among the needs in every country, it is clearly can be seen that Canada and the United State spend more money on transportation than food while the reverse trend happened to Japan and the United Kingdom. Furthermore, the United Kingdom has the least spending on health care trend while the United States appear as the least country spending its expenditure on clothing.

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Writing Feedback / The fast food expenditures in UK (1990's) were dominated by people who earn the most [2]

The bar and line chart given provide the data about the amount of expenditure spent on fast food, according to people earnings and the quantity of fast food consumption in uk during two decades. Overall, with the exception of fish and chips, fast food expenditure was dominated by people from high income salary; furthermore, while pizza experienced an upward trend, the opposite was seen in the remaining figures.

According to the bar chart, the high income people spent more than 40% of their earnings to consume hamburger and its number is quite significant compares with the other two types of fast food while the least percentage of fast food spent by them is fish and chips as much as 16%. Even thought the percentage of income spent by the average income people to consume hamburger is also the highest, the least percentage of fast food spent by them is pizza that is 11%. However, the low income people consumes fish and chips the most with the total number is more than 15% and surprisingly, the least fast food chosen by them is also pizza with the total percentage as much as 6%.

On the other hand, the line graphs showed that over two decades the trend of fish and chips and hamburger are highly increased with the number reached respectively is 500 and 300 while the amount of the pizza consumption is significantly decreased up to 200. It clearly can be shown that from 1970 to 1990, the fish and chips and hamburger experienced the steady increasing trend every year while the reverse trend happened to pizza.

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Writing Feedback / The rising trend of reading in Barnaby, the most significant growth was shown in male readers. [4]

The line graph below presents the information about the number of books read by people based on gender over four-year period at Burnaby Public Library. Overall, even though the trend of both variables is rising, the most significant growth was shown in male readers.

According to the line graph, even though the increasing number is not identical, the number of books read by both gender was steadily increased during the first two years. At 2013, the amount of books read by women achieves the peak with as much as ten thousand books in total while also it intersects the number of books read by men. At 2014, it was experienced a sharply decreasing trend to 8000 books while the number of books read by the male had become 14000 books. The number of books read by female was steadily increased from 2011 to 2013 and decreased sharply for the next year while the number of books read by male was slowly increased from 2011 to 2012 and rose sharply for the next two years.

At more detail look at, the growth of the number of books read by female continued to increase and reach 9000 by the end of 2013 but it experienced a sharply decreasing trend and reached 7,000 by 2014. In contrast, the growth of the number of books read by male experienced a sharply increased trend since 2012.

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Writing Feedback / Classes attended by many students are less effective and less efficient [2]

When students are in large classes, it is very hard for the teacher to give every student individual attention. What can educational authorities do about this?

Lecturer gave at the large room classes attended by many students is less effective and less efficient since the teacher will not be able to maintain and pay attention to each student. Obviously, the large classes loosen the teacher-student relation and disturb the concentration of student because the larger the classes used to teach, the more students attending to study and to overcome this problem, educational authorities should not only minimize the size of the class and limit the number of student but also suggest the teachers to change the way their teach student become more attractive.

It goes without saying that the capability of student to pay attention in school is depend on the class atmosphere including the wide of the classroom as the large classes loosen the teacher-student relation and as the impact, it will disturb the concentration of students. A research conducted by Australia Government in 2010 showed as much as 75% of student is being passive and having less concentration while attending large classes and this condition is influenced not only by the large number of student come to the large class distracted their focus on the lessons but also because the teacher cannot notice and observe the progress of each student. It is true that the large classes will loosen the teacher-student relation as the teacher cannot pay attention to all students attending the class.

The educational authorities have several options to tackle this issue. As the large classes will involve many students to join the lessons, if it is possible it will be best to minimise the size of the classroom. However, whereas the idea of minimizing the classroom is impossible, the educational authorities are suggested to train the teachers to have an attractive teaching way. Modifying the teaching way will be the best solution so that teacher can observe the progress of each student and get the full attention by the student as a current study carried out by Japan Education Researcher found as much as 65% of student become more concentration on the lessons while their teacher teach in an attractive way such as giving quiz and presentation. It is can be seen that minimizing the size of classroom and giving lesson in an attractive way are the best solution to overcome this problem.

Overall, it is true that the larger the classes used to teach, the more students attending to study, so that it is harder for teachers to pay attention to each student. The workable solution suggested to the government authorities is to minimise the size of classroom and to train the teachers to have attractive way to give lecturer.

Writing Feedback / Utilizing the renewable energy sources is favored in generating electricity. [2]

More renewable energy sources are harnessed to generate electricity these days. What are disadvantages and advantages of this trend?

Utilizing the renewable energy sources is favored in generating electricity. While this policy needs astronomical budget to operate, this also can decrease human's dependence on fossil fuel.

It is commonly believe by the cons that the way of harnessing these newest sources invite others negative impacts such as the expensive cost spend and the advanced technology needed. For some countries, cost become the most common problem appear as it will also affect the government capability to provide the advanced technology. As the current research conducted by Japan Government shows that almost 63% of the country facing the need for renewable energy urgently is the underdeveloped countries that have not enough money to supply the research towards the renewable energy and its advanced technology. It is true that renewable energy need a lot of state spending.

However, the counter party believes exploiting renewable energy to operate electricity is the only way to solve the problem of the depletion of fossil fuel. It goes without saying that the fossil fuel is slowly become extinct and the workable solution to overcome this problem is by finding another resource which has the same function to generate electricity. The study carried out by California University in 2009 showed that the fossil fuel will only appear after hundred years in the future and the renewable energy is the only alternative for human to survive from this problem. It is clear that the advantage of renewable energy is it can solve the problem of human's dependence on fossil fuel.

Overall, even though the drawback impact of harnessing renewable energy to operate electricity is that some government should spent a lot of their state spending to provide the advance technology, it also bring advantage that it will decrease human's dependence on fossil fuel.

Writing Feedback / SEA LEVELS. Building dams and reservoirs can be taken as the workable solution for flood problem [4]

Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions.

The global warming phenomenon is one of big issues faced by human beings and the level of sea floor has reached at. The problem appeared owing to this phenomenon is flood around the coastal area and the workable solution which can be taken is the construction of flood-control barrier.

As the impact of the emerging of climate change, the flood is striking many countries since the amount of the ocean's surface increased so that it spillover to the river near the residence. A current study conducted by Japan Government reveals the impact of flood is striking out every single part of human life and the aftermath of flood brings many drawbacks such as the skin disease and diarrhea that mostly affects children, causes the absent of economic activity as people cannot walk on their daily activity, and inflicts the financial loss of a country.

The construction of flood-control barrier such as dam and reservoir can be taken as the workable solution for this problem. The function of the dam is to control the limit of water near the residence where inhabitants live while the function of reservoir is to place plenty of water. Therefore the flood can be controlled since the excessive amount of water will go through the dam and will be accommodated to the reservoir next to the dam. The construction of this barrier has been used by some countries having the same problem for decades, for instance Netherlands.

In conclusion, building dam and reservoir that has been applied by Netherlands is the best long-term solution to face the flood in many other countries as the amount of water in the ocean is overflowing resulting in flooding happened in some regions of countries become the most common problem of the global warming phenomenon.

Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK II - WORK ENVIRONMENT IS CHANGING RAPIDLY [2]

The world of work is changing rapidly. Working conditions today are not the same as before and people no longer rely on taking one job for life. Discuss the possible causes for these changes and give your suggestion on how people should prepare for work in the future?

It is no doubt that the working environment is changing recently and people are not taking one profession anymore. Obviously, the increase of living cost is one of main reason of this trend and saving money and changing the lifestyle are some options to prepare for people to tackle this issue in the upcoming day.

One reason why people are prone to have more than one job is that the amount of money spent by them in every month escalates which is not only as the impact of the living cost that is getting expensive but also the life necessities that is increasing while their salary is not enough to pay all of that continuously. The increase of living cost is covering the price of groceries, the cost of raw material for building, and the cost to rent apartment while the rise of life necessities is including the changing of lifestyle as people tend to hang out with their friends or colleagues outside, the needs of handling advanced technology such as mobile phone or computer, and the cost of transportation. All of those things forces people to have much more money by taking more than one profession so that they can finance their life.

However, people have several options can be taken to tackle this issue in the future. It is very obvious that people can prepare to the upcoming day not only by reducing the money spending and saving some but also by changing their lifestyle as it is very impossible for them to have more than one job for their entire life. As a current survey conducted by California University shows that the average of productive age for people to work is only until 53 years old. Therefore, people should not work in many places anymore even though their salary is barely. Besides, in my experience, the other thing people can do to handle this problem is to reduce the using of technology or transportation if they cannot afford it. This option can be taken as people do not always need to follow the recent trend.

To sum up, the options can be taken to tackle this issue is by saving money and changing the lifestyle as the changing of working environment forced people to have more than one profession is caused by their increasing outcome while their salary from one job is not getting bigger.