nurainiyusuf16
Nov 19, 2016
Writing Feedback / A comparison of total units of electricity produce by five sources between 1980 and 2010 [3]
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A comparison of the electricity generation by source in New Zealand and Germany between 1980 and 2010 covered by units is revealed in the four pie charts.
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Overall, it is immediately apparent ...
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there was a rapid incline in the total of units for each countries ...
a significant rise: singular
an extreme: singular
It should be "was"
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Hello willy!
Allow me to give you some suggestion.
A comparison of total units of electricity ...
Look at my suggestion below:
A comparison of the electricity generation by source in New Zealand and Germany between 1980 and 2010 covered by units is revealed in the four pie charts.
Punctuation
Overall, it is immediately apparent ...
Look at my suggestion below:
there was a rapid incline in the total of units for each countries ...
..., there were a significant rise ...
there were an extreme fall ...
a significant rise: singular
an extreme: singular
It should be "was"
Hope it helps you, break a leg!