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|"television programme production essay" Introduction feedback.
2 - And that's the problem, right there. Your essay so far is vague and wordy, instead of specific and...
Writing Feedbackkors88 - Oct 28, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 29, 2009
|I have to write an essay on both "The Storm" & The Story of an Hour"
3 - hardwork...
Writing FeedbackmrsArias - Oct 28, 2009 / killerwind - Oct 29, 2009
|Restriction on how many years a teacher may teach same subject- CBEST
3 - nice essay. although the way i understand it only states 1 thesis statement (it is beneficial for students) .....
Writing Feedbacknanskk2000 - Oct 28, 2009 / elainedlcruz - Nov 10, 2009
|take up the endangered animals' habitat - toefl essay
Writing FeedbackLapland - Oct 27, 2009 / brood910 - Oct 29, 2009
|Changes in the world in the coming century?
Writing Feedbackvothiha - Oct 27, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Oct 30, 2009
|Brave New World and Today's Societal Parallels
5 - @mattsaysfierce- I would certainly hope you turned yours in! I am in your class and I stayed home today...
Writing Feedbackdonfilipe - Oct 27, 2009 / donfilipe - Oct 27, 2009
|Rice contribution essay - 'my experience and ability to seek solutions'
2 - Here is the good way to use a colon: ...lived in three different countries: China, New Zealand and...
Writing Feedbackblubunny5 - Oct 26, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Oct 28, 2009
|TOEFL IBT: SCHOOL EDUCATION OR SELF STUDY (CONTRAST)
4 - It's better. The idea is clearer this time. Admittedly independent study is more convenient. However, principles, communication and cooperation...
Writing Feedbackfuhuanluck - Oct 26, 2009 / litingjiao - Oct 28, 2009
|How to give a presentation with ease and confidence?
3 - Thank you for your praise. I know the language is my largest barrier that prevents me from stating my...
Writing Feedbackvothiha - Oct 26, 2009 / vothiha - Oct 29, 2009
|An Indian milieu
12 - Ha ha, yes, for now help me correct some of these essays! I'm having trouble keeping up. :-)...
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Oct 26, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 1, 2009
|Abortion: Why it should be Illegal.
Writing Feedbackjuliat cung - Oct 25, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 26, 2009
|Why is music important to many people?
4 - Most people would say because the music became popular since it has been used in advertisement business. no...
Writing Feedbackbaitassel - Oct 25, 2009 / fuhuanluck - Oct 26, 2009
|"Gross National Happiness" as a measurement of the success of the country. Maryland Essay #4 review
Writing Feedbackplaya25 - Oct 25, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 26, 2009
|the time from birth to twelve years is the most important period in life time?
3 - hi Clare Healy, thanks for your comment however, i find that your comment is less useful what i need...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Oct 25, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Oct 25, 2009
|Is it better to marry someone who is similiar to you? or different wth you?
Writing Feedbackjimmi - Oct 25, 2009 / jimmi - Oct 25, 2009
|Intrusive, friendly & polite; What are the qualities of a good neighbor.\?
Writing Feedbackbaitassel - Oct 24, 2009 / baitassel - Oct 25, 2009
|Compare and contrast of my children
Writing Feedbackbrianw - Oct 24, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 24, 2009
|Even though some of the ads are beneficent, we should have discretion for national purchase
Writing Feedbackung0911 - Oct 24, 2009 / litingjiao - Oct 26, 2009
Writing FeedbackFloria_ran - Oct 24, 2009 / Floria_ran - Oct 24, 2009
|Win is always your if you do fight from your deep heart. A success does not depend from luck.
8 - Your thesis should probably be something along the lines of "Success often requires a combination of good luck and...
Writing Feedbackalina967 - Oct 23, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 26, 2009
|I like to live in big city like "Ahemdabad"
Writing Feedbackalina967 - Oct 23, 2009 / alina967 - Nov 12, 2009
|"Pontius Pilate Indeed"
3 - thanks...
Writing Feedbackyvette - Oct 22, 2009 / yvette - Dec 7, 2009
|Mobile phone merits and defects.
Writing Feedbackung0911 - Oct 22, 2009 / ung0911 - Oct 23, 2009
|studying the past has little value. do u agree or not? why?
2 - Your point is Okay, though I think you could revise some sentences like: First of all, studying the...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Oct 22, 2009 / linhexi - Oct 22, 2009
|"TV is a such idiot box."; INFLUENCE of TV and MOVIES on people's behavior
9 - you can use the good dictionary to check grammar errors by yourseft and the option of Word Window by...
Writing Feedbackalina967 - Oct 22, 2009 / vothiha - Oct 27, 2009
|'an evil demon' - It was only a dream; essay
4 - If you want your writing to really sizzle, use fewer adjectives and more expressive verbs. That will help you...
Writing Feedbackchie - Oct 21, 2009 / EF_Stephen - Oct 21, 2009
|How people can gain job satisfaction?/ Factors contributing to job satisfaction
5 - to be honest, i am not really comfortable with this essay. i think that it is not convincing enough;...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Oct 21, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Oct 21, 2009
|write to thank a local businessman for giving large sum of money to the club....
3 - Noted. Thanks alot. I will try to improve on it. How about the details I have written? Is there...
Writing Feedbackdylantcp - Oct 21, 2009 / dylantcp - Oct 22, 2009
|"Teach for India" why?
3 - Thanks a lot for givining the feedback..i will rewrite and send it again with keeping all the point u...
Writing Feedbackruchika kumari - Oct 21, 2009 / ruchika kumari - Oct 22, 2009
|Contrast viewpoints of the author and the lecturer about using cell phone
4 - tuanlnc have a hard look the reasons cause accidents and should not focus only on using cell phone. >>>...
Writing Feedbacktuanlnc - Oct 21, 2009 / vothiha - Oct 29, 2009
|WHAT is the message that advertisement is communicating to the viewer?
2 - You need to greatly tighten up this essay. You might start by looking at how the elements you describe...
Writing Feedbackmtelsayed - Oct 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 21, 2009
|Should Euthanasia be legalized?
16 - There are simple MLA formats that you can google online it helped me a whole lot when writing my...
Writing Feedbackjohnnylin_24 - Oct 20, 2009 / jaimeealexis - Oct 31, 2009
|Essay about the influence of Parents on Kids
2 - This is great, very engaging. I couldn't stop reading because of the emotion it conveyed. You should go...
Writing Feedbackriaboo46 - Oct 20, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Oct 21, 2009
|Introsuce about college and faculty of pharmacy
3 - I will join in an international lecture on how to develop pharmacists' education in Vietnam and some countries in...
Writing Feedbackvothiha - Oct 20, 2009 / vothiha - Oct 21, 2009
|'priceless gift of oneself' - People do different things to stay health; IELTS
4 - You say right. I'm a pharmacist. That maybe a reason why my essay like a writing on a newspaper....
Writing Feedbackvothiha - Oct 20, 2009 / vothiha - Oct 20, 2009
|Romanticism - British literature essay. i need a good proofread.
3 - I'm also glad that you made references to the poets. But I think there's some information here that came...
Writing Feedbackehoskin24 - Oct 20, 2009 / EF_Stephen - Oct 21, 2009
|"Luck is very important factor to succeed" - toefl ibt
2 - ainash After reading your essay, I understand why no one has made response. Although my English writing is...
Writing Feedbackainash - Oct 19, 2009 / thanhlh84 - Oct 20, 2009
|Sport and motivations - money influence?
Writing Feedbackasoa - Oct 19, 2009 / asoa - Oct 19, 2009
|TOEFL:ELECTRIC BOOK OR PAPER BOOK?(contrast)
8 - EF_Stephen：thank you for your advice. but i am confused how to improve my vocabulary problem. how to make words...
Writing Feedbackfuhuanluck - Oct 19, 2009 / fuhuanluck - Oct 20, 2009
|Can a computer be hacked easily? Introduction to Computer research paper...
2 - Um, that seems like a fairly important issue, and one that has all sorts of ethical implications. ...
Writing FeedbackNita S - Oct 18, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 19, 2009
|Modernization vs Dependency Theory
Writing FeedbackMakeAnImpact97 - Oct 18, 2009 / MakeAnImpact97 - Oct 20, 2009
|Write a report about a graph; Coca-cola bottles
2 - ollowing the North America wereare the Latin America and Europe with 25.7% and 20.5% in total 17.1 billion bottles...
Writing Feedbackessay0405 - Oct 18, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Oct 18, 2009
|life in prison is better punishment than death penalty
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Oct 18, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 22, 2009
|TOEFL:Progress in civilization is always goog
Writing Feedbacklyqinyi - Oct 17, 2009 / yin - Oct 17, 2009
|An amazing place that you visited
Writing Feedbacksilentheart - Oct 17, 2009 / silentheart - Oct 17, 2009
|Should nations maintain old buildings. Ielts
3 - Thanks Sean specifally for the examples you gave. I can see how weak the first structure is. I will...
Writing Feedbackorlando - Oct 17, 2009 / orlando - Oct 17, 2009
|[TOEFL] All students should be required to study art and music in secondary school.
Writing Feedbackyin - Oct 16, 2009 / EF_Stephen - Oct 24, 2009
|The advantage and disadvantage of the mobile phones
Writing Feedbackessay0405 - Oct 16, 2009 / tuanlnc - Oct 17, 2009
|Essay on three businesses if Mr. Gates awarded me with $300,000
Writing FeedbackSyed - Oct 16, 2009 / youngeebs - Oct 16, 2009
|brain drain and solutions for this problem
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Oct 16, 2009 / essay0405 - Oct 17, 2009
|LEGALIZATION OF SAME SEX MARRIAGE - revise my introduction, argumentative paper.
32 - I personally would simply talk about the essence of human rights; how essentially we are all equal and that...
Writing FeedbackBrianne - Oct 16, 2009 / Envie - Feb 9, 2010
|TOEFL - prefer large or small company? Large - stable jobs and fine salaries
4 - it is a contrast essay, so your structure is wrong. mention both merits and demerits , besides what overweighs...
Writing FeedbackAnly - Oct 16, 2009 / fuhuanluck - Oct 30, 2009
|giving more chance for women can cause some problem?what are your views?
3 - Hi, I agree with worldbound10, "develop themselves" is used three times. Instead of replicating it, you can use...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Oct 15, 2009 / tuanlnc - Oct 17, 2009
|TOEFL College education is one of the significant sources of increased knowledge
3 - Thank you. i really appreciate. i will redo it as soon as possible. besides, what else do you think...
Writing Feedbackfuhuanluck - Oct 15, 2009 / fuhuanluck - Oct 15, 2009
|Toefl iBT, integrated task: Invasive plants are a growing problem.
3 - Hi Jeannie, This is a Toefl iBT integrated writing task. After reading a passage & listening a lecture,...
Writing Feedbacktuanlnc - Oct 15, 2009 / tuanlnc - Oct 15, 2009
|'My sister's problems and solutions' - concise narrative describe a meaningful event
Writing FeedbackNoumon - Oct 14, 2009 / shaddy - Apr 16, 2013
|Narrative Essay: "Mother's heart is infinite like the Pacific Ocean overflowing"
3 - Dear EF_ Kevin, Although I handed in the essay to my professor, your advice is very useful for...
Writing Feedbacktrthanhthao109 - Oct 14, 2009 / trthanhthao109 - Oct 17, 2009
|Toefl essay:: Studying abroad, advantages and disadvantages.
8 - hi, in essay or any academic writing should avoid using some pronoun such as you, we, i as possible...
Writing Feedbackerfan222 - Oct 14, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Oct 16, 2009
|"The most delicious meal I have ever eaten..." - Descriptive Essay
3 - This is called a dangling modifier. It implies that your girlfriend was coming home from work, because that...
Writing FeedbackHugcr84001 - Oct 14, 2009 / EF_Stephen - Oct 15, 2009
|government should spend as much money as possible on developing technology
3 - Your have some grammar errors in this essay, but I would do some revision before I worried about that....
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Oct 13, 2009 / mikesperry79 - Oct 14, 2009
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