akbarmappiare
Aug 18, 2016
Writing Feedback / Summary an Article Best Trails to People Who Do Not Like Hiking [2]
Hi Farida.
I appreciate your effort because you wanna provide your time to improve your English. Let me give you suggestions to develop this.
because it takes much times and AN extra effort also dangerous on the way up.
That is why right nowmany A LARGE NUMBER OF people look for (...) do not need to spent SPEND much time but can ...
This is THESE ARE 10 best places to FOR people who like THE short hikes.
... Rifugio Bonatti, Italy, . it is only 11.3 km, and people THOSE (THOSE CAN BE USED AS PEOPLE) can enjoy Mount ...
... Island Peak, Nepal, WHERE people need to walk 56 to 65 km to reach A Himalayan peak.
... National Park, New Zealand also THE great destination to go ...
Note: You still fall down some same errors. First, you have strayed the use of the article. Following that, you always write some words repetitively (PEOPLE AND MANY). I do not know why I get bored when I read the last six sentences. It seemed like the list of the data. Please, you harness appropriate linking words, so the readers can find a sense of your summary.
keep spirit...
I am looking forward to meeting your summary..
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Hi Farida.
I appreciate your effort because you wanna provide your time to improve your English. Let me give you suggestions to develop this.
because it takes much time
That is why right now
... Rifugio Bonatti, Italy
... Island Peak, Nepal, WHERE people need to walk 56 to 65 km to reach A Himalayan peak.
... National Park, New Zealand also THE great destination to go ...
Note: You still fall down some same errors. First, you have strayed the use of the article. Following that, you always write some words repetitively (PEOPLE AND MANY). I do not know why I get bored when I read the last six sentences. It seemed like the list of the data. Please, you harness appropriate linking words, so the readers can find a sense of your summary.
keep spirit...
I am looking forward to meeting your summary..
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