Writing Feedback / African social dance which influenced the world [2]

A Visual History of Social Dance in 25 Moves

Camille A. Brown talked on TED channel about African social dance which had influenced in the world. This dance had merging social engagement and dance belong to group. Actually, many type of this dance, Brown said more less thirty motions are dancing in African and Afro-American but to make it simply, I took only two examples; Charleston and Hip-hop. Those dance more popular among Africa people. Charleston is complex dance that need more improvisation while hip-hop which it is happening in the world. Teenager until old people are dancing this.

In question is why social dance popular in African? Simply, in past decade, slavery affected suffering to African people. By dance they express and protest which their condition. As result, dance took apart in African movement. As a speaker said, African dance make boundaries blurred.

These dance to express in social relation, intimacy and freedom.

Source: TED Channel

Writing Feedback / A glory day to Hillary Clinton in first presidential debate [2]

Hillary started impressing performance which is defeated the rival, Donald Trump of the first presidential debate at Hofstra University, America. This campaign as like asymmetric war that explained unequal battle. The candidates have not same idea such economy sector, Trump blamed Hillary which she do nothing to fix this problem along 30 years as public representative. On the other hand, Hillary striking back which Mr Trumph talked non-sense. She was good preparation and notoriously. By the end of debate, the candidates spent more time talked about tax and war. Trump had been denying for not paying income tax to federal whereas Hillary opposite, said 'on behalf of myself, and I think on behalf of a majority of the American people, say that, you know, our word is good. Thus, this debate resulted that one candidate who was good preparation and other confused, 1-0 to Mrs Clinton.

Source: economist.com/blogs/democracyinamerica/2016/09/win-hillary-clinton

Writing Feedback / Clint Smith, a poet and teacher spoke about the danger of silence on the TED channel [3]

The danger of silence by Clint Smith

Clint Smith, a poet and teacher spoke up about the danger of silence on the TED channel. He begun speech with quoted of Marten Luther King Jr story who reflected African movement in America. Smith talked that silence is residue fear entire in his life and African people as well, for example, discrimination, violence and war. At the beginning he live in suffered, no soda, no food, no home, as the result he give up. However he realized that every man want to be as human, have right to live which every people are needed life good, freedom and equal. A short, he stand front of the audience is speaking up against discrimination and injustice.

Source: TED

Writing Feedback / The history of England Conquest [3]

In the 11th century, England had responsible twice invasions which changed the nation. This country has more adequately invader. It defeated two conquests in the site only 50 years which impact on culture, politics, law and language because Danish conquest in 1016.

After thirty years, all area surrounded by Scandinavian overhand by England. Denmark people ruled belong Svein while Cnut and an England kingdom separated between King Elthered and his young prince Edmund. Over time England has not be able to maintain among 6 months of class against Cnut's armies whereas it did not have planned final victory for Cnuts at Essex in eightieth century. Soon after after Edmund passed away six weeks later, Danish-Norman dynasty become formed.

The last story, even Cnuts has not the first Danish King in the UK but he founded more less impact in the English kings. Further his generations were responsible by the epochal situation of year 1066 become history and collective memory in England people.

Writing Feedback / How to make work-life balance work by Nigel Marsh [2]

Nigel Marsh lays out about day balance between work, personal time and productivity. People sometimes forget quality time with family ever their self because they spent more time in labor. People need realistic they cannot spare time of working we need find the meaning of life Marsh as He said. People need balance in life. Marsh suggest to focus on draw or map life to be knowing reality. When persons spend time to workplace for example take child in childcare, work in office which is more responsible and care full. Those activities waste people time then forget meaning of their life. As He mentioned before, Marsh say people need be meaningful so people need to set up of life with sleep well, social intimacy, physical and spiritual need. These are totally work to increase meaning of life. As result, small investment essentially transform person's quality relationship and quality in life. Nigel Marsh believe that it is possible.

Writing Feedback / Artic snow dissolved are killing animals and will be caribou aground [2]

Continuing decrease of sea-ice shield is causing disorder on ecosystem along the artic, and might spell the last more variety animals than properly thought.
Low appearance species possibly will be in suffering. Researcher were calculated data on sea snow and zooplankton, fish and seabirds in the South-east Bering Sea among year 1975 and 2014. They found which most seabird and zooplankton were less rich where sea ice liquid early in spring, telling that these species will decrease in warmer temperature.

A stuck of ice might hamper the diaspora of plants, dooming them to elimination. Researcher collected previous data on sea ice and plants original arrival to the Arctic to sho that plants are likely to group new place after sea ice dominant.

Writing Feedback / Try a lot of different things in a month by Mutt Cutts [2]

Matt Cutts shared which his experience after reading a book from American philosopher. Matt, Technologist at Google talked the story of his life in the past. He told to audience that his live change after he read that book. In lecture session, Matt shared that some activities that we should do in thirty days. There are cycling to work, jogging a thousand per day and writing novel. Mutt always feel confidence by those activities. Day by day, he spend time at cycling, hiking Kilimanjaro mountain in Africa, and writing a novel. Mutt wrote a novel more less fifty thousand words per days only a month. It was amazing. The last session, Mutt believe that people have occasion to do best things in life.

Source: TED

Writing Feedback / Bill Gates and his presentation in Long beach California [3]

Bill Gates had speech in February 2009 that placed at Long beach California. He talked about health and education. He argued that market not drilled the scientists and professionals. Only pay attention in science everything can be solve he said. I am optimist any top problems it can be solve Gates added. In his lecture, there are problem in the world such as diarrhea, pneumonia and malaria that decrease time in time.

On the other hand, Gates had questions, firstly, how do stop the deadly disease that is spread by mosquitoes? According to Gates, mosquitoes bite at night and had epidemic since thousand years. To decrease this diseases he explained by killing mosquitoes with DDT chemical. In statistic, malaria rapidly spread of the world that it 200 people had suffered, He added. Secondly, how do make a teacher great? Gates concerned about education. By his organization he had helped many people in the world to pursue of their future with scholarship and financial support. He admitted that he had great teacher even though he drop out from college. Gates talked that having great teacher is the key and he added to increase impact of diseased should be more involved by mathematician, social science and another scholar.

In the end of his lecture, he said that he optimistic people can study this things and everybody need to be more involved and help come up to the solution.

Source: TED, Februari 2009

Writing Feedback / Being social makes us happier, healthier and we live longer than people who are less connected. [3]

What makes a good life? Lessons from the longest study on happiness

Life is too short sometime we climb from bottom to the top, sometime turning opposite direction. Life teach about relationship so keep happier and healthier. Robert Waldinger by his big lesson talked about relationships which social connection. Social connection to communities, to friends are happier, healthier and they live longer than people who was less connected.

Based on his research, more happily man or women even their physical pain but their mood just still happy. However the people who unhappy relationship reported their physical pain by more emotional pain. This explanation good for us that is relationship good in health.

To sum up human need connected each other. It is practical endless. A good life is build good relationship, he ended his speech.

source: youtube.com/watch?v=8KkKuTCFvzI

Writing Feedback / Writing Task 2: There are two factors entertainment editors that it should decide to advertise [2]

There are two factors entertainment editors that it should decide to advertise on TV or print news in magazine. In this essay I has divide in two statements are capital and media interest that is influence of news editorial member to broadcast news. On the other hand I suggest the media would be better to produce a good report.

Broadcasting has change since Guttenberg invented printing in Europe. Yet, TV also have many advantages to spread information at society in latest century. However, nowadays, mass media such us TV and newspaper are ideologist and capitalistic now. Some Medias are reported depend on their owner want. The editor cannot independently because boss media has forced their freedom. Television and radio of this example, there always produce advertisement that it related to owner interest. On the other hand, capital resources can contribute the media existence such as amount of printing and video shooting, operational vehicle and qualified human resources as reporter and so on. Finally capital and interest of media has essential factor that it is influenced editor.

On the other hand, I believe that positive news better than negative report. Media such internet, television, newspaper and radio is responsible to educate people by reporting news. Sadly, some people agreed that media have great bad impact to influence people such kids or teenagers. Some media advertise of their product without moral obligation and uneducated. They sacrificed of their ideology for material reason. In example, media that content are provocation, sex

bias, criminal, and radicalism. Finally, for these reason, I agree that media should release of positive news.

In conclusion, I believe that capital and media interest has responsible of editor decision. Also I agree that media should produce of good news.

Writing Feedback / The brief life of Circus from ancient world in Romans [4]

The circus is one of the oldest forms of entertainment. History of circus started in ancient romans around sixth century B.C. chariot races were more popular and also gladiator fights and display of exotic animals like elephants and tigers. Over time the site was permanently retired and entertainment was reduced to small bands of travelling performers and animal trainers. However, the circus survive to make a return to its former grandeur in the eighteenth century.

On the other hand, during the late 1700s, an Englishman named Philip Ashley founded the first modern circus. We was skilled rider who invented stunt riding on horseback. He performed in a circus ring and expanded his act to clowns, acrobats, and parade of trained animals.

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Writing Feedback / Happiness is not only related to economic success, yet the social and psychology aspect is important [2]

Many people think that happiness is through to economic success. On the other hand, some people support the opinion that happiness caused by many factors. This essay is going to explain two statement and I give my own opinion.

It is commonly believe that personal happiness is depend on financial support. Financial is indicating with money and large of land. Almost all problem can solve problem by money. Some people saying that many accounts in bank and have big salary are symbolize of happiness. Rich people have many advantages when they have more financial base such as have purchase some cars, homes and shops. In urban community for example, rich people represent with a luxury with if they live in flat, apartment, and palace. On the other hand, people having car and eating in luxury place caused by financing support. In addition, land is essential in rural community

However, another people believe that happiness not only economic factor but also many factors. There are social, culture, psychology factors there some essential items by going happier. Nowadays, networking, trust, being love are vital in social and culture. It looks at some people have good relation with another in business, education and so on. However, family time, travel and need for achievement are related to in psychology. People believe that have quality time and holiday with family will support mentally health.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that statement happiness directly not only related to economic success but also many factors such as social and psychology aspect.

Writing Feedback / The old map shows no buildings and any other facilities on this area, except the beach and palms. [2]

Writing Task 1: The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facility

The maps shows an area which is provided by travel accommodations previous until after construction that length 100 meters. Overall, previous, the land looked mostly undeveloped that shown trees and beach. Soon after construction, the land developed by variety of facilities.

Based on information on map that looked in previous land look no existing building and other facilities except beach and plant. The layout will prospect in the future that build several public facilities. In On the other hand, after construction there no longer space. Yet, the land replaced by accommodation such as restaurant, public space and road, and leisure. Whereas, the layout shows which was installed by water sport and swimming area near by the beach include boat as well. While cottage built in two places and road trough along restaurant, receptionist and peer. However, coconut tress existed along building. Interestingly, the land used in left side while the right side existed in more trees.

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Writing Feedback / Find out the peripheral vision in sport [3]

Sometime we simply tolerate the blur. It is important to pay attention to the blur that surrounds the point where we have focused our vision. Athletes, for example must be keenly aware of what is happening all around them. An athlete's performance not only depends on physic but also visual training ability.

On the other hand, the environment also contributes to athlete's visual sharpness such as contrasting court background, adequate lighting, and non-confusing uniform color combinations and less off-court motion. It is that caches the athlete's attention as they gather a quick view of focused on detail. As result the eyes move in and out of focus, there is a blur between each pause.