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|Technology Vs Traditional skills and Way of life
Writing Feedbackmaryam2900 - Aug 25, 2011 / violetkau1 - Jun 16, 2013
|Let's protect our Earth; Effects of Global Warming
5 - 1. "Serious and dangerous" are already implied if not directly stated. 2. The word "this" doesn't mean...
Writing Feedbackrozha - Jun 14, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jun 16, 2013
|I always dreamed of being a doctor
Writing Feedbackenglishlover - Jun 14, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jun 16, 2013
|Ielts: Changes in women's position in society cause juvenile deliquency
4 - Thank you, Sopha but the second sentence in the introduction is my thesis statement. I had better add some...
Writing FeedbackMisterWandering - Jun 15, 2013 / MisterWandering - Jun 15, 2013
|Students are the people who get knowledge from teachers in classroom and laboratory.
3 - These are the places where students gain knowledge and wisdom. This knowledge is necessary for...
Writing Feedbackgangadhar - Jun 15, 2013 / dumi - Jun 15, 2013
|IELTS: Should we experiment on animals?
Writing FeedbackDHuong - Jun 15, 2013 / dumi - Jun 15, 2013
|IELTS task2 : How should visitors behave when they travel in other countries?
3 - Thanx v.much for the feedback ,,do you think any part of this is not related to the main topic...
Writing Feedbackmedoo - Jun 14, 2013 / medoo - Jun 15, 2013
|Human Trafficking is a process that forces people to act against their will!
Writing Feedbackreem19 - Nov 17, 2012 / rozha - Jun 15, 2013
|IELTS: Young people today have more power & influence than previous generations
3 - .... your sentences are pretty incomplete. You also need to have a logical flow of ideas. First, technological...
Writing Feedbackgrb18 - Jun 13, 2013 / Pahan - Jun 15, 2013
|Increasing a number of students are choosing to study abroad
6 - On the other hand, studying abroad is not always beneficial. or even you can say; On the other...
Writing Feedbacknguyenngoc - May 31, 2013 / Pahan - Jun 15, 2013
|Selecting a career is not an easy thing; How do you choose your career?
5 - Thank Dumi....
Writing Feedbackrozha - Jun 13, 2013 / rozha - Jun 15, 2013
|IELTS-Smoking kills and hence should be banned!
5 - ... I wish you said this a bit differently; Furthermore, smoking freely in public places may set a...
Writing FeedbackArezuF - Jun 6, 2013 / Pahan - Jun 15, 2013
|"I'm not going to lie, I'm a liar" - my best lie yet is lying about lying
Writing Feedbacktrilam153 - Jun 14, 2013 / dumi - Jun 15, 2013
|Formal exams and Course Assignments; Which is better to assess students?
6 - Thanks Dummi and all for your correction and your useful feedback! I will take it into account and revise...
Writing Feedbacklilythuy2289 - Jun 9, 2013 / lilythuy2289 - Jun 15, 2013
|STOP BULLYING - Argumentive Essay
5 - Yes, it's only you can delete your posts. Since you have already got comments from others including moderators,...
Writing FeedbackAlexRomero - May 28, 2013 / dumi - Jun 15, 2013
|An short essay - ways and reasons why people are escaping from the reality.
Writing Feedbackmichi555 - Jun 14, 2013 / dumi - Jun 15, 2013
|IELTS; Write a complain letter to manager about mobile phone is not working
Writing Feedbackmraheel - May 29, 2013 / Pahan - Jun 14, 2013
|IELTS: Advertisements make us waste money, or make our life easier?
7 - I think ah_zafari is right. When it's agree or disagree, you have to go by your opinion only. If...
Writing FeedbackShumaila86 - Jun 13, 2013 / Pahan - Jun 14, 2013
|[Task 1] Graph indicating the composition of transportations
Writing FeedbackAvencast - May 31, 2013 / dumi - Jun 14, 2013
|"Don't confuse money with happiness! "Money and Happiness
4 - Veronicacowen69 thank you. But as a no-native speaker, I could not find some errors in your essays. sogeily...
Writing Feedbackazulrongjie - Jun 10, 2013 / azulrongjie - Jun 14, 2013
|A 100 feet walk through a street of India
Writing Feedbacknikhil123 - Jun 2, 2013 / rozha - Jun 14, 2013
|Traveling broadens one's perspectives
Writing Feedbackjole - Jun 10, 2013 / jole - Jun 14, 2013
|The role of teacher in modern society
Writing FeedbackAllinaa - Jun 5, 2013 / rozha - Jun 14, 2013
|IMPACT OF VIOLENT MOVIES ON CHILDREN: introduction
4 - First, violent movies can have negative influence on children's behavior. ... this one is too...
Writing Feedbackchrisredfii - Jun 4, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|How violent movies impact on young children?
3 - First, you should type a meaningful topic under the subject field when you open a new thread. It's an...
Writing Feedbackduchuy1809 - Jun 1, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|IELTS To what extent should economic planning be influenced by the need of environmen
3 - .... concerning & bothering give a redundant feeling to the reader.; Nowadays, protecting environment is one of the...
Writing Feedbackpatleaxly - Jun 9, 2013 / Pahan - Jun 13, 2013
|TOEFL; There are three main reasons why people attend college or university
4 - People usually have themselves enrolled with these institutions for several reasons. .... better you link it...
Writing FeedbackDionisio - Jun 12, 2013 / Pahan - Jun 13, 2013
|IELTS: Too much emphasis on examinations
Writing Feedbacknellylovekelly - Jun 5, 2013 / Pahan - Jun 13, 2013
|University education is necessary for success in today's world. Agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbacktruongnhunhan - May 21, 2013 / chrisredfii - Jun 13, 2013
|Teaching children how to be good members in society is parents or school role ?
Writing FeedbackTareko - Jun 10, 2013 / Pahan - Jun 13, 2013
|IELTS: Alternative medicine can be dangerous?
4 - However, there are still people who believe in alternate medicines and also rely on them. .......
Writing FeedbackNewUser - Jun 4, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|Fast-pace lifestyle makes people pay more attention on making money than maintaining a healthy body
Writing FeedbackBaicheng - Jun 4, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|Balance between both indoor and outdoor activities as they both are essential
8 - .... I agree with ArezuF ... redundancy makes your essay boring. Like every person, children too...
Writing FeedbackArezuF - Jun 5, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|IELTS- Languages die every year......... Is this a positive trend?
Writing FeedbackBaicheng - Jun 6, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|TV is dangerous for family bonds; Do you agree?
2 - TV has become a serious threat to family bonds because it affects adversely on communication between family members....
Writing Feedbacknguyenngoc - Jun 13, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|Europe, America and Asia; The holiday of a lifetime
2 - .... honeymoon is referred to a vacation spent together by a newly wedded couple... is that what you...
Writing Feedbacksmudla95 - Jun 12, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|ADVERTISING ; Useless & Useful depending on individual perceptions
Writing Feedbackrozha - Jun 12, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|Earning capacity of successful SPORTS professionals Vs OTHER professionals
3 - I think you definitely need to double check this for grammatical errors; there are a fair amount of blantant[i][/i]...
Writing Feedbackdragosp - Jun 12, 2013 / marecrowley - Jun 12, 2013
|How should girls and boys study? Should they attend separate schools?
2 - These lines do not have much relevance to your essay. In the introduction you are supposed to introduce...
Writing Feedbackgangadhar - Jun 12, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|IELTS task 2: Inclusion of Competitive sports in the school curriculum.
2 - I disagree with this argument and wish to discuss the advantages of inclusion of sports in the school...
Writing FeedbackShumaila86 - Jun 12, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|When I was younger, I began keeping a journal/ Attitude towards writing
3 - Thanks :)...
Writing Feedbackashleynicole - Jun 10, 2013 / ashleynicole - Jun 12, 2013
|City vs countryside (essay by 8th grader in Norway)
3 - Hi What's the purpose of this writing? Is it a term paper? Or answers to a few questions? .......
Writing FeedbackJeruTheBuilder - Jun 3, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|Parents should encourage their children learn a secondary language as soon as possible
3 - ... start sentences with capital letters even during your practice sessions. It's a healthy habit and also less...
Writing Feedbackjemmy - Jun 3, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|The excessive usage of social networkings
3 - There are many more social networks, in fact EF is also one of them. However, Facebook and Twitter...
Writing Feedbackanggittas - May 25, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|college and university should be available for all students or only to good students
4 - Nowadays, many people look forward to receiving a degree from university or college to acquire more in depth...
Writing FeedbackHabib Rastegar - May 25, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|Compare the advantages and disadvantages of establishing a new university in your own
Writing FeedbackHabib Rastegar - May 24, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents job
3 - I guess you are preparing for IELTS or TOEFL. It's better that you mention the purpose of your writing...
Writing Feedbackrobotics - Jun 11, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|Share the Dorm or Choose my own Roommate
5 - You seem to have a fair understanding about the essay structure. However, you need to include specific examples in...
Writing FeedbackHabib Rastegar - May 22, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|IELTS: Is it fair that sportmen earn far more money than doctors and teachers?
5 - First of all, they need to commit themselves and make many sacrifices, both physically and emotionally, in order...
Writing Feedbackkayo1996 - Jun 10, 2013 / dumi - Jun 11, 2013
|IELTS ; Is travelling around the world a good thing?
3 - Some people think it is a good way of spending time because it helps people explore new things....
Writing FeedbackAslanbek - Jun 11, 2013 / dumi - Jun 11, 2013
|IELTS: Arranged Marriage vs Love Marraige / Discuss both systems
2 - Hi Lady Elle, I think the below essay need minor correction which I have highlighted below. In my...
Writing FeedbackLady Elle - Jun 10, 2013 / davesh82 - Jun 10, 2013
|IELTS TASK 1: Heart Attacks by Age & Gender ; Chart information
2 - A glance at the bar graph provided reveals the information about frequency of heart attacks of US. male and...
Writing FeedbackLeeHyoRi89 - Jun 5, 2013 / jole - Jun 10, 2013
|"No way out?"; Explain what this quote means
2 - Has there ever been a time in your life when you have feltfeel hopeless and vulnerable, experienced the forlorn...
Writing Feedbacklindatong - Jun 7, 2013 / runkirby - Jun 10, 2013
|Event planning is a relatively new career field; Event planning as a career
Writing Feedbackeventzkaze - Jun 7, 2013 / eventzkaze - Jun 10, 2013
|The Mozart Effect - citing references
Writing Feedbackwhitknee - Jun 5, 2013 / cutierlb - Jun 9, 2013
|Now day's crime is increasing. Why is this happening? What can government do?
Writing Feedbackankush - Feb 21, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jun 9, 2013
|Need help in evaluating my Analytical Writing. GRE
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Jun 9, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jun 9, 2013
|GRE Analytical writing; Letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner
2 - This isn't a lower-half response, but I'm afraid that (as is the case with most test takers) you haven't...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Jun 9, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jun 9, 2013
|GRE; Blogosphere & Social media Vs Quality of political discoure in the US
2 - You did raise some really nice points in your essay and acknowledged both sides of the the argument. However,...
Writing Feedbacktaanyakhare2312 - May 27, 2013 / shadman19922 - Jun 9, 2013
|My dog spoke to me! Essay for a writing contest
2 - that was wonderful MAN... hats off... your age and your narration. vocabulary was more than enough. how excited i...
Writing FeedbackJoanne123 - Jun 9, 2013 / temptprovidence - Jun 9, 2013
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