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|IELTS TASK2:Shopping as a replacement of hobbies and other leisure activities.
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Jul 12, 2013 / gmad06 - Jul 14, 2013
|understand the most important characteristics of a society = study of major cities
Writing Feedbackatabati - Jul 14, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jul 14, 2013
|People do many different things to stay healthy. 'not skip our breakfast'
6 - This essay (along with the well-intended comments that accompany it) is a mess. Reread the prompt. Unless I'm...
Writing Feedbackrozha - Jul 14, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jul 14, 2013
|The influence of the internet has done more harm than good
6 - Well... I think you are pretty strong with grammar. However, you need to improve on vocabulary. If you don't...
Writing FeedbackDW6789 - Jul 10, 2013 / dumi - Jul 14, 2013
|Children's work at a early age - beneficial or a threat ?
3 - .... don't open your essay with sentences like these. Try to introduce your topic with more meaningful sentences....
Writing Feedbackninaaxtopol - Jul 13, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 14, 2013
|IELTS: Money for: successful sports professionals vs other important professions
Writing Feedbackfred123 - Jul 13, 2013 / KamilG - Jul 14, 2013
|What is the responsibility of an educational institution?
Writing FeedbackSulli - Jul 11, 2013 / Sulli - Jul 14, 2013
|TOEFL; Food is now easier to prepare than ever; Specific reasons & examples
7 - I'd recommend you to express your idea in the following way ...The enormous chain of the fast...
Writing Feedbackrozha - Jul 11, 2013 / SemehenM - Jul 14, 2013
|In this materialistic world only people who earn a lot of money are considered succesful
Writing FeedbackLakshani08 - Jul 13, 2013 / rozha - Jul 14, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: GOVERNMENTS SHOULD BAN CIGARETTES AND OTHER TOBACCO PRODUCTS
5 - I guess there is no harm in including your position in the introduction. It affirms which stance you...
Writing Feedbackldlsky03 - Jul 13, 2013 / dumi - Jul 14, 2013
|Teachers should not encourage the children to think in the same way
4 - Thanks a lot...
Writing FeedbackSemehenM - Jul 13, 2013 / SemehenM - Jul 14, 2013
|SAT: Do changes that make life easier not necessarily make them better?
8 - ... be a bit more descriptive.... may be people have forgotten the details of WW2 :D ...lol the...
Writing Feedbacksamilli - Jul 10, 2013 / dumi - Jul 14, 2013
|academic writing course "compare social science and natural since"
4 - However, which science, natural or social , could claim to be the one that makes more meaningful contributions...
Writing Feedbackindividuum - Jul 11, 2013 / dumi - Jul 14, 2013
|Is it important that young people should know about history of their country?
2 - You need to express your view on this statement .Do you think it's importantfor them to learn history?...
Writing FeedbackChristen - Jul 13, 2013 / dumi - Jul 14, 2013
|TOEFL Essay-Movies should present positive values. Y or N ?
7 - It is better to use First,... and in the next passage - Second,... or Firstly and Secondly but not...
Writing Feedbackguy2010 - Jul 12, 2013 / SemehenM - Jul 13, 2013
|IELTS T2: In what ways has technology affected the types of relationship people make?
5 - On the other hand, technology can impact negatively on relationships between people. The rapid growth of...
Writing Feedbacknancy07 - Jul 11, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 12, 2013
|GRE Analyze an argument; Child-rearing traditions in Tertia
6 - Don't stop practicing! However, you are right that you shouldn't do so "mindlessly." Millions of kids (not that...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Jul 10, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jul 12, 2013
|Any means can be taken to attain a worthy goal;GRE Issue
Writing FeedbackGREASPI - Jul 9, 2013 / dumi - Jul 12, 2013
|TOEFL Essay about value life experience
6 - Thank you...
Writing FeedbackSemehenM - Jul 12, 2013 / SemehenM - Jul 12, 2013
|TOEFL - Do you like comfortable living or large amount of money?
4 - .... by changing the order, you can improve its flow and align your writing better with your topic;...
Writing Feedbackrozha - Jul 12, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 12, 2013
|Research Report three hostels in Sydney
2 - You better start with introducing the city and its connection to hostels; Sydney, the capital of Australia is...
Writing Feedbackmrbin - Jul 11, 2013 / dumi - Jul 12, 2013
|Living with Family vs. Living in dormitory While Studying in the University
3 - Thanks. It is not for TOEFL. it was an assignment.Well, i never wrote a good paragraph.And when i joined...
Writing Feedbackpositive thinkr - Jul 11, 2013 / positive thinkr - Jul 12, 2013
|Benefit of supermarket and how it affects on small buisness
4 - In conclusion., supermarkets and small shops collectively have a great role in our daily life, government should have such...
Writing Feedbackrozha - Jul 11, 2013 / rozha - Jul 12, 2013
|TOEFL/ Do you agree that professional athletes deserve high salaries ?
8 - .... "show up" or "appear". As April April suggested, "appear" sounds better. get involved with many...
Writing Feedbackelan - Jul 11, 2013 / dumi - Jul 12, 2013
|TOEFL- How people's behavior is influenced by TV and movies?
4 - There are many mistakes in your essay . I suggest you shoud make your sentences short , easy to...
Writing FeedbackErgenekon - Jul 11, 2013 / yucky - Jul 12, 2013
|IELTS 'do everything by rules'; children learn to be good members of society
6 - I think you should learn some basic grammars ~ it seems that you wanna write some long sentences, but...
Writing Feedbackzzwestmanzz - Jul 10, 2013 / guy2010 - Jul 12, 2013
|TOEFL Essay-Professional athletes do not deserve the high salaries Y or N?
5 - WOW I'm practicing this article too. I like your article! It's skillful! Strong structure and explicit explanation!(far better...
Writing Feedbackguy2010 - Jul 11, 2013 / elan - Jul 12, 2013
|Toefl: more important to work at a job that you enjoy than to earn a lot of money
8 - Well you can even do your own assessment with the insights provided by their TOEFL official website; ets.org/Media/Tests/TOEFL/pdf/ibt_writing_sample_responses.pdf...
Writing Feedbackeden68 - Jul 8, 2013 / dumi - Jul 11, 2013
|<TOEFL> Is it good to have students employed?
Writing Feedbackicarusfly - Jul 11, 2013 / rozha - Jul 11, 2013
|TOEFL- "A development of more intensive ways to exploit the natural environment"
7 - Well.... I don't think that you really need to worry about complex vocab structure.... this is a pretty...
Writing Feedbackwestside9 - Jul 10, 2013 / dumi - Jul 11, 2013
|ielts task 2: do we should exclude males and females from certain jobs?
Writing Feedbackmangdoli - Jul 10, 2013 / dumi - Jul 11, 2013
|TOEFL; Nowadays, dependence on neighbors is much less compared to previous eras
Writing Feedbackaxn1118 - Jul 11, 2013 / dumi - Jul 11, 2013
|IELTS TASK2:things learned by children from watching tv and movies
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Jul 10, 2013 / xueweinian - Jul 11, 2013
|IELTS: solve growing traffic and pollution problems - people's awareness
Writing Feedbacknancy07 - Jul 10, 2013 / nancy07 - Jul 11, 2013
|IELTS；The power of advertising or consumers` demand.
4 - ... you have too many spelling mistakes throughout your essay. Be careful about it! I feel you should...
Writing Feedbackxueweinian - Jul 9, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 10, 2013
|'cultural homogenization'; Effects of increasing tourism in different countries
6 - ... well... it is the technological advancement and not the globalization effects that had caused a decline...
Writing Feedbacktroublehappy - Jul 10, 2013 / dumi - Jul 10, 2013
|Studying alone is a best fit for my life. It allows me to freely choose the convenient time to study
Writing Feedbackholylua - Jul 9, 2013 / holylua - Jul 10, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: I think it is worth being a celebrity in spite of the problems
3 - Introduction is confusing and unbalanced.You were mentioning some examples of problems being a celebrity and nothing on its benefits....
Writing Feedbackyirunli - Jul 9, 2013 / gmad06 - Jul 10, 2013
|There are many types of friendships; Friendships Classification Paragraph
Writing FeedbackLizzaanna - Jul 9, 2013 / Lizzaanna - Jul 9, 2013
|IELTS ESSAY TASK 2: Some jobs are better done by men and others by women.
3 - ... some careers better suite a particular gender. Although there are valid reasons to justify this...
Writing Feedbackldlsky03 - Jul 9, 2013 / dumi - Jul 9, 2013
|Adult Education; Bar chart and pie chart illustrations
Writing Feedbackyucky - Jul 8, 2013 / yucky - Jul 9, 2013
|IELTS: agricultural land becomes less productive; Worldwide land degradation
4 - Thank you Dumi and Pahan for your valuable comments! Both of you have helped me improve my writing a...
Writing FeedbackMisterWandering - Jul 8, 2013 / MisterWandering - Jul 9, 2013
|GRE - ISSUE ESSAY; Do we need ceremonies & rituals to define ourselves?
Writing Feedbackptejas40 - Jul 9, 2013 / ptejas40 - Jul 9, 2013
|Parents have numerous influences to teach us what to do
6 - ...you can present this idea more strongly; Secondly, the parents do not leave us when we are in...
Writing Feedbackaxn1118 - Jul 7, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 9, 2013
|IELTS task 1; male and female fitness membership @ fitness center
Writing Feedbackm_q8 - Jul 4, 2013 / mangdoli - Jul 9, 2013
|IELTS Academic Writing Task 1 : Adult Education (Pie graphs)
4 - In introductory paragraph, you should paraphrase the sentences. For example: show=illustrate=indicate=point out... If you copy the instruction of the...
Writing Feedbackkokett - Jul 4, 2013 / mangdoli - Jul 9, 2013
|TOEFL; High paid insecure jobs VS low paid secure jobs - Which option is better?
Writing Feedbacksherry manson - Jul 3, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 9, 2013
|IELTS; Do you agree to making unpaid community service compulsory in schools?
Writing FeedbackHayleyyy - Jul 3, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 9, 2013
|IELTS ; Job satisfaction and individual well being / What factors& How realistic ?
Writing Feedbackdido272000 - Jul 7, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 9, 2013
|IELTS TASK2:Should driving be taught at school?
10 - hi pahan and dumi...thanks for the feedback.. it is my pleasure..yes I think that would be a...
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Jul 1, 2013 / gmad06 - Jul 8, 2013
|IELTS TASK2:who should take care of the elderly,family or professionals?
10 - thanks dumi :)...
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Jun 25, 2013 / gmad06 - Jul 8, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: Fixed or variable punishment for crimes
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Jul 2, 2013 / gmad06 - Jul 8, 2013
|Nations should pass laws in order to preserve nature; GRE/ Analyze an issue
6 - ... actually, this is better termed as "echo tourism" which is based on supporting conservation efforts of tourism....
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Jun 24, 2013 / dumi - Jul 8, 2013
|education is important in the development of the country. Discuss.
4 - I think others have provided you good suggestions for your essay content. This is my suggestion for your essay...
Writing Feedbackminnie then - Jul 8, 2013 / dumi - Jul 8, 2013
|Understanding Who we are! ; SAT Essay
Writing Feedbackkazure14 - Jul 6, 2013 / wzncx - Jul 8, 2013
|Health budget should allocate more funds for medical technology or health education?
4 - .... yes you are right. let's say the same idea a bit differently; First, there are many adverse...
Writing Feedbacktu_phinh - Jul 8, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 8, 2013
|Why tracing family history become popular and it is a negative trend
6 - Ok....then I would suggest you to read the following essays. They follow this structure very well. Also, by reading...
Writing Feedbackymin8957 - Jul 7, 2013 / dumi - Jul 8, 2013
|Can a child be taught talents or he is born with talents?
6 - I think your essay is too short. You should give more details, examples, rather than just use reasoning to...
Writing Feedbackdido272000 - Jul 1, 2013 / caozeyuan - Jul 8, 2013
|Are Technology and Tradition incompatible? ; TOEFL
Writing Feedbackcaozeyuan - Jul 7, 2013 / caozeyuan - Jul 8, 2013
|Should elder people live in nursing houses or stay with their family members?
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