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|IELTS Task 1 : Hours of leisure time per year in Someland
5 - I suggest you to take this line after introduction and present it as the overview (have a look...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 27, 2014 / dumi - Mar 5, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of en
2 - Well, I think you need to have an overview after the introduction. Overview is an important feature in report...
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|TOEFL; Classroom learnng vs online education - Which is better?
5 - You need to include a specific example for every reason you use to justify your position. So, my...
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|Essay For Toefl: With the help of technology student can learn more information
4 - First of all thank you for your quick and informative reply. I honestly never thought I will get response...
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|Some are born with talents and others not; Discuss!
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|IELTS Writing - Argument - "Is country music more important than the International Music"
5 - Hi Srkrishnan, In my personal view you have good range of vocabulary and many point with supporting examples, however...
Writing FeedbackSrkrishnan - Feb 28, 2014 / Arun0506 - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Graduates should be advised to do a second degree
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 27, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 4, 2014
|TASK 1 population in yemen and italy
Writing FeedbackPurwati Ayu - Feb 27, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS Writing task 1 - Interpreting survey data on Adult (Higher/Executive) Education.
Writing FeedbackSrkrishnan - Feb 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS, Change look is good or not?
4 - ... wrong grammar - "when compared"/ "in contrast of" Today the general attitude towards one's appearance is very...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|(IELTs) Should developing countries concentrate on industry or education?
Writing FeedbackkridUessay - Mar 2, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS; Changing look is good or not?
6 - ... there is no problem in terms of grammar or presentation of this sentence. However, I feel it...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|Movies and television changing the way that we entertain; big influence
Writing FeedbackVanthai - Mar 3, 2014 / mariasultana - Mar 4, 2014
|University student should stay away from their parents in most country; Agree or Disagree?
3 - It is good to include your purpose (TOEFL, IELTS, GRE etc.) in the title itself so that others would...
Writing FeedbackKARNIK - Mar 3, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|TOPic : Long distance flights use more fuel than cars & pollute the environment!
11 - Secondly reduction in number of vehicle is a remarkable way to cut average liters of petrol used by aper...
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|WHAT IMPORTANT SKILL A PERSON MUST HAVE TO BE SUCCESSFUL - TOEFL ESSAY EVALUTION
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 3, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Freedom of speech in a free society
5 - Very good introduction - good structure, ideas, vocabulary :) I feel this is a good suggestion....
Writing Feedbackvynguyen - Mar 1, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTs - Voluntary community service fulfils the purpose of education
3 - First, I want to request you to select the right forum when you open a new thread. For IELTS,...
Writing Feedbackvynguyen - Mar 3, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS; Should we spend our lives doing the same things and avoiding changes?
2 - Use space after comma ( FIRST LINE) - In this electronic age, advanced technology and modernized world has imposed...
Writing Feedbackangel8713 - Mar 3, 2014 / sandipsinh - Mar 3, 2014
|Money for space exploration? Government should spent more on space research
3 - A closer look at the intro: Space exploration has become a debatable issue:I don't think this is a...
Writing Feedbackangel8713 - Mar 1, 2014 / eddies - Mar 3, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: WOMEN'S RIGHT TO CHOOSE PROFESSION
2 - "logical thinking" is a noun phrase while a adjective phrase is "physically stronger". those phrase are not equivalent...
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Mar 2, 2014 / Vanthai - Mar 3, 2014
|IELTS, EXTREME SPORT, WHY KEEPING IT AND HOW RISK COULD BE MINIMIZED?
2 - This needs more clarity. Your opening sentence should hook your reader and therefore you should present it in...
Writing Feedbackagi - Mar 3, 2014 / dumi - Mar 3, 2014
|ACADEMIC WRITING Nuclear Energy: Boon or Bane?
2 - I read the essay, Critiquing it for and against needs to be done in a systematic manner. In the...
Writing Feedbackvincere - Feb 28, 2014 / jennifer2000 - Mar 3, 2014
|About Technology Effect
NEW - " Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology." " In what ways...
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|Pros or cons of mobile phone; contribution to society cannot be underestimated
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|IELTS; Rubbish created by humans today is a worldwide issue!
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|IELTS, nowadays it is more difficult to concentrate or pay attention in school.
7 - You have had very great commentaries :) Here are a few details to work with your concluding paragraph...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 13, 2014 / eddies - Mar 3, 2014
|IELTS;More & more people are relying on private cars as their major means of transport
4 - You write well. However, it is nicer if you could construct the concluding paragraph with this following structure:...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 12, 2014 / eddies - Mar 3, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : The IELTS Score In Four Different Countries
3 - It seems that you just use the same sentence structure in your two body paragraphs. Also, your ideas need...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 28, 2014 / MisterWandering - Mar 2, 2014
|IELTS, One year off after secondary school and before starting university.
3 - :((((((((...
Writing Feedbackagi - Mar 1, 2014 / agi - Mar 2, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: distance education to classroom-based education ?
4 - I totally agree with kridUessay. Your essay is very good if something are added, such as supporting ideas. ...
Writing FeedbackNinamar - Feb 28, 2014 / nightmare2k - Mar 1, 2014
|IELTS: Wealthy nations among poorer nations; 'level of export'
Writing Feedbackeddies - Feb 26, 2014 / xsimio - Feb 28, 2014
|International sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions
2 - i think that you should add adjective to intensify your meaning. Be more specific if you can. For...
Writing Feedbackmariasultana - Feb 27, 2014 / agi - Feb 28, 2014
|IELTS TASK II : Born talents or Experiences - which is the major influence?
7 - hy, Pahan. As far as I am feel, many comments before give me correction technically.what I want...
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|It is astonishing that people keep in circling in their comfort zone and avoid life variation
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 26, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 27, 2014
|STRICKLY ENGLISH (Article re-write)
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 22, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 27, 2014
|IELTS: some actions should be taken to preserve the endangered languages
Writing FeedbackWendyli - Feb 25, 2014 / tiaDS - Feb 27, 2014
|Many people oppose changes, yet those changes make's big differences; moving or?
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 24, 2014 / dumi - Feb 27, 2014
|UNIFORM TO WEAR OR NOT TO WEAR?
6 - What I found worked best under a graduation gown. Is a dress you wont necessarily be able to see....
Writing Feedback98_IIG - Oct 20, 2013 / siamesefox - Feb 27, 2014
|Some people argue that it is more importsnt to have enjoyable job that to earn a lot.
6 - Pay attention to what Pahan suggested above. Yes, it is always better you conclude your intro with a statement...
Writing Feedbacknigulina - Feb 24, 2014 / dumi - Feb 27, 2014
|Let's make mineral soup..........
4 - yep.... now understand what your task expects. :) However, as Pahan also had some concerns above, I too...
Writing FeedbackDuave - Feb 26, 2014 / dumi - Feb 27, 2014
|Its Hard to say Goobye
3 - Pay attention what Pahan suggested to you :) sheShe had Bowel Cancer, but she never told anyonetill about a...
Writing Feedbackmgurl101 - Feb 26, 2014 / dumi - Feb 27, 2014
|Paid work must be appreciated but it must be good for children's health and mind
5 - In many under developed countries, poverty is the biggest problem and people cannot afford basic needs of life such...
Writing Feedbackmariasultana - Feb 25, 2014 / dumi - Feb 27, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2 : About Overweight
2 - In your first paragraph you should make it clear what you want to say in the following paragraph, in...
Writing Feedbackehaforyou - Feb 27, 2014 / nightmare2k - Feb 27, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: The best way to improve public health- increasing sports facilities?
4 - Moreover, improving sports facilities may motivate more and more people to take care of their health and fitness because...
Writing FeedbackSerapke - Feb 25, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 27, 2014
|Graduates from coeducational schools are more likely to integrate into the real life effortlessly
4 - Where is your opinion? It is always good to conclude an intro stating your opinion clearly if the...
Writing Feedbackanselzhang - Feb 26, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 26, 2014
|Toefl - essay evaluation - Many subject learning is better or specializing in one subject
2 - which can be availed.... "avail" may not be the best word for this idea. My suggestion; Knowledge is...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 26, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS TASK2: WHY DO YOU NEED MUSIC?
Writing FeedbackPhuong Thao - Feb 26, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 26, 2014
|What is Love? What does it mean to you?
3 - Why not keep this in present tense? Of course we need love today and also tomorrow :D Therefore,...
Writing Feedbackjordandhale - Feb 26, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 26, 2014
|Toefl evalution - Impact of television on children
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 25, 2014 / sandipsinh - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: WHO DECIDE TO CHOOSE SUBJECT FOR CHILDREN
4 - It is nicer if you could construct this into: 1. a 'conclusion' signal: In conclusion, ....etc, 2. a...
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Feb 25, 2014 / eddies - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS Being a volunteer in the community is not rare among high school students
Writing FeedbackWendyli - Feb 24, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: advantages and disadvantages of working mother
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 23, 2014 / eddies - Feb 26, 2014
|Internet advantages and disadvantages.
4 - Using internet becamehas become an indispensable part of life for many people.However, some people think that it has a...
Writing Feedbacknigulina - Feb 25, 2014 / niesaysi - Feb 26, 2014
|BENEFITS AND DRAWBACKS OF CREDIT CARDS
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Feb 24, 2014 / dumi - Feb 26, 2014
|"Prevention is better than cure". Out of a country's health budget,
9 - In conclusion, it is the duty of governments that they provide better health services as well as educate their...
Writing Feedbackmariasultana - Feb 24, 2014 / mariasultana - Feb 26, 2014
|A paragraph for IELTS: benefits of mobile phones
Writing FeedbackAtakeielts - Feb 23, 2014 / Atakeielts - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS 7 WRITING TASK 2: ARE THE ENTERTAINERS PAID TOO MUCH?
3 - It is common to rouse a debate on whether celebrities deserve their paymentssuch high revenueswhenever we talk about them....
Writing Feedbackanselzhang - Feb 25, 2014 / dumi - Feb 26, 2014
|Every generation has a lot of differences - because problems, technology and ideology surrounded
Writing Feedbackaldebaran - Feb 25, 2014 / niesaysi - Feb 25, 2014
|IELTS TASK II : Distance Education or Classroom-based learning. Agree Disagree
3 - Well, I feel you have some idea about how to construct your introduction. However, you have not sufficiently introduced...
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