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|I grow up in Jiquilpan Michoacán; My New Life
Writing Feedbackoscar cazares - Oct 2, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 11, 2013
|Having fewer languages is a good thing?
9 - .... this section does not convey your idea clearly. I cannot really get what you try to mean...
Writing Feedbackhkahal - Oct 2, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 11, 2013
|Doing the same job for whole life, is it challenging?
2 - As per the human nature , no matter how lucrativeinteresting and well paid th e job is, people may...
Writing Feedbacktishca2013 - Oct 10, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 11, 2013
|[TOEFL] What makes a good neighbor? - Optimistic people
Writing Feedbackyushan - Oct 10, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 10, 2013
|If I had a chance to go back in time, I would like to meet Albert Einstein
Writing Feedbacksomething - Oct 10, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 10, 2013
|My favorite room is my study because it keeps my memories alive!
Writing FeedbackNora_Toxic - Oct 6, 2013 / Nora_Toxic - Oct 10, 2013
|talk about a photograph or painting you have seen that was memorable.
Writing Feedbackmahsa kh - Sep 30, 2013 / dumi - Oct 10, 2013
|Eating at restaurant vs eating at home; Which is better?
4 - "Those who have no time for healthy eating will sooner or later have to find time for illness." -...
Writing Feedbackkrishnadeo - Oct 8, 2013 / krishnadeo - Oct 10, 2013
|IELTS; As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role
3 - What is the reason you try to tell that can justify your position stated in the introduction? I...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Oct 10, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 10, 2013
|IELTS; youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly
3 - These are good starting sentences for your paragraphs... Let's do this on a different approach... I...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Oct 9, 2013 / gmad06 - Oct 9, 2013
|We should look at computers advantages and research to utilize them in a good manner.
6 - Thanks...you will have your turn soon. Just keep on writing and practice proofreading..Cheers....
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Oct 7, 2013 / gmad06 - Oct 9, 2013
|IELTS; Popular events help ease international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions
Writing FeedbackBALOCH - Oct 8, 2013 / BALOCH - Oct 9, 2013
|IELTS - Do the same thing and Avoid Changes; GOOD or BAD?
4 - .... this sentence does not make sense.... I think you have made some typos. Is this what you...
Writing FeedbackWattanhi - Oct 9, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 9, 2013
|Media should present diverse aspects of our life, so like bad guys sometimes live happy
Writing Feedbackjugajoa - Oct 9, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 9, 2013
|Fair view on PROSTITUTION ; Grammar/ Structure
Writing FeedbackPeterdo1988 - Oct 9, 2013 / dumi - Oct 9, 2013
|IELTS; Why do we need music?
5 - To much 'telling the reader' in the essay. Let the essay convey its own ideas through itself. The sentences...
Writing Feedbacknovembernqk - Oct 7, 2013 / OchoCinco85 - Oct 8, 2013
|'solution for world hunger' or ' space exploration'?- Which project do you choose and why?
NEW - Your candid feedback is highly appreciated. Thanks in advance for the help. Prompt: A science laboratory in Britain...
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|IELTS; People who have committed a crime should always be in jail ?
Writing Feedbackjoylabx - Oct 6, 2013 / dumi - Oct 8, 2013
|IELTS ; The only way to guarantee getting a good job is to complete a course of university
Writing FeedbackKjerry - Oct 7, 2013 / dumi - Oct 8, 2013
|The concept "translation" has been changing during the last century; TRANSLATION PROCESS
Writing FeedbackMarina123 - Oct 5, 2013 / joylabx - Oct 8, 2013
|IELTS : What contributes for a GOOD JOB? University education or job experience?
6 - Hi hisho, For me your essay looks monotonous. Your ideas are circling around what is it like to...
Writing Feedbackhisho - Oct 4, 2013 / gmad06 - Oct 7, 2013
|IELTS Writing Task 2 : Modern Technology make parents have no time for their children
Writing Feedbacklilyvn1009 - Oct 3, 2013 / Kjerry - Oct 7, 2013
|You successfully passed a job interview. You are expected to start on November 15, but you
Writing Feedbackfextora - Oct 5, 2013 / dumi - Oct 7, 2013
|Should you start a career or enter university at 18?
2 - good introduction :) ... I guess he would become an experienced worker rather than a qualified...
Writing FeedbackElizabethAsking - Oct 6, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 6, 2013
|Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because
3 - .... this sentence needs improvements in its presentation; To begin with, the world today is becoming closer and...
Writing Feedbackabbas8158 - Oct 2, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 6, 2013
|The fewer language the world have, the more convenient we can live our life
3 - has become / is becoming The numbers of international students coming from overseas for studies are...
Writing Feedbacklilyvn1009 - Oct 4, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 6, 2013
|TOEFL writing 2 essey: Big city vs small town
4 - Let's take your first body paragraph - In body paragraphs you should give reasons to justify your...
Writing Feedbackhosein_g - Oct 5, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 6, 2013
|TOEFL (task II): compare / contrast " learning from book or experience" ?
Writing FeedbackReshaidNasser - Sep 18, 2013 / Nora_Toxic - Oct 6, 2013
|IELTS TASK -2 :- Control over usage of water
Writing Feedbackmirchi1123 - Oct 6, 2013 / dumi - Oct 6, 2013
|IELTS-CAM4-TRAVEL TO AND FROM THE UK AND MOST POPULAR COUNTRIES FOR UK RESIDENTS
Writing FeedbackTraveler - Oct 5, 2013 / dumi - Oct 5, 2013
|successful sport professionals can earn great deal money than people in other ...
Writing Feedbackneosit - Oct 5, 2013 / neosit - Oct 5, 2013
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1:Bar graph/ Asian Elephants
Writing Feedbackhisho - Oct 4, 2013 / Traveler - Oct 5, 2013
|'telephones rank first and television second' - what have a bigger impact in people's life?
Writing Feedbackaster0224 - Oct 4, 2013 / aster0224 - Oct 5, 2013
|IETLS TASK 1; CHARTS on results of a survey of adult education
7 - Thanks for your suggest. I will correct follow you tomorrow. I hope you will help me for correct....
Writing Feedbackbinhpht - Oct 2, 2013 / binhpht - Oct 4, 2013
|task 1- The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land
3 - I see you follow a very good structure. Practice according the same structure for other topics. It flows very...
Writing Feedbackhpatel - Sep 26, 2013 / dumi - Oct 4, 2013
|[TOEFL] Telephones and emails have made personal communication less required
5 - I advise you to use these conectors "Firstly" instead of "To begin with", "Secondly" instead of "Second" because they...
Writing Feedbacksomething - Oct 3, 2013 / Marina123 - Oct 4, 2013
|IELTS:It has been reported that several minority languages become extinct each year.
Writing FeedbackAntonio Lu - Oct 1, 2013 / Antonio Lu - Oct 4, 2013
|IELTS TASK1 THE GRAPH SHOW THE PERCENTAGE OF UK AND INTERNATIONAL STUDENTS GAINING SECON..
Writing Feedbackshin122 - Oct 4, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 4, 2013
|IELTS: Should the government subsidise heavy indsustries to improve economic development?
7 - Well.... For this task you would score on your essay structure too. So, specific reasoning and examples to back...
Writing Feedbackhoseini57 - Sep 21, 2013 / dumi - Oct 4, 2013
|Ielts Essay task 1 : Different forms of entertainment over a five- year period
Writing FeedbackEnglish_Learner - Sep 19, 2013 / shin122 - Oct 3, 2013
|IETLS Proportion of population aged 65 & over; Aging will accelerate after 2030s
3 - All the country present a upward situation. ---> all the coutries presented a upward situation Sweden go upward signally...
Writing FeedbackJIMMY0907 - Sep 25, 2013 / shin122 - Oct 3, 2013
|Should students have to wear uniforms? - Persuasive Essay
3 - .... is this "something so ridiculous" has got anything to do with uniforms? You need to link that...
Writing Feedbackbriancd3 - Sep 25, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 3, 2013
|GRE Issue Essay; All nations should help support the development of a global university
4 - .... I don't see issues with your structure. I think it is well structured and you have presented...
Writing Feedbacknikitabonawate - Sep 28, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 3, 2013
|Technology and Its Effects on Reading and Writing.
Writing Feedbackdarashea - Sep 29, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 3, 2013
|CHEATING IS GOOD AND BAD! (in easy words)
Writing FeedbackLAIBA - Sep 23, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 3, 2013
|Some parents have many obvious similarities and differences; Compare and contrast essay
Writing Feedbackswimmer_chick - Sep 22, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 3, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: Control Over use of Water by Government
3 - "scarcity" is a more appropriate key word to express "less availability" ... I doubt "strata" is...
Writing Feedbackieltsp - Oct 2, 2013 / dumi - Oct 3, 2013
|ielts; examination of education system should be emphasised and implemented in each country
3 - Tests or examinations require students to prepare for them before taking them and this makes students to study...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Oct 2, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 2, 2013
|Solving the gap between rich and poor nations requires much effort from governments - IELTS
Writing Feedbackhaisergeant - Oct 1, 2013 / gmad06 - Oct 2, 2013
|IELTS; The subjects that children are taught in schools are decided by central authorities
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Sep 21, 2013 / fahadbd - Oct 2, 2013
|IELTS TASK 1 THE GRAPH SHOWS THE PERCENTAGE OF UK ADOLESCENTS FOLLOWING A VEGETARIAN DIET
5 - Hi, your essay failed to reach 150 words, however with only one line in the graph it's difficult to...
Writing Feedbackshin122 - Oct 1, 2013 / Traveler - Oct 2, 2013
|TOEFL - Should we tell the truth always to our friends?
5 - Hi Dumi thanks for your attention As I read so many answer templates , all of them had mentioned...
Writing Feedbackghazal85 - Oct 1, 2013 / ghazal85 - Oct 2, 2013
|People naturally resist making changes in their lives.What kind of problems can this cause
4 - ... I think it is not fair to make such generalization. In the contrary, people look forward to...
Writing Feedbacksaddream - Sep 29, 2013 / dumi - Oct 2, 2013
|Gre -- Argument; homeowners in nearby Brookville community
2 - This sentence is poorly constructed. In the first place, it's too long and at the end of your...
Writing Feedbackjunisha - Oct 2, 2013 / dumi - Oct 2, 2013
|[TOEFL] Secure job or satisfying job ? Which option would you take?
3 - .... the right word is affecting , not effecting; Affect means have an effect on; make a difference...
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 26, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 2, 2013
|For & Against Topic (TOEFL) . Students should attend to classes or it should be optional?
3 - .... here you need to tackle why these teachers can explain those lessons thoroughly - It is because...
Writing FeedbackGolnazgol - Sep 29, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 2, 2013
|Involvement of children in different paid work, is it good or bad?
3 - I like this introduction. It is simple, yet interesting and contain all necessary features. .... great...
Writing FeedbackEnglish_Learner - Oct 1, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 2, 2013
|whether job is only for money or there are several other reasons for it..
4 - thank u very much,dumi and pahan for ur suggestions.i will try my best,not to make this type of mistakes...
Writing Feedbackprakrit - Sep 30, 2013 / prakrit - Oct 1, 2013
|IELTS (Charts); electricity generation by source in New Zealand and Germany
Writing Feedbackhisho88 - Sep 27, 2013 / hisho88 - Oct 1, 2013
|TOEFL;should universities spend more money on salaries for university professors?
4 - .... here there are several grammar issues. Also, ideas are scattered here and there. Arrange them according to...
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 27, 2013 / dumi - Oct 1, 2013
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