Writing Feedback / Some people argue that businesses have to focus on making money and profit on what they produce. [2]

The purpose of businesses is to make money and they should to concentrate only on this.
Do you agree or disagree?

At present, businesses are one of sectors that have a big opportunity and profit. Some people argue businesses have to focus on making money and profit on what they produce. Personally, I tend to disagree with this view since I believe presence of businesses play an important role in society and making contribution to local community.

Making money is the main part of what businesses do. They have to make profit to make their effort still stand out. Businesses also have to make income on what they produce so that the production processes do not stop.

However, I think there are many roles that businesses have to do aside from produce profits. It related to the society. They have to make contribution to local community. For instance, open requirement in where are businesses located for job to local people as priority. By this requirement more people have a job, and surely affected to local community living standard. Presence of businesses also can make an area more popular if the business produces something that special from the local community. For example, there is a food namely "Dodol Garut" in Indonesia. It is so popular. Initially of this food is started in local area called Garut. It attracts other people in that place to produce it because of interesting profit. Until now, Dodol Garut have been produced and become unique food of that area. This is businesses role to increase a local community's name.

All in all, I believe that presence of businesses not only for money or profit. It has an important role for society. Businesses also have to make contribution on local community.

Writing Feedback / The picture illustrates some parts of a house where air is absorbed and released. [2]

The diagram below shows how heat is lost and energy wasted in a house because of air getting into and out of the house.

The picture illustrates some parts of a house where air absorb and release. Then, how heat and energy is lost. Overall, it can be seen that leaking of air happened into and out the house.

One of pathways that show air leaking into house is in dryer event which is located in basement. There are two ways of air to leaking into this room which are by pipe and ventilation. In the same floor, outdoor faucet also become one way to air enters. By the tap, air throughout and enters to the room. Move to the first floor, air leaking into three areas. First, in the bathroom by electrical outlet. Second, in the main room by window, door, and fireplace. The last is in the kitchen room where air leaking out by kitchen fan event and the window.

Leaking out of air happen in the balcony part. Some of parts which are release heat are tan event and recessed lights in bathroom. The next part is plumbing stack vent which throughout from basement until the rooftop. Other part is attic hatch in the first floor middle room and the top of fireplace as well. Then, recessed lights in kitchen area.

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Writing Feedback / The external and internal communication, essential in work, in 1997 and 2002. [3]

The table below gives the results of two surveys, in 1997 and 2006, in which people were asked which communication skills were essential in their jobs.

The table gives information about the results of two study that covered people about parts of communication skills which were external and internal communication that essential in their work in 1997 and 2002. Overall, both external and internal communication skills more essential by year except in selling a product or service which was less needed by employee and the highest increased was taken by listening carefully to colleagues.

First survey told about external communication of worker. Three of four aspect through a steadily increased, selling a product or service has a steadily decreased from 24 percent in 1997 to 21 percent in 2006. The most important external communication which was needed by employee is dealing with people by 65 percent then selling an outcome or service and advising or caring for clients.

Second survey illustrates communication skills which were needed by employee to make up relation inside the company. All skills showed upward trend. The biggest percentage was had by listening carefully to colleagues, this skills also got the highest significant increase by 9 percent. Then, it was followed by instructing and persuading people, good speeches, study group, and planning the activities of others.

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Writing Feedback / Electronic media has stronger good impact than a negative - it's best for regular communication [2]

The use of electronic media has a negative effect on personal relationships between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the past, people who want to get communication each other should make an appointment to meet up in a place but now we do not longer need it since innovation of electronic media increase by time. Only by using a computer or a phone, in seconds we connect to other people. Some people argue we should not use electronic media since it has a negative effect on people personal relationship. I tend to disagree with this statement due to electronic media has positive effect outweigh than the negative effect.

Nowadays, electronic media become a common thing for people. Everyone has it. Sadly, most of them do not use it properly as the effect many negative things affect to them. For instance, using social media. Mostly, people use their electronic media to active in social media but the sadness is sometimes they post something without thinking it first. There is no problem if it is not related to other people but when it comes to others personal problem it will affect to our personal relationship with people.

However, electronic media has stronger good impact than it badness. For instance, it can helpful for people who need to get communication regularly. By using electronic media, they do not need meet each other, only by using mobile phone or computer they can get communication. We can use it to make lots of friend on social networking as well. On the internet, there are so many people browsing at the same time around the world by some feature like social media or chatting application, it is so easy to make friends.

All in all, electronic media not only has a negative effect, more of that it has more positive impact such as connecting to relatives regularly and make a plenty of friends on social media.

Writing Feedback / The number of Bulgarian community which move to live overseas, divided into education level [3]

The chart below give information about the level of education of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006 and 2008.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the number of Bulgarian community which move to live overseas by education level in 2002, 2006, and 2008. As a general trend, in those years the highest level of education which go abroad was taken by secondary school. Higher, primary, and lower education have similar trend each year, except in 2008 which primary and low education higher than education.

About 17 percent of students in 2002 get higher education in another country. Meanwhile, in 2006, it was a stead increased to 20 percent. After two years later, the number of students who got higher education dropped to 9 percent.

Secondary education got the biggest number of Bulgarian people education level from 2002 to 2008. Even though, the number has decreased gradually by 65 percent in 2002 to 59 percent in 2008. For primary and lower education, it was showed upward trend. It was started from 2002 by 18 percent and got the highest in 2008 by 32 percent.

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Writing Feedback / It depends on ourselves, how much efforts we do to be fit and healthy. [3]

Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be.

At present, a healthy life style have become precious thing for most of people. It is too difficult to have a way of life which is healthy. Others argue it is so easy for society if they want to be fit and health only if they want, it depends on their self.

Work, obligation, and plenty of activities have made some people get health problem. For instance, worker who require to sit prolonged time made them harder to get some exercise. In rush-hour time and deadline, they will choose sit all along day and do not have time to break for taking sport time. It makes some diseases follow them.

However, there are many things that we can do to have a healthy life style by small activities. For example, get some walk before go to office, about 15 to 30 minutes. A researcher from Colombia University has discovered employee who obligated to work at desk all day can increase death risk but it can be eliminated by exercise or walking in earlier morning, in lunch time, or in dinner. If the distance of the workplace and the home is not really far, get walk or bicycle will much better to get healthy body.

Personally, I believe that it is hard for worker people to get healthy life style since they have a lot of activities but it is not impossible. What people need are more effort and be smart time regulator. There are some daily sport people can do, which do not take a long time and much money as well.

All in all, healthy lifestyle is easy for people want to be. It depends on ourselves, how much effort that we do to be fit and healthy.

Writing Feedback / The charts provides several factors that affected on lower numbers of farm-land productivity [3]

The pie chart below shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive. the table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The charts give information about several factors that affected decreasing of farm-land productivity and the percentage of land degradation which was caused by these factors in North America, Europe, and Oceania during the 1990s. Overall, there were three main reasons that affected land degradation which are over-grazing, illegal-logging, and over-farming. These factors gave the biggest impact to Europe and the fewest was faced by North America.

The pie chart illustrates several reasons behind dropped of agricultural productivity. The biggest percentage is over-gazing by 35 percent. The, deforestation becomes the next reason which made 30 percent of farm and less productive. Over-cultivation in agricultural land also made land degradation increase. There were 28 percent of land degradation caused by this reason.

These three factors effected land degradation in three regions. The biggest impact came to Europe which was 23 percent, which was illegal-logging decreasing until 9.8 percent. The next, Oceania by 13 percent where over-cultivation did not give any impact. The last was North America which only affected on 5 percent of total land.

Writing Feedback / Children have to learn how to be a good person as a member of community life [2]

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Children are worldwide future. They have to learn how to be a good person as a part of community live. Some people argue, teach children become a good society member is parents obligation. Meanwhile, others think that school is place where children learn about a lot of things since children have many opportunities to meet people when they are in the school.

In school time, which is started from kindergarten, school is children's second home. They will meet many people, such as teacher, headmaster, and their friends as well. It will make them feel meet with people get communication is common thing. Taking friends as an example, in first time they meet their friend they will get bit nervous but over time they will more confident as they do it every day. It makes them become confident to get communication in society.

However, get networking is not only aspect of good society member since also includes our attitude, behaviour, and respect. All of these aspects are learn from our children time, in our home. For instance, discipline children is formed when they learn about daily habits, like eating rules. Children have been taught to wash their hand before eat and use their right hand to eat. It is a eat law. Frome these children can learn how to be discipline person by their daily activity.

Personally, I believe that both parents and school are the place where children learn about now to be a good member of society. Parents teach them about be a good in individual so that they can be received by ordinary people. Then school teach the get communication to make relation each other.

All in all, children have to be a good person in their local area no matter the place, since whether school and home become place children spent most of their time.

Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1: How satisfied are you with your life? What would make you happiest? [7]

The graph below and the chart on the on the next page show the answers people gave about the extent to which they are satisfied with their lives and what they would make them happiest.

The graphs provide information about people's average life satisfaction and what might make them happy. It shows the data across different age groups and gender. Overall, male and female stood at different point but from 21 to 70 years, they have similar point which is dipped in 41 to 50 years as the lowest of happiness grade, than increase gradually until 71 years. For young people the main reason of their happiness is have a lot of money, meanwhile for elderly people have a healthy body is the most important.

Start from 15 to 20 years old, male happiness higher at 5,5 point than female in 5,3 point. For the following age, they have similar satisfied of life. It decreases steadily and dip in 41-50 years old at 5,0 point. Then, their average life satisfaction increase sharply until reach a peak at 5,6 point in 61-70 years old.

Main factors that make people happiness are health and money. For young people, they will more happy when they get a large of money, over 50 percent of them feel satisfied for that reason but it decreases gradually until under 10 percent when they get older since for elderly people the most thing that make them happy is a healthy body.

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Writing Feedback / Dress smartly or quality of work? I think it depends on our obligation in occupation. [5]

Some organization believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance.
Discuss both these views and give you own opinion.

At present, dress smartly such as look office or business dress is requirement for plenty of organisation or companies. Others think that quality of work is more important than just good looking. I think it depends on our obligation in occupation.

Most of companies want to their employee use smart-dress since they want to attract people for buying their product or only for introducing their latest invention. Taking a sales promotion as an example. The company ask them to use good-looking dress because they get communication directly with consumes. It is also use for make a good image for their company. Due to that reason, when job-seeker looking for interview session, dress smartly is one of company assessments.

However, other organisations argue work quality of their employee is more important than appearance. For instance, most of start up such as Google inc. and Facebook do not obligate their worker to dress like an officer. These companies suggest to their employee to use their comfortable dress for work since they think casual dress make their worker feel enjoyable and it gives impact to their work effectiveness. The dress can make them comfortable even in work pressure.

Personally, I believe that every company has their own requirement for set their workers look. It depends on their obligation. If their job is relate with costumer or public, use smart dress is better. But if their tasks faced on computer or no living creature, use comfortable dress make them feel enjoy. I think both of them use for increase quality of employee work.

All in all, our dress work relate to our obligation since dress smartly is one of things that can support our work but not in all.

Writing Feedback / Being an employee makes people less creative since all of major activity is set by a company. [6]

Some people decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organisation. Do the advantages for people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages?

At present, many people have chosen to become an entrepreneur than decide to be an employee. Some society argue, it will much better if they start their own business and other think become worker-force is better. I tend to stand out for first statement since I believe that the advantages of becoming an entrepreneur stronger than the disadvantages.

As the impact of modern era, there are so many big companies are built. Surely, it needs many employees to work there. This becomes gold chance for job-seeker or fresh graduate who want to improve their self or just get income by working. They can work in company or organization and apply their knowledge from college. For instance, people who study about finance. They will choose to working in companies that relate with their study, such as bank, pawnshop, or in government. It sounds good since they can apply their knowledge, learn new knowledge by work-experience, which is affect to company income as well.

However, working for a company make us do not innovative. In a company, people only ask to do something, what company want and what they have to do. They do not have any chance to improve their personal skills. Taking a design interior as an example. They only do what company ask to do. How to design something, what is designed, all of that are set by company. They cannot make their own style since they have to follow company rules. People become close minded, and over time they will lose their natural ability. Meanwhile, start up make their chance to work independent bigger than be employee.

All in all, be a worker force can make us learn from the big company which have through the hardness of start new business but it makes people become less creative since all of people activity is set by company.

Writing Feedback / Each location offers different advantages and disadvantages based on wind strengths and scenery look [2]

The diagrams below show the design for a wind turbine and its location.

The pictures illustrate the design of machine which is used for generating electricity from a wind and its proper location. The turbine consist of blades, steel tower, wind sensor, generator, computers, and wind as the energy source. Overall, each of locations offer different advantages and disadvantages based on wind strengths and scenery look.

The process is will be started when the turbine get signal from sensor adjusts bladed about direction and angle of wind. Following this, blades which are made by fibreglass or timber will spin automatically. The speed and direction of this movement is set by wind sensor and passes into generator. At the same time as the generator reach maximum pressure, it will produce 1,5 megawatts electricity.

There are some proper location for wind turbines which is near from house, by the sea, and in the mountain. If the machine is located near from place to live, the turbine will produce lesser energy about 100 kilowatts but it does not decrease landscape view. The second place is in the mountain, as a consequence the turbine will produce maximum electricity due to the big of wind strength. But, it is not good since the scenery is spoiled. The last place is by the sea which is one place where the turbine gets maximum wind, does not ruin the landscape, but it is render difficult when the turbin gets touble as people need more time to reach the location.

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  The design for a wind turbine and its location
  

Writing Feedback / Media give so much attention to celebrities and almost forget about ordinary citizens [NEW]

The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They shoud spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead.

Nowadays, media give so much attention to celebrities, such as their lives or relationships. Some people argue, the media should report more about ordinary people lives than celebrities. I tend to disagree with the second statement since I think both of them are important, but celebrities are more important.

Ordinary people lives are common things. They talk about surrounding such as people activity, occupation, or crime that happens in society. Media should show this news, so people can know about what have happened in their local area. As in rush-hours, people will busy with their work or their family, a TV program that shows ordinary people will help people them so much to know a particular thing in their area.

However, celebrities' news are more important. Actors, singer, or footballers are as example of famous person. Their lives were usually reported as an extraordinary thing. It is true since they have unusual live. Only certain people can be like them. Taking a footballer as an example, so many people can play football in this world but not many of them can survive and be the professional one. so many things that we can learn from them such as hard-working, never give up, or polite. Something that really hard to do, but they can do it. It is not easy to tackle obstacle than reach their dream. That is why we have to learn from them and media should be pay more attention for them.

To sum up, I believe that both of news are necessary for people but I think celebrities news more important than ordinary people. Due to they have unusual life that make us inspired.

Writing Feedback / The range of fresh regular teachers in Ontario - back from 2001 to 2007. [3]

The graph below shows information about the reqruitment of teachers in Ontario between 2001 and 2007.

The line graph gives information about the range of fresh regular teachers in Ontario. The information goes back from 2001 to 2007 and covers english and french languange teachers. Overall, a number of teachers who teach english slightly increase over those years, meanwhile french languange teachers went up a lot. Generally, it can be seen that demanded of french languange teachers bigger than english teachers.

The number of english and french languange stood at similiar point. It was about 70 percent in 2001. For the following year, the number fell by 20 percent.

It was started from 2003 to 2007, there was a different trend for each teachers. The number of french teacher slightly rose and hit a high point at 70 percent in 2007. While, teachers who teached english still drop until 2003 to 40 percent. The range of french teachers has remained fairly stable between 2003 and 2004 at 40 percent, but it was plunged to over 20 percent in the end of 2007.

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  Percentage of first-year teachers with regular teaching jobs by year of garduation
  

Writing Feedback / Kids tend to eat what they like or do want they want to do, without considering the adverse effects [3]

Many children these days have unhealthy lifestyle.

Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

At present, the way of children live become unhealthy. They tend to eat what they like or do want they want to do without considering the adverse effects. Some people believe that both academic institution and parents have responsibility to solve this problem. I tend to agree with this statement since most of children time is spent in school and home.

Some unhealthy lifestye is refers to dietary or food consumption. Many children choose to eat junk food or unhygiene one. This is responsesibility of schools and parents. For instance, many kind of food that offer in school. In the rest time children will choose attarctive food, which is unhealthy. As the effect children have digestion problem or any diseases. It is one of school responsisbility since they have authority to prevent stall food from selling bad dishes. For parents, they have to pay attention to their children like give them box meal, so they do not need eat extraneous food at school.

Unhealthy life style of children also include in developing sedentary and mundane activity. Nowadays, children have more chance to access computer or internet. Due to this case, they will have same and long activity all day. For instance, a game online or video game. Children usually addicted to this invention because it is so fun and challenging. It is good if they use it in normal time. But it will become dangerous since it is too much. Some illness will follow them. Such as, eyes problem as they have too much time in focus on screen and fewer sleep or sleepless due to fact that play is more enjoyable for them than study even sleep. So, for this time, parents have to control children leisure and their sleeping time.

In conclusion, the way of children life is influenced by people around them especially the academic institution and parents. As the effect, both of them have to endeavor solve this problem since what children do now will give effects in their future.

Writing Feedback / The kind of trouble that society usually have after moving overseas [4]

Writing Task 1: Integration Problems For People Living Abroad

The bar chart gives information about kind of trouble that society usually have when they move to overseas according to ages. Generally, people aged 35-55 years old have sorting out health as the biggest problem they faced out, meanwhile for young people weeding out finances become the first problem, and searching schools for children become the last problem in all ages.

For young people, looking for money is the biggest problem. A problem experienced by just 34 percent. Society with age 35-54 choose money as the second problem although the percentage is bigger than young people which is 35 percent. Only about 23 percent people over 55 have this problem.

Healthcare become the most problem in middle and elderly people have. Both of them have similar value about 36 percent. Old people choose health care as the first problem they have, although less than the other ages.Young people take this problem as the second one.

Looking for schools children is the last and the less problem that people have in every ages. The biggest percentage is had by people aged 35-54 about 19 percent. Then, it is followed by young people and eldery people.

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  The chart shows information about the problems people have when they go to live in other countries.