eddies [Contributor]
Dec 15, 2019
Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 1 IELTS The process of solar powered Water Heating System [2]
you cannot reach a score higher in Task Achievement since you fail to summarize the main report in the overview. A good overview should sum up the two pictures above. Some basic grammar flaws are seen, like installment ... are; The pump will operate ... ; there is heating coil; and ready to used;. Although they do not affect the communication, these errors affect the accuracy, and this may lead to a 5.0 in grammatical range and accuracy. Other problems can be seen as well in the use of cohesive devices and comma splices. It is suggested to put a comma if you use coordinate conjunctions.
I do not see any improvements in details 1 & 2, since you did not successfully describe the two diagrams. This is not all aboutThere are positive and negative effects for every part of solar panels. , so I prefer to omit this.
Hope this helps
you cannot reach a score higher in Task Achievement since you fail to summarize the main report in the overview. A good overview should sum up the two pictures above. Some basic grammar flaws are seen, like installment ... are; The pump will operate ... ; there is heating coil; and ready to used;. Although they do not affect the communication, these errors affect the accuracy, and this may lead to a 5.0 in grammatical range and accuracy. Other problems can be seen as well in the use of cohesive devices and comma splices. It is suggested to put a comma if you use coordinate conjunctions.
I do not see any improvements in details 1 & 2, since you did not successfully describe the two diagrams. This is not all about
Hope this helps