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Apr 30, 2014
Writing Feedback / [IELTS] schools should only teach children the academic subject [6]
Hei kelly219,
First of all, i suggest you to leave a space in every paragraph because this layout needs more work to read.
Many Some people believe that students only need to study academic subjects likesuch as mathematics and physics because these subjects are necessary for students' future to improve students' intelligence.
make it simple and clear sentence.
Some parents argue that formal education can help their children to get a job and to avoid idleness.
Hei kelly219,
First of all, i suggest you to leave a space in every paragraph because this layout needs more work to read.
In addition, the unemployment rate is always high, so their parents want children to study these subjects which can help students have a job.
make it simple and clear sentence.
Some parents argue that formal education can help their children to get a job and to avoid idleness.