andika08
Oct 5, 2016
Writing Feedback / Wiriting Task 2: Problems associated with the internet and what solutions ? [3]
Hello
You have a good summary
I have some corrections
Using the Internet isthe means used to share information ...
For instance, sales mode online that sellsnot accordance with goods .
Some userscomplained of feel pain in thecertain ofbody parts, just as which are pain...
... The first,The need for law enforcement with the ...
... while using the Internet for health more than anything.
You have explain the Computers are a lot of benefit in many ways clearly and totally.
You can added introduction in the first paragraph. there is repetition like first, second and the last you can use another words.
Hello
You have a good summary
I have some corrections
Using the Internet is
For instance, sales mode online that sells
Some users
... The first,
... while using the Internet for health more than anything.
You have explain the Computers are a lot of benefit in many ways clearly and totally.
You can added introduction in the first paragraph. there is repetition like first, second and the last you can use another words.